【独立写作】星城的作业贴

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LZ准备今年申请，1019托福刚出分，作文竟然又跪了。。有点疑惑，计划报11.10号的托福再战，希望大家一起加油！
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作文可能要下午交了，对这个活动规则还是不太了解

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谁能告诉我怎么上传文件啊。。。。小白感激不尽

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Do you agree with the friends that you can have fun with is more important than the friends that you can get help from?

When it talks about whether people should make friends who could help you or one you can have fun with, most people in China would choose the former. It's a common sense that playing would distract people from their work and study, and most Chinese children are taught to make friends with excellent grades, who could help them in studying. However, I tend to say the latter is more significant.

To begin with, by doing something fun, myfriends could help relieve me from stress. Actually, I'm easy to get nervouswhen meet some big challenge, such as the final exam or doing some performancein front of hundreds of audiences. I'm so stressful that I couldn't have a goodsleep, and therefore I couldn't work efficiently. Thanks to my friend, he wouldtells me a great number of jokes, requires me to play football with him. Inthis way, the nervousness disappears, and I'm energetic again to face thechallenge again.

Moreover, a friend who could make me happywould guide me thinking and behaving in a positive way. For instance, in theCollege Entrance Exam, I couldn't think out the solution of several questionsin math test. My friend encouraged me by pointing out that other studentscannot solve the problems either. And he told me many stories about the happyending of people who thought they would fail at first but never give up. Itruly appreciated him. With the optimism, I got a excellent overall score andI'm self-confidence for the following challenges.

Admittedly, we could benefit from friendswho could help us. However, it's hard for us to find a friend who could solvevarious kinds of problems. As we all know, people could not achieve successunless they spent lots of time in it. Thus the friends who are good at somespecific field must have less free time. Besides, if everyone wants to find afriend who could help them, the people they choose would busy in solvingproblems and cannot solve yours at time. Instead, we could make a friend thatmakes us happy easily. And the sense of happiness could help us solve theproblems as well.

To sum up, I truly believe that choosing friends who make you happy is more significant.

星城UID: 3393302

Do you agree with the friends that you can have fun with is more important than the friends that you can get help from?

When it talks about whether people shouldmake friends who could help you or one you can have fun with, most people inChina would choose the former. It's a common sense that playing would distractpeople from their work and study, and most Chinese children are taught to makefriends with excellent grades, who could help them in studying. However, I tendto say the latter is more significant.

To begin with, by doing something fun, myfriends could help relieve me from stress. Actually, I'm easy to get nervouswhen meet some big challenge, such as the final exam or doing some performancein front of hundreds of audiences. I'm so stressful that I couldn't have a goodsleep, and therefore I couldn't work efficiently. Thanks to my friend, he wouldtells me a great number of jokes, requires me to play football with him. Inthis way, the nervousness disappears, and I'm energetic again to face thechallenge again.

Moreover, a friend who could make me happywould guide me thinking and behaving in a positive way. For instance, in theCollege Entrance Exam, I couldn't think out the solution of several questionsin math test. My friend encouraged me by pointing out that other studentscannot solve the problems either. And he told me many stories about the happyending of people who thought they would fail at first but never give up. Itruly appreciated him. With the optimism, I got a excellent overall score andI'm self-confidence for the following challenges.

Admittedly, we could benefit from friendswho could help us. However, it's hard for us to find a friend who could solvevarious kinds of problems. As we all know, people could not achieve successunless they spent lots of time in it. Thus the friends who are good at somespecific field must have less free time. Besides, if everyone wants to find afriend who could help them, the people they choose would busy in solvingproblems and cannot solve yours at time. Instead, we could make a friend thatmakes us happy easily. And the sense of happiness could help us solve theproblems as well.

To sum up, I truly believe that choosing friends who make you happy is more significant.

星城UID: 3393302

尴尬。。。我明明记得昨天传了的。。怎么会没有传呢。。。。。。。太尴尬了！！！！

星城UID: 3393302

48积分了，怒冲50！

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1101-education revised by Darren.doc (29 KB, 下载次数: 2)

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是的···写早了~呵呵····

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Darren_Van 发表于 2012-11-2 20:01
是的···写早了~呵呵····

额,同学你好,你能具体说下修改建议或者感想吗?还有你的标注是表示什么意思呢?

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星城 发表于 2012-11-2 22:05
额,同学你好,你能具体说下修改建议或者感想吗?还有你的标注是表示什么意思呢?

哦~加亮是表示我觉得写得不错的地方~除了我的标注，总体感觉的话·····词汇略显简单，而且细节都是你和你同学的，感觉·····有点缺乏说服力，可能有点总体通用情况的论述会好一点···大概就这样吧~