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12.2 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
Colleges or universities should offer students a better job preparation before they start working.
Use specific reasons to support your answer.
With the development of the modern society, more people focus on the education problems (This phrase has no actual meaning. A problem in education can be anything from lack of teaching material to poor quality of teachers to inadequate support for disabled students: which 'problems' are exactly 'the' education problems?). Some people think that students should get a better job preparation from colleges or universities before they start work. Personally, I totally agree with them. The reasons for that are as follows.
First and foremost, companies need the employees who have specific experience for the jobs. Most of students have no chance to get an internship job in the area which they are interested in. For example, my major is bioengineering. Most of my classmates are only able to do some part-time jobs. It is obviously that these jobs have nothing to do with our major. Thus, students are hardly able to get the jobs in bioengineering area during their school time (I don't see how this sentence has a 'thus' relationship with the previous one. It's basically saying the same thing as the previous sentence, not a consequence of it.). If schools offer students the opportunity to accumulate the experience, it must be helpful for their future working.
In addition, most of students have no idea about their future jobs. It makes them hardly to decide (I'm not sure why you keep using 'hardly' as an adjective. It is an adverb, and it does not mean 'hard'. You use this word like this: They are hardly able to decide..) which kind of job they want to do. For instance, most of my college classmates are working in different areas, but only a few of them are able to work in bioengineering field. Because, only a small number of them have the chance to get in touch with several different job fields which have connections with our major, such as, cosmetics production, medicine production, and so on. The more opportunities they get, the easier for them to make the decision. According for those phenomenons (1. it is 'according to'; 2. the plural of 'phenomenon' is 'phenomena'; 3. I don't know what 'those phenomenons' refer to, because you only talked about one thing – students don't know enough about their future jobs when they study.), colleges or universities should create more chances for students to get good preparation for their future jobs. So, that is able to make a student's college major more useful.
Last but not least, everyone has his dream job, and he would do every contribution to get a chance to be hired. However, sometimes working harder and harder is not the only condition for companies to hire new employees. The most important condition is that assess, which is from other companies, and that would able to show others a person's abilities and also the sprite of teamwork.(1. 'assess' is a verb. The noun is 'assessment'; 2. I have absolutely no idea what you mean by 'assess' in this paragraph. Do you mean something like 'recommendation letters' or 'references'?) So that, colleges or universities should offer students the opportunity to get a good assessment for their job preparation, and them, it will make them to get their dream to come true more easily. (Your grammar, especially on verbal phrases, is not solid enough for a sentence this complicated..keep to shorter sentences.)
All in all, students should have more opportunities to do preparation before they start working, or even (I don't see why you need 'or even' here. What exactly needs 'or even'-ed on context. In your context, it should be '..before they get their dream jobs, or even start working'.) to get their dream jobs. There is no denying that they will get all conditions (Conditions for what?) they need from the job preparation.
总结:
论述不错。表达上请注意避免直接翻译。。语法上请特别注意单复数和词性。
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