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发表于 2012-12-16 16:13:18 |显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 Julian99 于 2013-4-6 12:31 编辑

尽管还搞不大来,但是先开个贴
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发表于 2012-12-16 16:21:00 |显示全部楼层
为什么一看到楼主的头像,我就想到少年派...
忽略我...楼主加油

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发表于 2012-12-16 16:57:19 |显示全部楼层
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Do you agree: Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.
Nowadays, countless entertainers and athletes have occurred. Those celebrities have to cope with all kinds of reporters and consensus. It is safe to say that they are enduring more pressure and facing more difficulties than the ordinary, and thus many of those believe they deserve more privacy. Do we have to give them the privacy? I cling that they do deserve these privacy.
The first reason is the consensus will distract them from their career. When an entertainer or an athlete spends most of their time handling reporters, how can they focus on films or games. So head-racking those reporters are that the celebrities barely have time to enhance their skills or play more roles. Why would people desire to  know the gossip about those celebrities? I hold that one of the reason is they enjoy seeing those notables on the screen or the court. If they are collapsed on account of getting rid of reporters, they would never should on the screen or court any more.
Moreover, everybody want to spend his leisure time with their families or lovers. The more pressure they endure while working, the more time they are supposed to spend in relaxing. Not only can it help you to absorb in the events you enjoy, but it also help you change your mind. What if they people have to spend time being on guard against other people who will destroy the relaxing plans? The relaxing will not work. Nowhere is the significance of relaxing without distraction more evident than in my own experience. In general, I hang out with couple of friend together with me at weekends. If I am aware of that a classmate I do not care for is near me, I will hardly absorb in what I am doing. Therefore, it is easy to say during the process of relaxing, rarely anything is more essential than doing this without distraction.
Crucial though privacy is for the celebrities, there do are some advantages of discussing the gossip those notables. Entertainment is one of the reason we care for those celebrities. Gossiping is among the way to entertain ourselves as well, and thus for the ordinary of us, it seems acceptable not giving privacy to the famous.

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发表于 2012-12-16 16:58:56 |显示全部楼层
okqishi 发表于 2012-12-16 16:21
为什么一看到楼主的头像,我就想到少年派...
忽略我...楼主加油

其实我也是看了少年派才知道meerkat这种生物的

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发表于 2012-12-16 17:14:01 |显示全部楼层
Do you agree: Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.
Nowadays, countless entertainers and athletes have occurred. Those celebrities have to cope with all kinds of reporters and consensus. It is safe to say that they are enduring more pressure and facing more difficulties than the ordinary, and thus many of those believe they deserve more privacy. Do we have to give them the privacy? I cling that they do deserve these privacy.
The first reason is the consensus will distract them from their career. When an entertainer or an athlete spends most of their time handling reporters, how can they focus on films or games. So head-racking those reporters are that the celebrities barely have time to enhance their skills or play more roles. Why would people desire to  know the gossip about those celebrities? I hold that one of the reason is they enjoy seeing those notables on the screen or the court. If they are collapsed on account of getting rid of reporters, they would never should on the screen or court any more.
Moreover, everybody want to spend his leisure time with their families or lovers. The more pressure they endure while working, the more time they are supposed to spend in relaxing. Not only can it help you to absorb in the events you enjoy, but it also help you change your mind. What if they people have to spend time being on guard against other people who will destroy the relaxing plans? The relaxing will not work. Nowhere is the significance of relaxing without distraction more evident than in my own experience. In general, I hang out with couple of friend together with me at weekends. If I am aware of that a classmate I do not care for is near me, I will hardly absorb in what I am doing. Therefore, it is easy to say during the process of relaxing, rarely anything is more essential than doing this without distraction.
Crucial though privacy is for the celebrities, there do are some advantages of discussing the gossip those notables. Entertainment is one of the reason we care for those celebrities. Gossiping is among the way to entertain ourselves as well, and thus for the ordinary of us, it seems acceptable not giving privacy to the famous.


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Julian99 发表于 2012-12-16 16:58
其实我也是看了少年派才知道meerkat这种生物的

其实迪斯尼的《狮子王》里的丁满也是这种生物;P

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发表于 2012-12-16 18:59:09 |显示全部楼层
Do you agree: Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.
Nowadays, countless entertainers and athletes have occurred. Those celebrities have to cope with all kinds of reporters and consensus. It is safe to say that they are enduring more pressure and facing more difficulties than the ordinary, and thus many of those believe they deserve more privacy. Do we have to give them the privacy? I cling that they do deserve these privacy.
The first reason is the consensus will distract them from their career. When an entertainer or an athlete spends most of their time handling reporters, how can they focus on films or games. So head-racking those reporters are that the celebrities barely have time to enhance their skills or play more roles. Why would people desire to  know the gossip about those celebrities? I hold that one of the reason is they enjoy seeing those notables on the screen or the court. If they are collapsed on account of getting rid of reporters, they would never should on the screen or court any more.
Moreover, everybody want to spend his leisure time with their families or lovers. The more pressure they endure while working, the more time they are supposed to spend in relaxing. Not only can it help you to absorb in the events you enjoy, but it also help you change your mind. What if they people have to spend time being on guard against other people who will destroy the relaxing plans? The relaxing will not work. Nowhere is the significance of relaxing without distraction more evident than in my own experience. In general, I hang out with couple of friend together with me at weekends. If I am aware of that a classmate I do not care for is near me, I will hardly absorb in what I am doing. Therefore, it is easy to say during the process of relaxing, rarely anything is more essential than doing this without distraction.
Crucial though privacy is for the celebrities, there do are some advantages of discussing the gossip those notables. Entertainment is one of the reason we care for those celebrities. Gossiping is among the way to entertain ourselves as well, and thus for the ordinary of us, it seems acceptable not giving privacy to the famous.


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发表于 2012-12-17 20:14:34 |显示全部楼层
lz 今天我稍微晚点交和改啊 中午不小心睡了一个小时= =

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发表于 2012-12-17 23:59:52 |显示全部楼层
楼主得多过过语法关
个人愚见,如有不对的地方莫怪:lol

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发表于 2012-12-18 20:58:28 |显示全部楼层
lz 有点晚 但是改好了
有点晚了就顺便附上我的链接吧https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1478007-4-1.html

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发表于 2012-12-22 12:41:13 |显示全部楼层
successful-wang 发表于 2012-12-17 23:59
楼主得多过过语法关
个人愚见,如有不对的地方莫怪

我的语法的确有很大的问题,如果考试的时候因为这个扣分就要跳楼了

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发表于 2012-12-23 00:34:42 |显示全部楼层
明天要泡自习室,所以12.22大概晚上10点以后传上来,不好意思了,请不要着急哈~

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寄托与我 IBT Zeal 备考先锋

发表于 2012-12-23 09:14:31 |显示全部楼层
12.22已改好。LZ过目~~

印象最深的就是你倒装句真的太多了...至少4个。真心不用这么多哈。2句就可以了

你觉得改的怎么样?咱们再交流哈

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发表于 2012-12-23 13:25:45 |显示全部楼层
Julian99 发表于 2012-12-22 12:41
我的语法的确有很大的问题,如果考试的时候因为这个扣分就要跳楼了

昨天刚考完,最后一站了。。。建议楼主以后练习一定时间限制在25分钟内,我平时练得时候不限时间,各种从句强调倒装什么的用的挺多的,考试的时候一紧张觉得好不尽如人意

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发表于 2012-12-23 13:27:36 |显示全部楼层
Julian99 发表于 2012-12-22 12:41
我的语法的确有很大的问题,如果考试的时候因为这个扣分就要跳楼了

语法问题好解决,买个高中语法大全,只看看大略就行,高中语法对付托福作文足矣。。。。特别注意简单错误,什么单三啊谓语动词一致性什么的,语法不用特别愁,多看看练练就有感觉了

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