【攒RP帖】GRE作文我是如何拿到5的， 附全部个人练笔

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erencie 发表于 2013-2-11 23:46
再给一个比较难的提纲，关于艺术的。同样，是《谁来拯救我的GRE ISSUE》那本书的一个分类，叫“艺术与可理解 ...

学习了~  

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谢谢分享！

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erencie 发表于 2013-2-12 00:05
以下开始贴个人练笔。

教育篇：

亲，问个小弱问题：5楼的关于教育的练笔，有800多字。这个是不计时的练笔成果对吧？

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好文章啊，必须顶。

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真的好棒！谢谢！

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赞，学习～～～～

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感谢楼主分享，慢慢学习

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赞

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好厉害啊~佩服~

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我也很喜欢simple but clear这种写作的style，只是一直模仿不像.楼主的体会是先养成这样思维的习惯就能写出这样的文章？还是并不需要？

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3.However, it is unrealistic to demand highest or complete pureness in politicians' morality.
In Machiavellians' political thoughts, it is of most importance for politicians to maintain his power and orderliness of the state instead of pursuit of justice.
Politicians are ruling a world which is itself not morally good.
Some prominent figures lie, not for self-serving reasons, but in attempt to secure what they saw as morally important political goals.
In those elections, you can't expect whatever the candidate says is true. They are using political tactics or tricks to convince the electorate to vote for them.

不知道用这个作为第三点的例子可以不？
As a widely circulated ancient Chinese political event, Yongzheng, the fifth emperor of the Qing Dynasty who was deeply esteemed by the people at that time because of his diligence to create an prosperous era and an effective government at minimal expense as his final political goals, however, hardly hesitated to murder his brothers and relatives for the supreme throne, which was regarded as kind of the most immoral behavior in the world. Nevertheless, no historian dare to stand out to condemn Yongzheng as an unqualified politician due to his misconduct in morality. On the contrary, to some extent, it was exactly owing to his cold-blood ruthlessness that this great king could grasp the chance to become the emperor, the highest and noblest existence in this historic realm, and to pursue his political targets.

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        1. The artists might be ahead of time and produce works which are not appreciated and understood by contemporary people.

如果写相反观点的话，这样反驳合适么？不知道有没有表达清楚
Many impulsive opponents may take Vincent Willem Van Gogh, the post impressionist painter of Dutch origin whose work-notable for its rough beauty, emotional honesty and bold color-had a far reaching influence on the 20th-century art, as a buttress to the argument irrefutably that though not understandable by most erstwhile people, Van Gogh's paintings still have invaluable merit. It's definitely true, however, once deepening the analysis, we can easily find that the mentioned merit was just in significance for descendants in the 20th-century and afterwards when Van Gogh had already passed away. As for people in the same era with Van Gogh, all his work, even the famous masterpiece starry sky, were some kind of tawdry and shoddy and thus had no merit in their eyes. Admittedly the hidden merit did exist after the birth of Van Gogh's paintings, however was not manifested and thus impalpable and worthless because of the world's ignorance. And only after people began to accept and turned to appreciate them were the actual and pragmatic merit expressed successfully in the true sense. From this perspective, it's not difficult to conclude that prevalent understanding and cognition is the most fundamental prerequisite of the existence of the blatant merit of art, additionally, nothing to do with the hidden merit which could not be defined as actual merit, frankly speaking .

claire谧UID: 3166989

感谢感谢！这些写作内容要有很多积累才行啊。。觉得还是很困难的

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陌轻尘 发表于 2014-8-26 12:13
如果写相反观点的话，这样反驳合适么？不知道有没有表达清楚
Many impulsive opponents may take Vincen ...

介不介意我来打个岔～看到写的很好就想来插嘴:lol个人觉得例子会不会用的有点长，如果一整段都是例子的话代表性就会相对减弱。。。语言还是很不错的啦！就是有的句子有点重复，像“ 。。。were some kind of tawdry and shoddy and thus had no merit in their eyes. Admittedly the hidden merit did exist after the birth of Van Gogh's paintings, however was not manifested and thus impalpable and worthless because of the world's ignorance. And only after people began to accept and turned to appreciate them were the actual and pragmatic merit expressed successfully in the true sense.”这里其实就是想表示梵高的艺术成就很高但是实际不被人关注，感觉是在翻来覆去的说，可以浓缩一点点哈～只是一点个人意见～～

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claire谧 发表于 2014-9-4 18:19
介不介意我来打个岔～看到写的很好就想来插嘴个人觉得例子会不会用的有点长，如果一整段都是例子的话 ...

明白了哈! 就其实对自己的表达不是很有信心，总是感觉说不清楚，所以就想多说一点尽量说明白，以后会注意的哈