[请求]第一次发作文，各位大哥给看看吧

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2. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.


In generally, most people are brought up by their parents.When they were young ,they lived with their parents. So the parents do a big effect to their children. I state that compared with others, parents are the best teachers to their children.

Parents can teach us how to deal with problems. When we were still a baby, it was our parents who teached us to speak and walk. And when we were old enough to go to school, we started to be exposed to other people. Then when we had trouble to get along with others or even fight with someone, we would first want to find our parents to pretect us and help us to solve the troubles. And usually, it was our parents who help us to treat the problems and told us how to do if those occurred again.

Parents also teach us lots of commonsense in daily life. Although you think your teacher can also teach you how to deal with problems, they can not teach you so many things about daily life. For example, when the temperature decreases, our parents would ask us wear warmer clothes to pretect from cold. In addition, when we were sick, it also was our parents who send us to the hospital, took care of us and told us that we should be more careful with our health.

In conclusion, our parents teach us no matter when and no matter where we are. They are the best teacher to us.

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各位老大，给点意见呀！

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1、注意时态
2、避免简单的句式
3、多写一些富有深度的语言

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谢谢楼上的大哥，请问一个弱弱的问题，这种水平离4分还有多远？

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您写的字数也太少了~！！！！

danahUID: 144289

有点远，但不太远！（别生气）
而且，短句子太多，要分析的深刻一点！

编也要编出来！！

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谢谢，我会努力的