[独立写作]hua_draw的作业贴

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5.31版本2

5.31版本3




=============================================================华丽丽的分割线

T^T。。。为啥子写作那么难~~~


5.25独立写作来啦~


5.26的也来啦~~

里面有个被画上绿色波浪线的句子我怎么也找不到错误~希望帮我改的同学能够帮我指出来~~谢谢~~

5.27的~~~

结尾有点语塞~~希望大家能够给我点建议~~谢谢！！！

5.29的...我用了中立..不知道这样写能行不


5.30
tpo21


5.31
第一次破400字

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5.21的作文...我想了好久的..就是扯不出什么论点..求各位赐教了..
      As a student, it’s obviously that I prefer the latter one, which is university professors’ spending more time educating students. In my view, university professors are ones of educators, so they should understand the meaning of education.
      It’s very obviously that the quality of students in universities has been eliminated recently. University professors’ not focusing on education may contribute to it. In the university, it’s our first time to take participation in one area, so most of students have no idea about what it is. Thus, the best way to connect with our major is taking lessons by professors or joining in some projects with professors. Just at that time, if ignoring by professors, who have so rich experience in this area, students usually don’t know what to do, then they’ll lose any desire about this area
      As for professors, they must want to do research with some good partners. These partners might come from their students if they are willing to educate them. Supporting one professor have no link with his/her students, he/she take every time in his/her research, how could he/she get some new good partners from his/her students? We know that the relationship between professors and students can transfer into friendship, so, how could people become friends even don’t know each other.
      According to the passage above, I’d better agree with the latter.

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  hua同学，作文已改，欢迎讨论。

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springdrop 发表于 2013-5-22 02:04
hua同学，作文已改，欢迎讨论。

非常感谢spring~~!!真的是改的非常非常非常认真!!!很谢谢你给我提的这些建议和那些修改,真是写的太好了!!
0.0可能感叹词忒多了点..但这就是我的心情啊
其实我自己也觉得写的很不好,但就是不知道从哪些地方去修改这篇作文,所以我很感谢你给我修改的那些地方~我一会就去看看去~

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5.22的TPO23综合写作~= =听的我好辛苦...

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hua_draw 发表于 2013-5-22 11:13
非常感谢spring~~!!真的是改的非常非常非常认真!!!很谢谢你给我提的这些建议和那些修改,真是写 ...

不客气，能对你有帮助就太好了。
昨天晚上改的，看了一天英语自己也有点头晕脑胀，说的有点多。
你有空也去看看我的吧，我们分在一个组，自己的问题自己总是看不粗来~~~
----我是地址，请戳我----

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springdrop 发表于 2013-5-22 11:54
不客气，能对你有帮助就太好了。
昨天晚上改的，看了一天英语自己也有点头晕脑胀，说的有点多。
你有空 ...

嗯嗯~上午有点忙就还没来得及改哩~刚刚改好~希望对你有用><

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buyadeid 发表于 2013-5-23 11:58
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buya也快一起去看讨论贴~~看了后发现好多要点都没有抓到。。
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1586481-1-1.html

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秋雨荆州 发表于 2013-5-23 15:07

谢谢秋雨点评。。。0.0语法错误确实不少呢我。。。

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:lol

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没想到小白这么写。。。我没太看过这种写法。。。把地址贴到秋雨那儿去了。。。也不知道他什么时候来看看。。。。。。。。。。

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jerry13466 发表于 2013-5-26 22:46

0.0无视你~~~

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翼_yoyoyoyoy 发表于 2013-5-27 14:38
没想到小白这么写。。。我没太看过这种写法。。。把地址贴到秋雨那儿去了。。。也不知道他什么时候 ...

是不是有种主语太长的感觉..我的那些句子..