issue1 我的第一篇文章,请多指教

bluecomma001UID: 150851

We can usually learn much more from people whose views we share than from people whose views contradict our own; disagreement can cause stress and inhibit learning.

With the improvement of science and technology, we should learn more and update our knowledge in time to catch up with the era. It's no doubt that communication is a direct way to acquire advanced knowledge. During the communication, we may confront two types of people: whose views we share and whose views contradict our own. In my opinion, both are necessary and important, the agreeable and disagreeable views should call for a balance.

We'll certainly feel satisfied and encouraged when hearing the agreed statement, especially when you are making your way arduously, the sharing of our views will give you more confidence, which is the most stimulus for us ongoing. As I was a teenager, I was intrigued in plane models, but I always feel frustrated when failing, and my parents sent me to a model club where is full of all model amateurs, we share our views and experience there,. With the amiable cooperation, I learned the spirit of teamwork, with the full communication with my collaborators, I found the best spiritual friends hitherto, It's a permanent memory of amenity. This illustrate the point that the sharing view is indispensable.

On the other hand, the dissenter may induce us into embarrassment in public sometimes, we even may feel them impertinence. While the truly contradictive views will not hamper your step, but accelerate your progress. It may be the perspicacious insight to your views. It's certainly that we are not so insular to accept the contradictive views. Anyone who want to help you sincerely will speculate your statement carefully and point out the weak point, which is a responsible behavior, rather than those insouciant approval. We should be open-minded enough to receive and analyse these views: Am I omitted something important? Is my attitude deviated? How can my cases stand for my point strongly? Is there anything I overlooked? Such kind of introspection can help us to correct our thoughts and help us in learning to be more mature and wise.

in conclusion, with the sharing views, we get encouraged and confidence; with the contradictive views, we get a chance to avoid indulging in the deviated way and narrower paths of thoughts.

fortitudesagUID: 139374

看一看置顶的帖子，注意发文章的格式和奖励措施。

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在作文版发帖子的时候，请注意到基本的格式要求。为了别人考虑，请点击你的帖子右下角的编辑，把文章改为比较友好的格式，尤其是换行的部分。

文章语言上的问题不多，我就不一一修改了。as i was a teenager应该是when i was a teenager。

第二段的论证还算像模像样，虽然单独用个人的例子说明也比较weak，应该补充一些相应的其他论据或者继续深入发挥几句。第三段明显比第二段差了一个档次，一连串的陈述，基本上没有论证。考虑一下你写的那个body有没有回答题目的问题？有没有充分说明你的论点？ While the truly contradictive views will not hamper your step, but accelerate your progress. It may be the perspicacious insight to your views. It's certainly that we are not so insular to accept the contradictive views，写了这么多，why？为什么事情就是像你所说的这样？要说明，要有理由。

issue1很多人都写过，去习题库自己找一下前人的文章，可以做个参考。再继续练练，有了第一篇的基础后面的进步会快一些的。

希望你也能多多修改其他朋友的文章。尤其是提点结构上和想法上的建议。因为你不可能每个题目都练过来啊，看别人的题目，自己脑子过一遍,既可以给别人提建议，自己又多了一次训练的机会.不要有“怕mislead别人”之类的顾虑，参与和交流会帮助自己提高的，帮助别人也帮助自己。为别人服务的人优先得到斑竹和网友的关注哦.

bluecomma001UID: 150851

谢谢指教，我会继续努力的，也会继续关注GTER其他的朋友的文章，大家互相指教，互相进步