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issue 137
"What we call progress is a matter of exchanging one problem for another"

As mentioned in the words above, the process of progress is a period, in which human beings encounter different problems, whatever simple or difficult, accompanying with the advancement and improvement of the society of mankind at all ages. The progress itself, is nothing but exchanging from one problem to another.

Looking back to the history of human beings, from eolithic period to modern times, problems exist in almost all ages. The progress of society could solve well hundreds of problems which had puzzled people for decades, while cause thousands of new that people had never thought of and did know how to handle with. According to Van Loon's famous book, The Story of Mankind, as the procedure of Alexander the Great conquering the ancient Greece, the problem for a small state-polis besides Mediterranean transformed from the level of steadiness of the protection work to the conflict and compromise among people with different nations and religions. From the example offered above, it is not to conclude that, the progress is, in other words, the proceeding of settling down the past yet waking up the current, or even, future, questions.

The problems, however, cannot lead to progress in all situations. At present, for example, in nearly every corner on the earth exists problems, such as war, health, social security, medical treatment, the millions of people out of work, and etc. Although a well-known sociologist has pointed out that the problems in a nation is the best balance to weigh the strength and capability of the country, not all the governments tend to solve such problems radically and sometimes merely to take some ineffective measurement excusing themselves from lacking abundant financial support. Therefore, the problems under such circumstance not only barely result in the social advancement but may also prevent the whole country and society moving forward.

On the other hand, many other factors, including declination and retroversion indeed, may raise problems as well. It is believed that every Jew surviving in Europe in the thirties last century could tell what Oswiecim means to them and the ones in the sixties were acquainted with the book Anne Frank's Diary. Hitler, at that time, with his Nazism Party caused tremendous problems-more exactly to say, tragedies-all around in Europe. The sorrow and pain on Jews and Europeans do not disappear till today, with the shadow on Germans of losing the domestic economics and bad international fame enduring for a long period. Historians generally concluded that the existence of Nazism brought to the world nothing but troubles and tragedies, yet its political determinations had never led to progress at all.

As a conclusion, progress is a complicated process that can be regarded as the work of cutting the weed in grassland, some cut down while others spring up. Still, progress is the exclusive origin of the problems. To say in a philosophical way, the progress is only a sufficient condition of problems, not necessary.

先说说自己的想法 这次的文章的重点化在逻辑的思路 而不是语言的提炼上
所以语言方面请大家多多指教
逻辑思路方面
虽然可能出现跳跃和臆断的地方 我都有考虑过
但是难免还是会有很多差错
希望大家多拍砖  谢谢了

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这篇文章以前看过，所以有点个人看法，不对的地方请大家指正：）
1。感觉你这篇文章手段中心同意题目观点The progress itself, is nothing but exchanging from one problem to another.可是后面几段又在反驳说problems不一定带来progress。于是产生了没有中心的感觉。
2。第二段说it is not to conclude that, the progress is, in other words, the proceeding of settling down the past yet waking up the current, or even, future, questions.即反对题目的观点。第三段紧接着The problems, however, cannot lead to progress in all situations.说problems有些情况下不能引起progress.所以感觉上一段（第二段）应该写problems有时候可以引起progress。因此你的二，三段之间没什么逻辑吧

3。第四段On the other hand, many other factors, including declination and retroversion indeed, may raise problems as well，说declination and retroversion 会产生problems（暗示了progress能产生problems），可是题目重点我认为是谈论progress是怎么样的东西的（exchange）问题，而不是说progress是否会产生problems的问题。

我认为exchange才是本文的重点，problems当然有好有坏的，只有两者的相互产生消除转化才能progress。

下面是引自别人的观点，我也挺同意的。

最初由  gteryy 发布
[B]exchange是交换，就是一个问题换到另一个问题。

进步的过程确实是发现问题——>解决问题——>发现问题的过程。
可以从事物的两面性来论述啊。科技进步了，消耗了能源，但又能发现新能源；生产上去了，但是又带来环境问题。教育的改革，学生更自由了，但是纪律管理成了问题；学习可以选择，也造成了偏科（以至于有美国学生不知道美国在地球何处，气死老米，哼哼）。艺术的进步多样化，更另类了，更让人不懂了。从各个方面来论述吧。
个人觉得这题说理说不了多少，就用铺天盖地涉及面非常广的例子来侃 [/B]

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我最后一段也有谈过
我个人的认为 是progress是problem的充分非必要条件
充分 乃是指progress一定推出problem
非必要 乃是指problem不一定依赖progress的存在而存在
换句话说 乃是其他因素亦可能 推出problem
这就是我文章中3个body paragraphs的思路
那 这里面哪里的逻辑出问题了呢
还是 我表达不是很明白 导致错误的理解呢?
请各位赐教 谢谢~~~~~~~