今天第一次开始写作文，issue46

bert2177UID: 3468997

如题，可是不知道自己到底是写怎么样。。。求拍>< 如果有空我也会帮忙改一下各位的作文的，大家加油！！

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the revise version is under the attachment. Please download it and read it.

I may be a bit harsh on the comment. Hope you don't mind.

bert2177UID: 3468997

HK_House 发表于 2013-9-4 23:44
the revise version is under the attachment. Please download it and read it.

I may be a bit harsh ...

Thxs, I appreciate it. It was great

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I hope i can help. don't hesitate to post anything here. I can help proofread your article once I have time. :victory:

bert2177UID: 3468997

HK_House 发表于 2013-9-5 14:23
I hope i can help. don't hesitate to post anything here. I can help proofread your article once I ha ...

I won't~ If possible can I ask for a score? I'd have a better understanding bout the rating standard. If it's not bothering. And thanks a million!

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bert2177 发表于 2013-9-5 21:01
I won't~ If possible can I ask for a score? I'd have a better understanding bout the rating stan ...

on a scale of 1-10, maybe I give you 6-5.5. I hope you won't give up and I am looking forward to your next article.

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HK_House 发表于 2013-9-5 23:04
on a scale of 1-10, maybe I give you 6-5.5. I hope you won't give up and I am looking forward to y ...

That's good enough for me. I'm working on the next one this afternoon