ISSUE152 社会类，今天凌晨完成，希望大家多拍砖

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ISSUE152   The only responsibility of corporate executives, provided they stay within the law, is to make as much money as possible for their companies.

As universally acknowledged, nowadays we are living in the commercial society, which advocates the significance of marketing economic and tends to put wealth above everything. In the issue the speaker asserts that as long as complying with the law, executives of the corporations are only responsible for nothing but their companies' economic profits. Apparently, his/her statement is too absolute and irresponsible, for as a leader in a enterprises, an executives should put the social value of his/her company at the first place, while the economic profits are just by-product.

To begin with my view, the success of a company lies not only in how much money it makes, more important, in what contributions it does to the society. In this sense, the executive of the company may play a crucial role. A case in point is the success of Microsoft Corporation. Bill Gates, as the head of the company, spares no efforts to the public utilities regardless of the financial expense, by means of which enhanced the reputation of his company so that more people tend to buy his softwares, which in return brings him great economic profits. In the mind of the public, what a company can do for the society is always more significance than how much it can earn. Devotion to the society is a wise investigation for the company to earn both the market and public.

In addition, important as money-making is, what should be brought into focus by the executive is the culture of the enterprise. An excellent enterprise always has its unique culture, which creates a favorable working environment for the employees, so that they can work more easily with a good state of mind. Moreover, it is easily to be concluded that once the employees devote their heart and soul into their works, there is no worry for the efficiency and profits. There are many cases illustrating this point of view. Many international enterprises have their own mottos, such as "Just do it" from Nike, and "I'm lovin' it" being sung every day in every McDonald’s. These words not only attract consumers but also inspire both the managers and employees to worker more passionately in the form of a corporate culture. A successful corporate culture created by the executive will bring the enterprise a surprising pay-off.

On the other hand, overemphasis on social value may sometimes obscure the significance of economic profits. Broadly speaking, the original purpose of the establishment of an enterprise is making money. With the development, the social contributions and corporate culture can be taken into account. Fortunately, the above-mentioned, however, are not mutually exclusive, so it is totally to reconcile all of them so that the enterprise will enjoy more fruits. Nokia Corporation in Finland is a successful example. It does well in the spread of its culture, so that almost everyone in the world will thing the word Nokia for a few seconds when purchasing a cell phone. What's more, it invested a lot in the social constructions, and now more than 70% of the public telephones are set by the Nokia. So it is easy for a company like Nokia to make money, and now in the time when a person blinks, a Nokia cell phone is sold in the world.

In sum, we can easily come to the conclusion that prosperity of a enterprise is up to many factors which I can not list all above. However, what an executive should pay attention is that economic profits do not necessarily always come the first. The focus on its social influence sometimes may even be more crucial. Although it may not guarantee the success, but the pay-off will be worth the effort.

杀青UID: 140733

ISSUE152 the only responsibility of corporate executives, provided they stay within the law, is to make as much money as possible for their companies.

As universally acknowledged, nowadays we are living in the commercial society, which advocates the significance of marketing economic（市场经济应该是这样表述吧market economy） and tends to put wealth above everything（偶觉得用的不够好，好像不够地道，但又想不出来）. In the issue the speaker asserts that as long as complying with the law, executives of the corporations are only responsible for nothing but their companies' economic profits.（nothing but＝only，重复了） Apparently, his/her（不用这样吧，直接用his就ok了吧） statement is too absolute and irresponsible, for as a leader in a（an） enterprises（单数复数问题）, an executives（去掉s） should put the social value of his/her company at the first place, while the economic profits are just by-product.

To begin with my view, the success of a company lies not only in how much money it makes, more important（importantly）, in what contributions it does（contrubute可能更好，贡献嘛^_^） to the society.（lie in这个词组一般是指躺着，睡觉的意思，没有depend on） In this sense, the executive of the company may play a crucial role. A case in point is the success of Microsoft Corporation. Bill Gates, as the head of the company, spares no efforts to the public utilities regardless of the financial expense, by means of which enhanced the reputation of his company so that more people tend to buy his softwares（不用复数）, which in return brings him great economic profits. In the mind of the public, what a company can do for the society is always more significance（significant） than how much it can earn（earns）. Devotion to the society is a wise investigation for the company to earn both the market and public.
（这个例子举得不好吧，人们不会应为他是个好人就去买他得产品吧，因果没有联系吧）

In addition, important as money-making is, what should be brought into focus by the executive is the culture of the enterprise. An excellent enterprise always has its unique culture, which creates a favorable working environment for the employees, so that they can work more easily with a good state of mind. Moreover, it is easily to be concluded that once the employees devote their heart（复数） and soul（复数） into their works, there is no worry for （worry about）the efficiency and profits. There are many cases illustrating this point of view. Many international enterprises （跨国企业应是Multinational Corporation）have their own mottos, such as "Just do it" from Nike, and "I'm lovin' it" being sung every day in every McDonald’s. These words not only attract consumers but also inspire both the managers and employees to worker more passionately in the form of a corporate culture. A successful corporate culture created by the executive will bring the enterprise a surprising pay-off.

On the other hand, （一般来说，on the one hand和他是一起出来的）overemphasis on social value may sometimes obscure the significance of economic profits. Broadly speaking, the original purpose of the establishment of an enterprise is making money. With the development, the social contributions and corporate culture can be

wglxhUID: 152604

As universally acknowledged, nowadays we are living in the commercial society, which advocates the significance of marketing economic(market economy)and tends to put wealth above everything.( put 的主语是？？起码应该用个被动语态吧？此外，整句话意思混乱）（参考修改从句： which is dominated by market economy and propelled by those wealth-pursuiting entrepreneurs) In the issue the speaker asserts that as long as complying with the law, executives of the corporations are only responsible for nothing but their companies' economic profits.(很罗嗦，除了楼上的兄弟所说外，economic一词多余）
Nokia Corporation in Finland is a successful example. It does well in the spread of its culture（spreading its culture,写作基本规则之一，有动词不用名词）
easy 或 easily出现的频率太高，参考词汇：positively,definitely,doutlessly...
最后一段与第一段语气不搭调，基本语法错误多的没法一一修正，建议在WORD上先改一下

杀青UID: 140733

不好意思啊，楼主，想不到快速回复里面只能帖这么点没有贴完，而且我没有保存（我用word改的），忘了。。。。。。。

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No.1 ISSUE152，社会类，今天凌晨完成，希望大家多拍砖
ISSUE152 The only responsibility of corporate executives, provided they stay within the law, is to make as much money as possible for their companies.

As universally acknowledged, nowadays we are living in the commercial society, which advocates the significance of marketing economic and tends to put wealth above everything. In the issue the speaker asserts that as long as complying with the law, executives of the corporations are only responsible for nothing but their companies' economic profits. Apparently, his/her statement is too absolute and irresponsible, for as a leader in a enterprises, (）an executives should put the social value of his/her company at the first place, while the economic profits are just by-product.

To begin with my view, the success of a company lies not only in how much money it makes, more important, in what contributions it does to the society. In this sense, the executive of the company may play a crucial role. A case in point is the success of Microsoft Corporation. Bill Gates, as the head of the company, [U]spares no efforts to the public utilities regardless of the financial expense,[/U] （不对吧） by means of which enhanced （现在时吧？）the reputation of his company so that more people tend to buy his softwares, which in return brings （主胃一致）him great economic profits. In the mind of the public,（有这种说法？） what a company can do for the society is always more significance than how much it can earn. Devotion to the society is a wise investigation for the company to earn both the market and public.

In addition, important as money-making is, what should be brought into focus by the executive is the culture of the enterprise. An excellent enterprise always has its unique culture, which creates a favorable working environment for the employees, so that they can work more easily with a good state of mind. （企业文化这样定义不妥把？）Moreover, it is easily to be concluded that once the employees devote their heart and soul into their works, there is no worry for （？）the efficiency and profits. There are many cases illustrating this point of view. Many international enterprises have their own mottos, such as "Just do it" from Nike, and "I'm lovin' it" being sung every day in every McDonald’s. These words not only attract consumers but also inspire both the managers and employees to worker （谓语呢）more passionately in the form of a corporate culture. A successful corporate culture created by the executive will bring the enterprise a surprising pay-off.

On the other hand, overemphasis on social value may sometimes obscure the significance of economic profits. Broadly speaking, the original purpose of the establishment of an enterprise is making money. With the development,（这样是表达？） the social contributions and corporate culture can be taken into account. Fortunately, the above-mentioned, however, are not mutually exclusive, so it is totally to reconcile all of them so that the enterprise will enjoy more fruits. Nokia Corporation in Finland is a successful example. It does well in the spread of its culture, so that almost everyone in the world will thing（什么意思？） the word Nokia for a few seconds when purchasing a cell phone. What's more, it invested a lot in the social constructions, and now more than 70% of the public telephones are set by the Nokia. So it is easy for a company like Nokia to make money, and now in the time when a person blinks, a Nokia cell phone is sold in the world.（这个句子与主题逻辑很别扭）

In sum, we can easily come to the conclusion that prosperity of a enterprise is up to many factors which I can not list all above. However, what an executive should pay attention（ＴＯ） is that economic profits do not necessarily always come the first.（对吗） The focus on its social influence sometimes may even be more crucial. Although it may not guarantee the success, but the pay-off will be worth the effort.


个人感觉，把焦点转到（１段）企业领导人身上，优点跑题，论据有点不恰当．

ValentinerUID: 121676

大家的建议很对的说~~~~
可能是这两天连续睡眠不足,写的时候有点晕
我自己也觉得例子不是很恰当
嗯,我下去再改!!!!

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改完再看吧

飘翎UID: 145870

THE recent government report, "U.S. and Allied Efforts To Recover and Restore Gold and Other Assets Stolen or Hidden by Germany During World War II," has returned the story of collaboration with the Third Reich to public attention. The report, carried out by eleven federal agencies under the direction of undersecretary of Commerce Stuart Eizenstat, shows that valuables confiscated from Jewish victims of the Holocaust -- including dental fillings melted down into gold bars -- were deposited into Swiss bank accounts held by the Nazis. The report's foreword neatly summarizes the extent of Swiss financial collaboration and its importance to the Nazi war effort:
这个可以用来论证企业家的responsibility 那个，他们不可以在法律的范围内唯利是图，因为还有其它的责任和道义……，这个是绝对好的例子。……