issue29 公众人物隐私问题，欢迎砖头^_^

杀青UID: 140733

29 Public figures such as actors, politicians, and athletes should expect people to be interested in their private lives. When they seek a public role, they should expect that they will lose at least some of their privacy.

Public are always interested in public figures' private lives, such as their marriages, love affair, or their heath. There is a trend that these public figures, such as actors, politicians have strong criticism on these interests, since they are afraid of losing their privacy, which is more or less open to whole society without any secrets. As the above statement asserts when then seek a public role, they should have the courage to show some of their privacy and should not blame to the public.

People are strongly desirable to make sense of other's activities, especially celebrities. It is a public psychology which inspires many mass media to report the private life of celebrities, such as the renowned couple, Beckham and Victoria. Another result of this psychology is paparazzi photographers who observe and peer celebrities at any occasion and any time. Some people attribute the death of Princess Diana to paparazzi, but that's just a traffic accident, the driver of car should be blamed because of his excessive alcohol.  Why do the public hold Princess Diana in great reverence? Doubtlessly her beauty, her smile, her royal marriage, her donation to charity, her divorce and so one play a indispensable role. These factors, concluding her private life consist of her great influence all over the world in many fields. But, if mass media did not focus on Princess Diana so much, provided that mass media did not report the activities so many, ordinary people would not make sense of them. Moreover, paparazzi are just the reflection of interests of the public; they only publish the heated news and make the Prince Diana much more illustrious. To some extent, celebrities, particularly actors, football stars, or royal families, use some of their privacy to exchange the reputation, fame, even money.  

When it comes to politicians, it must be another case. Politicians should be responsible for their voters, as they are voted and supported by these voters. Some of their privacy, to ordinary people, is their personal affairs; to them, as a politician, should be open to every voter, because maybe some of their privacy is concerned with the development and security of country. Former French president Mitterrand is the best example to illustrate this point. Though Mitterrand had already suffered the cancer for a long time, he still keeps his place as a French president until he died in his office at age of 76. As a president, he was the key person concerned with French voters had the right to know whether he was capable enough to continue his political career. When he sought to be French president, he should expect he had lose some of privacy.  On one hand as a ordinary man, Mitterrand has the right to hide his illness, on other hand, he was irresponsible for French voters.

Nowadays, even some public figures deliberately divulged details of their private life on purpose. The reason why they are not nervous to show their selves under the eyesight of the public is just because they are eager to be famous by mean of uncovering their privacy to attract notice. Generally believed, divulgement of privacy is one the best way to be celebrated for newly-emerged figures in show business.

In conclusion, public figures are expected to feel relax when they are under the spotlights, unless they won't seek to be public figure.

poohUID: 146994

In my opinion, this essay lacks coherence because you conclude that "they should have the courage to show some of their privacy and should not blame to the public''  , however,  you  said "When it comes to politicians, it must be another case." , which implies that what you are going to talk below is different with the situation of above.   I am confused that whether you wanna say any celebrites are the same or politicians should be differentiated.

gdhdannyUID: 125843

Public（The public） are always interested in public figures' private lives, such as their marriages, love affair(affairs), or their heath. There is a trend that these public figures, such as actors, politicians have strong criticism on these interests, since they are afraid of losing their privacy, which is more or less open to （the）whole society without any secrets. As the above statement(statement above) asserts (,)when then(when then?不懂得说) seek a public role, they should have the courage to show some of their privacy and should not blame to（blame是及物动词） the public.
首段如果想提出观点，最好用明确的语言表示，如果同意，就用agree之类的词，不要仅仅说出as the statement asserts

People are strongly desirable to make sense(直接说know就好了) of other's（others’） activities, especially celebrities(those of the celebrities). It is a public psychology which（强调句多用It is … that…） inspires many mass media to report the private life(lives) of celebrities, such as the renowned couple, Beckham and Victoria. Another result of this psychology is paparazzi photographers who observe and peer celebrities at any occasion and any time（感觉直接用一个职业名词作宾语不太好，建议改成”the new born branch of photographer, the paparazzi”）. Some people attribute the death of Princess Diana to paparazzi, but that's just a traffic accident, the driver of car should be blamed because of his excessive alcohol（alcohol又不是人的属性，应该不能excessive吧）. Why do the public hold Princess Diana in great reverence? Doubtlessly（Undoubtedly） her beauty, her smile, her royal marriage, her donation to charity, her divorce and so one(so on) play a（an） indispensable role. These factors, concluding her private life（,） consist of her great influence all over the world in many fields. But, if mass media did not focus on Princess Diana so much, provided that mass media did not report the activities so many(often), ordinary people would not make sense of them. Moreover, paparazzi are just the reflection of interests of the public(public interests); they only publish the heated news and make the（不用冠词） Prince Diana much more illustrious. To some extent, celebrities, particularly actors, football stars, or royal families, use some of their privacy to exchange the reputation, fame, even money.
感觉这段的论点是公众的好奇心驱使名人必须公布隐私。戴安娜的例子举在这里个人感觉有点不痛快。因为她的美不为世人所知也会倾倒周边的人，她对与慈善事业的爱心同样也会得到被资助者的感激，而这并非媒体的作用使然，况且这也并非privacy所讨论的范围。

When it comes to politicians, it must be another case. Politicians should be responsible for their voters, as they are voted and supported by these voters. Some of their privacy,(为什么加逗号？) to ordinary people, is their personal affairs; to them, as a politician, （缺主语）should be open to every voter, because maybe some of their privacy is concerned with the development and security of country.（既然涉及国家发展安全为什么还可以公开？看了后面的例子才明白这里的逻辑，建议不要用is concerned with, 改称“their privacy may influence the …”） Former French president Mitterrand is the best example to illustrate this point. Though Mitterrand had already suffered the（不用冠词） cancer for a long time, he still keeps his place(keeps working) as a French president until he died in his office at（the） age of 76.(这句话的意思可以在清楚些，明确指出他隐瞒了病情) As a president, he was the key person (这里有问题，不知你要表达什么)concerned with French voters had the right to know whether he was capable（healthy） enough to continue his political career. When he sought to be (a)French president, he should expect he had lose some of (his)privacy. On (the)one hand as a ordinary man, Mitterrand has the right to hide his illness, on other hand, he was irresponsible for French voters.
这段是想强调政治家对于公开隐私的必要性，例子很好，注意语言描述。

Nowadays, even some public figures deliberately divulged details of their private life（lives） on purpose. The reason why they are not nervous to show their selves (themselves)under the eyesight of the public is just because they are eager to be famous by mean of uncovering their privacy to attract notice. Generally believed, divulgement of privacy is one(of) the best way (ways)to be celebrated for newly-emerged figures in show business.

In conclusion, public figures are expected to feel relax when they are under the spotlights, unless they won't seek to be public figure.

最后两段建议和在一起。
全文论证思路比较清晰，语言描述还要下功夫阿。另外，建议在论证过程中加入让步，会使文章显得更理性，论述更全面，更有说服力。

caleUID: 150437

我也觉得diana的例子有问题，似乎和第一段的主题没有太大的关系，而且从感情角度上讲，你对她的评价也不太客观，我还记得在她死后很长时间，我在看英超转播的时候还看见有很多球迷高举标语“diana, we all love you!" 我觉得这种声誉不是一朝一夕可以获得的。她死于车祸，而且就是为了躲避新闻媒体的追踪，如果你的观点是和“新闻媒体过于关注公众人物的私生活”有关的话，diana的例子倒是很合适的。

杀青UID: 140733

最初由 pooh 发布
[B]In my opinion, this essay lacks coherence because you conclude that "they should have the courage to show some of their privacy and should not blame to the publ..

以下省略...... [/B]

Thanks for your advice, I will do some corrections,

I just want to say on the one hand,  the sacrifice of privacy of some celebrities, esp. actors, royal families,  is in exchange of reputation, money and so on; on the other hand,some of privacy of  politicians should be open to the public so as to be responsible for voters, as the privacy is concerned with the country.

so both of them come to the conclusion, when public figures seek a public role, they should expect that they will lose at least some of their privacy.
我只是想表达，政治家和那些诸如演员啊，运动员隐私的公开化的原因是不一样的，但结论还是一致的，既然他们是名人，就必须接受部分隐私会暴露

杀青UID: 140733

我举diana和mitterrand的例子，是想说名人与公众之间的交易是多样化的——比如说政治家用自己的言行向公众换来权力，歌星用自己的歌声和隐私向fans换来关注和金钱，王diana则靠自己的微笑换来爱戴和影响力。

如果没有传播媒介持久而广泛的报道，戴安娜怎么会有今天的感召力？热心慈善事业的人数之不尽，微笑握手谁也做得来。但能够具有她那样的感召力的却很少啊，靠的是什么？靠的就是大众传媒营造的吸引力。

她的美丽是隐私、她的婚姻是隐私、她的服装是隐私，如果这些隐私都被禁止报道，谁会知道她是谁，她就不能能为慈善事业做出如此这般的贡献吗？

既然名人利用公众的好奇心理，赢来了名望、倾慕和力量，就不得不承受同样来自公众好奇心的密切关注和道德压力。

看来我的英文太烂了，写成英文好像就和我想的就不太一样了

杀青UID: 140733

感谢大家提的意见，这是我大改后呕心沥血之作，虽然还是很一般啦。。。。。修改时间居然比我写的时间还长什么，ft
29 Public figures such as actors, politicians, and athletes should expect people to be interested in their private lives. When they seek a public role, they should expect that they will lose at least some of their privacy.

Admittedly, the public are strongly interested in public figures' private lives, such as their marriages, love affairs, or even their costume. There is a trend that many celebrities have a strong criticism for the overcuriosity of their privacy, since they are disturbed by the situation that their privacy is more or less open to the whole society without any secrets. In my point of view, I agree with the speaker that when public figures seek to be famous, they should anticipate that some of their privacy will be under the eyesight of the public.

There is a contradiction between with individual privacy and public awareness. On the one hand, people have a strong desire to know others’ activities, especially those of the celebrities. It is a public psychology that inspires mass media, including some tabloids, to report the private lives of celebrities. On the other hand, celebrities consider that they do not have the obligation to let their privacy uncover, so they should not sacrifice privacy.At first glance, this opinion seems to be somewhat convincing, but further reflection tells me that I can not agree with it for following reasons.
When it comes to politicians, universally believed, politicians are responsible for their voters whom vote and support them to govern the country. Though,to ordinary people, some of their privacy are their personal affairs, to them, as a politician, their privacy should be more or less open to every voter, because maybe some of their privacy may influence the development and security of country. Former French president Mitterrand is the best example to illustrate this point. President Mitterrand disguised the facts that he had already suffered cancer in a long term until he died in his Paris office at the age of 76. As a president, he can be regarded as the most important person concerning with French, so voters had the right to know whether he was healthy enough to continue his political career. When he sought to be a French president, he should expect he had lost some of his privacy. To some extent, the behavior of Mitterrand was irresponsible for French voters.

Somebody may argue actors, athletes and other celebrities are not politician, they are not expected to be responsible for voter, so they should not be annoyed by mass media and open their privacy. As was stated above, politician use their privacy to win the support from voters, well, actors, athletes and others use privacy to win the attention from fans. Let me take Princess Diana as an example. Some people attribute the death of Princess Diana to paparazzi that observe and peer without measure, here we do not discuss who is obligatory to this tragedy, just imagine why the public hold Princess Diana in great reverence. Undoubtedly, her beauty, her smile, her handshake and her donation to charity play an indispensable role.  But if mass media did not focus on her in a very long time and in a deep scope, did Princess have the great rallying point? There are so many people who is enthusiastic for charity, but so few have the great influence in contrast with her. The great influence of Princess Diana was, to some extent, created by mass media. If some of her privacy, such as her love affairs, her costume, her marriage, are forbidden to be reported on the news paper, few people will not know who she is. As a result, she can not contribute so greatly to charity. In the same way, singers use their voice, athletes use their plays, and actors use their acts to exchange the reputation, fame, and money, without exaggeration, some of privacy play a crucial role in their carrees to gain what they expect.

Nowadays, even some public figures deliberately divulged details of their private life on purpose. The reason why they are not nervous to show themselves under the eyesight of the public is just because they are eager to be famous by mean of uncovering their privacy to attract notice. Generally believed, divulgement of privacy is one of the best ways to be celebrated for newly-emerged figures in show business. In conclusion, public figures are expected to feel relax when they are under the spotlights, unless they won't seek to be public figure.