lz你好 点评来完了 见谅。 12.6
T1:
as a student , lz的【t】发音 是清辅音, 不要振动声带发出浊辅音的感觉
i have to do teacher's assignment 最好替换成 finish teachers' assignments
last night, i have to -> had , 另外 have to 接着用了两次 , 可以考虑变换下
so i need to -> needed , also make -> made lz 过去式。。。
use (可以加个my) computer for entertainment like watch -> watching
另外 T1 结合自身例子 很好 注意单词的发音清晰度不要过于含糊, 这样可以很快让听者理解lz你的意思,不用去猜。
T2:
decision [dɪˈsɪʒən] 注意不是 [dɪˈsɪʃən]
most of the time 冗余了 -> most time, the decisions we made (最后用make ,most time)in our daily life time( 去掉 time)
last month, I don't (didn't ) know ...
T2的例子不是那么完美, lz的论点是不要把时间浪费在决定上, 例子如果能突出自己之前时间花在决定上,然而却错过了更加重要的东西
。 就更加好了
Task1: 例子论证的第一点关于look into my eyes and listen carefully,我觉得这个不大合适呢,fortunately的发音;
Task2:第二点去例子可能是讲的着急了,我有点听不清楚呢;前面的比较好呢;支撑的不是很充足了呢,我觉得relax的支撑用exercise and get paid 不大够;还有一些语法方面的问题;比如 it's makes me relax;