issue127 放慢速度写的一篇：)

四月的迷迭香UID: 154552

Issue127
"Facts are stubborn things. They cannot be altered by our wishes, our inclinations, or the dictates of our passions."事实是不容改变的。它不会由于我们的希望、偏好或者个人的情感而改变

It is indisputable that facts exist objectively, and they cannot be changed by human being's wishes, interests and passions. In every field of our society, we should admit and accept facts, rather than cheating ourselves by negating them. However, the notion the speaker holds overlooks the way we deal with facts which may bring significantly different results.

No one can ignore the importance of facing facts in our quotidian lives. Everyday we must face countless facts, no matter whether we are expecting them or trying to avoid them. Facts do not become better or worse according to our willingness. We can see the fact that traffic accidents occur everyday, killing thousands of people each year. We can see the fact that AIDS prevails all over the world, bringing unutterable pains to those who suffer from it either culpably or innocently. We can see the fact that the depletion of atmospheric ozone, caused by environmental pollution, has warmed the Earth significantly and is threatening the survival of human beings. All these are the truths that we do not want to see but are actually in front of us. Had we resist to accept these facts most of which are result from ourselves rather than to face them and make our efforts to solve these problems, the conditions will be terribly deteriorated and we will be bound to suffer more pains.

In the field of science, it is also essential to use facts, or to say, the empirical evidences or the results of experiment to justify and conclude scientific theories. Anyone who subjectively draws some conclusion from ones own wondering or intension will inexorably end in with failure by attaining wrong concept or principles. Even if the conclusion is theoretically right, it must be tested with the help of practice. The famous experiment of Pisa Tower, taken by Galileo, vigorously proved that all the things that are at the same height fall down to ground with the same time, regardless of their weights. In front of the fact that two iron balls with different sizes drop onto ground simultaneously, people realized the previous concept that heavier object drops faster than the lighter one is groundless.

However, admitting that we cannot alter facts with our willingness does not mean we have nothing to do with facts. The different way we look at facts and deal with them often brings about different outcomes from facts. John Maynard Keynes, the British economist, once said:" Jovons saw the kettle boil and cried out with the delighted voice of a child; Marshal too had seen the kettle boil and sat down silently to build an engine." From his words we can see that, if we try our best to think of something behind the fact – the cause, the principles and the potential benefits – we may find a lot of useful things from it. Otherwise fact is just valueless thing to us. To some extent, the recognition and exploration towards fact is equally important with fact in itself. Our intelligence can change the outcome of dealing with facts.

In sum, anyone who wants to avoid certain pains by intending to change and even negate the facts will ultimately gain more pains. We should accept and respect facts with objectivity. At the same time, positive attitudes and active thoughts help us to gain a great deal from the unchangeable facts.

crusadeUID: 149710

"Facts are stubborn things. They cannot be altered by our wishes, our inclinations, or the dictates of our passions."事实是不容改变的。它不会由于我们的希望、偏好或者个人的情感而改变

It is indisputable that facts exist objectively, and they cannot be changed by human being's wishes, interests and passions. In every field of our society, we should admit and accept facts, rather than cheating （cheat）ourselves by negating them. However, the notion the speaker holds overlooks the way we deal with facts which （指代什么？way?facts?）may bring （+ about）significantly different results.

No one can ignore the importance of facing facts in our quotidian （看上去挺帅的）lives. Everyday we must face countless facts, no matter whether we are expecting them or trying to avoid them. Facts do not become better or worse according to our willingness. We can see the fact that traffic accidents occur everyday, killing （前面是每天，后面是每年，这个伴随是不是能用？吃不准）thousands of people each year. We can see the fact that AIDS prevails all over the world, bringing unutterable pains to those who suffer from it （them）either culpably or innocently. We can see the fact that the depletion of atmospheric ozone, caused by environmental pollution, has warmed the Earth significantly and is threatening the survival of human beings. All these are the truths that we do not want to see but are actually in front of us. Had we resist to accept these facts most of which are （好像不用be动词）result from ourselves rather than to face them and make our efforts to solve these problems, the conditions （太泛了，最好具体一点）will （是想用虚拟？那就是would）be terribly deteriorated and we will be bound to suffer more pains.（这段意思说生活中我们必须直面事实，而且基本是不好的事实）

In the field of science, it is also essential to use facts, or to say, the empirical evidences or the results of experiment to justify and （是否要加to？）conclude scientific theories. Anyone who subjectively draws some conclusion from ones （one's）own wondering or intension will inexorably end in with failure by attaining wrong concept or principles（有点绝对，最好加个in some cases之类的）. Even if the conclusion is theoretically right, it must be tested with the help of practice. The famous experiment of （of是不是不对？觉得不通，还是有这个固定用法？）Pisa Tower, taken by Galileo, [U]vigorously [/U] （放在这不大恰当吧） proved that all the things that are at the same height fall down to ground with （during, in?）the same time, regardless of their weights. In front of the fact that two iron balls with different sizes （前面是weight,后面是size？）drop onto ground simultaneously, people realized the previous concept that heavier object drops faster than the lighter one is groundless.
（这段讲科学上事实出真知，最后在补充强调一下不根据主观愿望就更好了）
However, admitting that we cannot alter facts with our willingness does not mean we have nothing to do with facts. The different way we look at facts and deal with them often brings about different outcomes from facts. John Maynard Keynes, the British economist, once said:" Jovons saw the kettle boil and cried out with the delighted voice of a child; Marshal too had seen the kettle boil and sat down silently to build an （+steam?）engine." （这段引言不错，不过是否应该加个 I paraphrase？）From his words we can see that, if we try our best to think of something behind the fact – the cause, the principles and the potential benefits – we may find a lot of useful things from it. Otherwise fact is just valueless [U]thing [/U] （不要） to us. To some extent, the recognition and exploration towards fact is equally important with fact [U]in[/U] （不要） itself. Our intelligence can change the outcome of dealing with facts.（这段讲事实不能改变，但我们却可从中受益）

In sum, anyone who wants to avoid certain pains by intending to change and even negate the facts will ultimately gain more pains. We should accept and respect facts [U]with objectivity[/U]（好像有点别扭，是不是用个副词就行了？） . At the same time, positive attitudes and active thoughts help us to gain a great deal from the unchangeable facts.

我觉得你写的真是很不错， 我也只是根据自己感觉，手头没什么工具书，见笑了。
另外你的论点是人们对待事实的方式不同会产生不同后果，总觉得和后面的论述有那么一点点偏离。好像只有body3讲到了对待方式， 前两个不太像。body1更像背景陈述， body2似乎在讲事实的作用。总觉得3段之间联系不太紧密。
这个题目我觉得是比较难写的，也谢谢你给我的启发。

四月的迷迭香UID: 154552

首先感谢crusade那么认真地帮我改作文!暴露出那么多基本的语法错误,汗....

以下几处说明一下:
1.Keyens说的那番话是原话,所以不用加paraphrase了

2.关于全文的结构,其实我的TS是想说两个方面:1)在任何领域都要承认事实是不可改变的,要尊重事实.2)然后题目的观点忽略了人对事实的认识所起到的不可低估的作用.

接下来,body1和body2都是在说1)要尊重事实,不能否认事实.body1是从日常生活方面说的,body2是从科学研究方面说的.

body3说的就是第2)个意思了,即对待事实的不同态度可以导致截然不同的结果.

不知道我说明白了没有呢?希望和你探讨!