你真的知道PS要怎么写吗？教你如何写出PS的灵魂！

我叫皮皮1992UID: 3455524

。。还没开始写~先来论坛找帖看然后再搞定！感谢楼主的建议~虽然打算申的是英国~~

jshzirisUID: 3126827

很受教~~谢谢

EnolateUID: 3283311

yuanlongyl 发表于 2014-10-19 12:31
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第二次

yuanlongylUID: 3413742

额。。。好吧

Zh.CharlesUID: 3569112

顶顶顶

johnpuUID: 3434315

謝謝樓主！我剛剛寫完自己的ps，就是environmental engineering

pielangUID: 3284254

非常有用的建议！

nealhkUID: 3490611

谢谢大家支持！

nealhkUID: 3490611

感觉又到了大家疯狂修改PS的季节了。
我去年另外一篇帖子都不知道沉到哪里去啦~哈哈。我把内容贴在这里，希望能给大家一些参考吧。

这次我拿了一个具体例子给大家看一看，可能更加能启发大家的思维。这是我帮一个师弟修改的PS中的一段，已征得他同意，拿出来给大家分享。
Version 1.0：原文，很多时态错误、叙述啰嗦、词汇简单
In high school, although the experiments in class become more exciting, I start to become unsatisfied with the school work. That is when I set up my own chemistry lab at my home. From the first day that I cleaned the store room and bought my first test tube, I began my beautiful journey with chemistry. I strive to enrich my little lab with every opportunity I have, either getting reagents and labware from the school laboratory or buying chemicals from the local store. In the beginning, I was only doing some experiments extended from class work. After a while I began to do some senior experiments like organic synthesis. Once I was intrigued by the reagents the police use in television to examine blood stain. I looked up on the internet and found a way to synthesize that reagents---Luminol. Although it takes a long time to prepare and synthesize the reagents, I was so excited to see the blue light glimmer from the dark. The joy I obtain from the experiments in my lab is enormous, which led me to a pursuit in chemistry after graduation.
Version 2.0：精简内容、删去多余的细节和描述、用更准确的词
In high school, the in-class chemistry experiments could no longer satiate my curiosity. That was when I set up my home lab in the storage room. I strove to enrich my own chemistry lab by getting reagents and lab-ware from the school laboratory and buying chemicals from local stores. Not only did I carry out experiments extended from class, but I also tried more advanced ones like organic synthesis. Once I was fascinated by the Luminol used in crime scene investigation on TV. I looked it up on the Internet and figured out a way to synthesize it. Although it took lots of efforts, I was so excited to see the blue light glimmer from the dark in the end. The joy I obtained from these experiments was enormous, and it led me to a pursuit of chemistry thereafter.
Version 3.0：语言深度润色、句式变化丰富、更多动词和高级词汇的使用、使细节更生动具体
When my high school in-class chemistry experiments failed to satiate my growing curiosity, I resolved to set up my own lab at home. I cleared out a corner in the storage room for a makeshift lab and furnished it with labware and chemicals that I ran across town to collect. From there I carried out experiments extended from regular curriculum and gradually ventured into more advanced ones like organic synthesis. Once I was fascinated by the Luminol used in crime scene investigation on TV. I combed through the Internet for its synthesis method, trying to assimilate from online tutorials the experimental techniques that were still new to me. Hours were spent on practicing the synthesis procedure and becoming adept at each step. After numerous trial and errors, I succeeded in producing the Luminol and was overjoyed to see its blue luminescence upon reaction. The sense of achievement accumulated from these early day endeavors had inspired me to pursue chemistry thereafter.

飘飘然飞飞UID: 3451465

非常感谢楼主的悉心指导，看了你的文章，我获益匪浅。正在写文书，希望楼主指导一下，提出宝贵意见。谢谢

nealhkUID: 3490611

飘飘然飞飞 发表于 2014-10-30 14:38
非常感谢楼主的悉心指导，看了你的文章，我获益匪浅。正在写文书，希望楼主指导一下，提出宝贵意见。谢谢

希望我的指导能真正的帮到你~:D

RoseXYXUID: 3526372

太感谢楼主啦！！！感觉受益匪浅！我也正在写PS，申请15FALL的，这两天写完之后可以发给楼主邮箱帮忙看下吗？？

nealhkUID: 3490611

RoseXYX 发表于 2014-11-4 00:14
太感谢楼主啦！！！感觉受益匪浅！我也正在写PS，申请15FALL的，这两天写完之后可以发给楼主邮箱帮忙看下吗 ...

可以，你直接发到我邮箱吧。

Lucy_2014UID: 3520489

谢谢楼主指导！