【口语小组】david-ding作业贴(4.27)

楚鲁松杰UID: 3503680

4.10

T1
不知道为什么只有3秒呀！

T2
开头一段的单复数是不是有点问题？把"a gift"改成"gifts"，这样跟“friends”是不是比较搭？14~16s, lz是说“there was once I had a best friend having a birthday party”吗？是不是感觉有点怪？40s, "means"是不是可以改成“meant”？

楚鲁松杰UID: 3503680

4.11

T1
lz整体流畅，就是时态和单复数的问题稍微注意一下哈！另外loser writer的用法是不是有点问题？

T2
3s, 是不是应该“rather than traveling...”？13s, 听来是”It's just like...“? 25s, 我查了一下好像是”on the train“？

david-dingUID: 3395460

楚鲁松杰 发表于 2014-4-12 22:16
4.11

T1

谢谢建议！

清林UID: 3412004

T1 small shop？最好有个名字，sunshine store也好，只是建议；
    take a train 有点夸张了..subway就好
    27s那里是already not so expensive ? 有点绕，直接some fashionable clothes
     感觉楼主还是能想到很多点的，不像我，硬扯例子反而生硬
     楼主清晰、顺利的语音语调不错，想你学习
T2  instead of 后面加名词，应该是finishing
      deadline、myself发音有点不准
楼主如果是一遍成的话，整体效果还是不错的。

rainbow0206UID: 3472557

hi你好~4.13评价：
t1: is the crab; grow[ɡro]; dead in the airplane那里有点牵强，毕竟保鲜技术已经很发达了; 内容上有点弱，可以说说做法、吃法等细节。
t2: 结构、内容不错，没啥问题。

lz发音赞~很好加油~

活性氧UID: 3487677

4-15
楼主的发音和内容都比我强很多，没有听出什么问题~ 只挑出一些小错
1
So he were have to prepare the test in the night. 这里好像有个were一样的音，have是不是要had？in the night 应该是 at night?
2
10” I already playing tennis and badminton 里的playing不太对
42“ It's really wonderful for you to sing and play guitar at the same time. 不知道这里的sing对不对

havrlUID: 2814564

T1：
1. AND 稍微有点都多。
2. 楼主的例子很好。
除了调比较平，没有激情外，其他我没觉得哪有问题。
T2：
1.OWN a small knowledge ? a little amout of ..
2.he just keeps 。。。s

活性氧UID: 3487677

4-17
1
第一句 I think XXX 没听懂， a student  should always ..
I can have the real image in my head, 感觉有点奇怪，替换为
the real image immediately appears in my mind
2
because the night time is the most of the time people get off the work. 感觉不太好
because at night, most people will get off the work and ...
19“ disturb their enjoying 改成 enjoyment， 应该是想说  rest/relaxation 吧
思路上，论点是噪声打扰休息，但例子是噪声打扰了你录制歌曲，严格上讲可能不太好？

david-dingUID: 3395460

活性氧 发表于 2014-4-18 10:02
4-17
1
第一句 I think XXX 没听懂， a student  should always ..

这两个例子确实不是太好，我回头会重新想的..15s实在是太短

iamjoyzUID: 3495271

418

T1
propose an active 的搭配好像不太恰当
at least at they can
12s, take the ground.xxx.?没听清
because i think the current dioxide made by the cars is one of the main reasons the city got pulluted发音注意一下
表述换 because i think that the current air pollution caused by cars  emissions/exhausts is ....可能更恰当一点 , current dioxide 总觉得有点怪
if we can not driving and go to underground station which is very convenient by the way,也可以再想一下怎样换个表达法更好一点

t2
it would never be the priority就可以了  再加Part跟前面也有所重复
at every Sunday... On
because i have losts of ... when i was in the campus..because most of the time..for example....这里的逻辑词有点乱，一个例子恍惚中有种例子里还有例子的感觉
it's 4:30 and till the 6;30...and then...till night ..前面可换成from 4:30 to 6:30
然后after that i ... 时间段 ，

david-dingUID: 3395460

iamjoyz 发表于 2014-4-20 13:18
418

T1

谢谢点评..一遍走就有点匆忙

清林UID: 3412004

一遍成吗？一遍的话这个已经相当厉害了，说到openssl这么新的新闻。
T1 前五秒听不懂，through 发音有误。估计是一遍成，连贯性这个不用说了，我没有好的建议，只有练习。内容上，说的东西太少。15s的准备时间，确实...我也很少这么练。但是逻辑和题目的关联程度够高

T2 2s friends ，25s love 其他的没什么问题，估计还是一遍成，流利度有待提高

活性氧UID: 3487677

4-21
1
2" the kind of book (不是 novel)
2
16" It can make you memory old times, memory 是名词, it can remind you of old time 是不是好点
其他没发现什么问题~~

活性氧UID: 3487677

t1：
35“   if we have some study problems, I can ask them either.  前后主语一致稍微注意一下~
例子挺好的~

t2
12“ and anyone else encourage them won't do much. 这里细听的话会发现问题
18” two carton a day 复数
22“ he just ignoring the encouragement 似乎少了be动词
34“ less healthier 应该是 less healthy
整体很好~有一些小错误但不影响理解~~

havrlUID: 2814564

422
来晚了。
T1：
1.很流利，但是句与句中间时间间隔比较长。
2.6' In my ... 没听出来单词。
3.内容不错，流利。
T2.
1.很好。
2. 21‘ 太快了，没听懂。

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