issue9 没有限时，请多指教！

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Issue9 "Academic disciplines have become so specialized in recent years that scholars' ideas reach only a narrow audience. Until scholars can reach a wider audience, their idea will have little use."

After careful and objective analysis about the issue whether the scholars should reach a wider audience to make their ideas really useful, I find my view principally consistent with the authors'. In my opinion, despite of the specialization of today's academic disciplines, the scholar have every reason to expose their ideas to wider audience for the improvement of their idea and its application into practical life. In the following discussion, I will show my evidence to substantiate my view.

In first place, in the age of bombardment of information, the academic field tends to be divided into increasingly specialized disciplines. It is believed that Aristotle had known almost everything in the time he lived, however, nowadays, it is impossible for us to deal with the information produced daily. It is a current trend that the scholars are dedicated in specialized field for the growing complexity of the problem we are now dealing with, which lead us to the illusion that our human race have retrograded in intelligence. However, it is a scientific and efficient way to specialize our study or works, it relatively reduces the difficulty of our jobs, and make us more able to concentrate all our efforts on a single problem and easier to accomplish our tasks.   

In the second place, though the academic fields are continually specialized, the scientist should expose their ideas to a wider audience for the improvement of their ideas and the development of the scientific research. For example, when the Quantum Theory was presented, it could not be accepted at first, even Einstein was suspicious of its truth by saying that the god would not dice. However, It is until some experiments had been proved the results predicted by the Quantum Theory that most of scientists regarded the theory just as one of the unintelligible imaginations. If we simply assume that no one concern about the Quantum Theory and thus no one design experiments to test it, the theory could never contribute so much to the development of science. Furthermore, the new-presented ideas of a certain scholar however authoritative he is are not necessarily theoretically correct, the wider audience it reaches, the more chance it has to be improved or to be rejected and then contribute to a new direction of efforts. Therefore, without wide enough audience, scholars' idea will be neglected after a certain period, which is necessary for it to evolve into a valuable one.

In the final analysis, scholars' ideas reaching wider audience may promote the process of turning their theoretical achievement into our practical use. Only the idea itself, despite of its correctness and significance, cannot be practically useful to the society and is far from its application to our everyday life. Usually, the presentation of a great idea and its application are not finished by the same scholar. For instance, the idea of steam engine had long been presented before Watt's time, however, it could not be used in industrial production for its low efficiency. It is Watt, whom most of us take for the exact scholar who invented the steam engine, that innovated the already existing steam engine and improved its efficiency, which make the industrial application of the steam engine possible and promoted the start of the first Industrial Revolution. Just imagine, if the original idea of the steam engine had been only accessible to a small portion of people, the possibility of Watt's improvement would have been greatly reduced.

To sum up, I consent to the author without reservation. Through the discussion mentioned above, we can easily reach the conclusion that the scholar should guarantee their ideas to reach wide enough audience for the improvement and application of their theory, even if in an age of continually specialized academic disciplines.  

我总觉得这篇文章的例子举的不合适，可也想不出更合适的例子，兄弟姐妹了帮忙给改改，顺便帮忙提供一下更合适的例子，谢谢！

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今天太晚了
我估计明天会有人给你看看的:)

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Issue9 "Academic disciplines have become so specialized in recent years that scholars' ideas reach only a narrow audience. Until scholars can reach a wider audience, their idea will have little use."

After careful and objective analysis about the issue whether the scholars should reach a wider audience to make their ideas really useful, I find my view principally consistent with the authors'. In my opinion, despite of the specialization of today's academic disciplines, the scholar（s） have every reason to expose their ideas to wider audience for the improvement of their idea(好象应该用复数) and its application into practical life. In the following discussion, I will show my evidence to substantiate my view.

In first place, in the age of bombardment of information, the academic field tends to be divided into increasingly specialized disciplines. It is believed that Aristotle had known almost everything in the time he lived, however, nowadays, it is impossible for us to deal with the information produced daily. It is a current trend that the scholars are dedicated in specialized field for the growing complexity of the problem we are now dealing with, which lead us to the illusion that our human race have retrograded in intelligence. However, it is a scientific and efficient way to specialize our study or works, it（and） relatively reduces the difficulty of our jobs, and make us more able to concentrate all our efforts on a single problem and easier to accomplish our tasks. （感觉都是it 做主语,可以换一些表达方法）感觉however 后面的应该是重点，但好像缺乏论证，只是提出了观点

In the second place, though the academic fields are continually specialized, the scientist should expose their（their? 前面不是 scientist） ideas to a wider audience for the improvement of their ideas and the development of the scientific research. For example, when the Quantum Theory was presented, it could not be accepted at first, (conjunction)even Einstein was suspicious of its truth by saying that the god would not dice. However, I(i)t is until some experiments had been proved the results predicted by the Quantum Theory that most of scientists regarded the theory just as one of the unintelligible imaginations(可能是水平有限，看了半天才明白). If we simply assume that no one concern about the Quantum Theory and thus no one design experiments to test it, the theory could never contribute so much to the development of science. Furthermore, the new-presented ideas of a certain scholar however authoritative he is are not necessarily theoretically correct, the wider audience it reaches, the more chance it has to be improved or to be rejected and then contribute to a new direction of efforts. Therefore, without wide enough audience, scholars' idea will be neglected after a certain period, which is necessary for it to evolve into a valuable one.
好想量子论并没有neglected,只是没有被accepted,正因为它被关注
才有人去证实它

In the final analysis, scholars' ideas reaching wider audience may promote the process of turning their theoretical achievement into our practical use. Only the idea itself, despite of its correctness and significance, cannot be practically useful to the society and is far from its application to our everyday life（看不明白）. Usually, the presentation of a great idea and its application are not finished by the same scholar. For instance, the idea of steam engine had long been presented before Watt's time, however, it could not be used in industrial production for its low efficiency. It is Watt, whom most of us take for the exact scholar who invented the steam engine（need consideration）, that innovated the already existing steam engine and improved its efficiency, which make the industrial application of the steam engine possible and promoted the start of the first Industrial Revolution. Just imagine, if the original idea of the steam engine had been only accessible to a small portion of people, the possibility of Watt's improvement would have been greatly reduced.
Whether Watt was representative of the wide audience should be taken into question.

To sum up, I consent to the author without reservation. Through the discussion mentioned above, we can easily reach the conclusion that the scholar should guarantee their ideas to reach wide enough audience for the improvement and application of their theory, even if in an age of continually specialized academic disciplines.
没能说服我改变自己的观点
第一次改作文， 没什么经验，如有错误，请见谅

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觉得稍有点跑题,我觉得应该反驳一下第二句话

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After careful and objective analysis about the issue whether the scholars should reach a wider audience to make their ideas really useful, I find my view principally consistent with the authors' (author’s吧？). In my opinion, despite of the specialization of today's academic disciplines, the scholar have every reason（这种用法好象不是很合适） to expose their ideas to wider （widen吧）audience for the improvement of their idea（复数） and its application into practical life. In the following discussion, I will show my evidence to substantiate my view.
觉得开头段写的有些罗嗦，第一句话可以去掉，意思写清楚就行

In first place,（是in the first place） in the age of bombardment of information, the academic field tends to be divided into increasingly specialized disciplines. It is believed that Aristotle had known almost everything in the time he lived, however, nowadays, it is impossible for us to deal with the information produced daily. It is a current trend that the scholars are dedicated in specialized field for the growing complexity of the problem we are now dealing with, which lead us to the illusion that our human race have retrograded in intelligence. However, it is a scientific and efficient way to specialize our study or works, it relatively reduces the difficulty of our jobs, and make（注意单复数） us more able（ability） to concentrate all our efforts on a single problem and easier to accomplish our tasks.
本段你试图用理证法说明专业化的好处，但是觉得说的力度不够

In the second place, though the academic fields are continually specialized, the scientist should expose their ideas to a wider audience for the improvement of their ideas and the development of the scientific research. For example, when the Quantum Theory was presented, it could not be accepted at first, even Einstein was suspicious of its truth by saying that the god would not dice. However, It is until some experiments had been proved the results predicted by the Quantum Theory that most of scientists（不用加of） regarded the theory just as one of the unintelligible imaginations. If we simply assume that no one concern about the Quantum Theory and thus no one design experiments to test it, the theory could never contribute so much to the development of science. Furthermore, the new-presented ideas of a certain scholar however（whatever吧？） authoritative he is are not necessarily theoretically correct, the wider audience it reaches, the more chance it has to be improved or to be rejected and then contribute to a new direction of efforts. Therefore, without wide enough audience, scholars' idea will be neglected after a certain period, which is necessary for it to evolve into a valuable one.
觉得你用的这个例子比较牵强，你想说只有有大量的读者群才能是理论有进一步发展的可能性吧？但是你的例子中并没有突出这一点啊。

In the final analysis, scholars' ideas reaching wider audience may promote the process of turning their theoretical achievement into our practical use. Only the idea itself, despite of its correctness and significance, cannot be practically useful to the society and is far from its application to our everyday life. （句子好复杂啊，你到底要说什么？）Usually, the presentation of a great idea（表达有问题） and its application are not finished by the same scholar. For instance, the idea of steam engine had long been presented before Watt's time, however, it could not be used in industrial production for its low efficiency. It is Watt, whom most of us take for the exact scholar who invented the steam engine, that innovated the already existing steam engine and improved its efficiency, which make（注意单复数） the industrial application of the steam engine possible and promoted（时态！） the start of the first Industrial Revolution. Just imagine（好象词性需要换一换吧？）, if the original idea of the steam engine had been only accessible to a small portion of people, the possibility of Watt's improvement would have been greatly reduced.
总是觉得你的例子不太贴切，你是在说有大的读者群有利于idea的推广，但是你的例子并没有扣住这一点啊。

To sum up, I consent to the author without reservation. Through the discussion mentioned above, we can easily reach the conclusion that the scholar should guarantee their ideas to reach wide enough audience for the improvement and application of their theory, even if in an age of continually specialized academic disciplines.



昨天晚上IMONG和我说你这篇文章了，因为我以前写过，所以让我过来给你看一下  ：）

语言问题我不多说了，个别地方注意一下时态语态，另外长句子的使用还是要以能让你读懂为前提。

说一下你的思路吧，这道题2月份的时候在版上曾有过提纲方面的讨论，你可以搜索一下，另外我们几个也写了，你都可以找到的。
综观你通篇作文，觉得说服力不强，主要原因还是例子举的有点牵强，你觉得呢?

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呵呵，有这么多高手指点小弟，感激不仅 :D ，这篇文章自己都觉得有点跑题，就是因为找不到贴切的例子，能告诉我在这里怎么根据文章的题目搜索呀，我想去看看大家写的，好借鉴一下，呵呵。

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可以用的方法有作文版版面右下角（或者页面最最上面一排）的论坛搜索功能，找个关键词search一下就差不多了。

另外就是从超级入口里面往里进，能够看到我写的一个说明哦。