如果PS这样构思，大家帮我看看合理不？

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Houyhnhnms 发表于 2014-4-21 12:16
那这样说的话，我是不是可以写，我写论文的过程啊，论文虽然没得很高质量，但是我写的挺认真的，唯一的一 ...

其实六楼robin大神说的已经是sop主要需要回答的东西了。因为我是理科生，我们一般写某项科研的话，首先会写对相关领域很interested，做了哪些工作，中间有什么印象很深或者很难解决的问题，怎样解决的，通过科研获得了哪项技能，比如说编程能力增加了对哪些方面的了解之类的。总之PS是一个展示你学术能力和潜力的地方，个人理解。

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北辰远 发表于 2014-4-21 11:05
我一直在想申请的时候PS老师真的会认真看吗，我感觉都是各种数据扫一眼，综合看下就差不多了，几百份申请啊 ...

对于MS的申请我觉得PS可能不是特别重要，尤其是大家都没有什么科研背景，而MS也不是特别强调科研的时候。LZ的这种思路我个人比较赞同

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贫僧来阅经 发表于 2014-4-21 14:19
故事可以作为一个让人眼前一亮的开头，但不能作为ps的全部。
好的ps对申请的影响还是挺大的，尤其是cv无法 ...

你说的太有道理啦！一篇既要结合自身情况，又要结合自己的专业潜能，大概才是一篇好的PS吧。如果从头到尾都写故事，可能太偏了。突然觉得都不知道怎么写了~这要怎么结合呢~  我的故事我写的是一气呵成的，虽然不是一篇合格的PS，但是字字发自肺腑。如果是专业方向，突然觉得自己挺蒙了，都不知道该什么些。我的实习和研究经历确实有限。还没能有深刻的体会。如果实在不行，我可能就要放弃自己写了，自己写也是各种编造，只能找文书机构代劳，虽然他们都爱套模板。

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wang_come_on 发表于 2014-4-21 16:11
对于MS的申请我觉得PS可能不是特别重要，尤其是大家都没有什么科研背景，而MS也不是特别强调科研的时候。 ...

对呀，真心没什么科研感悟，一定要写，我就只有走编造的路，但是难道真的能写和专业无关的成长经历吗？

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crazyrobin 发表于 2014-4-21 11:47
你不妨写2个版本
一个以故事为导向，一个完全写成sop式

另外SOP式是指？我不太懂，我是小白别见怪，能跟我大体说一些吗？或者有类似的文章推荐看下吗？

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Houyhnhnms 发表于 2014-4-21 17:03
另外SOP式是指？我不太懂，我是小白别见怪，能跟我大体说一些吗？或者有类似的文章推荐看下吗？

Statement of purpose. 主要是学术的ps，写你为什么想学某一个专业，你大学四年的积累和你对这个项目的展望。

另外一种ps是anecdotal来说你是怎么样的一个人。我个人认为写学术和personal都可以。你看你对那个满意。另外如果学校要求一篇ps一篇sop，那么ps最好用personal touch.

我给你贴两篇吧，前一篇是anecdotal，后一篇是academic的sop写法。

anecdotal and personal touch

I never really paid much attention to the signs placed in front of the homeless and the less fortunate as I walked past them on the streets of New York. These were the thoughts running through my head as I considered what my own sign should read. Certainly, no one was going to read it. I had just spent the night in the ATM area of a desolate Citibank branch trying to get some sleep. I had no money, no phone and no hope of getting back to school in Boston. I think I came down with the worst case of writer’s block that morning as I tried to come up with a compelling message that would entice some level of compassion from a complete stranger. Having entertained the idea of a sign for a brief moment, I put the whole notion to rest, my pride simply would not allow for it. I used my gift for gab to convey my circumstances to the bus driver and garnered some sympathy towards my cause. I had to put my Discman up as collateral in order to get a seat on the next bus heading back to Boston which seemed like a small price to pay in exchange for a piece of my dignity as I avoided having to use a sign. The next four hours on that bus were filled with intense scrutiny and contemplation. I did not need my Discman after all. The biggest question I kept asking myself was ‘how did I get here?’

I was in my third year of undergraduate studies at Northeastern and I was barely able to make ends meet financially. Being the first member of my family to attend college was both a gift and a curse. I always excelled in the realm of academia and this was a great source of pride and joy for my parents. As a member of the schools Dean’s List and a number of different clubs and organizations, I gave my family something to cheer for. At the same time, being the first family member to attend college really called for financial resources that were beyond my parents’ modest income. Like a deep-sea diver venturing into an infinite ocean with inadequate supplies, I dove in headfirst. I knew that my acceptance into Northeastern was not something I could put aside because of money. My family shared the same sentiments and agreed that this was something that needed to happen. Completing my college education and attaining that degree was a must.

However, as each year passed it became increasingly difficult to maintain a financial foothold on my college education. No longer able to keep my head above water, I found myself completely submerged and gasping for air. By my third year, I was skipping meals or simply eating candy bars that I had shaken out of vending machines for dinner. I knew I could not last long. When I voiced my fears to a concerned listener on the other end of the phone, I thought a solution might have been reached. The plan was to go back home to NY and meet up with him. I agreed to serve as a runner, transporting drugs between a contact in New York and a contact in Boston. The money seemed justifiable and the risks seemed manageable. I was completely focused on the ends and not the means at this point. I used my last twenty dollars on a bus ticket and a dream and found myself spending the night on the floor of a Citibank branch. This cold and dirty floor, like the bed of a vast ocean, was the bottom.

Fortunately, no one showed up that night. I spent the whole night reflecting on how and why I was there to begin with. I could not believe I had even considered partaking in such activities just to generate some income. I would later find out that my real dad, whom I never met, suffered the same fate. My mom shared the story of how my father lived a life as a drug dealer only to be murdered while she was pregnant with me. It was at this point that the fire was lit inside of me and the thought of what I needed to do to make my college aspirations a reality became clearer. I realized I wanted to be a different person with clear and attainable goals for my academic and professional career. I transferred to a smaller college in New York where tuition was more affordable and I moved back home with my parents. I set my ego aside and worked full time as I put myself through school working forty-hour weeks by day and attending classes by night. No longer satisfied with my easily attainable but mediocre B’s and B+’s I studied diligently and completed my undergraduate degree with ‘A’s almost totally across the board. This afforded me a spot on a national honors society in recognition of my efforts.

There are two types of people in this world, those who take and those who make. Some people resign themselves to their fate and accept the hand which was dealt to them. That was me, nonchalant and absolutely content with any grade I received, apathetic about my lack of progress. As rough and as painful as a night in the cold and on the streets felt as it was occurring, I knew I only stood to learn from it in the long run. Now I am the protagonist in my own life instead of just being an idle spectator. My ambitions for law school have been cultivated by this vision of making things happen, not only for me but also for the sake of others. My younger sisters have both followed suite as they too have a roadmap drawn up to help them attain their college degrees. I have led by example, showing them that anything is truly possible if you want it bad enough and work hard for it. That whole experience has taught me a number of valuable lessons. I learned how to remain humble and to not let pride obscure my perception of what is important in life. I learned about resilience and about being steadfast in the face of adversity. I also became more tenacious as a result of that night. Now when I see something I want, I lock onto it like the jaws of a famished pit bull, not letting go until I devour and conquer what I set out to achieve. I know all of these qualities will help me excel in the study of law just as they have helped me arise triumphant in my turbulent undergraduate years as well as my professional career after College. This work ethic and newfound vision has transcended beyond my Bachelor’s degree and into the world of finance.

For the past year I have been working as an analyst with Morgan Stanley. My ability to make quick decisions and to think analytically is essential when dealing with a multitude of multi-million dollar trades. In order to work out various trade discrepancies I serve as a liaison between brokers, traders and various sales desks on the front end. This has allowed me to hone my communication skills. Getting my point across in a concise and comprehensible manner is crucial for the company’s financial goals. I know that these skills will help me to be a better law student and I’m excited at the prospect of sharing and learning with my future classmates and professors. Now when I look back at my undergraduate years and my professional career the question is no longer “how did I get here?” instead it is “where am I going?”

Academic

Winter break of freshman year, my friend Callie sent me a copy of Deleuze and Guattari’s Anti-Oedipus. No explanation accompanied the book, apart from an intriguing note inside the front cover: I dare you. The next few months were something of an intellectual metamorphosis. Before that point, “philosophy” had always meant sterile classes with names like “The Western Tradition.” In Anti-Oedipus, it became a means of dynamic, but refreshingly playful, critique. I spent the next semester and summer poring over many texts like Deleuze and Guattari’s, all of which opened my eyes to new, transformative ways of thinking. These texts, in conjunction with various experiences abroad, greatly influenced my undergraduate life.

My time at XXX University has afforded me the space to explore, and the structure to focus, my diverse intellectual interests. My work in Religious Studies has utilized critical theory such as Anti-Oedipus to develop frameworks for examining the intersection of theology and media studies. Although religion and technology are both important aspects of daily life, much social theory tends to conceptualize the two in oppositional terms. My work has sought to move beyond this simplistic antagonism, and to delve into the complexity of their intersection.

Among the issues that have directed my research: Can one find God online? Is media sharing on peer-to-peer networks unethical? Do cell phones and computers enable or impede spiritual development? Such questions are complicating, indeed, entirely reshaping, social and political discourse. Despite their intricacy, however, many people are still holding fast to easy, archaic answers. Social ills are often blamed on “Technology,” for instance, as if the word were coherently monolithic. Such accusations always bring to mind my experiences with development work in rural Latin America – notwithstanding other problems that “Technology” might pose, I fail to see any downside to the global provision of reliable electricity, potable water, or modern plumbing. Ultimately, the question is not one of universal judgment, but of case-by-case flexibility: in what situations is technology valuable, in what situations is it harmful, and how can we best evaluate this difference?



Even in the limited context of my time abroad, I found that although the communities in which I worked were similar, they faced different difficulties. In Paraguay, the importance of codified property rights was made clear through the daily struggles of poverty. The absence of infrastructure made financial lending next to impossible, severely curtailing any chance of social mobility. In Panama, where the standard of living is significantly higher (but still impoverished by U.S. norms), it became clear that global media—television, radio, and the Internet—is only useful if information remains accessible. Privatized wireless and land-line networks effectively bar the majority of Panamanians from ever experiencing the fruits of cyberspace. For example, basic medical knowledge—information that could be revolutionary in destitute areas of the world where child mortality is often caused by such simple ailments as dehydration—is readily available online. Yet startlingly few people in Panama, or elsewhere in the world, have the privilege to access it.

Not surprisingly, lofty jargon and sweeping generalizations have been of little help as I make sense of the social, cultural, and political questions engendered by experiences abroad. This deficiency has led me to believe that theory is immensely valuable—imperative, even, for human progress—but only to the extent that it casts light on the contours of daily life. Although I still find texts like Anti-Oedipus exhilarating, the sense of entitlement discernible behind its cryptic prose often exasperates me. What are underprivileged people in Panama or Paraguay—or, for that matter, in the United States—supposed to do with Deleuze and Guattari’s dense, rarefied writing? As far as I
can tell, nothing.

When I told Callie of my plans to apply to law school directly out of college, she replied, bluntly, “You don’t want to go to law school. You’re a theory-head; you read Deleuze and Guattari on the weekends; you use the word ‘hegemony’ on a daily basis. That’s not the kind of person who goes into law.” In some sense, she’s right. My penchant for theory runs deep, and I look forward to bringing my “theory-headedness” to bear in law school. However, I also find it crucial not to lose sight of widespread accessibility and practical application. Law appeals to me because it thrives on the negotiation between formal principles and real-world specificity. Legal argumentation must be rigorous and persuasive, but most of all, it must be transparent. Law must be responsive; it cannot afford elitism or obscurity. Neither can its students: I work actively to avoid both.

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crazyrobin 发表于 2014-4-21 18:02
Statement of purpose. 主要是学术的ps，写你为什么想学某一个专业，你大学四年的积累和你对这个项目的展 ...

灰常灰常感谢！感觉被脑补了！我想：如果说我真的要写个人经历。我觉应该些这段经历带给我的改变，这些改变让我得到一些品质，让我成为某一program的一个更合格的人候选人。不知道这样理解对不对~

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Houyhnhnms 发表于 2014-4-21 19:48
灰常灰常感谢！感觉被脑补了！我想：如果说我真的要写个人经历。我觉应该些这段经历带给我的改变，这些改 ...

不用，ps没有固定格式。你personal touch怎么写都可以。不用循规蹈矩。

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crazyrobin 发表于 2014-4-21 19:59
不用，ps没有固定格式。你personal touch怎么写都可以。不用循规蹈矩。

谢谢！那我觉得我可以先把我想写的那篇，写出来~再说

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Houyhnhnms 发表于 2014-4-21 12:16
那这样说的话，我是不是可以写，我写论文的过程啊，论文虽然没得很高质量，但是我写的挺认真的，唯一的一 ...

硬要掰的话，中国学生很少有很牛的论文。。。

就说自己有论文，谈谈自己论文写的过程，自己研究的和别人不一样突出的部分，

我是工科生，我也是diy的，ps我就写的是自己的科研经历，自己参加比赛做xxx，发现这个方向是我的兴趣（OMG！！），然后搞设计做实验，自己做了xxx，出了论文xxx，得了啥奖xxx，所以申请你们学校不是因为冲着你们排名去的，是因为自己很喜欢这个方向，而学校恰好有这个方向的研究老师，（好虚伪。。。汗），然后自己满心欢喜的申请你们学校。

我diy没有虚夸的地方，就是实事求是

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crazyrobin 发表于 2014-4-21 18:02
Statement of purpose. 主要是学术的ps，写你为什么想学某一个专业，你大学四年的积累和你对这个项目的展 ...

那最后提交哪一种风格的ps比较好呢？具体看学校项目？

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sarahxuxu 发表于 2014-4-21 21:40
那最后提交哪一种风格的ps比较好呢？具体看学校项目？

你对哪个版本满意就写哪个。这两种风格没有绝对优势。而且ps真心是最没规律的东西了，你怎么写都可以。只要表达出你是个啥人就ok了

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Houyhnhnms 发表于 2014-4-20 23:16
那这样说的话，我是不是可以写，我写论文的过程啊，论文虽然没得很高质量，但是我写的挺认真的，唯一的一 ...

ok

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crazyrobin 发表于 2014-4-21 22:06
你对哪个版本满意就写哪个。这两种风格没有绝对优势。而且ps真心是最没规律的东西了，你怎么写都可以。只 ...

嗯，好的！谢谢robin大神！！！！

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PS怎么可能扫一眼就过！我教授做过很多年的录取委员会成员，他就说，PS是最重要的，看PS就说找SPARK!!！

PS其实结构都是，我的career goal是什么，我为了这个goal做过什么努力，这个努力的过程中，我体现出了什么特质，证明我是适合这个career的，我又发现了自己的哪些不足。为了这个不足，我做过哪些努力，有哪些成就，有哪些困惑，所以我选择了你们这个program，因为这个program可以怎么帮到我。
除非是学校要求你写life narrative，否则。。。。你7788的成长经历，和项目本身无关的，人家不关心！跟研究生教育无关。  

PS是看中细节的，你可以不用把故事讲得多么的跌宕起伏，可是至少你做过什么，要细节。PS不是CV，不是罗列经历。
至于要不要写研究经历，你是申请学术项目么？千万别申请个实践项目，写了个学术项目的PS。