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发表于 2014-5-4 15:15:52 |显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 lifei00987 于 2014-5-4 15:30 编辑

People hold wildly different opinions regarding to the question whether children should learn foreign languages at primary school.Some argue that young children have special talents for language learning,while the others assert that parents and teachers should relieve students' burdens,and give them more time to play with their peers.In my opinion, the most important thing about children schooling is the cultivation of their interests in foreign cultures rather than memorising words and grammars.

Undeniably, those who contend that primary school students could learn foreign languages more effciently than secondary school students are right. According to a recent scientific report, young children could memorise more words than adults for a same period, and they could write those words down more accuratly three days later. Another advantage of language learning at primary schools is that in this way students at secondary schools have more time to acquire knowledges,instead of spending a large proportion of their time on memorising words.

So it is undeniable that learning foreign languages at primary schools has its advantage,but parents and schools should also try to avoid the inherent disadvantages of this practice. First of all, too complicated language environment may be confusing to young children.Switching between two distinctly unlinked languages is definitely difficult for young children who is trying hard to understand his mother language.And another important thing parents and teachers should pay close attention to is to make foreign language learning interesting and motivating.This is the key to successful foreign language learning.Teachers should avoid forcing primary school students to memorize words,which is intolerably monotonous and frustrating,and may make young children lose further interest in language learning.

To conclude,regarding this issue,my view is that young children should learn foreign languages at primary school.In the mean time,teachers and parents should make language learning interesting. That is what primary school students need most.

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发表于 2014-5-4 15:16:04 |显示全部楼层
能指点一下更好啦

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发表于 2014-5-5 10:21:12 |显示全部楼层
求大神,拜大神

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发表于 2014-5-8 13:51:43 |显示全部楼层
求大神,拜大神

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发表于 2014-5-8 21:18:29 |显示全部楼层
親可以參加我們的雅思寫作互改小組https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1725048-1-1.html

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发表于 2014-5-9 08:47:04 |显示全部楼层
我會打6分。有一些動詞、名詞和介詞的用法不夠準確。例如regarding後面不需要加to;"for a same period"應為"in the same period of time";倒數第二段最後那個which指代不清,應該去掉逗號,等等。

建議樓主寫完之後自己先檢查一遍。

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发表于 2014-5-15 16:47:33 |显示全部楼层
kaywoo 发表于 2014-5-9 08:47
我會打6分。有一些動詞、名詞和介詞的用法不夠準確。例如regarding後面不需要加to;"for a same period"應為 ...

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发表于 2014-5-15 17:40:01 |显示全部楼层
就这篇而言
个人觉得可能不到6分
历史上小组里面得6分的人挺多的  貌似写的都比楼主好
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然后最重要的一点  请不要用模板  

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