Issue223 正确认识学校所起的作用：主观能动 Vs 客观环境；个人 Vs 整体

dezhiUID: 156141

Issue223
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作者：dezhi     共用时间：45分24秒     506 words
从2004年2月12日22时50分到2004年2月12日23时35分
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Education is primarily a personal matter; it has little to do with school or college.
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The speaker claims that education is primarily a personal matter, which has little to do with school or college. Although education depends on the individual efforts, as far as I am concerned, the significant role school or college plays ought not be neglected.

I concede that education would be not productive without personal efforts. Only with their own efforts can the students learn well, which are the most significant. A beautiful school or a great college does not make sense if the students in it are reluctant to learn. Only by its impetus and desire can a student accomplish his/her education in the end. Without such desire or interest, no other things can help him/her to achieve the education goal. As a result, the primary purpose of education is to activiate students in their studying, not to solely provide them with a good learning enviornment.

However, school or college provides students with an enviornment for learning more comfortably, and offers a competitive atmosphere. On the one hand, libraries, basketball Squares, swimming pools, and other facilities standing on the campus help students get a better education. At school, students can search the materials wanted in the library, and do exercises to build a strong body, while at home or other places, there will be no such comfort. On the other hand, excellent pupils on the campus from all over the country compel one to learn harder in order to gain high grades. Such competitive atmosphere is beneficial, for it forces one to review its lessons before an examination, and help one better master the knowledge. Imagine the performance of two students at school and at home. It is reasonable to deduce that the student at home will learn less for the simple reason that there are so many distractions at home which may attract his/her attention. However, the student at school may learn a large quantity of knowledge, as the pupils around him/her are all learning hard, which in turn has great influence on him/her.

Furthermore, with the dramatic increase in knowledge today, it is impossible for students to educate themselves without the involvement of school or college. Due to the largely expanded knowledge and the increasing number of lessons one may take during his or her college life, it is almost impossible for a student to learn well all by himself/herself. Under such cirmustances, the school or college just serves as a guidance to help student go the right way. It is hard to imagine a student who can learn all the knowledge required by the society just through his or her own efforts.


To sum up, although individual factors are indispensible for education, it is school or college that finally pushes students to accomplish their education. It is unwarranted to assert that education has little to do with school or college. On the contrary, if the individual factors can combine with the help of school or college, the education of a country will surely go more effective and productive.

dezhiUID: 156141

写得真烂，想砸~~~~~

写这篇Issue的时候,周围的环境非常恶劣,有三四个人在高谈阔论,所以写着写着就没了思路,然后努力的想下一步说什么,.....还事先写好了提纲的说~~~~~~~~晕

eaglezhouUID: 156651

Education is primarily a personal matter; it has little to do with school or college.
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The speaker claims that education is primarily a personal matter, which has little to do with school or college. Although education depends on the individual efforts, as far as I am concerned,（是不是放到句首会更加好点） the significant role school or college plays ought not be neglected. （开头好简洁啊！）

I concede that education would be not productive without personal efforts. Only with their own efforts can the students learn well, which are the most significant(这句话的意思好像有点不明确). A beautiful school or a great college does not make sense if the students in it are reluctant to learn. Only by its impetus and desire can a student accomplish his/her education in the end. Without such desire or interest, no other things can help him/her to achieve the education goal. As a result, the primary purpose of education is to activiate（activate）  students in their studying, not to solely provide them with a good learning environment.

However, school or college provides students with an enviornment(environment)  for learning more comfortably, and offers a competitive atmosphere（这个观点不错）. On the one hand, libraries, basketball Squares, swimming pools, and other facilities standing on the campus help students get a better education. At school, students can search the materials wanted in the library, and do exercises to build a strong body, while at home or other places, there will be no such comfort. On the other hand, excellent pupils（students会更加普适一点吧！） on the campus from all over the country compel one to learn harder in order to gain high grades. Such competitive atmosphere is beneficial, for it forces one to review its lessons before an examination, and help one better master the knowledge. Imagine the performance of two students at school and at home. It is reasonable to deduce that the student at home will learn less for the simple reason that there are so many distractions at home which may attract his/her attention. However, the student at school may learn a large quantity of knowledge, as the pupils around him/her are all learning hard（是不是太武断了，也有一些人会给坏的影响）, which in turn has great influence on him/her.

Furthermore, with the dramatic increase in knowledge today, it is impossible（感觉这个论断的weight太重了，改成not that easy之类的会不会好点，或者像下面用almost impossible） for students to educate themselves without the involvement of school or college. Due to the largely expanded knowledge and the increasing number of lessons one may take during his or her college life, it is almost impossible for a student to learn well all by himself/herself. Under such cirmustances（circumstances）, the school or college just（用just好吗？） serves as a guidance to help student go the right way. It is hard to imagine a student who can learn all the knowledge required by the society just through his or her own efforts.


To sum up, although individual factors are indispensible （indispensable） for education, it is school or college that finally pushes students to accomplish their education. It is unwarranted to assert that education has little to do with school or college. On the contrary, if the individual factors can combine with the help of school or college, the education of a country will surely go more effective and productive.

fishergirlUID: 152325

The speaker claims that education is primarily a personal matter, which has little to do with school or college. Although education depends on the individual efforts, as far as I am concerned, the significant role school or college plays ought not be neglected.

I concede that education would be not productive without personal efforts. Only with their own efforts can the students learn well, which are the most significant. A beautiful school or a great college does not make sense if the students in it are reluctant to learn. Only by its impetus and desire can a student accomplish his/her education in the end. Without such desire or interest, no other things can help him/her to achieve the education goal. As a result, the primary purpose of education is to activiate activate students in their studying, not to solely provide them with a good learning enviornment. environment

However, school or college provides students with an enviornment for learning more comfortably, and offers a competitive atmosphere. On the one hand, libraries, basketball Squares, swimming pools, and other facilities standing on the campus help students get a better education. At school, students can search the materials wanted in the library, and do exercises to build a strong body, while at home or other places, there will be no such comfort. On the other hand, excellent pupils on the campus from all over the country compel one to learn harder in order to gain high grades. Such competitive atmosphere is beneficial, for it forces one to review its lessons before an examination, and help one better master the knowledge. Imagine the performance of two students at school and at home. It is reasonable to deduce that the student at home will learn less for the simple reason that there are so many distractions at home, which may attract his/her attention. However, the student at school may learn a large quantity of knowledge, as the pupils around him/her are all learning hard, which in turn has great influence on him/her.

Furthermore, with the dramatic increase in knowledge today, it is impossible for students to educate themselves without the involvement of school or college. Due to the largely expanded knowledge and the increasing number of lessons one may take during his or her college life, it is almost impossible for a student to learn well all by himself/herself. Under such cirmustances circumstances, the school or college just serves as a guidance to help student go the right way. It is hard to imagine a student who can learn all the knowledge required by the society just through his or her own efforts.

To sum up, although individual factors are indispensable indispensable for education, it is school or college that finally pushes students to accomplish their education. It is unwarranted to assert that education has little to do with school or college. On the contrary, if the individual factors can combine with the help of school or college, the education of a country will surely go more effective and productive.

写的很好，向你学习：）

fishergirlUID: 152325

不过，个人感觉那个学生在家和在学校学习的例子显得有点……幼稚（请千万不要生气，呵呵）

流浪的小孩UID: 157889

思路是清晰的，先承认自身因素的重要性，在分别说明外在环境的好处和必要性。但论证有些单薄
Body都要展开啊，我觉得body1 可以先用一般到特殊的方法，即任何事物的性质都是由内外两方面因素共同决定的，
教育也不例外。所以不能否认自身的影响：……
body 2 学校的好处还有提供交流的场所。尤其在大学中，由于学校的质量不同，汇聚的学生素质也不同，整个学习和生活的
气氛也不同，自然教育水平的高低和成效也有差别。
外界因素还能作用与内在因素，互相有关联。好的学校的学生自信心相对强，学习动力足。而差的学校的学生可能会有自卑心理，
这会因向他们的学习。
Body 3 学校的必要性，自学为什么没有上学好？办学校的目的：在思想，价值观上和知识上进行引导。
其实我逻辑也很混乱的，改的时候思路也不怎么清晰和广阔，以上仅作参考，其实我觉得也很不好举例的。
搂主要先自己改改错字和一些错误用法哦

dezhiUID: 156141

首先：
activiate--> activate
enviornment-->environment
cirmustances -->circumstances
indispensible -->indispensable
　　这里面只有最后一个词是我不太熟的，其他的都是打错了
　　我本来以为我的拼写和语法没有太大的问题，所以以前发帖子都是直接发，没有事先放到Word里面去check，没想到这篇文章里出现了这么多打错的情况！
　　尤其是流浪的小孩说的一句话：“搂主要先自己改改错字和一些错误用法哦”---blush~~~
　　以后再发文章，保证一定先检查好有没有写错的词:)

dezhiUID: 156141

to eaglezhou:
谢谢批改！
“However, the student at school may learn a large quantity of knowledge, as the pupils around him/her are all learning hard（是不是太武断了，也有一些人会给坏的影响）, which in turn has great influence on him/her.”
“Furthermore, with the dramatic increase in knowledge today, it is impossible（感觉这个论断的weight太重了，改成not that easy之类的会不会好点，或者像下面用almost impossible）”

说得很对，我写Issue时不时用上一些这样的很绝对化的词，写的时候好像也没有经过大脑一样，很不好。以后一定注意避免思想的极端化！

dezhiUID: 156141

to fishergirl:
我举的那个学生在家和在学校学习的例子确实有些幼稚，也太common了。
或者从另外一个角度来说，不能算是个例子，就是大白话，设想了两个场景，烂

dezhiUID: 156141

to 流浪的小孩:
谢谢你提供的思路，很好的说：）
论证有些单薄正是我的弱点，只有继续努力了