issue41 机井题 爆炒狒狒ing...

lovebrianUID: 157127

最初由 小狗圆圆 发布
[B]With the development of technology, science areas, the mainstream areas which instill people's daily lives, have played a considerable role. In my point of view other nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits are also quite indispensable for they are supplementary ways which could do much to people's mental fields.

First, such nonmainstream areas could satisfy human needs (这个是中心吧,我按照这个看的) that are not addressed by mainstream science. As is known to all, science, a modern measure with high objectivity, is like a strict friend who may tell you the right direction to go, the wrong things you have done, and the highway to success. Thus, however, such a friend may neglect one's feeling and emotion which are even more important than those rational factors. For example, Phil Jackson, a famous coach in NBA, takes astrology as an instrument in his basketball matches in that, for him, this instrument could tell the main direction of the play during that night and may decide the play's destiny or fate. He is one of the best coaches in NBA undoubtedly for he has gained nine NBA final championships, though his measure of astrology seems unconvincing for most people. (前半句好像有点多余,呵呵,这样说可以吗?虽然对别人unconvincing,但是satisfy his own need, that is to tell the fate. 是不是更严密一点) （有道理！这个句子还是有问题的~好多人提出疑问了阿）As far as I am concerned, the future told by the astrology could motivate the players' passion when it directs light and could protect the confidence when they lose during a basketball match. (which are also in need)To a larger extent, such nonmainstream areas pay more attentions to human's mental fields which are neglected by mainstream science.

Second, these nonmainstream ways to deal with human's mental factors pass down from one generation to another in that they have got their historical position, consequently they could not extinct even these days when high technology used widely. So to speak, things which have a long history always have strong lives in that they have got stable statuses in people's deep minds; these nonmainstream areas are not the exceptions. Take astrology as an example. As a traditional method to tell future, it has got nearly a thousand-year-history and is still useful these days to some races and clans whose people believe in their Gods or Goddesses in their very religions(这个逻辑好像有点问题呀,应该说即使科技是我们更了解宇宙的客观规律,但是我们仍然在寻求一种astrology的暗示.是文明却迷信,你说的好像是蒙昧(clans)而迷信哟)（我是想说……我没说这是迷信阿~~倒~）. And the future told by such old manners is thought to be the directions given by their Gods; thus these words play an indispensable role in the special organizations as words of Gods. The case illustrates that such so-called nonmainstream areas are not merely instruments comparable with science(好像表达的不太对吧,ts好像说他们是共存的呀) （这个考虑一下哦~~呵呵~~似乎……）in that through the long history they have got their special significant meanings even religion positions. This is the reason why they cannot extinct even the modern times.

Admittedly, some negative points have been brought by such nonmainstream areas; and even some evil organizations play against the peace world as the name of them. For instance, some evil religions encourage the believers to suicide for a host of reasons made by the so-called leaders. They suicide, then they could go to the heaven without any pains, they could make it a better life for the next life, they could escape from the big disasters, and they could make their relations live with great happiness.( 是邪教的观点吧,说明一下是不是更好,初读起来不知道,还以为是在论述,挺突兀的)（这里我用排比用乱了~~sigh） People's beautiful willing becomes the hands of Satan which destroyed many people's lives and leaves many people crying lonely in the big world. (偶喜欢这句话)（因为这是中国话？！）Government should destroy such evil organizations (把政府的职能扯进来好像显得比较散,惊醒一下世人就够了吧)（后边的考虑删掉~~掺杂的多余意群）, however, the proper nonmainstream areas should not be interrupted and even be protected for their great contributions.

To sum up, these nonmainstream areas care people's mental lives more than mainstream science and have their historical and special positions thus live with strong power. People may gain better lives from these areas while people must take great alert of Satan.(总结的很漂亮呀!)

果然是牛人的东东,挑毛病很难耶
怎么改作文还要占座呀,不好意思,小妹先顶一顶,见笑了!

狒狒是学生物的吧,^_^!加油哟!
（我不是牛人啊~~我太菜了~~就是胆子大~~敢写而已
吼后~~我是学生物工程的哦）
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谢谢你啦~~嘿嘿~~~
我觉得你的语言功底不错哦

童心UID: 151202

最初由 dezhi 发布
[B]我一下午的邓小平理论与三个代表，同晕~~~~
anyway，共同努力吧 [/B]

heihei ...偶也逃，不过小心点。。。。考试。。。

小狗圆圆UID: 155823

Second, these nonmainstream ways to deal with human's mental factors pass down from one generation to another in that they have got their historical position, consequently they could not extinct even these days when high technology used widely. So to speak, things which have a long history always have strong lives in that they have got stable statuses in people's deep minds; these nonmainstream areas are not the exceptions. Take astrology as an example. As a traditional method to tell future, it has got nearly a thousand-year-history and is still useful these days to some races and clans whose people believe in their Gods or Goddesses in their very religions(这个逻辑好像有点问题呀,应该说即使科技是我们更了解宇宙的客观规律,但是我们仍然在寻求一种astrology的暗示.是文明却迷信,你说的好像是蒙昧(clans)而迷信哟)（我是想说……我没说这是迷信阿~~倒~）. And the future told by such old manners is thought to be the directions given by their Gods; thus these words play an indispensable role in the special organizations as words of Gods.
我才sigh~,这么好的逻辑错误,你都没有看,就听着我的语文水平,我就用”迷信”指代一下嘛,
不行,我一定要说明白,我的意思是,开头的逻辑是我们进步了,但是我们还用那些落后的东西,这里的例子是clan,(clan是代表落后的部落的吧)部分落后的部落还在用落后的东西,--注:落后也是指代,sigh~

^_^,被我骗了吧,我都很少说英文,中文说了也说不清,没办法
那我们算是同道中人,上次逃试验还被捉住,sigh~

有这么多人给你改呀,羡慕ing~

lovebrianUID: 157127

再次倒~~~看来是我把读者误导了~~
我并非在解释进步和落后阿~~我只是（只是！）想说，这是一种传统的方式~~~在一些部族中仍然起着很重要的作用~~~这与科技无关阿~~因为是传统~信仰  信仰是凌驾于其他一切之上的吧~~~我是这么理解的~~~你觉得呢？
呵呵~~~

因为我也给大家改嘛！~~都是朋友了~~~

哎呀~~发现圆圆都已经考完作文了阿~~~
这样还来帮狒狒改作文~~~~bow了阿~~呵呵

happymichelleUID: 154082

呵呵~
狒狒你面子可真大~
大家也来拍拍我的吧。

lovebrianUID: 157127

最初由 happymichelle 发布
[B]呵呵~
狒狒你面子可真大~
大家也来拍拍我的吧。 [/B]

大家赏光哦~~~狒狒真太荣幸了~~嘿嘿~
我来看看你的

icyscorpioUID: 146659

No.1 issue41 狒狒也来一篇机井题~~~有砖的来拍吧
41"Such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits play a vital role in society by satisfying human needs that are not addressed by mainstream science."




With the development of technology, science areas, the mainstream areas which instill people's daily lives, have played a considerable role. In my point of view other nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits are also quite indispensable for they are supplementary ways which could do much to people's mental fields.
开门见山。

First,（firstly??） such nonmainstream areas could satisfy human needs that are not addressed by mainstream science. As is known to all, science, a modern measure with high objectivity, is like a strict friend who may tell you the right direction to go, the wrong things you have done, and the highway to success. Thus, however,（这两个词用到一起？？） such a friend may neglect one's feeling and emotion which are even more important than those rational factors. For example, Phil Jackson（哥们我是踢足球的，看来这点上去美国也是个劣势啊。）, a famous coach in NBA, takes astrology as an instrument in his basketball matches in that, for him, this instrument could tell the main direction of the play during that night and may decide the play's destiny or fate. He is one of the best coaches in NBA undoubtedly for he has gained nine NBA final championships, though his measure of astrology seems unconvincing for most people. As far as I am concerned,（好像不好，不知道你在这个词后面写的是什么？） the future told by the astrology could motivate the players' passion when it directs light and could protect the confidence when they lose during a basketball match. To a larger extent, such nonmainstream areas pay more attentions to human's mental fields which are neglected by mainstream science.

Second,(secondly??) these nonmainstream ways to deal with human's mental factors pass down from one generation to another in that they have got their historical position, consequently they could not extinct even these days when high technology used widely. So to speak, things which have a long history always have strong lives in that they have got stable statuses in people's deep minds（不如写“存在即是合理”。）; these nonmainstream areas are not the exceptions（＃%＃ are not expected??，好像在新概念还是什么地方见过。）. Take astrology as an example. As a traditional method to tell future, it has got nearly a thousand-year-history and is still useful these days to some races and clans whose people believe in their Gods or Goddesses in their very religions. And the future told by such old manners is thought to be the directions given by their Gods; thus these words play an indispensable role in the special organizations as words of Gods. The case illustrates that such so-called nonmainstream areas are not merely instruments comparable with science in that through the long history they have got their special significant meanings even religion positions. This is the reason why they cannot extinct even the modern times.（仿佛这个例子后的总结不是太好）

Admittedly,（看来你是用这个词的） some negative points have been brought by such nonmainstream areas; and even some evil organizations play against the peace world as the name of them. For instance, some evil religions（写个名字啊，记得在哪看过一个贴子说过，不写法轮功，有两个什么教好像在美国那边挺有名的，不过我忘了，懒的记那些东西。） encourage the believers to suicide for a host of reasons made by the so-called leaders. They suicide, then they could go to the heaven without any pains, they could make it a better life for the next life, they could escape from the big disasters, and they could make their relations live with great happiness. People's beautiful willing becomes the hands of Satan which destroyed many people's lives and leaves many people crying lonely in the big world. Government should destroy such evil organizations, however, the proper nonmainstream areas should not be interrupted and even be protected for their great contributions.

To sum up, these nonmainstream areas care people's mental lives more than mainstream science and have their historical and special positions thus live with strong power. People may gain better lives from these areas while people must take great alert of Satan.
（？？没看懂。）

在极其混乱的宿舍写的~~~还没吃饭~~sigh~~~提纲也没弄清楚~~~sigh again。。。


说说总体感觉吧，没大问题。但好像有些泛泛，说不出什么亮点。
可能是一天下午看累了吧。
第一个例子好，算你狠，估计这东西美国人喜欢。
我现在要是编就写一些学术的东西，写中国的航空工业什么的，复合材料的制造和设计之间的关系什么的，估计美国哥们也看不懂，我要写个皇马什么的，觉得他们可能也难。。。。。
看来从小的爱好不太符合人家那边的标准啊。。。。。。

还有一点，我觉得你句间的关系还应该再考虑。
一句一句下来，揉成一个整体说明主题是中国人的写法。
一句接一句，一步一步推进，得出结论是美国人的写法。

好运！！
多多帮助我啊！！

lovebrianUID: 157127

最初由 icyscorpio 发布
[B]还有一点，我觉得你句间的关系还应该再考虑。
一句一句下来，揉成一个整体说明主题是中国人的写法。
一句接一句，一步一步推进，得出结论是美国人的写法。

好运！！
多多帮助我啊！！
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恩~~看了你的意见咯~~呵呵~~尤其是举间关系~~~说得很有道理
这是我的大劣势阿~~
呵呵~~说得很好~~的确没什么亮点~~
篮球足球的嘛！不重要的~~

大家互相帮助咯！！

jianguoUID: 157933

41"Such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits play a vital role in society by satisfying human needs that are not addressed by mainstream science."

With the development of technology, science areas, the mainstream areas(areas不能灌输) which instill people's daily lives, have played a considerable role（加一个限定范围in）. In my point of view（我没见这种说法，学之） other nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits are also quite indispensable for they are supplementary ways which could do much to people's mental fields.

First, such nonmainstream areas could satisfy human needs that are not addressed by mainstream science. As is known to all, science, a modern measure with high objectivity, is like a strict friend who may tell you the right direction to go, the wrong things（what） you have done, and the highway to success. Thus, however, such a friend may neglect one's feeling and emotion which are even more important than those rational factors. For example, Phil Jackson, a famous coach in NBA, takes astrology as an instrument in his basketball matches in that, for him, this instrument could tell the main direction of the play during that night and may decide the play's destiny or fate. He is one of the best coaches in NBA undoubtedly for(because) he has gained nine(缺times) NBA final championships, though his measure of astrology seems unconvincing for most people. As far as I am concerned, the future told by the astrology could motivate the players' passion when it directs light and could protect the confidence when they lose during a basketball match. To a larger extent, such nonmainstream areas pay more attentions to human's mental fields which are neglected by mainstream science.

lovebrianUID: 157127

最初由 jianguo 发布
[B]With the development of technology, science areas, the mainstream areas(areas不能灌输)（哈哈 已经被教育过了） which instill people's daily lives, have played a considerable role（加一个限定范围in）（具体化~~）. In my point of view（我没见这种说法，学之）（不是吧？） other nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits are also quite indispensable for they are supplementary ways which could do much to people's mental fields.

First, such nonmainstream areas could satisfy human needs that are not addressed by mainstream science. As is known to all, science, a modern measure with high objectivity, is like a strict friend who may tell you the right direction to go, the wrong things（what） you have done, and the highway to success. Thus, however, such a friend may neglect one's feeling and emotion which are even more important than those rational factors. For example, Phil Jackson, a famous coach in NBA, takes astrology as an instrument in his basketball matches in that, for him, this instrument could tell the main direction of the play during that night and may decide the play's destiny or fate. He is one of the best coaches in NBA undoubtedly for(because) （对~）he has gained nine(缺times) （九个冠军）NBA final championships, though his measure of astrology seems unconvincing for most people. As far as I am concerned, the future told by the astrology could motivate the players' passion when it directs light and could protect the confidence when they lose during a basketball match. To a larger extent, such nonmainstream areas pay more attentions to human's mental fields which are neglected by mainstream science.
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恩~~谢谢jianguo了~~呵呵~~

小狗圆圆UID: 155823

Second, these nonmainstream ways to deal with human's mental factors pass down from one generation to another in that they have got their historical position, consequently they could not extinct even these days when high technology used widely.

不好意思呀,我理解错误,我的理解是TS说那些非科学has historical position so survive even these days when high technology used widely.
不受现代科学的冲击,^_^,那就是你的中心句有问题呀!

吭哧吭哧啃啃UID: 153580

With the development of technology, science areas, the mainstream areas which instill people's daily lives, have played a considerable role. In my point of view other nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits are also quite indispensable for they are supplementary ways which could do much to people's mental fields.

First, such nonmainstream areas could satisfy human needs that are not addressed by mainstream science. As is known to all, science, a modern measure with high objectivity, is like a strict friend who may tell you the right direction to go, the wrong things you have done, and the highway to success（success the highway??）. Thus, however, such a friend may neglect one's feeling and emotion which are even more important than those rational factors. For example, Phil Jackson, a famous coach in NBA, takes astrology as an instrument in his basketball matches in that, for him, this instrument could tell the main direction of the play during that night and may decide the play's destiny or fate. He is one of the best coaches in NBA undoubtedly for he has gained nine NBA final championships, though his measure of astrology seems unconvincing for most people. As far as I am concerned, the future told by the astrology could motivate the players' passion when it directs light and could protect the confidence when they lose during a basketball match. To a larger extent, such nonmainstream areas pay more attentions to human's mental fields which are neglected by mainstream science.

Second, these nonmainstream ways to deal with human's mental factors pass down from one generation to another in that they have got their historical position, consequently they could not extinct even these days when high technology used widely. So to speak, things which have a long history always have strong lives in that they have got stable statuses in people's deep minds（这谁说的啊，这种能不能作为论据啊）; these nonmainstream areas are not the exceptions. Take astrology as an example. As a traditional method to tell future, it has got nearly a thousand-year-history and is still useful these days to some races and clans whose people believe in their Gods or Goddesses in their very religions. And the future told by such old manners is thought to be the directions given by their Gods; thus these words play an indispensable role in the special organizations as words of Gods. The case illustrates that such so-called nonmainstream areas are not merely instruments comparable with science in that through the long history they have got their special significant meanings even religion positions. This is the reason why they cannot extinct even the modern times.

Admittedly, some negative points have been brought by such nonmainstream areas; and even some evil organizations play against the peace world as the name of them. For instance, some evil religions encourage the believers to suicide for a host of reasons made by the so-called leaders. They suicide, then they could go to the heaven without any pains, they could make it a better life for the next life, they could escape from the big disasters, and they could make their relations live with great happiness. People's beautiful willing becomes the hands of Satan which destroyed many people's lives and leaves many people crying lonely in the big world（这一句真的有这一说，绝了，肯定能为你加不少分）. Government should destroy such evil organizations, however, the proper nonmainstream areas should not be interrupted and even be protected for their great contributions.

To sum up, these nonmainstream areas care people's mental lives more than mainstream science and have their historical and special positions thus live with strong power. People may gain better lives from these areas while people must take great alert of Satan.

这么多生物的,医的同行怎么能不支持一下呢
实在,写地好,没什么好改的
顺便问一句,像我们这样的专业,什么类型的题目会考多一点啊,碰到政治类我就偏头痛,

lovebrianUID: 157127

With the development of technology, science areas, the mainstream areas which are instilled into people's daily lives, have played a considerable role. In my point of view other nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits are also quite indispensable in providing supplementary ways to promote mentality of people.

First, nonmainstream areas could serve people more deeply in their mental world than mainstream science. As is known to all, science, a modern measure with high objectivity, is like a strict friend who may lead you to the right direction, tell you what is wrong or what is right, and guide you to the highway to success. However, such a friend may neglect one's feelings and emotions which are even more important than those rational factors. For example, Phil Jackson, a famous coach in NBA, takes astrology as an instrument in his basketball matches since this instrument could offer him the main direction of the play during that night and may decide the play's destiny or fate.  Undoubtedly he is one of the best coaches in NBA because he has gained nine NBA final championship rings, though his measure of astrology seems unconvincing for most people. As far as I am concerned, the future predicted by the astrology could motivate the players' passion when it points success and could maintain the confidence when they lose during a basketball match. To a larger extent, such nonmainstream areas pay more attentions to human's mental fields which are neglected by mainstream science.

Second, these nonmainstream ways to deal with human's mental factors come down from one generation to another in that they have got their historical position, consequently they could not extinct even these days when high technology is used widely. Generally speaking, whatever have a long history always have strong lives in that they have got stable statuses in people's deep minds; these nonmainstream areas are not the exceptions. Take astrology as an example. As a traditional method to tell the future with a thousand years’ history is still useful these days for some races and clans whose people believe in their Gods or Goddesses in their religions. And the future told by such old approaches is thought to be the directions given by their Gods; thus these words play an indispensable role in the special organizations as words of Gods. The case illustrates that such so-called nonmainstream areas are not merely instruments comparing with science in that through the long history they have got their special significant meanings even religion positions. This is the reason why they cannot extinct even the modern times.

Admittedly, some negative points have been brought about by such nonmainstream areas; even some evil organizations play against the peaceful world in the name of them. For instance, some evil religions encourage the believers to suicide for a host of reasons given by the so-called leaders. Their leaders tell them that they suicide, then they could go to the heaven without any pains, make it a better life for the next life, escape from the big disasters, and make their relations live with great happiness. People's beautiful will becomes the hand of Satan which has destroyed many people's lives and leaves many people crying lonely in the big world. Government should destroy such evil organizations to protect the people who may be beguiled by these devils and become the weapons of these organizations to ruin their own families.

To sum up, these nonmainstream areas care people's mental lives more than mainstream science and have their historical and special positions thus live with strong power. People may gain better lives from these areas while people must be alert to the controllers who stand behind with undesirable purpose.

lovebrianUID: 157127

最初由 小狗圆圆 发布
[B]不好意思呀,我理解错误,我的理解是TS说那些非科学has historical position so survive even these days when high technology used widely.
不受现代科学的冲击,^_^,那就是你的中心句有问题呀! [/B]

看来后边加了科技这半句话~~~起了不好的作用啊~~呵呵~~
圆圆的意思我明白啦~嗯嗯~ts再改改

最初由 吭哧吭哧啃啃 发布
[B]这么多生物的,医的同行怎么能不支持一下呢
实在,写地好,没什么好改的
顺便问一句,像我们这样的专业,什么类型的题目会考多一点啊,碰到政治类我就偏头痛,[/B]

写得不好了阿~~看看大家给掐的~~~呵呵~~~同学们都好热心~感动~~~

谢谢你拉~~同行~~加油！！

issue毕竟是二选一阿~~
都是政治的可能性不大~~