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新人，刚开始看资料，顶一下单纯感谢一下老师的帮助

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也不知道能不能在楼下留言。
如果违反了规定，请楼主见谅。
我自己就Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.这题写了一个提纲:

Claim：政府应该提供给大城市一定的经济支撑。因为大城市的运转需要a huge amount of money。但是也不能只靠政府，否则会有corruption或资源分配不平均的事情发生。    Reason:文化可以在rural 或者suburb的地方发展。   

楼主您给的范文里面大致的结构是：不应该分很多给大城市，因为大城市可以通过advertise ,donation, volunteer来维持文化产业的发展。  而应该分给小地区，因为他们不能够通过以上方式发展，只能通过政府补贴。

我是不是偏题偏的太厉害了。。。。- -。 但是我记得之前上课的时候老师讲这种题应该claim reason 都写一写。

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郑艺蕾BAM 发表于 2016-2-17 19:19
也不知道能不能在楼下留言。
如果违反了规定，请楼主见谅。
我自己就Claim: Governments must ensure tha ...

你提纲里的reason实际上是反对题目给的reason，对吧。但是你这个reason和你的claim之间却没有关系呢。所以，你按这个提纲写出来的文章就很难整合在一起了。

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tesolchina 发表于 2016-2-17 19:35
你提纲里的reason实际上是反对题目给的reason，对吧。但是你这个reason和你的claim之间却没有关系呢。所以 ...

所以这道题审题应该是： 政府应该拨款给主要城市来preserve culture
而不是应该割裂来看吗。  
那这种claim reason的题是否都是需要 把题目揉在一起写。而不是分reason 和claim来写。  
又或者说reason 和claim其实可以分开写，但是要有共同的点串起来。？

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郑艺蕾BAM 发表于 2016-2-17 20:31
所以这道题审题应该是： 政府应该拨款给主要城市来preserve culture
而不是应该割裂来看吗。  
那这种 ...

我一般建议将reason和claim看做一个整体 这并不妨碍你分别讨论R 和C
如果你完全同意这句话 就意味着你同时同意R和C  你如果只同意C而不同意R 你也可以提出R' 来支持C
我不太确定你可以不同意C而同意R  因为毕竟决定C是否对的是题目的重点所在 如果C都不同意了 那么同不同意R又有何意义呢
当然这道题有些特殊，因为题库里有道issue 是直接放了这道题的R，而没有C，我当初看到简直惊呆了
所以 对于那道题你就得独立考虑这道题里的R了
有没有把你绕晕 O(∩_∩)O哈哈哈~

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tesolchina 发表于 2016-2-17 23:49
我一般建议将reason和claim看做一个整体 这并不妨碍你分别讨论R 和C
如果你完全同意这句话 就意味着你同 ...

懂了懂了 谢谢老师。

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老师你好，今天准备提纲的时候碰到一道难题TAT。 请老师赐教。

People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.

我想的提纲如下：

Thesis：中立。人们的的行为更多的受到forces not of their own making.Forces可以分为家庭、社会、学校的forces。这三重forces会引导人的行为。但是因为人分为有想法并且有能力的人和随波逐流的人。对于有想法且有能力的人，会很好将自己的能力和forces结合，找到自己的舞台。而对于随波逐流的人来讲，这种forces会影响他们自己做违心的决定。

forces来源广泛：社会force:如今就业难已经成为普遍共识，所以社会对于高素质的人才更需求，这使一些同学以拿文凭为目的读书，尽管他们不喜欢。Universities希望培养研究型的人才，所以会引导学生往研究领域发展，这使得一些没有了解自身兴趣的同学朝研究领域发展。有些家庭可能经济困难，所以需要学生尽快工作来承担家庭的开支，这会使同学尽快找工作。

有想法和有能力的人不会受到外力的影响。他们能够洞察社会的需求，并且和自身的爱好做结合。相反，随波逐流的人往往跟随大趋势，因为他们没有缺乏insight。比如大学生是应该深造还是就业呢？Independent thinking的大学生会根据自我的需求：比如喜欢研究的会继续深造，而想更快融入社会的会选择就业。但是对于大学里混的人来讲，就只能随大流，看到大家都去读研究生就去读。

这就告诉我们，人们的决定确实会很大程度上受到forces的影响，但是只要提高了自己的素质，拓展了自己的视野，就能够很好的利用这种forces，从而做到forces和own decision 结合

看到GTER上两篇写这个话题文笔很好的大神，不禁汗颜啊。。     表示没有那么多例子和insight的观点。可能就自身现阶段谈一谈还比较有话可说。  求楼主狠狠拍。

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tesolchina 发表于 2015-5-28 10:33
15) Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that ...

范文的第二段的开头总领句是不是有问题？说了学生可能不会“享受”这种工作，但是后面分析了可能进入了这个行业但是还是不成功的原因，换句话说就是成功的先决条件（四条）。

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范文的第二段的开头总领句是不是有问题？说了学生可能不会“享受”这种工作，但是后面分析了可能进入了这个行业但是还是不成功的原因，换句话说就是成功的先决条件（四条）。

第二段开头是回应no studies in any given fields can guarantee the so-called lucrative careers in the future

Maybe pursuing a major in certain fields such as computer science and finance can increase the chance of getting into a field where more people can have lucrative careers.  But the graduates also need many other things mentioned above to become successful.
你是说这句话有问题？
我是说学了某些专业可以增加进入有lucrative career机会较大的行业 但是进了这个行业不代表就一定能有lucrative career
做码农也可以很失败的  lucrative career这个概念应该暗示了是要在这个行业成功  这里可能展开的不够 有时间我再修改  



I strongly disagree that students should be encouraged to choose their study areas for future lucrative careers for two reasons.  First, no studies in any given fields can guarantee the so-called lucrative careers in the future; moreover, students who choose the fields with the hope of lucrative careers may not enjoy their studies and their future works.  While the educational institutions may be interested in cultivating future successful alumni, this policy may lead to dissatisfaction among the graduates.  

To begin with, there are no such majors that can ensure that the graduates will necessarily enjoy a lucrative career later in their lives.  To get a well-paid job and a successful career requires a combination of many things including a good degree with solid knowledge, a booming industry in which the graduate works, good interpersonal skills and a large amount of luck.  Maybe pursuing a major in certain fields such as computer science and finance can increase the chance of getting into a field where more people can have lucrative careers.  But the graduates also need many other things mentioned above to become successful.  In other words, the notion that certain fields of study can “prepare” students for lucrative careers is nothing but wishful thinking.  

Another reason why this policy is not desirable is that students may end up studying something they are not interested in.  Without genuine interests in the field but driven by the extrinsic motivation from the promise of future “lucrative” careers, the students may find it difficult to understand the materials or commit themselves to the studies.  Their academic performance may not meet the standards expected by the future employers and, as a result, they may not get good jobs in the fields.  Even they do manage to start their careers in the fields, they may not enjoy their work and the lack of job satisfaction would render the “lucrative" careers less meaningful for the graduates.  Their chance for long-term success will also be very small.   

Some people may argue that by encouraging the students to choose majors that lead to lucrative careers the universities may cultivate future alumni with higher income, who will then donate more money to the institutions. With stronger financial support from the alumni, the schools will have more resources to improve their education and attract better faculty members and students.  What is overloooked in the reasoning is the possibility that students who cannot find lucrative careers after studying majors they were encouraged to choose or do not enjoy their careers due to the lack of interests may not be willing to donate any money to the schools.   

In conclusion, while it is understandable that educational institutions may want to encourage students to prepare for lucrative careers by choosing certain majors, this policy is not helpful for students as there are no majors that can guarantee lucrative careers in the future and students may end up with careers they do not enjoy if they follow the advice of the institutions rather than their hearts.

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tesolchina 发表于 2015-4-3 22:25
4) The following appeared in a letter from a homeowner to a friend.
Of the two leading real estate  ...

一句结束后，有些地方空两格，有些空一格，有什么讲究么？

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tesolchina 发表于 2014-11-18 18:38
2) To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities.
...

第一篇文章的倒数第二段，城市的级别顺序反了吧？

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感谢分享

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guoguo100011 发表于 2015-2-23 16:03
issue部分的excel在此。抱歉这里面没有太多原创内容，我犹豫了一阵子到底要不要上传，怕玷污了大家的眼。思 ...

Thx for sharing:handshake

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guoguo100011 发表于 2015-2-23 16:03
issue部分的excel在此。抱歉这里面没有太多原创内容，我犹豫了一阵子到底要不要上传，怕玷污了大家的眼。思 ...

感谢分享:handshake

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