GRE作文6分教学博客

gulu2015UID: 3641483

王老师，已经看过您的1+3理论和issue写作的指导，这是我的第一篇提纲，希望您不吝赐教。准备5.2参加考试，希望在那之前至少能做到每天一篇提纲。现在写文章还是没有头绪，先从提纲做起。3.8打卡。
Issue1：As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
我的提纲：不同意，人们越来越依赖技术解决问题，但是技术是人类开发而来，是帮助人类解决问题的手段，人们依靠技术的帮助能够越来越高效的解决问题，并没有阻碍人类思考的脚步。分成建筑师、医生、新闻工作者来讨论。1.建筑师使用构图软件构筑建筑图纸，能够第一时间直观感受到自己的建筑灵感的模拟效果，但是他们的建筑灵感来自于本身的思考，而不是依赖于技术；2.医生可以使用医疗技术在手术前看到肿瘤的位置、大小，但是手术的成功更大的依赖于医生源于临床经验的迅速思考和判断；3.新闻工作者使用视频、音频、网络技术分别在电视台、广播和网络展现新闻事件，而对新闻事件的选择 、采访、编辑等一系列源自新闻价值观判断的思考，都是来自新闻工作者本身的价值观判断，而不是由技术指引。末段：诚然，技术在很大程度上改变了我们的生活和工作，但是思考来自于人类本身，技术的进步也来自于人类的思考。

Compling801UID: 3638806

王老师，您好，我很后悔今天才静下心来一点点看您的博客。之前我GRE作文3.5，作为语言学专业学生真是特别糟糕了，今年申请也不理想。作文我一直不擅长，各类论坛里资料很多，我也看了不少，现在真切感觉到有不少是误导性的、倡导凑字模板的，凡是说三天、十天、十五天搞定G、T作文的帖子我都不看了，我也惭愧自己早该有这样的辨别能力，此类考试真是不容得一丝丝懒惰。您的帖子不同，我看了几篇您的范文，感觉思路清晰了好多。特此先谢过，我争取在考试前细细刷完一遍。

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gulu2015 发表于 2016-3-9 14:22
王老师，已经看过您的1+3理论和issue写作的指导，这是我的第一篇提纲，希望您不吝赐教。准备5.2参加考试，希 ...

如果你从这三个职业来讲的话 应该也可以 只是有很多细节你能不能用英语表达好 需要考虑
你写提纲可以先按照我的示范或者ETS范文来逆向写提纲 逐步过渡到自己写提纲
这篇论文可以看看
King, C. L. (2012). Reverse Outlining: A Method for Effective Revision of Document Structure. IEEE Transactions on Professional Communication, 55(3), 254–261. http://doi.org/10.1109/TPC.2012.2207838

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Compling801 发表于 2016-3-11 17:16
王老师，您好，我很后悔今天才静下心来一点点看您的博客。之前我GRE作文3.5，作为语言学专业学生真是特别糟 ...

嗯 慢慢来 要达到4分以上的水平 需要对这些问题有一定深度的思考 适当的例证 和 语言表达

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tesolchina 发表于 2016-3-11 20:19
如果你从这三个职业来讲的话 应该也可以 只是有很多细节你能不能用英语表达好 需要考虑
你写提纲可以先 ...

谢谢王老师，我马上看！

池学敏UID: 3600934

慢慢走在这条路上

Ivana_bokowskiUID: 3688151

Argument 练习， 请老师点评指导。

题目：Nature's Way, a chain of stores selling health food and other health-related products, is opening its next franchise in the town of Plainsville. The store should prove to be very successful: Nature’s Way franchises tend to be most profitable in areas where residents lead healthy lives, and clearly Plainsville is such an area. Plainsville merchants report that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time highs. The local health club has more members than ever, and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full.Finally,Plainsville's schoolchildren represent a new generation of potential customers:these schoolchildren are required to participate in a fitness-for-life program,which emphasizes the benefits of regular exercise at an early age.

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument.Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

习作：
In this argument, the arguer concludes that a new store of Nature’s Way should be built in Plainsville. This conclusion is based on the assumption that they have many residents that are highly concerned with leading healthy lives that can lead to the success of NW. To substantiate this conclusion, the arguer points out that the sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time highs. In addition to justify this claim, the arguer reasons that the local health club now have more members than ever. And the schoolchildren required to join a fitness program anticipate a new generation of customers. This argument suffers from several critical fallacies as follows.
The major problem lies in this argument is that the arguer improperly inferred the future condition from the current condition in haste. The recommendation fails to substantiate that this interest will continue in the foreseeable future. For that this inference of interest mostly based on several unrelated conceptions: (1) strong sales of exercise apparel currently do not necessarily indicate that Plainesville residents would be interested in Nature’s Way’s products in the future. (2) the people who exercise regularly do not necessarily also always interested in buying health food and health-related products. All of the passion can just be a moment popular trend that will continually fade away. The groundless ill-conceived anticipation on current customer interest contains no assure evidence to support that NW can make future profit on its new store in Plainesville.

Another problem worth considering is that the non-causal relationship between the conclusion and several evidences. There are no causation relations between the resident’s interest of healthy lives and the success of NW’s new store in Plainseville.  (1) the popularity of the local health club can little indicate that the residents in Plainesville live much healthier live, and would love to eat healthy food from NW. There still a lot of people exercise just for they can eat more delicious food that they want to eat but not that healthy. (2) a certain fitness program is mandatory for Plainesville’s schoolchildren does not necessarily lead to bolstering in NW. The arguer fails to consider the possible factors that the resident’s interest in healthy lives may contribute to the existing stores primarily other than a new store of NW.

In addition the conclusion is based on a gratuitous assumption that the interest of customer can assure the success of NW’s new store. This is, however, unwarranted. The arguer does not provide any information regarding the cost of building and managing such a new store thus we cannot be convinced that the new store will be profitable, or even can barely balance the expenditure.

To conclude, this argument is not persuasive and somewhat misleading as it stands. I would suspend my judgment about the credibility until the arguer can prove the causation relationship between the resident’s interests and the future success of NW to make the argument more convincing. To solidify the argument, the arguer would have to provide more concrete facts about the cost of building and operating such a new store of NW.

感谢！

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tesolchina 发表于 2014-11-29 18:40
6) A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they ente ...

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yvonnejiaUID: 3676881

今天二战作文出分
得了4分，顺利和gre分手啦～
感谢王老师的满分作文博客，一战的时候发现的这个博客然后别的资料一点也没有用，按照1+3模型写的
一战的时候作文3.5
二战的时候发现得了4分
真的很感谢王老师！
不知道这样的回复能不能给你的博士论文带来点素材？

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yvonnejia 发表于 2016-3-21 21:26
今天二战作文出分
得了4分，顺利和gre分手啦～
感谢王老师的满分作文博客，一战的时候发现的这个博客然后 ...

恭喜 你一战二战考的什么题目？  
可否简单总结一下你的主要经验以及对其他同学的建议？

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tesolchina 发表于 2016-3-21 22:32
恭喜 你一战二战考的什么题目？  
可否简单总结一下你的主要经验以及对其他同学的建议？

一战是15年12月18考的
issue应该是领导们是否应该五年后下台（这个我不太记得了）
argument是一个district应不应该把洗澡的水量控制到三分之一
二战是16年3月12号考的，刚出分
issue是scandal的存在有没有必要，
argument不太记得了，但是应该是question类的问法
然后我考试的时候准备作文的时间其实不是很长，主要是先研究了一下1+3模型，两次都是按照这个写的，开头的时候就把自己的三个观点写好，然后每一段配上具体的例子什么的，最后再总结。观点的话我是先把这个博客贴的每一楼好好看过去，然后每一篇文章都自己再总结一个新的观点（没有新观点的话就总结一个新的例子），考前的时候再看一遍有个印象就可以了。
argument的话就是把博客贴里的一般规律好好看了一下区分了下evidence question之类的区别以及每一类应该怎么写。再把所有的题目都过了一遍对于那些例子有了点印象考场的时候再临场发挥加点东西就好
其实我练的不是很多，可能也是因为这样所以没有到4.5 5 分吧。
感觉考前几天每天练一篇issue 一篇argument保持手感还是很重要的
个人觉得如果有很长时间准备作文能够把博客贴都仔细研究过去的话4分还是没问题的
谢谢王老师！
也祝福大家！

Sherlocked2015UID: 3665880

tesolchina 发表于 2014-10-10 10:31
我已经刷完整个GRE作文题库，写了issue范文53篇、提纲30篇，argument范文42篇、提纲41篇。可通过查看以下的 ...

feel it is great,but do not have time to read about

池学敏UID: 3600934

2016年，4月16日 二战。 之前 完全是小白 。 走就是江湖传说中的野路子，东拼西凑。在和TES AW 肉搏的时候 达到了 电影中跑龙套的一样的戏份，3分（去年10月17号）。

今年开始慢慢的看1+3 。 距离考试还有 20多天，希望能有一个思维框架上的提示。训练自己的思维模式。到时候回来汇报成果。

其次，再膜拜一下老师。

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Ivana_bokowski 发表于 2016-3-17 11:44
Argument 练习， 请老师点评指导。

题目：Nature's Way, a chain of stores selling health food and ot ...

粗略看了一下 行文挺好 in addition to后面要跟动名词
其他的具体内容 请参考我写的示范和提纲  

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tesolchina 发表于 2016-3-26 09:37
粗略看了一下 行文挺好 in addition to后面要跟动名词
其他的具体内容 请参考我写的示范和提纲

谢谢老师 我会参考您的范文再修改一下 想请问一下这篇未修改的习作大概在几分档