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本帖最后由 Alfredfeng 于 2014-11-29 10:21 编辑
我来回评了:
11.25
TASK 1: 听出了三个点。思路挺好的,总-分结构
" The person I enjoy talking to should be my college roomate "
He has a good knowledge , so it's very easy to start a topic. 具体的例子呢?只有观点让人不信服。
He is open-minded , so he makes people willing to talk to him, even if the person talking to him has conflicting views ( but he doesn't mind ). 录音的原句,在这里说的不够清楚,让人不理解。 更重要的问题,还是例子。
He is humorous,making people enjoy the conversation. 还是例子
其实从这里可以看出来,45秒钟说三个饱满的点,时间不够用。可以就说一个详细的点。
拿第一个点来说:可以这样展开: 我的室友的知识面很广,什么都知道,我没事的时候喜欢跟他聊聊篮球,游戏,但是除了跟男生相处得好,也有很多妹子喜欢约他一起吃饭,因为他也懂得很多女生的东西,跟女生有共同的话题。所以他知识面很广。![](https://oss.x-php.com/smile/7ctWUAaEUCyE_hE4c7ZYxgq9fu63cB267vmMf6Vvt9NqoSXAimYzMjM~)
TASK 2 : “ I prefer to playing in the field rather than sit in the audience chair watching. The reason behind the kinda choices is , first , because I think sport is about participation , to get involved in this sport is the main reason why we have them,while the 2nd reason is like you get a lot more fun when you are really playing it , to watch is one thing and to really do it is another. If you never play football , you'll never understand how exciting it is to run on the ground and clash with others. "
大致听抄了一下。 从原文可以看出问题:
关于prefer的用法
prefer doing to doing
prefer to do rather than ( to ) do
后面一些句子可以更加简洁一些:
If you never play football , you'll never understand how exciting it is to run on the ground and clash with others.
这样更好些: You'll never understand the fun of competing with others until you really start to play football. 表达这种:”你不去做什么就不会知道什么“的句子最好用not --- until...,这样简洁一些,给自己的supporting reason留出时间
first , because I think sport is about participation , to get involved in this sport is the main reason why we have them
其实sport is about participation和to get involved in this sport is the main reaon...前后的意思是等价的,后面那个可以用个具体一点的事例来支撑sport is about participation
先评 T1 T2。 后面的等回来再继续评![](https://oss.x-php.com/smile/J0g6pUsHh7u3eoZHC6DJA61VC6lphC3gQuJ2QoKuxVRpNYLdQ2YyYzM~)
11.25 TASK 3 : 同学你用了40秒来summarize the reading passage,简直是够了 = =!
about covering the old mud pavement , with a new cement one .
1st better for students to run on the pavement , which makes safer for them to run on it
second : look better and attractive
while the man doesn’t agree , with contradicting views : 1st , hurt the bone and joints. secondly , doesn’t think look good , not major ( = not of major concern )
reading passage部分过于冗长,句式复杂且语速跟不上导致时间消耗太多。特别是听到了which 定语从句这里,简直是醉了,这种定语从句在口语中太杀时间了= =;
about the man's view:
1st:hurt the bone and joints ( since cement pavement means hard surface )
2nd: He doesn't think the pavement looks good , 这里少了the fact that people would stop feeling relaxed if they ran on the paved track. 因为时间不够了
TASK 4:
好机智的 vice versa
based on the research on 2 groups of monkeys ,
用了30秒钟来描述这个research的过程, 还可以通过句式来压缩一下时间,语速快一些的话用一个before就要好些,或者用过去完成时。 比如The researchers were/had been informed of the difference in the intelligence of monkeys (before they performed their research).
然后描述试验结果这里,因为前面花的时间多了,所以就没法说全两个结果,不知道这个真的大丈夫?
建议:多用介词结构和不定式来代替从句,让表达更简洁; 把相关的内容放在一起说。 比如:researchers事先被被有意误导了,他们被告知两个组猴子的智商有区别,其实并没有区别。
The researchers had been informed of the difference in intelligence although monkeys were identical in their intelligence.
TASK 5: The lady's white shirt was stained .She couldn't go to the performance in that shirt. The one who got the exactly same shirt was her roommate , but the roommate was out of contact. My proposal is that she suck it up because it's not good to take the shirt without permission. 这个展开的很好,没什么问题。
现在问题来了:
这个outstanding不太好,换个表达she would end up looking different from others
TASK 6: 主要的问题是,口语表达不够清晰,应该是平时很少说英语造成的吧。
The position of the eyes are critical to birds in two forms: the first one when the eyes are positioned in the forewards , ...... on the birds skull , e.g. the eyes of hawks which are positioned in the front , allows it to see things straight and forward, at the same time gives them the sterotypical view , clear off the distance between themselves and preys of them , while the other form is eyes are located in each side of skull , which allows them to be alert to the predators that potentially harm them
lecture 的原文是这样展开的 the position of birds’ eyes is critical to their surivival , both for predators and preys ,然后分开说predator和prey
比如我觉得先提一下as for predators 再举例子hawks 要更清晰一些。as for predators blah blah blah... as for those being preyed on blah blah blah...
最重要的还是需要多练习高效的口语表达句式。 |
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