issue30 [color=#0000ff]今天的野鼠~~~拿砖的来~~欢迎占座

lovebrianUID: 157127

documentaries错了~~~~是documents  前者表示纪录片~~不知道当时怎么打的 太顺手了吧
呵呵~~什么叫题目很恼火啊？嘿嘿

eaglezhouUID: 156651

eagle复出了吗？呵呵！

我可是一直关注寄托的动态的哦，这周也改过两篇文章
但是，实在是力不从心，作业积了很多哦！
一直在想，为什么是aftermath而不是afterGRE呢？好像后者更加恐怖。
p.s fishergirl，好像不太见到你的文章哦

lovebrianUID: 157127

最初由 eaglezhou 发布
[B]一直在想，为什么是aftermath而不是afterGRE呢？好像后者更加恐怖[/B]

这个单词我喜欢！！ :D  :D

neuzergUID: 156156

题目好像是要让我们说明科技发展是不是应该以提高效率为主要目标（科技发展还有其他目的，比如，提高人们的生活水平等），而不是说提高效率后人们的生活是否更有空闲了？但狒狒兄似乎主要讨论这个：（
不知我的理解是不是有问题？ 各位多指点！

lovebrianUID: 157127

最初由 neuzerg 发布
[B]题目好像是要让我们说明科技发展是不是应该以提高效率为主要目标（科技发展还有其他目的，比如，提高人们的生活水平等），而不是说提高效率后人们的生活是否更有空闲了？但..

以下省略...... [/B]

对对对~~看看前面的几楼帖子~~你就知道了
的确有跑题的嫌疑~~~~
我写的时候就感觉到了

另外~~~我不是斑竹哦~~~~ :cool:

happymichelleUID: 154082

The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that everyone has more leisure time.


With development of technology, people's efficiency is increased(increasing). And the speaker claims that the main goal of technological advancement is to make more leisure time for people ultimately. As far as I am concerned, the development of technology does improve the efficiency of human beings, but no more leisure time is produced and people today is even much busier.

On the one hand, with(the) help of new high technology, people's productivity improve greatly thus people can do more things than before within the same time limitation. To illustrate this point, here(there are) are some convincing examples. First, after the invention of personal computer (PC), one can deal with a great amount of documentaries within a short period of time. Especially with the software Microsoft office, one can edit text document, make a PowerPoint file and a complicated diagram. Such jobs might cost people lots of time during the past while today, after several minutes, one can get what he/she wants. Second, another example is that the usage of E-mail. People send E-mail with many topics--commerce, greetings, questions and answers, and just common communications--and such a type of mail is widely used the entire world since it just costs a few seconds on the way sending. It is much faster than the written-letter and does save lots of precious time. Undoubtedly, people are getting more and more efficient due to the development of new high technology.

On the other hand, although people's efficiency is increased, there is not more leisure time for the modern person but a more competitive and busier life is waiting for him/her. Surely more time is saved by the increasing of efficiency, but why do people get busier? There are several actual reasons to interpret the case. For one thing, most modern people have stable goals to achieve in their lives; therefore, with the time saved they want to work more, learn more and gain more. Just like one of my professors, Prof.Hu, he is the leading one in his field at our University and of course, he have many classes to teach, however, Mr.Hu takes a job in a company outside the school and works there just after his class. So to speak, the leisure time it should be, but it become another piece of work time. For another, with the high efficient work, many people have formed a habit that they cannot stop working until the weekend comes. It is reliable that many people often feel upset and unhappy when they have nothing to do, which is the consequent of the formed modern habit. Accordingly, even more time is saved; people always want to change it into busy one.(感觉这两个层次有点不明确，你可以说一方面，科技的发展使得人们要掌握新的技术必然花费一些时间，比如学打字开车什么的，另外的层次说科技带来的问题有需要人们去换时间治理，比如污染等）

Moreover, it is not to say the increasing of efficiency prevent people's livings from being more light-hearted and colorful. On the contrary, at the right and proper time people do enjoy more relax(relax and enjoy the leisure time) and leisure time. For example in China, there are several golden weeks of tourism result(resulting) in that there are several long holidays for people to relax(relax from stress of life) and enjoy their lives. During the May olden (???)week, more and more people begin to go out(some may) even go abroad to spend their long holiday. One can enjoy rather(去掉) colorful and comfortable leisure time only if one would have. Also the common weekends are changing now. People begin to treasure(care more about) their weekend time to do something joyful and significant to(这句话里面有3个to) spend such a leisure time instead of just sleeping at home. In a word, people do have leisure time when it is proper.(这段是说晚上和节假日人们的relaxtion,更多了？）

To sum up, people would like to lead busy lives since they take it granted to do so for their aims though the efficiency is increased greatly by the development of technology. Also, people do not lose their leisure time and enjoy their livings happily on the time deemed leisure one.

总的来说，还可以的。观点听明确的，结构也不错
语言你太求长了，有的时候长短句结合会有力度和节奏，而且写长句容易丢三落四的，呵呵~
没几天了，加油！

lovebrianUID: 157127

十分感谢~~~考完了还来帮偶改~~感激ing……
body2经你那么一说~~~变得清晰而且简单了  不愧是牛人哦！pf pf！
body3赶时间~~就把自己的语言毛病都暴露出了~~~其实不是我刻意求长的~~是越写越长~~
正在克服这个毛病！！

再次感谢拉！

btw~~~怎么没见你写的经验涅？

fishergirlUID: 152325

是很恼火啊~~~~~~~~~~~~~

我觉得要不跑题很难！

fishergirlUID: 152325

我每写完一篇issue就感觉很累，需要休息很久才有动力写下一篇。怎么办？明知道不对，可是对着题目就会发呆啊……

lovebrianUID: 157127

最初由 fishergirl 发布
[B]是很恼火啊~~~~~~~~~~~~~

我觉得要不跑题很难！ [/B]

不跑题的话 的确困难~~这个题目偶得好好研究下~~~

btw~~我认为突破你那种1篇要休息很久的情况就是“逆流而上”
比如我，今天是三篇issue~~~写的恶心到一定程度~~就不再恶心了~~ :cool:

fishergirlUID: 152325

三篇？？？

向你致敬！

看来我也别无选择了，其实考G真是一种体力活啊！

BTW，如果那天你们看到我发了两篇野鼠，会不会谴责我呢：）

kaventUID: 154493

坑你挖了~~罚你去看我的阿狗~~   
不是第一篇哦~~是将要发的~~时间待定

好说，发了给我留言吧，我明天可能晚点才上。

SRVUID: 157299

狒狒，只能帮你顶一下了，快考了，闭门中，加油啊！

sniper613UID: 147372

不好意思，跟主题无关哈
happymichelle：你是四川的吗 ？