Argument 48 Clearview - a top choice for retirement

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48．The following appeared in a magazine article about planning for retirement.

"Clearview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire, because it has spectacular natural beauty and a consistent climate. Another advantage is that housing costs in Clearview have fallen significantly during the past year, and taxes remain lower than those in neighboring towns. Moreover, Clearview's mayor promises many new programs to improve schools, streets, and public services. And best of all, retirees in Clearview can also expect excellent health care as they grow older, since the number of physicians in the area is far greater than the national average."

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

2 列出argument的结论和主要证据

3 写第一段

  4. 写出中间段的主题句（英语）用汉语解释主要讨论的点
中间第一段

中间第二段

中间第三段

中间第四段

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2 列出argument的结论和主要证据
claim或结论：Clearview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire.  

证据01 It has spectacular natural beauty and a consistent climate.
证据02 Housing costs in Clearview have fallen significantly during the past year, and taxes remain lower than those in neighboring towns.
证据03 Clearview's mayor promises many new programs to improve schools, streets, and public services.
证据04 The number of physicians in the area is far greater than the national average

3 写第一段
TS (pt1, pt2, pt3, pt4): The author asserts that the town of Clearview is the best site for the retirees to dwell in, citing proofs in four aspects which range from local natural environment to the health care conditions. Although her argument is reasonable and acceptable at first glance, readers still need more evidence to judge whether the final conclusion is valid.

  4. 写出中间段的主题句（英语）用汉语解释主要讨论的点
中间第一段
ts (pt1): First of all, the depiction of the landscape in Clearview is rather vague and the consistent climate cannot point to a suitable town for retirees, which entails proofs. 人们对美的理解千差万别，因此一个人眼中的美丽景色也许是另一人眼中的寻常画面。因此作者须证明Clearview的美景是退休者眼中的美景，而非小孩子眼中的美景。其次，四季如冬也是一种consistent climate，它显然不适合退休者，因此作者须表明consistent climate所指：四季如冬则反驳结论，四季如春则支持结论。

中间第二段
ts (pt2): The next piece of evidence is about housing prices and the tax rates.房价降不能说明问题，如果原先房价超高，就算去年大降，也于事无补。税收同理，周遭小镇税收如果超高，Clearview比它们低一些，也是不适合退休者居。

中间第三段
ts (pt3): Thirdly, the writer need to provide proofs to illustrate the mayor will keep her words. 要是有证据证明这个市长总是食言，她的话不信也罢。如果有证据表明该市长言出必行，那么退休者可以考虑作者所说。而市长承诺的修缮schools显然与退休者无关,改进的 streets上会有什么方便退休者的设施也需指明, public services中唯有有利于退休者的部分才是支持作者结论的。

中间第四段
ts (pt4): The final evidence is about the qualification of the local doctors, since the number is merely one aspect of the matter. 医生众多，如果都是庸医，那么退休者来了，岂不是羊入虎口？因此作者需提供证据，表明这些医生的行医资质超群，而且大多是老年病泰斗，而非儿科症专家。

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tesolchina 发表于 2014-12-15 02:16
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2 列出argument的结论和主要证据

王老师，学生写的提纲是否合格？能写全文了吗？请您说句话吧，谢谢！

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zsczsl 发表于 2014-12-16 00:03
王老师，学生写的提纲是否合格？能写全文了吗？请您说句话吧，谢谢！

我觉得这个提纲挺好

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tesolchina 发表于 2014-12-16 13:12
我觉得这个提纲挺好

那我就写全文啦，写好后发到“[备考小组] 全文修改专用帖 ”请您点评。谢谢！