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本帖最后由 dengdeng619 于 2015-2-2 14:16 编辑

【独立写作】dengdeng619作业贴...准备一考（2015.3.7）

一开始没有弄好楼层，这层放的是二改稿。请互改的小伙伴到下一层看当天的作业吧~不好意思了
ps.路过的小伙伴也请看看作文提提意见啦~

1.28
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? We should state our honest opinions even though other people may disagree with them.
[ESSAY MAP]
1. Disagree
2.reasons(3')
(1) to protect onself
(2) to establish better relationship
(3) to better serve the purpose of convincing others
3. summary

第一点没想到比较好的例子，想举国际博弈的例子又怕太黑暗了。囧。

1.24
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important problems in today's world will be solved in our lifetime.
[essay map]
1. Disagree(despite human ability)
2."cake" model(假设模型，用“cake”做比喻，3步递进分析。这个写法新尝试一下，感觉考试的话最好还是不要这样= =传统的三段三点论比较好)
（1）先分析什么是most important problems，归纳为peace & development，再自然引出蛋糕模型，用简单点的说法来分析问题，第一层假设是最初始最简答的只讨论distribution of resources的客观影响，无法改变（无法解决问题的客观原因）。
（2）第二层加入“人”的主观复杂性，多形式的去争取cake（主观原因）。
（3）最后，综合各方面因素，模型复杂程度提升，自然得出多方角逐是一个长时间的过程，不是短短一代人可以解决的（主客观相互作用的复杂度）。
3.summary
总的来说，这篇写法上采用一个模型用到底这种形式，具体例子确实欠缺了，但是篇幅和时间问题我觉得挺难加= =本来想扯一下伊拉克石油的，但是想想会被美帝呵呵哒的就没加。感觉逻辑上没什么问题，但是我自己也拿不准这样写适不适合tofel考试QAQ还木有考过也不敢乱试，求小伙伴们指点~么么哒

12.18
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Many countries are paying attention to environmental problems. But the attention is not making the environmental situation better.
[essay map]
1.Disagree
2.Reasons(3'):
Subtle transformation may not be noticed.
It takes time to turn the attention into action.
People’s attitude will influence how they see things.
3.Summary

12.16
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to attract good students, a university should spend a lot of money funding social activities.
【ESSAY MAP】
1. Social phenomenon, to introduce the topic; Show my attitude:disagreement
2. Analyze potential causes of the statement
3. Reasons for adverse attitude(3-5):
(3): Universities’ basic responsibility
(4): Common value
(4): Good students, good universities
4. Summary

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作业

本帖最后由 dengdeng619 于 2015-2-5 21:04 编辑

2.4 独立
[essay map]
1. Disagree
2.reasons(3')
(1)virtues
(2)meaningful stories
(3)different and inspiring views
3.summary

2.2  独立
[essay map]
1.Should
2.reasons(3')
(1)sense of value
(2)better motivated
(3)social trend: comprehensive talents
3.summary

1.28  独立

1.27 综合TPO3

1.26 独立
[essay map]
1.Agree
2.reasons(3')
(1)individually
(2)to the entire society
(3)moral required
3.summary

1.24 独立  （期末隔了好久没开工，这几天感冒嗓子完全哑掉口语做不来为什么连带作文也懒了= =开始重新战斗！！3.7考努力冲作文~）

这篇尝试了新的思路，没用正常的三点论（论点+例子）。可以看作是三段递进分析，做了一个分蛋糕的小假设，慢慢复杂化假设，跟社会问题相对应。写的有点匆忙，因为是不常用的思路，不知道考试中这样行不行一起讨论讨论吧 ≧▽≦

12.31独立新年快乐~~

[ESSAY MAP]这篇感觉怪怪的= =不太会写这种话题的，主要理由觉得各种扯
1. preference：live close to relatives
2.Reasons(3):
(1)the importance of family
(2)the motivation to fight
(3)care for the elderly
3.summary
12.23独立

12.22独立

12.20独立
[ESSAY MAP]
1.Social phenomenon. Agreement.
2.My father's story as a teacher.(2-3)
(2)In the past
(3)Nowadays
3.Potential reasons & suggestion.

12.19独立
[ESSAY MAP]
1.Social phenomenon. Disagreement.
2.Reasons for disagreement:
(1) Virtue
(2) If people were all impolite, the world will be…
(3) why it is still expected in today’s world.
3.Conclusion & suggestions.

12.18 独立
[essay map]
1.Disagree
2.Reasons(3 points):
Subtle transformation may not be noticed.
It takes time to turn the attention into action.
People’s attitude will influence how they see things.
3.Summary

12.17 TPO12

12.16 独立

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