15年5月28日 同主题练习 Argument 71

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71. The following is a letter to the editor of the Waymarsh Times.

"Traffic here in Waymarsh is becoming a problem. Although just three years ago a state traffic survey showed that the typical driving commuter took 20 minutes to get to work, the commute now takes closer to 40 minutes, according to the survey just completed. Members of the town council already have suggested more road building to address the problem, but as well as being expensive, the new construction will surely disrupt some of our residential neighborhoods. It would be better to follow the example of the nearby city of Garville. Last year Garville implemented a policy that rewards people who share rides to work, giving them coupons for free gas. Pollution levels in Garville have dropped since the policy was implemented, and people from Garville tell me that commuting times have fallen considerably. There is no reason why a policy like Garville's shouldn't work equally well in Waymarsh."

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

这道题也是绝对高频。这一类的题目可以归为“他山之石”，就是提出借鉴别人的成功经验来解决本地问题。

建议任务

根据详细提纲限时写全文。希望大家按照以下提纲来计时写全文。这次练习的主要目的是让大家能够在给定思路的情况下练习语言的表达。同时也可以学习一下我的破题思路。写完之后可以往博客328楼看看我的范文。

  



According to the letter, Waymarsh should introduce a policy similar to that of Garville to encourage more drivers to share rides with others to solve a perceived traffic problem.  This policy will be better than the road building project proposed by the city council.  To evaluate this argument, we need more evidence about the surveys indicating the traffic problem, the policy implemented in Garville that is now proposed for Waymarsh, as well as its strengths and weaknesses relative to the road construction plan.  

To begin with, we need to examine the surveys more critically to decide if there is indeed a traffic problem in Waymarsh.
这里主要讨论调查对象可能不同以及问卷调查对象的报告是否可靠  也许交通并没有变差

In addition, we need to collect more information about how the policy has changed the traffic in Garville and how a similar policy will affect people’s behaviors in Waymarsh.  
这里主要关注政策是否真的在Garville 奏效 也许pollution减少另有原因 比如政府加强对工厂排污的管理  另外Garville的commute time是否真的减少了 仅凭和当地人谈话是否可靠
同时要讨论 gas coupon及share ride在Waymarsh是否被人接受 也许当地人都是土豪 不在乎那点钱 更关注隐私或安全问题   

Finally, we need to compare the cost and benefits of the ride sharing policy with the proposed road construction project.
修路虽然很贵 但是可以用50年 和补贴汽油50年的费用对比如何
对当地人的滋扰可以转化为经济补偿 再和补贴汽油的费用对比
总之需要定量数据来对比两种方案


In conclusion, while the proposed policy seems useful, we need to collect more information to address the issues discussed above to evaluate the soundness of the argument.

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2 列出argument的结论和主要证据
claim或结论：There is no reason why a policy like Garville's shouldn't work equally well in Waymarsh.

证据01 Although just three years ago a state traffic survey showed that the typical driving commuter took 20 minutes to get to work, the commute now takes closer to 40 minutes, according to the survey just completed.   
证据02 Members of the town council already have suggested more road building to address the problem, but as well as being expensive, the new construction will surely disrupt some of our residential neighborhoods.
证据03 Last year Garville implemented a policy that rewards people who share rides to work, giving them coupons for free gas. Pollution levels in Garville have dropped since the policy was implemented
证据04 people from Garville tell me that commuting times have fallen considerably

3写第一段
写第一段的第一部分不包括主旨句
In this letter, the author recommends that the city of Waymarsh should imitate its neighbor Garville City and introduce a car pooling program in order to ease traffic. To corroborate her conclusion, the writer mainly cites the results of a recent survey, points out the potential problems of building new roads, mentions the pollution levels in Garville and refers to the Garville residents’ words.   
写第一段的第二部分-主旨句
Before carrying out such a plan, the town council members should collect more evidence about the representativeness of the samples in the survey, the feasibility of the new roads, the reasons for less pollution in Garville and how much commuting time has been saved in Garville and will be saved in Waymarsh.

4 写出中间段的主题句（英语）用汉语解释主要讨论的点
中间第一段

输入本段重点回应的原题目相关内容 （系统列出题目的主要句子供选择）
Although just three years ago a state traffic survey showed that the typical driving commuter took 20 minutes to get to work, the commute now takes closer to 40 minutes, according to the survey just completed.
输入这段要处理的主要evidence
In the first place, the author needs to prove that the drivers in Waymarsh are suffering prolonged commute time just like the drivers in the whole state. 作者给出的调查说三年来整个state里的居民的开车上班时间几乎翻了一倍，要是Waymarsh里驾驶员于其所处state里的典型驾驶员情况一样，那么作者的建议可以考虑。
写出相关的其他可能性
可是也许Waymarsh的居民开车上班的时间并没有增加，因为Waymarsh的具体情况与state不同。当地可能因为人口少，道路宽，而并没有遭受堵车延时的麻烦。
写出这种可能性的后果
如果是这样，作者的建议就是多此一举。

中间第二段
输入本段重点回应的原题目相关内容 （系统列出题目的主要句子供选择）
Members of the town council already have suggested more road building to address the problem, but as well as being expensive, the new construction will surely disrupt some of our residential neighborhoods.
输入这段要处理的主要evidence
Even if the driving commuters in Waymarsh spend more time on the way to work just like their counterparts in the state, the next evidence that the traffic problems cannot be solved by constructing new roads is needed. 作者以费用高、扰民为理由，否定了新修公路，缓解交通压力的方案。倘若有证据证明当真如此，那么作者就可以否定修路的建议。
写出相关的其他可能性
然而，如果证据说当地居民可以承受修路的花费和修路时工地封路、噪音等代价，
写出这种可能性的后果
那么作者就不能贸然否定修路的提议了。

中间第三段
输入本段重点回应的原题目相关内容 （系统列出题目的主要句子供选择）
Last year Garville implemented a policy that rewards people who share rides to work, giving them coupons for free gas. Pollution levels in Garville have dropped since the policy was implemented
输入这段要处理的主要evidence
Moreover, the arguer should present evidence to show that the car pooling policy is the direct cause of the lower level of pollution in Garville. 要是作者能证明在Garville推行的拼车项目导致更少的车在路上运行，因而导致了更少的废气，减少了空气污染的话，那么Waymarsh的居民的确应该向邻居城市学习一下。
写出相关的其他可能性
可作者又没说在Garville减少的是空气污染，也许证据表明是当地一个先前排放大量污水的工厂关闭了，使水污染降低，进而当地的整体污染都降低了。就算Garville的空气污染减少，也有可能是先前排放大量废气的工厂关闭了造成的。写出这种可能性的后果
如此一来，作者的建议就不一定有利了。

中间第四段
输入本段重点回应的原题目相关内容 （系统列出题目的主要句子供选择）
people from Garville tell me that commuting times have fallen considerably.
输入这段要处理的主要evidence
Lastly, the members of the town council need the evidence of that the ride sharing program indeed reduce the time of commuting in Garville and will save a large amount of Waymarsh drivers’ commute time. 要是证据显示分享乘车计划的确如那些作者所遇见的Garville居民所说，大大地降低了通勤时间，而且Waymarsh与Garville大体情况接近，那么作者的提议值得考虑。  
写出相关的其他可能性
但是那些告诉作者其通勤时间减少的Garville居民，不一定说了实话。他们也许为了避免承认失败的尴尬，而故意夸大了该计划的正面效果。就算他们说了实话，他们也许只是Garville的一部分居民，是那些原本需要经过拥挤道路的居民，对于那些本来就途经不太拥挤道路的居民来说，通勤时间并没下降。就算Garville全体居民的驾车上下班时间都下降了，该项目也不一定适用于Waymarsh。也许Waymarsh的道路本就不及Garville的拥挤，因此推行计划后通勤时间变化不大。
写出这种可能性的后果
所有这些其他可能性，都能阻止Waymarsh贸然照搬Garville的经验。

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5.27

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欢迎指正，辛苦了！！

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5月28日 argument 71

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谢谢王老师和楼下同学~

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5月28日更新  Argument 71

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谢谢老师和楼下的同学们

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0528  Argument 71 根据提纲写全文

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谢谢老师和楼下同学~

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dingka 28日作文训练：根据给定提纲展开全文

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5.28 Argument 71
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谢谢老师和楼下的同学们~

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提纲 完全 按照 老师 的 来 ，但全文还是 写了 35分钟 。。。谢谢 老师 和 楼下 的同学
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感觉老师的提纲信息量好大啊！有些地方按我之前的处理方法我觉得完全可以拆成两个段落来写了！！先谢谢老师和楼下批改的同学！！明天开始给之前楼上的同学提意见！！

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锤先森G330 发表于 2015-5-28 20:59
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多谢啦！

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Argument 71
有了王老师的提纲，再也不怕写偏题了 ：D

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按照老师提纲限时写的。

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补写的 argument

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