jianguo摸考组的第一类题：教育类

jianguoUID: 157933

最初由 casablanca 发布
[B]214. 观点:can not agree
1.能力的发展是自然的过程，不同的人发展阶段不同
2.儿童时期应全面发展，有助于良好的性格形成和最大的挖掘人的潜力，且利于互相学习
3.区别对待害处多多：for example： 限制其他方面发展，造成精神压力，使其他孩子灰心从而影响整体教育水平。。。
结论，共同培养好

以下省略...... [/B]

我的看法：
1。能力是自然的发展的过程，但这只适应于常人，应该突出他的不同点。
2。和本题没有关系
3。不应该提其他孩子，因为该论点是要论述对这些特殊的孩子的作用，与其他的孩子没关/

jianguoUID: 157933

转自新东方
Issue154

"Both parents and communities must be involved in the local schools. Education is too important to leave solely to a group of professional educators."

Sample Essay

Local schools are an integral part of a society and of each individual community. Much of what happens in a community is directly tied in to the local schools, whether the members of that community's children are of school age or not. The quality of the local schools also depends a great deal on the community. If the schools are well supported, they generally will be good quality schools. If the community ignores or contributes to the school's problems, the schools and students may not perform to the best of their abilities. Without the involvement of parents and the surrounding communities, professional educators cannot do their jobs properly. Additionally, the involvement of the parents ensures that educators will keep the school children as their first priority, rather than focusing on maximizing personal profits through teachers unions and the like.

Traditionally in years past, the parents and communities cooperated to set up schools to serve all the children in a particular location. As the United States has become larger, local, state and federal governments have become further involved, thus lessening the responsibilities of the parents with regards to the schools. Parents cannot and should not abdicate all of their responsibilities to the various governmental bodies, however. It remains incumbent upon the parents and communities to remain involved in as many aspects of the local schools as they can.

First of all, the most fundamental responsibility of the parents is that they must ensure that their own children are properly dressed, on time and actually behaving themselves in the classrooms. Professional educators cannot properly teach children that don't know how to behave while at school. Other children are distracted or maybe even misled to misbehave themselves by children who are chronically disruptive. Parents must control their own children and not leave the job of child behavioral training to the teachers at school.

Secondly, parents and communities must make sure that they contribute financially to their local schools, and not only by the mandatory payment of taxes to the government. School groups are always trying to raise money for some beneficial school projects. It is important that parents do not turn their backs when school children come door to door asking for money, even when (and maybe especially when) it is not their own children who are asking for help.

Furthermore, parents have more than just a financial responsibility to the local schools, they also have an obligation to give generously of their time whenever possible. Attending their own child's sports games and recitals are certainly important. Volunteering to coach, referee or to help organize activities for the school children are also extremely important. Local schools seem to never have enough help to accomplish all that needs to be done or to accomplish all that should be done. Just ask any teacher or professional educator, they can probably find a place for any volunteer that desires to help.

Finally, parents and communities must be involved with local schools just to be sure that the professional educators are indeed "professional" and are giving the children the proper educational basics that they need. Direct and continuous communications with a teacher or principal can sometimes give parents all the information that they need to decide whether he or she is properly fit for the job. Powerful teachers unions have developed over the years that sometimes tend to put the teachers first and the priorities of the children second. By staying involved with the local schools, parents and the communities can show the educators that they are committed to the children and the schools, and that they should always remember whom the schools were built for in the first place.

The success or failure of a local school depends almost entirely on the involvement of parents and the local community. The parents and others in these communities must be willing to make sure that their own children are properly behaved, that they support the school both financially and with their time, and that the professional educators always put the well-being of the children as the number one priority.
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观点陈述型作文/[题目]

"家长和社区都必须参与到地方学校对青少年的教育中去。教育的至关重要性决定了它不能只依靠专业的教育工作者。"

[范文正文]

地方学校是整个社会及个人所属的社区不可缺少的组成部分。无论社区中的孩子是否达到上学的年龄，这个社区发生的很多事情都会与其学校有着直接的联系。地方学校的好坏也极大地依赖于它们所属的社区。如果社区努力办学，则学校的质量就会很高。如果社区忽视学校的建设或者使学校产生一些问题，则学校就不能充分发挥其作用而学生的能力也得不到最好的开发。没有家长和社区的支持，专业的教育工作者不能够很好地开展工作。另外，家长的支持与监督能保证教育者将孩子的教育放在最首位而避免他们将精力放在通过教师联合会或其他类似组织来谋取个人利益上。

根据过去的传统，家长和社区在特定的地区协力创办学校，为当地所有的孩子提供教育。随着美国的扩展，地方、各州及联邦各级政府加大了对学校教育的扶持，因而家长对学校的责任有所减少。然而实际上，家长不能也不应该放弃他们对学校教育承担的责任而交由各种政府部门管理。家长和社区有义务尽可能多地参与地方学校各方面的工作。

首先，家长最基本的责任就是保证他们的孩子穿着得体地按时去上学并在课堂上有良好的表现。对那些连在学校应该如何作为都不知道的孩子，专业的教育者不可能有效地进行教育。还有的孩子可能会受到坏孩子的影响甚至被坏孩子误导，做出不好的行为来。家长必须管教自己的孩子，不要把约束孩子行为表现的工作留给学校的老师来做。

其次，家长和社区必须在经济上支持地方学校而不仅仅是给政府缴纳必需的税款。学校团体常常要为开展一些有益的学校计划进行募捐。当孩子们上门来要求捐款，尤其是当别人家的孩子上门来要求捐款时，家长不应置之不理或予以拒绝，做到这一点是非常重要的。

而且，家长对地方学校负有的责任不应该仅仅是在钱财上的支持，他们还应该尽可能慷慨地将自己的时间投入到学校中去。参加自己孩子的运动会、朗诵会意义重大，主动帮助学校的孩子们组织活动，充当教练或裁判也是极其重要的。地方学校在达成需要完成的工作或应该完成的工作时似乎从未得到过充分的帮助。只要你愿意主动帮忙，随便问任何一个老师，都会找到需要你帮忙的地方。

最后，家长和社区参与到地方学校的工作中去可以确保那些专业的教育工作者确实是"专业"人员，确保他们能够教授孩子所需的基础知识。与老师和校长直接、频繁的交流可以让家长全面了解教师，看出他们是否适合教育这个岗位。近年来的发展使教师联合会的权力增大，有时倾向于将教师放在首位而将对孩子的考虑放在其次。家长和社区对地方学校工作的参与能提示教师他们对孩子、学校负有的责任，让他们记住学校首先是为谁设立的。

一所地方学校办得成功与否几乎完全依赖于家长和社区是否参与学校的工作。孩子的家长以及社区内的其他成员都必须愿意确保自己的孩子表现良好，确保他们自己在金钱上和时间上给予了支持，而且学校的专业教育者们将孩子的利益放在了第一位。

casablancaUID: 160003

最初由 jianguo 发布
[B]转自新东方
Issue154

"Both parents and communities must be involved in the local schools. Education is too important to leave solely to a group of profession..

以下省略...... [/B]

God.
偶中文也写不出介个来啊！！
community不一定要理解成社区吧？

jianguoUID: 157933

214 "Society should identify those children who have special talents and abilities and begin training them at an early age so that they can eventually excel in their areas of ability. Otherwise, these talents are likely to remain undeveloped."
发现n多人都写against？！想不明白
I strongly agree with the author on the claim that gifted children should be identified and provided special education. Since such training can help better develop talented individual and greatly benefit the whole society, it is necessary to put this proposal into reality as soon as possible.

Both theoretical studies and experimental practices have indicated that gifted children would better develop themselves under circumstances specially designed for them. Starting with the observation of extraordinary children, teachers from kindergartens and elementary schools have long been reporting their being obsessed with certain "troublesome" kids by their unique behavioral patterns. For example, while the whole class is learning basic arithmetic such as twelve plus thirteen is twenty-five, a math whiz, exercising multiplication on 4-digit numbers without awareness of what's going on in the classroom, may always draw the teacher's attention. So it is very often a headache for the teachers in that to punish this committed kid for not being attentive is so unreasonable. Actually letting him/her to stay in this class is an unreasonable thing itself since what is taught is far behind what is wanted. Hence the solution is to set up a special class or institution for all kids of this kind. I came to know one of these classes in China which mainly aims at academically promising stars. Some thirty talented children of ten years old from elementary schools are enrolled every two years and they will be sent to universities in various majors at the age of fourteen, since they are capable of learning much more and much faster. That is to say ------ take the chemistry major as an example ------ some of them will be doing experiments in university chemistry curriculum with ease while others of the same age find it painful to understand the composition of water. It makes a great difference once their potentials are fully developed. Therefore one can see the necessity in providing the talented such institutions as the genuine nourishment they need.

Moreover, these specialized institutions are capable of preventing some unpleasant consequences. Needless to say without these institutions we will miss the chance to produce numerous experts on various fields, or at least their debuts have to be postponed. More importantly, the unbalanced development, that is indulgence in their field of interest and disregard on others, is a commonplace among gifted children. A young math whiz may find it hard to ask for direction when lost his/her way since he/she is poor at communication. Or a young poet with personality flaws frequently complains for his/her absurd demands not being fulfilled. This problem is particularly conspicuous in that they are unexpectedly superior in one field yet unbearably inferior in another. In this case, gifted children's class can better afford solutions than ordinary ones as their experts on psychology can put more emphasis on these points, while ordinary school teachers tend to overlook such problems. In these classes it is far more convenient to make distinct therapy for individual on his/her own drawbacks, and produce genius with personality well-being and other necessary living skills. Thus the specialized institutions yield experts but not maniacs, which is a very satisfying outcome.

Last but not the least, establishment of these institutions is beneficial to the society. These kids with special training will generally work at an early age, and therefore produce more wealth for the society. Teenage university graduates can best support this thesis. The society spend less on their education yet gets back more once they get a job. Also it has been found out that people are usually more creative in their youth, as we recall those prominent figures like Goethe, or Mozart, or Einstein. On the behalf of the society it is advantageous for the talented spend his/her youth on research than on education. Therefore we can expect more inventions from them, be they scientific theory or painting masterpiece. Eventually we see how wise it is to invest in the special training programs.

In conclusion, I believe identification and special education for gifted children is necessary for the society. These projects should be carried out without hesitation, and the society will find it a strikingly wise decision as the talented make contributions in all aspects of life.

flyingfUID: 152189

Education is so complex and convoluted, such as the character, morality and personality beside the high grade, that the educators can not burden all duties and all-sided facets except the high grades. So, if people can recognize the situation is very emergent and important for cultivate(cultivating ?) the students in all-facets, parents and communities should involve in the local schools together.

When people mention the education, they would recognize that obtaining the high grades in every course. However, the education involves many facets such as the morality, character, temperate（词性有问题，如果你想用名词，应该是temperament吧）, and so on. In these facets, every facet is very important for students to obtain the successful education. The successful education is inculcating students the necessary knowledge and the way how to succeed in their field, they are very vital for people to make success and perfect the personality. For example, the character is a vital factor for a person to succeed in some fields instead of only the high grade or the solid knowledge. Many corporations employ their stuff commanding that the interviewers have the perfect character and mortality. We can assume that a person, who has abundant acquirement and perfect grades but he/she is very poor in character and mortality, can make great achievements and fortunes for company.（没有看懂，这句话有问题，不是你想说的意思，正好相反了） Every year people will afford the severely loss in computers because of the hackers’ damage, hackers do these detrimental things just for show off their adept technology for satisfying their damage appetite, which is just testify the character is very crucial. So, the education is not the only facet.（这段有一个大问题，就是你没有说到为什么communities and parents应该参与进来啊，要时时刻刻扣题。）

Moreover, the teacher or educator can only provide the sufficient beneficial knowledge relating （to）student's textbooks and exams instead of omnipotent learning. With the development of the society and economic, the competition become more and more furious and severe. The students have no choice but to get high grades for attaining more excellent and perfect than others and possess their own spheres in society. So, students and educators all involve in how to obtain the high grades, they have no time and no energy to impose other facets such as cultivating the perfect character and mortality and other interesting.

So, the parents and other community are indispensable for student's other facets education. In addition, Parents have the energy and obligatory to cultivate students' character and morality. They should recognize the importance of these facets instead of the only high grades and encourage them to form the mature character and health morality and cultivate them other own interesting. It is well known that people who has（have） the perfect felling status and great health are more important than the students who are always busy in preparing the endless exams which make so nervous and affording heavy burden for obtaining the high grades, The students, who have no good status and condition in every facets become very nervous in everything. However, parents and community always indulge the children and make them only can enjoy the comfortable life and lose the proper attitude for studying. So, the parents and community should control the degree of other education facets.

To sum, the education is so important that the parents and communities should participate the local schools for cultivate more perfect and excellent students on every facets.
(论证不是很深入和扣题，尤其是为什么要让他们参加进来啊，例子呢，黑客的例子很好，可惜没有很好的展开，就是范文的那种感觉，加油啊)

flyingfUID: 152189

issue 214
As a famous psychologist had ever put that the childhood for an individual is a key to one's later life. Also the early education to children will exert a tremendous influence on their later performs in a society. So I fundamentally agree with the speaker's claim that gifted children, either with special talent in intellectual area or with particular ability in physical field, will have outstanding performs and make great contributions to the society more likely as long as sufficient early educations are provided. On the contrary, children with inherent abilities will probably turn into ordinary adults without proper training in their early years.
  The absence of prompt training in children early ages may lead to grave consequence to the children themselves and unwished tragedy to a society. A classic story in Chinese history for this point is the case of Fang Zhongyong, who had a surprising talent in poet making. It was his father who had also discovered this special talent of his son innate showed off to his friends and relatives. The child remained this exceptional ability at the beginning, but many years later, this special ability disappeared completely. The talent child became as ordinary as a common child eventually. The main reason for this case is that the father left the child uncultivated in their crucial early years which was may be the most period for their later performs. However, a right attitude towards the intrinsic special character may give rise to positive outcomes.
  Let's shift our attentions from the intellectual area above to the physical field below. In some of the sport areas, only through guidance to the children with particular ability will they achieve great success in their competition later. A striking example for this case is Deng Yapping who is the most competent table tennis athlete in Chinese history ever before. In her early years, she manifested great interests and special talent required in this sports game. The father of Deng Yapping, who was also an instructor of this game, not like the father of Fang Zhongyong, gave her sufficient instructions concerning the game. Eventually, she achieved glorious accomplishment is this area.
  In summary, whether there has a proper and prompt instruction in one's early stages or not determine the final performs of the child who exhibits special talents and abilities in that times. An early training for the gifted children is helpful anyway.

casablancaUID: 160003

No.36 issue 214 谁给我掐掐
issue 214
As a famous psychologist had ever put that the childhood for an individual is a key to one's later life. Also the early education to children will exert a tremendous influence on their later performs in a society. So I fundamentally agree with the speaker's claim that gifted children, either with special talent in intellectual area or with particular ability in physical field, will have outstanding performs and make great contributions to the society more likely as long as sufficient early educations are provided. On the contrary, children with inherent abilities will probably turn into ordinary adults without proper training in their early years.
The absence of prompt training in children(‘s) early ages may lead to grave consequence to the children themselves and unwished tragedy(有点大了吧，loss?) to a society. A classic story in Chinese history for this point is the case of Fang Zhongyong, who had a surprising talent in poet making (when he was a little child). It was his father who (had also)去掉吧 discovered this special talent of his son innate showed off to his friends and relatives. (这个句子没太看明白)The child remained this exceptional ability at the beginning, but many years later, this special ability(重复->unusual, extraordinary/talent，innateness) disappeared completely. The talent(natural gifted) child became (as ordinary as)去掉a common(commonplace) child eventually. The main reason for this case is that the father left the child uncultivated in their crucial early years which was (may be)去掉 the most(?important) period for (for->related to) their later performs. However, a right attitude towards the intrinsic special character may give rise to positive outcomes.(这个句子有点唐突乐) 个人觉得例子还不错，不过第一句话说爸爸发现了儿子的才华，还以为会有特殊教育，加个句子转一下吧。
Let's shift our attentions from the intellectual area above to the physical field below. In some (of the)去掉 sport areas, only through guidance to the children with particular ability will they achieve great success in their competition later. A striking example for this case is Deng Yapping（,） (who is)去掉 （one of ） the most competent table tennis athlete(s) in Chinese history ever before. In her early years, she manifested great interests and special talent required in this sports game. The father of Deng Yapping(Her father), who was also an instructor of this game, （not like the father of Fang Zhongyong,）有点别扭啊-〉 adopted an absolutely different attitude from Fang zhongyong’s father and gave (her)->his daughter sufficient instructions concerning the game. Eventually, she achieved glorious accomplishment is(笔误吧？) this area.
In summary, whether there has a proper and prompt instruction in one's early stages or not determine(s) the final performs of the child who exhibits special talents and abilities in that times. An early training for the gifted children is helpful anyway.
短小精悍啊，例子不错的说，句子也不赖，不过论证稍嫌单薄乐。可以扩展一下滴，例子和结论段之间可以加一个纯论述段深化主题，说说优点，论论反面害处什么的，个人观点呵

jianguoUID: 157933

大家好勤奋呀

jermyUID: 155463

没时间细看了

flyingfUID: 152189

谢谢casablanca的建议，我就是有时候说的很罗嗦，改！！！

scarleticeUID: 158110

最初由 GORQI 发布
[B]我觉得还是写出明确的提纲和引用的例证比较好噢
现在没时间看整个的文章了 [/B]

同意

jackyeahUID: 159938

最初由 jianguo 发布
[B][QUOTE]最初由 jackyeah 发布
[B]Issue51  第5篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
------摘要------
作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户     共用时间：49分58秒     481 word..

以下省略...... [/B]

同意 深入思考中。。。。。。。

感觉一限时 思路就好难展开

很多问题都没考虑

janice1231UID: 154941

最初由 casablanca 发布
[B]
be ready (ready->sure是不是这个意思啊?) to find a good job以下省略...... [/B]

我想说做好找工做的准备，不知该怎么说好捏？

最初由 casablanca 发布
[B]
to attend (to attend->attending) a college以下省略...... [/B]

弱弱的问一下，to ….做主语不行吗？有什么区别，呵呵，语法不太好了。

最初由 casablanca 发布
[B]
completely and systematically我没想到“全面地”更好的说法，不过觉得这样句式会紧凑些) 以下省略...... [/B]

comprehensively 要得不？

最初由 casablanca 发布
[B]
the axioms and concepts as well as some reasons (which are essential for one’s academic study) are all indicated in the textbooks clearly. 以下省略...... [/B]

接受！

最初由 casablanca 发布
[B]
the students in the colleges or universities only (always,不要太绝对哦) passively accept what have been taught and inculcated whether the “knowledge” is right or wrong,(这句不是很通顺的说) 以下省略...... [/B]

后面那个’whether……’去掉。

最初由 casablanca 发布
[B]
I believe that studying and reading on one’s own will benefit more than attending a college or university. (这个是你的全文观点吧，最好不要用来作T.S. ->There are many advantages for one in learning by himself.) 以下省略...... [/B]

指点的及时，我经常干这样的傻事，呵呵

谢谢casablanca 的修改！
Bill Gates，呵呵，我有点underrate 了，按我那种写法的话，换哪个好呢？

janice1231UID: 154941

最初由 jianguo 发布
[B][QUOTE]最初由 janice1231 发布
[B]
people believe that to become a college and university student means to learn a lot of knowledge and experiences and ..你把vastly overrated 理解成高估了，猴哥认为是褒义。好好再想想。
你的写法我能够理解，但是你的第一段让步中的具体细节对你的下面论述很不利，我觉得你还不如把让步放到最后，而且说点其他的，例如学习环境，交友呀，不要在提学习的事了。
BODY3论证的很牵强，毕竟牛人少呀，所以缺乏说服力，还是保守点把。呵呵


[/B]

我按新东方的翻译，“大学学习的好处被过分的高估了”
如果是褒义，那应该怎么理解呢？后面的意思明显是说上大学没有自己学好啊？指点一下喽！
第三段的确不太好，我自己再好好掐掐。
谢谢你的点评！

jeffelfUID: 160637

expert的长处：general rules
parents的优点：specific knowledge
我理解的school是primary school，小孩子在心理上还不成熟。需要根据具体情况对通用原则进行subtle 的应用