Issue30 新种的机井高频椰树，科技进步目的与人们是否有更多闲暇

kaventUID: 154493

语法上的问题大家都讲得很细了，我就砍砍论证方面的问题吧，
body1开头是说科技提高人们的效率，到了最后，却变成了把人们从体力劳动里解放出来。要知道，这两者可不是等价的。
body2好像过分强调人们的主观因素，过度强调好奇的作用了。探索未知世界和单纯的好奇还是有很大区别的。而white的例子应该属于invent，不是discover。另外，既然这篇文章的思路是：科技提高人们的效率，但不一定增加空闲时间。body2就好像对中心没有帮助。我觉得可以去掉，再说题目说的事Primary goal，你却说了两个:)

likeying27UID: 195699

Living in such a world with rocketing development of technology, people must have been thought to enjoy much convenience so they should have more leisure time. However, as far as I am concerned, the purpose of technological advancement is not concentrated only on increasing people's efficiency but also on meeting human beings' curiousness by exploring unknown realms, to have more leisure time is not an inevitable byproduct of either.有保留的支持，提出了自己的新观点

Foundationally, a probe would find out that technology advancement firstly result from the endeavors to offer useful tools to increase people's efficiency. The basic technology revolution somewhat could be pointed to " the first great step", that ancient people had learned to use simple tools other than their hands since they realized that some jobs were far beyond their capability or they could only do in a quite time-consuming way without the help of tools. So somehow like the prime instruments, almost every advancement human beings have made is based on the needs of living better. For example, the sewing machine helps people accelerate their speed to do sewing; computer is a great invention to solve problems which would take a mathematician over one or even more years before. As the same, Watt's steamer in 18th century was not only an engine of a boat or a train but also a motor to a more efficient time. Those technological advancements, to some extent, are all created on the purpose to liberate people from laborious jobs. 科技进步使人们有更多闲暇时间

Another goal of the technological advancement lies in meeting human being's innate curiousness. People are born with a curious sense about unknown matters, no matter they are ultimately found to be dangerous or boring. Such curiousness sometimes acts as a motivation of a new advancement of technology. For instance, if people, enveloping Brother Whites, were not so eager to why human beings can not fly as the birds do, there would no such great and significant invention, airplane, appear. Also, if it were postulated that there is no curiousness on the situation out of the earth where human beings live, astronautics would not be so developed to send Armstrong to the moon. In brief, some advancements of technology are somehow impulsed by people's curiosity.人类的好奇心推动科技进步

However, no matter how the technological advancements arouse up, spurred by the needs or by the curiosity, they do greatly change the people' life style, but not necessarily a more leisure one. Sometimes, they do make people even much busier than ever before. Certainly, there are numerous examples to show how people are influenced by the technological advancements and are made idle since plenty of machines have taken over them on doing many jobs and convenient transports have saved so much time for them, but the same is the opposite examples. Living in a time with highly advanced technology, people have to pay more time to learn much to keep the pace with it, and make them not be washed out from their work positions. And what is more, they also have to arrange matters compactly in a single day since with the machines' help, a single matter would take less time than before. People are really more efficient but to try to catch up the speed of machines even makes them busier. 科技进步又一定程度上减少了人们的休闲时间

In sum, the goal of technological advancement does not only stand on the single point to increase people's efficiency, also it results from the curiousness of human beings sometimes. With the convenience brought about by the innovations, people are more efficient but one cannot take granted that they will have more leisure time.（598 words）

感觉文章的脉络，有点混乱
B1-科技进步使人们有更多闲暇时间
B3-科技进步又一定程度上减少了人们的休闲时间
矛盾啊~~
B2-人类的好奇心推动科技进步，这个是原因吧，和科技进步的首要目标有什么关系？

Nameless GardonUID: 199841

提纲：
1。不同意。科技进步的主要目的在于探知未知和提高人们的效率，未必更多空闲
2。科技进步的目的1
3。科技进步的目的2
4。两个目的都未必更多空闲。
5。总结

Living in such a world with rocketing development of technology, people must have been thought to enjoy much convenience so they should have more leisure time. However, as far as I am concerned, the purpose of technological advancement is not concentrated only on increasing labor efficiency but also on meeting human beings' curiousness by exploring unknown realms, to have more leisure time is not an inevitable byproduct of either.

Fundamentally, a probe would find out that technology advancement firstly result from the endeavors to offer useful tools to increase people's efficiency. The basic technology revolution somewhat could be pointed to " the first great step", Our ancestors had learned to use simple tools other than their hands since they realized that some jobs were far beyond their capability or they could only do in quite a time-consuming way without the help of tools. So somehow like the prime instruments, almost every advancement human beings have made is based on the needs of living better. For example, the sewing machine helps people accelerate their speed to do sewing; computer is a great invention to solve problems which would take a mathematician over one or even more years before. As the same, Watt's steamer in 18th century was not only an engine of a boat or a train but also a motor to a more efficient time. Those technological advancements, to some extent, are all created on the purpose to liberate people from laborious jobs.

Another goal of the technological advancement lies in meeting human being's innate curiousness. People are born with a curious sense about unknown matters, no matter they are ultimately found to be dangerous or boring. Such curiousness sometimes acts as a motivation of a new advancement of technology. For instance, if people, enveloping Brother Whites,  had beenso eager to find out whether  human beings can  fly as the birds or not, there would have been no  great and significant invention, airplane, appear. Also, if it were postulated that there is no curiousness on the situation out of the earth where human beings live, astronautics could not be so developed to send Armstrong to the moon. In brief, some advancements of technology are somehow impulsed by people's curiosity on the vast untouched universe.

However, no matter how the technological advancements arouse up, spurred by the needs or by the curiosity, they do greatly change the people' life style, but not necessarily a more leisure one. Sometimes, they do make people even much busier than ever before. Certainly, there are numerous examples to show how people are influenced by the technological advancements and are made idle since plenty of machines have taken over them on doing many jobs and convenient transports have saved so much time for them, but the same is the opposite examples. Living in a time with highly advanced technology, people have to pay more time to learn much to keep the pace with it, and make sure they willnot be washed out from their work positions. What's more, they also have to arrange matters compactly in a single day since with the machines' help, a single matter would take less time than before. People are really more efficient but to try to catch up the speed of machines even makes them busier.

In sum, the goal of technological advancement does not only stand on the single point to increase people's efficiency,but  results from the curiousness of human beings sometimes. With the convenience brought about by the technological innovations, people are more efficient. but one cannot take for granted that they will have more leisure time.（598 words）


Body3我自己感觉没写好，挺牵强的，主要是时间紧张。人也紧张。因为定死了要在1个小时之内完成的（勉强算完成了吧！超了一分钟，就算是有点进步好了）

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