Issue30 新种的机井高频椰树，科技进步目的与人们是否有更多闲暇

needleUID：158900

Issue30  The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that everyone has more leisure time.

提纲：
1。不同意。科技进步的主要目的在于探知未知和提高人们的效率，未必更多空闲
2。科技进步的目的1
3。科技进步的目的2
4。两个目的都未必更多空闲。
5。总结

Living in such a world with rocketing development of technology, people must have been thought to enjoy much convenience so they should have more leisure time. However, as far as I am concerned, the purpose of technological advancement is not concentrated only on increasing people's efficiency but also on meeting human beings' curiousness by exploring unknown realms, to have more leisure time is not an inevitable byproduct of either.

Foundationally, a probe would find out that technology advancement firstly result from the endeavors to offer useful tools to increase people's efficiency. The basic technology revolution somewhat could be pointed to " the first great step", that ancient people had learned to use simple tools other than their hands since they realized that some jobs were far beyond their capability or they could only do in a quite time-consuming way without the help of tools. So somehow like the prime instruments, almost every advancement human beings have made is based on the needs of living better.  For example, the sewing machine helps people accelerate their speed to do sewing; computer is a great invention to solve problems which would take a mathematician over one or even more years before.  As the same, Watt's steamer in 18th century was not only an engine of a boat or a train but also a motor to a more efficient time. Those technological advancements, to some extent, are all created on the purpose to liberate people from laborious jobs.  

Another goal of the technological advancement lies in meeting human being's innate curiousness.  People are born with a curious sense about unknown matters, no matter they are ultimately found to be dangerous or boring.  Such curiousness sometimes acts as a motivation of a new advancement of technology.  For instance, if people, enveloping Brother Whites, were not so eager to why human beings can not fly as the birds do, there would no such great and significant invention, airplane, appear. Also, if it were postulated that there is no curiousness on the situation out of the earth where human beings live, astronautics would not be so developed to send Armstrong to the moon.  In brief, some advancements of technology are somehow impulsed by people's curiosity.

However, no matter how the technological advancements arouse up, spurred by the needs or by the curiosity, they do greatly change the people' life style, but not necessarily a more leisure one. Sometimes, they do make people even much busier than ever before. Certainly, there are numerous examples to show how people are influenced by the technological advancements and are made idle since plenty of machines have taken over them on doing many jobs and convenient transports have saved so much time for them, but the same is the opposite examples.  Living in a time with highly advanced technology, people have to pay more time to learn much to keep the pace with it, and make them not be washed out from their work positions. And what is more, they also have to arrange matters compactly in a single day since with the machines' help, a single matter would take less time than before.  People are really more efficient but to try to catch up the speed of machines even makes them busier.

In sum, the goal of technological advancement does not only stand on the single point to increase people's efficiency, also it results from the curiousness of human beings sometimes. With the convenience brought about by the innovations, people are more efficient but one cannot take granted that they will have more leisure time.（598 words）


Body3我自己感觉没写好，挺牵强的，主要是时间紧张。人也紧张。因为定死了要在1个小时之内完成的（勉强算完成了吧！超了一分钟，就算是有点进步好了）

请大家拍吧！

lovebrianUID：157127

Issue30 The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that everyone has more leisure time.

提纲：
1。不同意。科技进步的主要目的在于探知未知和提高人们的效率，未必更多空闲比题目增加了个探知未知，嗯~
2。科技进步的目的1
3。科技进步的目的2
4。两个目的都未必更多空闲。
5。总结提纲倒是不错 不过我试想，这样安排：1。目的1+未必空闲  2。目的2+未必空闲 3。小总结 4。大总结

Living in such a world with rocketing development of technology, people must have been thought to enjoy much convenience so they should have more leisure time. However, as far as I am concerned, the purpose of technological advancement is not concentrated only on increasing people's efficiency but also on meeting human beings' curiousness by exploring unknown realms, to have more leisure time is not an inevitable byproductwhy not a product but a byproduct? of either.

Foundationallytypo error??, a probe would find out that technology advancement firstly result from the endeavors to offer useful tools to increase people's efficiency. The basic technology revolution somewhat could be pointed to " the first great step", that ancient people had learned to use simple tools other than their hands since they realized that some jobs were far beyond their capability or they could only do in a quite time-consuming way without the help of toolsthis sentence's so long. So somehowwrong word using? like the prime instruments, almost every advancement human beings have made is based on the needs of living betterthere is a distance to "efficient". For example, the sewing machine helps people accelerate their speed to do sewing; computer is a great invention to solve problems which would take a mathematician over one or even more years before. As the same, Watt's steamer in 18th century was not only an engine of a boat or a train but also a motor to a more efficient time. Those technological advancements, to some extent, are all created on the purpose to liberate people from laborious jobs. the former part is somewhat besides the point, whereas the latter is not deep enough on analysis though it is rather wide

Another goal of the technological advancement lies in meeting human being's innate curiousness. People are born with a curious sense about unknown matters, no matter they are ultimately found to be dangerous or boring. Such curiousness sometimes acts as a motivation of a new advancement of technologymotivation<>purpose. For instance, if people, enveloping Brother Whites, were not so eager to why human beings can not fly as the birds do, there would no such great and significant invention, airplane, appearthere is a converse causal relation. Also, if it were postulated that there is no curiousness on the situation out of the earth where human beings live, astronautics would not be so developed to send Armstrong to the moon. i cannot agree that it is just a curiosity to make people want to step into moon :p In brief, some advancements of technology are somehow impulsed by people's curiosity.a weak paragraph for some critical fallacies; i do not think such a topic sentence is well established with a comparable depth as that in the first body

However, no matter how the technological advancements arouse up, spurred by the needs or by the curiosity, they do greatly change the people' life style, but not necessarily a more leisure one. Sometimes, they do make people even much busier than ever beforehaha good . Certainly, there are numerous examples to show how people are influenced by the technological advancements and are made idle since plenty of machines have taken over them on doing many jobs and convenient transports have saved so much time for them, but the same is the opposite examples. Living in a time with highly advanced technology, people have to pay more time to learn much to keep the pace with it, and make them not be washed out from their work positions. And what is more, they also have to arrange matters compactly in a single day since with the machines' help, a single matter would take less time than before. People are really more efficient but to try to catch up the speed of machines even makes them busier.a well accomplished paragragh. but it seems not sufficient enough for its position in this issue.  maybe i would like to seperate this part into the factors of the other two bodies as mentioned in the top

In sum, the goal of technological advancement does not only stand on the single point to increase people's efficiency, also it results from the curiousness of human beings sometimes. With the convenience brought about by the innovations, people are more efficient but one cannot take granted that they will have more leisure time.（598 words）


Body3我自己感觉没写好，挺牵强的，主要是时间紧张。人也紧张。因为定死了要在1个小时之内完成的（勉强算完成了吧！超了一分钟，就算是有点进步好了）

请大家拍吧！

还不错了~~嘿嘿~~~~~美跑题！

needleUID：158900

最初由 lovebrian 发布
[B][quote]
还不错了~~嘿嘿~~~~~美跑题！
[/B]

我先晕一个。。。。

chrissie_luckyUID：129536

Living in such a world with rocketing development of technology, people must have been thought to enjoy much convenience so they should have more leisure time. However, as far as I am concerned, the purpose of technological advancement is not concentrated only on increasing people's efficiency but also on meeting human beings' curiousness[=> curiosity] by exploring unknown realms, to have more leisure time is not an inevitable byproduct of either.[后半句主语用不定时标目的，而leisure time是结果，再斟酌]

Foundationally, a probe would find out that technology advancement firstly result from the endeavors to offer useful tools to increase people's efficiency. The basic technology revolution somewhat could be pointed to[? =>considered as] " the first great step", that [=>in which]ancient people had learned to use simple tools other than their hands since they realized that some jobs were far beyond their capability or they could only do in a quite time-consuming way without the help of tools. So somehow like the prime instruments[=>tools, instruments感觉太现代化了], almost every advancement human beings have made is based on the needs of living better.[leading a better life] For example, the sewing machine helps people accelerate their speed to do sewing; computer is a great invention to solve problems which would take a mathematician over one or even more years before[=>to accomplish in the past]. As the same, Watt's steamer in 18th century was not only an engine of a boat or a train but also a motor to a more efficient time. Those technological advancements, to some extent, are all created on the purpose to liberate people from laborious jobs. [举例比较贴切，能排比一下更佳]
这段讲technology development improve people’s efficiency

Another goal of the technological advancement lies in meeting human being's innate curiousness.[=>curiosity ] People are born with a curious sense about [+the] unknown matters, no matter they are ultimately found to be dangerous or boring. [curiosity 怎么会最后变得boring？ 请赐教]Such curiousness sometimes acts as a motivation[impetus 如何？motivation 一般是对人而言] of a new advancement of technology. For instance, if people, enveloping Brother Whites,[莱特兄弟不是这个，具体我也忘了，查道再贴上来] were not so eager to why human beings can not fly as the birds do, there would no such great and significant invention, airplane, appear. [这句有问题，你是要写他们发明airplane吧]Also, if it were postulated that there is no curiousness on the situation out of the earth where human beings live, astronautics would not be so developed to send Armstrong to the moon. In brief, some advancements of technology are somehow impulsed by people's curiosity.
这段是meets curiosity

However, no matter how the technological advancements arouse up, spurred by the needs or by the curiosity, they do greatly change the people' life style, but not necessarily a more leisure one. Sometimes, they do make people even much busier than ever before. Certainly, there are numerous examples to show how people are influenced by the technological advancements and are made idle since plenty of machines have taken over them on doing many jobs[？wrong expression] and convenient transports have saved so much time for them, but the same is the opposite examples. Living in a time with highly advanced technology, people have to pay more time to learn much[ +than before] to keep the pace with it, and make them not be washed out from their work positions. And what is more, they also have to arrange matters compactly in a single day since with the machines' help[the help of machines 一般这么用吧], a single matter would take less time than before. People are really more efficient but to try to catch up the speed of machines even makes them busier.
这段先讲人们leisure time 是由于machines & convenient transportation; busier 是由于have to learn more , & tight schedule

In sum, the goal of technological advancement does not only stand on the single point to increase people's efficiency, also it results from the curiousness of human beings sometimes. With the convenience brought about by the innovations, people are more efficient but one cannot take granted that they will have more leisure time.
[结尾总结得挺好]
（598 words）

感觉逻辑比较完整，个别语言再推敲。
我正准备今天夜里写这篇，先帮你评了，等写完可能会更客观些:)
我是刚开始发文章，改的不周的请见凉啊，我也要加入你们的互改大队伍拉 呵呵
有空也看看我的这篇，如何？

https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/showthread.php?s=&threadid=180907

needleUID：158900

最初由 chrissie_lucky 发布
[B]Living in such a world with rocketing development of technology, people must have been thought to enjoy much convenience so they should have more leisure time. However, as far as I am concerned, the purpose of technological advancement is not concentrated only on increasing people's efficiency but also on meeting human beings' curiousness[=> curiosity] by exploring unknown realms, to have more leisure time is not an inevitable byproduct of either.[后半句主语用不定时标目的，而leisure time是结果，再斟酌][/B]

用increased leisure time或者having more leisure time如何？
curiosity和curiousness有什么区别呢？我不能分得很清楚，所以这一篇就混着用了。请赐教。

最初由 chrissie_lucky 发布
[B]Another goal of the technological advancement lies in meeting human being's innate curiousness.[=>curiosity ] People are born with a curious sense about [+the] unknown matters, no matter they are ultimately found to be dangerous or boring. [curiosity 怎么会最后变得boring？ 请赐教][/B]

主语they指代的并不是curiosity，而是unknown matters.

最初由 chrissie_lucky 发布
[B][/B]

最初由 chrissie_lucky 发布
[B]Such curiousness sometimes acts as a motivation[impetus 如何？motivation 一般是对人而言] of a new advancement of technology. For instance, if people, enveloping Brother Whites,[莱特兄弟不是这个，具体我也忘了，查道再贴上来] were not so eager to why human beings can not fly as the birds do, there would no such great and significant invention, airplane, appear. [这句有问题，你是要写他们发明airplane吧][/B]

谢谢指教！motivation和impetus的区别我可一点儿都不知道。记住了。
汗ing,莱特兄弟我就是线暂时写上去准备查了改了，结果忘了:PP

我那句的确是举例飞机的发明，句子的确有错，修改如下：
For instance, if people, enveloping Brother XXX, were not so eager to uncover the reasonwhy human beings can not fly as [the删去] birds do, there would no such a great and significant invention, airplane, appear.

最初由 chrissie_lucky 发布
[B]since plenty of machines have taken over them on doing many jobs[？wrong expression][/B]

A take over B，A代替B。

最初由 chrissie_lucky 发布
[B]感觉逻辑比较完整，个别语言再推敲。
我正准备今天夜里写这篇，先帮你评了，等写完可能会更客观些
我是刚开始发文章，改的不周的请见凉啊，我也要加入你们的互改大队伍拉 呵呵
有空也看看我的这篇，如何？
https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/showthread....threadid=180907
[/B]

谢谢chrissie_lucky详细的点评！你的帖子我夜里或者明天早上就帮你看！！再次感谢！

LSDUID：157855

No.1 Issue30，新种的机井高频椰树，科技进步目的与人们是否有更多闲暇
Issue30 The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that everyone has more leisure time.

提纲：
1。不同意。科技进步的主要目的在于探知未知和提高人们的效率，未必更多空闲
2。科技进步的目的1
3。科技进步的目的2
4。两个目的都未必更多空闲。
5。总结

Living in such a world with rocketing development of technology, people must have been thought to enjoy much convenience so they should have more leisure time. However, as far as I am concerned, the purpose of technological advancement is not concentrated only on increasing people's efficiency but also on meeting human beings' curiousness by exploring unknown realms, to have more leisure time is not an inevitable byproduct of either.
开门见山的点明主旨，典范典范:p
不过个人认为最好再强调一下leisure time. 的问题，回应题目。

Foundationally, a probe would find out that technology advancement firstly result from the endeavors to offer useful tools to increase people's efficiency. The basic technology revolution somewhat could be pointed to " the first great step", that ancient people had learned to use simple tools other than their hands since they realized that some jobs were far beyond their capability or they could only do in a quite time-consuming way without the help of tools. So somehow like the prime instruments, almost every advancement human beings have made is based on the needs of living better. For example, the sewing machine helps people accelerate their speed to do sewing; computer is a great invention to solve problems which would take a mathematician over one or even more years before. As the same, Watt's steamer in 18th century was not only an engine of a boat or a train but also a motor to a more efficient time. Those technological advancements, to some extent, are all created on the purpose to liberate people from laborious jobs.
这段最好和leisure time联系一下。可以论证科技的发展的却是人们的效率提高了，表面上看给人们带来了更多的空余时间。但实际上并非如此。这样可以使文章看起来层层深入，紧扣主题。

Another goal of the technological advancement lies in meeting human being's innate curiousness. People are born with a curious sense about unknown matters, no matter they are ultimately found to be dangerous or boring. Such curiousness sometimes acts as a motivation of a new advancement of technology. For instance, if people, enveloping Brother Whites, were not so eager to why human beings can not fly as the birds do, there would no such great and significant invention, airplane, appear. Also, if it were postulated that there is no curiousness on the situation out of the earth where human beings live, astronautics would not be so developed to send Armstrong to the moon. In brief, some advancements of technology are somehow impulsed by people's curiosity.
这段是对题目的一个引申，本人认为还是和题目很有关联的，但不知道老米会不会认为是跑题。以前我曾发过帖子就论证的深度进行讨论，对题目的延伸会不会被认为是跑题，如果有兴趣可以查一下:P

However, no matter how the technological advancements arouse up, spurred by the needs or by the curiosity, they do greatly change the people' life style, but not necessarily a more leisure one. Sometimes, they do make people even much busier than ever before. Certainly, there are numerous examples to show how people are influenced by the technological advancements and are made idle since plenty of machines have taken over them on doing many jobs and convenient transports have saved so much time for them, but the same is the opposite examples. Living in a time with highly advanced technology, people have to pay more time to learn much to keep the pace with it, and make them not be washed out from their work positions. And what is more, they also have to arrange matters compactly in a single day since with the machines' help, a single matter would take less time than before. People are really more efficient but to try to catch up the speed of machines even makes them busier.
这段的论证有些单薄，最好就各个领域多举些例子。这样的例子很好找，也可以编自己身边的人。

In sum, the goal of technological advancement does not only stand on the single point to increase people's efficiency, also it results from the curiousness of human beings sometimes. With the convenience brought about by the innovations, people are more efficient but one cannot take granted that they will have more leisure time.（598 words）

我觉得这篇文章论证不错，如果主体3再详细点，可以拿5分吧
呵呵，个人意见:P
(有空也请看看我的文章，谢谢)

lisa19821108UID：149806

我想我比较有发言权
因为我4月8日就考的这道题目
全文我记不住了
提纲大体如此：
首段：范说——立论
第二段：说科技进步的好处
第三段：从表面现象看，科技进步的确在某种程度上给人带来了一些休闲时间
第四段：然而，深入分析后，科技进步（1）带来高效率，从而使人绝对工作量增大（2）例子：很多都市人现在都必须加班※美国的一项关于工人工作时的报告（3）高科技带来失业从而使工作落在了更少人的身上
第五段：提高效率只是科技进步的副产品，而给人类带来更多休闲时间也不是主要目的。讲科技的主要目的
第六段：作结
：》我觉的我发挥的还行，考场上提前11分钟写完的，共写了700字吧

needleUID：158900

谢谢LSD和lisa点评！！！lisa的提纲很不错，尤其是body4部分，我觉得可以利用来充实我的body3.

意见都copy下来了，我会仔细看的！

needleUID：158900

莱特兄弟the Wright Brothers

voxbUID：147592

Issue30，新种的机井高频椰树，科技进步目的与人们是否有更多闲暇
Issue30 The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that everyone has more leisure time.

提纲：
1。不同意。科技进步的主要目的在于探知未知和提高人们的效率，未必更多空闲
2。科技进步的目的1
3。科技进步的目的2
4。两个目的都未必更多空闲。
5。总结
Sorry, something is wrong with the Chinese system in this machine, and I’ll have to comment in English. FT~~

Needle JJ: Your writing skill is quite fluent, but I am afraid you might pay more attention to the structure and main point.

Now that I think there are three key words you should take into account in your issue: “primary goal”,” people's efficiency”, “more leisure time”, therefore, you are expected to discuss them in your issue.
However, you are mainly focus on the first one—goal, and neglect the following two. In your essay, you should answer the question:
Is it the primary goal of technological advancement?
Does it increase people’s efficiency?
Even if people’s efficiency has increased,  how about their leisure time?

Anyway, this issue is not merely discuss what is the goal of technology, is it?
hehe, what stated above is my own suggestion, you can refrence to it or stick to your original one. +U~~~

needleUID：158900

非常感谢voxb！你说的很有道理，我的确写了太多篇幅的goal，而对于efficiency和leisure time联系的不够。

hattyUID：141246

我的第一个文章也是这个文章哈~~~

占个座位，那个同位语的问题，偶翻语法书去 ：） jj加油啊

hattyUID：141246

Issue30 The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that everyone has more leisure time.

提纲：
1。不同意。科技进步的主要目的在于探知未知和提高人们的效率，未必更多空闲
2。科技进步的目的1
3。科技进步的目的2
4。两个目的都未必更多空闲。
5。总结

Living in such a world with rocketing development of technology, people must have been thought to enjoy much convenience so they should have more leisure time. However, as far as I am concerned, the purpose of technological advancement is not concentrated only on increasing people's efficiency but also on meeting human beings' curiousness by exploring unknown realms, to have more leisure time is not an inevitable byproduct of either.

Foundationally, a probe would find out that technology advancement firstly result from the endeavors to offer useful tools to increase people's efficiency. The basic technology revolution somewhat could be pointed to " the first great step", （这个后面的that引导的应该是同位语，仍然不知道是不是可以这样用，印象中，只有少数如information一类词才可以这样用同位语从句的，但是语法书今天一下午我没有找到相关内容）that ancient people had learned to use simple tools other than their hands since they realized that some jobs were far beyond their capability or they could only do in a quite time-consuming way without the help of tools. So somehow like the prime instruments, almost every advancement human beings have made is based on the needs of living better. For example, the sewing machine helps people accelerate their speed to do sewing; computer is a great invention to solve problems which would take a mathematician over one or even more years before. As the same, Watt's steamer in 18th century was not only an engine of a boat or a train but also a motor to a more efficient time. Those technological advancements, to some extent, are all created on the purpose to liberate people from laborious jobs. 有人说过，例子后面应该多些分析，所以是不是可以调整一下for example之前的话的顺序，把它们放到例子之后当作分析？不知道说的对不对。。。

Another goal of the technological advancement lies in meeting human being's innate curiousness. People are born with a curious sense about unknown matters, no matter they are ultimately found to be dangerous or boring.（仍然是用法，no matter 后是不是要加点东西？） Such curiousness sometimes acts as a motivation of a new advancement of technology. For instance, if people, enveloping Brother Whites（挺新的用法，木有听说过，呵呵，欢迎交流）, were not so eager to why human beings can not fly as the birds do, there would no such great and significant invention, airplane, appear. Also, if it were postulated（这么用可以么？欢迎交流）that there is no curiousness on the situation（这个次用的有点怪） out of the earth where human beings live, astronautics would not be so developed to send Armstrong to the moon. In brief, some advancements of technology are somehow impulsed by people's curiosity.

However, no matter how the technological advancements arouse up, spurred by the needs or by the curiosity, they do greatly change the people' life style, but not necessarily a more leisure one. Sometimes, they do make people even much busier than ever before. Certainly, there are numerous examples to show how people are influenced by the technological advancements and are made idle since plenty of machines have taken over them on doing many jobs and convenient transports have saved so much time for them, but the same is the opposite examples. Living in a time with highly advanced technology, people have to pay more time to learn much to keep the pace with it, and make them not be washed out from their work positions.（wash 可以这样用？不过这个偶不确定） And what is more, they also have to arrange matters compactly in a single day since with the machines' help, a single matter would take less time than before. People are really more efficient but to try to catch up the speed of machines even makes them busier.这段分析的挺有道理

In sum, the goal of technological advancement does not only stand on the single point to increase people's efficiency, also it results from the curiousness of human beings sometimes. With the convenience brought about by the innovations, people are more efficient but one cannot take granted that they will have more leisure time.（598 words）结尾挺好的。

总体上，needle jj的文章不错，语法上，语言上基本挑不出毛病，有几个我没有见过的用法，我标了一下，不知道对不对？欢迎jj讨论。

文章思路清晰，论证也比较有力度，语言也不错   jj加油！

needleUID：158900

最初由 hatty 发布
[B]有人说过，例子后面应该多些分析，所以是不是可以调整一下for example之前的话的顺序，把它们放到例子之后当作分析？不知道说的对不对。。。[/B]

这个也是有道理的....下次我会注意尝试的

最初由 hatty 发布
[B] no matter they are ultimately found to be dangerous or boring.（仍然是用法，no matter 后是不是要加点东西？）[/B]

是我疏忽了！//sigh...no matter how they are ultimately found to be dangerous or boring.这样对了吗？我感觉我现在脑子胡涂的要命。:(

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[B]if people, enveloping Brother Whites（挺新的用法，木有听说过，呵呵，欢迎交流）, were not so eager to why human beings can not fly as the birds do, there would no such great and significant invention, airplane, appear. Also, if it were postulated（这么用可以么？欢迎交流）that there is no curiousness on the situation （这个次用的有点怪） out of the earth where human beings live, astronautics would not be so developed to send Armstrong to the moon. In brief, some advancements of technology are somehow impulsed by people's curiosity.[/B]

enveloping的用法是没有错的，表示“包括”，和including一样
if it were postulated虚拟假设
situation表示情形，不太合适么？换什么更好呢？

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[B] Living in a time with highly advanced technology, people have to pay more time to learn much to keep the pace with it, and make them not be washed out from their work positions.（wash 可以这样用？不过这个偶不确定）[/B]

wash out 淘汰

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[B]总体上，needle jj的文章不错，语法上，语言上基本挑不出毛病，有几个我没有见过的用法，我标了一下，不知道对不对？欢迎jj讨论。

文章思路清晰，论证也比较有力度，语言也不错 jj加油！
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汗ing....谢谢hatty的仔细点评。你的文章我也已经看完了。共同进步！

hattyUID：141246

偶找不到引用了，就直接这么说吧，前面的全nod~~

position，我不知道是不是会理解成“地点”，就是“除了地球以外的地点，地方，”，偶开始以为jj要表达那个意思，所以说用法上有点怪。。。

如果说情景，应该还是挺好的吧。。。
（语法的问题，偶，汗。。。）