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3楼    Issue 26  150919 已评 已总结，在6楼
7楼    Issue 101  150920 未评
9楼    Issue 12  150922 未评
10楼    Issue 146  150923 已评
11楼  ISSUE49  150924 未评
12楼  ISSUE3  151005 未评
13楼  ISSUE13  151006 未评
14楼  ISSUE15  151007 未评
16楼  ISSUE31  151008 未评
20楼  ISSUE10  151010 未评
21楼  ISSUE61  151011 未评
22楼  ISSUE67  151012 未评
23楼  ISSUE125  151013 未评
24楼  ISSUE148  151014 未评
25楼  ISSUE20  151015 未评
26楼  ISSUE39  151016 未评
29楼  ISSUE98  151026 未评
30楼  ARGUMENT51  151027 未评
31楼  ISSUE129  151027 未评
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34楼  ISSUE137  151031 未评
35楼  ISSUE70  151101 未评

附：文章中大写的为二次自改的内容，括号内为首次写作的原文

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issue 26  奢侈与方便会让人软弱而依赖
我觉着，主旨还是和各个分论点相照应的，我比较疑惑的是两个，一个是我分成determined 和indetermined people合不合适？感觉有点儿不确定，因为我是先贮备了例子再想的论点。第二个是，前两个例子合不合适？因为题目说的是luxury and convenience of contemporary world, Marva collins 和 Gandhi有点儿不是那么contemporary,不知问题大不大。最后还希望各路英雄能不能给指点指点怎么develop一个例子？我花了好多时间，结果还是有点儿胆怯。麻烦各位！

26) The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

With the growing world economy and technology, people are endowed with privileges to live a more luxury and convenient modern life. Since character such as hard-working is less necessary for people to earn a living, it is argued that people are prevented from developing into truly strong and independent individuals. While the statement is likely to hold true when it comes to less determined people who are aimed just at owning a living, ones with huge ambitions and clear goals would benefit from it rather than being trapped by the convenience and luxuries of life.

For those ambitious and determined people, convenient and luxurious life would benefit them with independent personalities.
The well-known American education reformer Marva Collins, for example
-lived a fine and luxurious life in the local black community in Alabama, which was earned by her disinterested and hard-working father, Henry Knight.
-luxurious life freed her from worrying about living compared to her peers, and endowed her with a quality of self-confidence.
-With the help of her confidence, she finished her college study independently and became an education reformer, who was nominated as secretary of Education by the president of the Unite States.

Despite the independent education reformer mentioned, strong spirit and powerful social relationship are more likely to be developed with the help of luxurious and convenient life.
For instance, Mahatma Gandhi,
-had a strong economic background in India, which was strong enough to support him to study law in England and practice his own beliefs without the worry of living cost and school fees.
-Then he was able to fight against injustice in South Africa with the support of his religious belief and his knowledge in law.
-The success of fighting injustice won him strong social relationships and strengthened his personality.

However, when come to less determined or ambitious people, it would be another case.
Take the Neets group -Japanese adults who have the ability to work but stay at home and live on their parents- as an example.
-Since the general financial conditions in Japanese family are fine enough to support the life of an extra adult and parents in Japan are tolerant, Neets need not work to support their own living.
-Because they stay at home enjoying videos and books all the day, they do not have opportunities to develop their independent will and ambition.
-their undeveloped personality prevents them from being capable and self-confident.
-Thus, a weak and dependent identity is formed in the situation without any challenges.

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Trueyang 发表于 2015-9-17 16:31
issue 26  奢侈与方便会让人软弱而依赖
我觉着，主旨还是和各个分论点相照应的，我比较疑惑的是两个，一个 ...

你这篇最主要的问题是没有对luxury and convenience进行具体的举例讨论 使得论述在关键的地方即l&c如何prevent people... 非常薄弱  
另外这里用的名人的例子也非常的牵强
请参考我的范文思路

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楼上同学好~我来啦~

issue 26  奢侈与方便会让人软弱而依赖
我觉着，主旨还是和各个分论点相照应的，我比较疑惑的是两个，一个是我分成determined 和indetermined people合不合适？感觉有点儿不确定，因为我是先贮备了例子再想的论点。第二个是，前两个例子合不合适？因为题目说的是luxury and convenience of contemporary world, Marva collins 和 Gandhi有点儿不是那么contemporary,不知问题大不大。最后还希望各路英雄能不能给指点指点怎么develop一个例子？我花了好多时间，结果还是有点儿胆怯。麻烦各位！

26) The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

With the growing world economy and technology, people are endowed with privileges to live a more luxury and convenient modern life. Since character such as hard-working is less necessary for people to earn a living, it is argued that people are prevented from developing into truly strong and independent individuals. While the statement is likely to hold true when it comes to less determined people who are aimed just at owning（earn） a living, ones with huge ambitions and clear goals would benefit from it rather than being trapped by the convenience and luxuries of life.（不太明白less determined 和earn a living的必然关系）
For those ambitious and determined people, convenient and luxurious life would benefit them with independent personalities.
The well-known American education reformer Marva Collins, for example
-lived a fine and luxurious life in the local black community in Alabama, which was earned by her disinterested and hard-working father, Henry Knight.
-luxurious life freed her from worrying about living compared to her peers, and endowed her with a quality of self-confidence.(没有说明luxuries和confidence的联系)
-With the help of her confidence, she finished her college study independently and became an education reformer, who was nominated as secretary of Education by the president of the Unite States.

Despite the independent education reformer mentioned, strong spirit and powerful social relationship （convenient and luxurious life不见了呃）are more likely to be developed with the help of luxurious and convenient life.
For instance, Mahatma Gandhi,
-had a strong economic background in India, which was strong enough to support him to study law in England and practice his own beliefs without the worry of living cost and school fees.
-Then he was able to fight against injustice in South Africa with the support of his religious belief and his knowledge in law.（感觉和上一段说的是同一个论点）
-The success of fighting injustice won him strong social relationships and strengthened his personality.

However, when it comes to less determined or ambitious people, it would be another case.
Take the Neets group -Japanese adults who have the ability to work but stay at home and live on their parents- as an example.
-Since the general financial conditions in Japanese family are fine enough to support the life of an extra adult and parents in Japan are tolerant, （不通顺）Neets need not work to support their own living.
-Because they stay at home enjoying videos and books all the day, they do not have opportunities to develop their independent will and ambition.
-their undeveloped personality prevents them from being capable and self-confident.
-Thus, a weak and dependent identity is formed in the situation without any challenges.（整段没看到 luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life，父母纵容啃老族也算现代生活的奢饰品和便利么？）








结尾段木有？？！！








可以参考老师的教学博客！！按照老师的结构写比较好！！

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谢谢楼上老师和同学的点评。看了老师范文发现我要写的determined 和 indetermined people就想表达老师说的 taken over by luxuries and convenience和 not taken over... 的确老师的写法更加劲道。
另外的话名人的例子太过笼统，很难说他的strong and independent 是因为good use of luxurious lifestyle。老师给出的解决方式是还是遵从从luxurious and convenient life 到 strong 和independent的逻辑关系，把前者具体化为小汽车，后者可能是坚强的辣妈或者是缺乏锻炼的懒汉，变成这样的一对多的关系。特别贴切，也清晰。找一篇类似的再试试

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Issue 101

总结起来就是一点，根据上次的不足，尝试用MOOC具体化题目当中的 innovations，来作为例子证明论点，具体结构参照了老师的ISSUE26，写完之后想想，似乎distract这个部分还欠具体化，没有聚焦在是怎么distract的

看了老师的文章，主要是分成videos,computers,Internet来讨论，最后归结到，老师有没有supervise是是否有distraction的关键因素。差距的话，主要是在老师每个例子都紧紧扣住是否会引起distraction,而在下文中，distraction 被泛化成有没有好好学习这样不明确的概念了。这一点我认为是最主要的差距。

101) Although innovations such as video, computers, and the Internet seem to offer schools improved methods for instructing students, these technologies all too often distract from real learning.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

In the era of information, students have been both blessed and cursed with the implemented new teaching methods including videos, computers and the Internet, which are made possible by advanced technologies. Whether students can remain determined and focused on their studies depend on the attitudes they hold towards improved teaching methods. More specifically, it depends on whether they are taken over or not by the abundance and convenience brought along with the new teaching techniques. I will take the mooc- massive open online courses as an example to illustrate my points.

Mooc can help students to improve the chances of getting further educated, as the ambitious program provide abundant high-quality courses on Internet, helping them to understand the material quickly and comprehensively.
-Imagine a child with poor economical backgrounds who can not to go to the university.
-He may have talents in physics, but may turn to hard labor because of the unaffordable college fees.
-With a computer connected to mooc, he may absorb all courses shared by top universities in physics with thirst, without worrying of his financial background.
-In discussing on the bbs, he might have the opportunity to have academic friends and further information not mentioned in the courses.
-Internet education does not only offer introduction to a certain subject. it also helps students to dig deeper in their field. And mooc is only a tip of the iceberg.

On the other hand, mooc may also have the opportunities to deprive the chances of students thinking and finishing their homework individually.
-With the opportunity to get ideas from brilliant students from a wide range of universities, students become more reluctant to think on their own.
-Investigations of mooc bbses support that work of students from a wide range of areas have a higher suspicion of copying ideas from others than before.
-This tendency may reduce the difficulty in finishing a course in university, which may cause a GPA inflation.
-as higher grades are more accessible, it is not likely for students to devote a necessary amount of time in their academic career.
-the unwillingness of study is the one of the undesirable consequences of educational innovation.

In addition, the abundance of courses offered by mooc may distract students from main courses in university.
-As we know, life in universities is stressful and compact.
-Since time resource for study is limited, students need to plan well and spend their time wisely.
-However, compared to their main courses, the ones from mooc tend to be fun and attracting.
-Worldwide studies show that by indulging in watching videos of other subjects on mooc, there is a considerable increase in the number of students excusing themselves for not doing tasks from major courses .
-In this way, mooc becomes another source of distraction for students who ought to be well focused on their major in universities.

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12)Governments should offer a free university education to any student who has been admitted to a university but who cannot afford the tuition.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.


With the development of economics and social awareness, more and more people become concerned with the issue of education, especially university education. The most important issue is the one related to admission fees, since it determines the decisions of a large number of students who cannot afford the full fares themselves. Some people argue that government should offer free education to students admitted to the university who can not afford the tuition. I will repute this opinion from the consequences on students, government and universities, and illustrate what kind of undesirable impact would it have on implementing such policies.

Students will get less motivated for government paying all the tuition.
-Students in universities are motivated by both their ambition and the pressure exerted through financial loan.
-Once the loan is carried by government, students would likely to get less motivated in their study and less likely to achieve academically.
-the deterioration of education quality may lead to another combat in increasing funds for universities. In this way, a downward circle may be build which lead to undesired outcome of both education and applied free university fee politicy.


Universities could not possibly offer quality education for enrolled students.
-universities could be seen as profit-making corporations, which try to make as much profit as possible to balance the teaching cost.
-once the financial burdens is taken by government, universities would reasonably have more students admitted in order to enlarge their influence and potential academic power.
-increased students number will put stress onto existing education resources such as available seats in classroom, the professors who tutoring students one by one in studios or labs.

Government would be likely to suffer from social benefit lost due to its shift of invest.
-government budget is limited, under this premise, if government put taxpayers’ money into education, the welfare for other members in the society is surly to deteriorate.
-Without a careful study of the overall benefit of shift money from other sectors of social programs into education, it would be brusque to determine to free the university education.
-other society members who deserves the invest may lack a necessary support , which would in turn cause other long term social problems such as early-year education, elderly nursing problems
 

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王老师在范文中使用的是难度较大的ARUGMENT的手法，分别从PREMISE, EVIDENCE, PROCESS OF REASONING三个方面讨论，的确比较抽象，而且对写作者要求很高，需要自己举例子并且同时作为反对者去质疑前提，推理和证据。可是说是MUST DIE的难度。虽高山仰止，却无路可学。于是在习作中我试着从参与讨论的双方是否对等这个角度出发来讨论，各位英雄来给评评是不是还能站得住脚？

ISSUE146
146) The best test of an argument is the argument's ability to convince someone with an opposing viewpoint.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

As human societies are developing toward civilization, arguments instead of violence become a common and reasonable way for people to exert influence upon each other in order to form a common ground. In my opinion, the validity of an argument can be tested through the way mentioned in the statement when the two sides are comparatively equal. However, if one side involved in the argument is more powerful than the other, then the consequence of persuasion does not justify the reliability of the argument. Because the consequence may be achieved through obedience rather than the validity of the argument itself. I will illustrate my point with more concrete examples as follows.

When the two sides involved in the argument is not even in their power, such as information acquired, the result of convincing someone will lose its validity to justify the argument. Imagine a debate between a layman and an expert,
-an expert has a clear structure of the whole knowledge system of the topic. Thus, he or she can develop a detailed and well supported thesis with ease, though his idea may not make sense when examined by other experts.
-however, it would not be possible for an outsider to discuss the same topic in the same systematical way. Thus, only a few fragmented points can be made.
-The huge gap between the arguments would give the former a dominant position through comparison.
-In this manner, the outsider can be easily convinced by the expert, due to the inequality of knowledge structure rather than the argument itself.

Despite the knowledge inequality mentioned as a factor contributes to the invalidity of testing an argument, the statement could also be wrong when the hierarchical power inequality is involved.
-For example, the argument would not necessarily be convincing concerning with a debate between a boss and an employee.
-the boss acquires imperative power which has the capability to force people to agree.
-an employee tends to consent with the idea of the boss even without full understanding.
-because of the inequality in power, the boss does not need to develop a well supported argument to persuade his employee to accept what he said.
-As the two examples aptly illustrate, the quality of an argument cannot be reliably tested as long as the two sides involved are not equal in their state.

An argument can be well tested as the two sides are comparatively equal in their power, whether it is information acquired or political power obtained. Take scientific argument between two scientist schools as an example.
-as we know, scientific schools are usually comparatively even when referring to the knowledge they acquired.
-the arguments between the two schools are pure competition of the completeness and the abundance of the supportive evidence.
-In this way, the validity of the argument is based on an objective standard which can be examined.
-Therefore, so long as equality is guaranteed, the method mentioned in the statement holds true.

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ISSUE49
49) Claim: We can usually learn much more from people whose views we share than from those whose views contradict our own.
Reason: Disagreement can cause stress and inhibit learning.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.



Diversity, a value being embraced by the world nowadays, is accepted by a growing number of people in modern society. Through such kind of perspective, both the claim and the reason do not seem to be agreeable in most cases. Because modern society develops a culture of tolerance and life-long learning, people are encouraged to be more rational and peaceful when facing with diverse ideologies and cultures. Nevertheless, there are still a few of issues especially referring to religious, through discussing of which stress can be easily generated and learning efficiency can be harmed due to the irrational and emotional states we tend to maintain in the field of pure trust. I will illustrate my points through several concrete examples as follows.

To begin with, when referring to academic fields, both the claim and reason mentioned do not stand. As we know, a scholar would not be a qualified one if he or she cannot remain calm and objective before different opinions. Take the famous philosopher Russell and Wittgenstein as example. W is the student of Russell. but he is an abnormal student who holds a large number of different views from his teacher. The usual debate they engaged in do not put stress on the relationship between the teacher and the students. Otherwise, they developed unique theories independently with the help of constant discussion. In other words, the fierce lasting debate between them help to lead to tremendous academic successes rather than stress each other and inhibit learning.

What's more, in political field, we can also enlighten each other through presenting our own ideas before other stakeholders who may probably think otherwise. For example, an advocate for gay and lesbian marriage would learn what kind of belief lies in the minds of those conservative people. They may find out that the opponents’ idea roots in the unconditional belief of the traditional culture that heterosexual marriage is the only form of marriage that would be blessed by gods and protected by law. Through such kind of discussion, the traditional people may also learn that homosexual marriage do not harm the right of others as they think. In this way, both sides can learn to think openly. Therefore, a consensus may have the opportunity to be reached with the help of learning from people who hold different views.

However, when it comes to more sensitive issues such as religious ones, the claim and the reason presented above may make sense, since people are less likely to stay calm and objective when their basic belief is challenged. Let us imagine a debate between a devout Christian and an atheist. The devout Christian would likely to strongly insist the Holy Bible is the only true source of wisdom and knowledge of the world, while the atheist may challenge the idea with lack of supporting evidence for every single story in the Bible. Since it is not a debatable discussion, people are likely to get emotional and irrational about the issue. Thus, a feeling of stressful and unsafe is generated, which may lead to damage in their relationship and hatred.

In conclusion, people would learn efficiently when they are involved in a clam and objective discussion because of the opportunity endowed to grab the other part of the topic. However, it would be stressful and inhibitive when more sensitive issues such as religious ones are involved.

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3) Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.


"To succeed" could be interpreted as getting a decent GPA in a certain field, according to the statement .Basically, I do not agree that institutions have the responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study where they are unlikely to succeed. According to the research data revealed, most students would take specific jobs after their graduation. And nowadays, students do not necessarily need to have a degree in order to be recruit by employers. With the advance of discipline integration, students need to have multiple backgrounds to be successful in their own careers. Some people may argue for students who are aimed to be a researcher thet the academic success would be pretty much important for him or her. I will address this argument later after discussing students who tend to work in future.

To begin with, if a student wants to get a nice job after graduation, he or she does not need to care about the academic success too much in cities, because in modern society many jobs are provided without any requirement of a specific degree in a certain field. The big four auditing firm, for example, recruit thousands of top-university graduates of non-accounting majors every year with the belief that their in-home training programs would effectively help the graduates to pick up pragmatic skills while they are working. Also, the leading investment banks do not expect their applicants to have specific degrees in finance or economics so long as they have a strong background in quantitive reasoning.

In addition, the merging trend of discipline integration puts the requirement of cross-discipline background on the job-seekers. A large number of them are required to have a solid background in multiple fields in order to handle the complex problems faced by mankind today. For example, students from Harvard graduate school of design is over-welcomed by the design firms and studios in architecture design market. Because the students receive an advanced mixed program of design education, they acquire comprehensive knowledge from all architecture , urban design and landscape design, which would be super effective in solving the complex design problems met in real projects. In other words, though it is not possible for them to become the experts in all areas, they will become an effective coordinator who serves as a pivot in the team.

Despite the unnecessity of dissuasion for students who want to get a job in future, some people may argue that students who are not likely to have academic success should be dissuaded from pursuing field if they want to be researchers in future, because academic success matters more in research. However, the opinion could not be fully support by facts. As we know, academic success could not be easily analyzed and predicted. A student may be inferior in his study at the first place, but later, driven by the power of interest, he or she would catch up and master the knowledge well after a certain period of study. Take Albert Einstine as an example. He is one of the most prominent theoretical physicist in the 19th century who was treated as untalented by his teacher of middle school. Imagine if he was persuaded and quitted in pursuing the academic research, what a pity would the result be.

In conclusion, as the examples above aptly illustrate, the educational institution do not have responsibility to dissuade students, even they are considered not likely to success in academic because the prediction can hardly be guaranteed with convincing supports for someone who wants to be a researcher. And the conclusion also applies to students who want to find a decent job, for job markets nowadays pay less attention to degrees but put more weight on the wide range of knowledge one possesses.

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13) Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

Though I acknowledge that students need a wide background of knowledge nowadays, I do not support universities to make a variety of courses required for all university students. For the students who want to major in pragmatic fields such as management and accounting, it would be beneficial for them to gain various knowledge to widen their scope in order to deal with real problems in a more comprehensive way. But for those who want to approach pure science research like mathematics, the mandatory requirement would not likely to benefit them, for these disciplines require the ability of pure reasoning more than shallow tastes of a variety of knowledge. Some people may argue pure science also need inspiration from other field. I will address this argument after giving solid examples for my former concerns.

To begin with, for students who are pursuing pure science, it would be redundant and distracting for them to take mandatory courses from other disciplines. For example, mathematics is a field requiring pure reasoning abilities and abstract thinking within the field. As we know, math is a field based on  mathematical principles which are absolute and abstract. All the theorems are deductions from the original principles. All the mathematical knowledge would be valid without the support from other subjects such as music, engineering and even theoretical physics. Because of the specific features of this discipline, students of math do not need  knowledge from other fields to help them dig deeper in the mathematical kingdom.

Despite the exclusiveness of pure science, students would need a wide range of knowledge if they major in more pragmatic fields and want to pursue career success after graduation. In this way, an official requirement of various courses would be supported by the future need of students and the requirement should be recommended. Imagine a student majors in management, though he or she might learn how to plan and organize an task in an organization, in the real world, the effectiveness of the plan and organization would also be determined by the specific business running in the company, which would be unfamiliar for a fresh graduate. For example, Frederick.W.Smith, the founder of FedEx, didn't invent his business with systematic knowledge of his single field. But rather, he was inspired by the military logistic system which is unfamiliar with all business leaders at that time. As this example aptly illustrate, a wide range of knowledge would be helpful for students in pragmatic majors, and a requirement putting on them would consequently be reasonable.

Some people may argue that even mathematician would also need knowledge from other fields, which would have the opportunity to serve as an inspiration of a breakthrough. And thus, courses from various fields would also be reasonably required. I would oppose such argument with concrete example. The ancient Greek mathematician Pythagoras, was cultivated in different cultures by a variety of experts. Particularly, he studied how to make beautiful music from a poet in Samos. Afterwards, the relationship between music and math became an important issue of his philosophy work, and he had addressed it in a quite compelling way. Though I admit music play an important role in the work of Pythagoras, studying music is one interest of him rather than knowledge acquired with the help of mandatory course. And inspiration could evolve in many ways other than between music and math. Therefore, It would be ridiculous to demand students of math to take musical classes in university which would be a joke rather than helpful courses. Instead, encouraging students to spend more time on their interests would seem to be more wise, with more diverse courses being available for them rather than mandatory requirements.

In conclusion, for students of pure science, they should not be required to take a variety of courses outside their major because the exclusiveness of their field. However, for other students major in pragmatic fields, the requirement is considered to be valid and supported. Considering the inspiration could be created between different fields, students should be encourage to pursue their own interest of any field.

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15) Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

ISSUE 15 基本是按照王老师的范文..:p

More and more people are looking for decent jobs after graduation, therefore, it is argued that students should be encouraged to choose fields with promises of lucrative careers in future. I do not agree with the statement, because the statement is built upon two unwarranted assumptions. Firstly, the writer assumes that job market is unpredictable four years later. In addition, he makes the assumption that a large number of employers require applicants to have specific degrees in relevant fields if they are considered as future employees. Some people may argue that having a degree in relevant fields would win students advantages when they are applying for their ideal work. I will address this argument after providing concrete examples to oppose the assumptions.

Firstly, the author assumes that one can reliably predict the future job market at any time. However, this assumption is inconsistent with reality in job market because the world economy is changing in an unprecedented way and the demands for talents differ from time to time. Take architects as an example. Back to the late 1990s, architecture is a attractive major with promises of many job offers to the graduates in China, since there was a large demand for architecture projects to fulfill the vaccum of incoming urbanization. However, by 2010s, the burst of estate bubbles had dramatically cut the number of architects in the job market, partly due to the economy structure transformation driven by the government. Nowadays, with the advent of P2P design apps and ascending private demands, architecture majors are in huge need again. With this example clearly illustrate, it is not true that one can reliably predict the future demands of a specific expertise.

Despite the unpredictability of job market, the writer also implies that one needs to have a specific degree in order to get a job in that field. This assumption is also not likely to be true, because more and more employers do not exert the importance of a degree certificate so long as the applicant is reasonably intelligent and hard-working. The big-four auditing firms, for example, recruit thousands of graduates of non-accounting majors from top universities all over the world with the belief that their in-house training programs would effectively help the fresh employees to acquire the technical knowledge they need while they work. Also, the leading investment banks do not expect the job applicants to have degrees in finance or economics so long as they have a strong background in quantative reasoning. Therefore, a relevant degree is not necessary for getting a decent job after graduation.

Some people may argue that following the advice in the statement would increase the opportunities of finding a good job, because it is believed that, other things being equal, a student having a specific degree would be favored by the employer. However, one factor being neglected here is whether students are interested in the field. As we know, a student would more likely to gain academic success if he or she is willing to engage themselves into the study materials. If not so, students may not do well in their majors. Without a decent GPA in their fields, the chance of getting ideal jobs might rather be reduced. Therefore, instead of choosing job based on job prospect, it would be more efficient for universities to encourage students to pursue their own interest, which would benefit them in the longer term and help them find their life-long career.

In conclusion, students should not be encouraged to choose their major based on an unreliable prediction of job markets, because a large number of jobs today do not demand specific degrees in certain field. Thus, following the advice in the statement would lead to the desired outcome. Instead, students should be encouraged to pursue their own interest and chase their own dreams, which would more likely to guarantee them a more desired job after four years.

642words 47mins 按照今天白天测的打字速度，我纯打需要15-20MINS，如果是王老师来打大概只要10MIN，所以——

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Trueyang 发表于 2015-10-7 23:55
15) Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that ...

乍一看还以为写的是argument。。。