[Test Date 10.10] preparatation on writing

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This is my preparation on writing for the test date of Oct. 10th.
Day 1, Sep/29, writing topic is

Do you agree or disagree with the statement: In order to succeed, it is better to be like others rather than different from everybody else.

My article written in 33 minutes is below.
Any advices and comments is welcome.

Nowadays, some may believe that you need better to be like others rather than different from everybody else to achieve success. However, in my opinion, in order to be successful, you should have your own idea and behavior.


The first reason is that be successful means to create a new thing, to succeed a new idea that no one has achieved before, I believe. As the goal is totally new to everyone in the field, what you have to do is to get out of the normal thinkings and not follow anyone, but challenge. Let me take iPhone as an example. As we all know, iPhone is very popular all over the world, for the simple but beautiful design, the great user feelings, and the convenience services like iMusic, iClound, and so on.  And why this small cellphone is so successful? I believe the most important reason is that to create, not follow others. It is the modify that Apple belive, no USB insert devices, but iCloud service; no music storage dick but iMusic service that one can listen to his favorite wherever he is, makes the iPhone become popular.


In addition,  be success means you can achieve the goal that less people could. That is to say, the others are have no idea of what to do, and how could you follow the advices from people who have no knowledge in this field.  On the way to success, advices and opinions from experienced people are really needed and necessary. However, this is not to say what you should do is to follow and obey their experiences. What you should do is to think by yourself, take helpful opinions and object harmful ones.

In summary, in order to be successful, you should have your own idea and behavior. And if you just follow what other people say, what are waiting for you ahead is failure not success.

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