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11"All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems."
提纲：反对成立global university
        1， 如何建立和管理该大学也是一个国际争端
     2， 这样的大学阻碍学术发展
     3， 这样的大学未必对解决社会问题有贡献
The speaker seems to introduce a charming educational project which suggests all nations develop a global university for the purpose of solving the world's most persistent social problems. I concede that education should pay attention to the global society with its academic wisdom and knowledge. However, I could hardly persuade myself to accept the speaker's proposal for the following reasons I have conceived.

The chief reason why I stand opposite to the settlement of a global university is that the operation and the management of such a university will be likely cause a expectable international argument. First of all, the financial share of the university imposed on each nation is to certain extent a disputable issue which will last longer than the current waited-to-solved social problems. For the most persistent social problems which is not cited may exist in certain location of the world. The objection of the equal responsibility to the university from the other countries whose sites is out of the location will be undoubtedly fierce. Additionally, the administrative control of this university is possibly to be the next most attractive and valuable goal for nations to seek, owning to the potential pool of elites within this university campus.

The second reason why I hesitate to the speaker's suggestion is that the so-called global university may probably harm the spirit of high-education with the university's definitively political purpose. The stress from its social purpose is only a burden for the university to achieve both the scientific accomplishments and the social studies' breakthrough. As far as we know, the elemental air for scholars to breathe is "academic freedom" and the indispensable condition for scientists to work is "mental independence". However, the compelling purpose casted on the university eclipses both the freedom and independence cherished by every university faculty, who piles the bricks of the academic reputation and social value of the university.

The last but the most important reason why I am conservative to my vote for the global university is that whether the university will actually and efficiently do contribution to solve the most troublesome world wide social problems. Because the science is just and still the science whenever it is colored by politicians with the avocations of its influence. The academic accomplishment from the university only will become feasible to solve social problems merely after the scientific fruit turn into the stones thrown by each political force. Without the original taste of scientific spirit, the academic work loses a considerable part of its efficiency.

In final analysis, the speaker ignores the most basic element of the solving process of global problem and the most essential spirit of a university----the former refers to the political and military power, which is always the repressive force on the latter one defined as the "independence of academic mind". Given such common notion, I could only bear the skeptical attitude towards the global university which is designed by the speaker to integrate the political power and academic view so as to erase off the durable social problems. From yesterday to tomorrow, the word I utter is just "impossible".

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太晚了，seat taken

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The speaker seems to introduce a charming educational project which suggests all nations develop a global university for the purpose of solving the world's most persistent social problems. I concede that education should pay attention to the global society with its academic wisdom and knowledge. However, I could hardly persuade myself to accept the speaker's proposal for the following reasons I have conceived.

The chief reason why I stand opposite to the settlement of a global university is that the operation and the management of such a university [B]will be likely （is likely to）[/B] cause a expectable international argument. First of all, the financial share of the university imposed on each nation is to certain extent a disputable issue which will l[B]ast longer than (overpower 是不是好些呢？)[/B] the current waited-to-solved social problems. For the most persistent social problems which is not cited may exist in certain location of the world. （这句意思不太明白）The objection of the equal responsibility to the university from the other countries whose sites is out of the location will be undoubtedly fierce. Additionally, the administrative control of this university is possibly to be the next most attractive and valuable goal for nations to seek, owning to the potential pool of elites within this university campus.

The second reason why I hesitate to the speaker's suggestion is that the so-called global university may probably harm the spirit of high-education with the university's definitively political purpose. The stress from its social purpose is only a burden for the university to achieve both the scientific accomplishments and the social studies' breakthrough. As far as we know, the elemental air for scholars to breathe is "academic freedom" and the indispensable condition for scientists to work is "mental independence". However, the compelling purpose casted on the university eclipses both the freedom and independence cherished by every university faculty, who piles the bricks of the academic reputation and social value of the university.

The last but the most important reason why I am conservative to my vote for the global university is that whether the university will actually and efficiently do contribution to solve the most troublesome world wide social problems. Because the science is just and still the science whenever it is colored by politicians with the avocations of its influence. [B]（这句话句子结构有问题）[/B] The academic accomplishment from the university only will become feasible to solve social problems merely after the scientific fruit turn into the stones thrown by each political force[B].（这句话太绝对了吧，虽然国际性的大学有政治色彩，但是就能证明学术成果的实现仅仅受这个影响吗？）[/B]  Without the original taste of scientific spirit, the academic work loses a considerable part of its efficiency.

In final analysis, the speaker ignores the most basic element of the solving process of global problem and the most essential spirit of a university----the former refers to the political and military power, which is always the repressive force on the latter one defined as the "independence of academic mind". Given such common notion, I could only bear the skeptical attitude towards the global university which is designed by the speaker to integrate the political power and academic view so as to erase off the durable social problems. From yesterday to tomorrow, the word I utter is just "impossible".

总的看感觉楼主语言挺流畅，反正比我好多了，论证结构挺好，只是感觉论据不是很充分，也没有较突出的例子，不知你认为呢？
btw，楼主要是有时间也帮我批批吧，我的好多篇都没人批，不知是不是我写得实在太烂 :p

binbinwinUID: 167698

目前，提纲才刚开始列，郁闷死了
7月机经issue有180多道，怎么复习啊，哎

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11"All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems."
提纲：反对成立global university
1， 如何建立和管理该大学也是一个国际争端
2， 这样的大学阻碍学术发展
3， 这样的大学未必对解决社会问题有贡献
The speaker seems to introduce a charming educational project which suggests all nations develop a global university for the purpose of solving the world's most persistent social problems. I concede that education should pay attention to the global society with its academic wisdom and knowledge. However, I could hardly persuade myself to accept the speaker's proposal for the following reasons I have conceived.开头很好哦，很清晰

The chief reason why I stand opposite to the settlement of a global university is that the operation and the management of such a university will be likely cause a expectable international argument. First of all, the financial share of the university imposed on each nation is to certain extent a disputable issue which will last longer than the current waited-to-solved social problems. For the most persistent social problems which isare not cited may exist in certain location of the world. The objection of the equal responsibility to the university from the other countries whose sites is out of the location will be undoubtedly fierce. 什么意思，没看明白？Additionally, the administrative control of this university is possibly to be the next most attractive and valuable goal for nations to seek, owning to the potential pool of elites within this university campus.

The second reason why I hesitate to the speaker's suggestion is that the so-called global university may probably harm the spirit of high-education with the university's definitively political purpose. The stress from its social purpose is only a burden for the university to achieve both the scientific accomplishments and the social studies' breakthrough. As far as we know, the elemental air for scholars to breathe is "academic freedom" and the indispensable condition for scientists to work is "mental independence". However, the compelling purpose castedcast on the university eclipses both the freedom and independence cherished by every university faculty, who piles the bricks of the academic reputation and social value of the university.

The last but the most important reason why I am conservative to my vote for the global university is that whether the university will actually and efficiently do contribution to solve the most troublesome world wide social problems. Because the science is just and still the science whenever it is colored by politicians with the avocations of its influence. The academic accomplishment from the university only will become feasible to solve social problems merely after the scientific fruit turn into the stones thrown by each political force. Without the original taste of scientific spirit, the academic work loses a considerable part of its efficiency.

In final analysis, the speaker ignores the most basic element of the solving process of global problem and the most essential spirit of a university----the former refers to the political and military power, which is always the repressive force on the latter one defined as the "independence of academic mind". Given such common notion, I could only bear the skeptical attitude towards the global university which is designed by the speaker to integrate the political power and academic view so as to erase off the durable social problems. From yesterday to tomorrow, the word I utter is just "impossible".
楼主的语言很好啊，羡慕啊，学习学习，没什么意见，我觉得整篇都在说理，可不可以加点事例啊，我是没这个水平通篇说理啊，我的观点是可以加入些目前的问题杀伤性武器，巴以问题之类，有政治利益，环保方面有经济利益之类的，只是个人见解，楼主有空帮我改改文章把