Issue11 武汉8月11日题目试练,大家砸砸 :)

SunnyOpenUID: 164650

Issue11  第5篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
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作者：SunnyOpen     共用时间：56分28秒     464 words
从2004年7月15日9时11分到2004年7月15日10时56分
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All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems.
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      As the development of economic and communication technology, people from different countries have increasingly frequent communication. The world has become a small village as a result of globalization. The problems in a country can probably have affect on some other countries. Thus it is necessary for all nations on the earth to support the building and development of a global university designed engages students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems.

     To solve the world's most persistent social problems, such as environmental pollution, global crime, energy crisis and so on, need to promote mutual understanding and cooperation among different nations. Consider the global warming and global air pollutions, its solution depends on all the nations of the world trying to control exhaust amount of each, which need mutual trust and cooperation among the countries. The same is global crime; it also depends on mutual cooperation among countries to arrest the criminals who flees everywhere. In short, many problems have been belonging to the world, countries on the earth should pay an effort together to solve them.

     A global university can be effective to supply chances for the youth of different nations to understand culture of the others and to build cooperative basic for the future. The youth of each country who come to the university are likely to play an important role in their country's foreign affairs department, which asks them to learn to communicate with and understand people from different culture backgrounds. The global university is actually a good place for them. In the university, they can learn much about different culture and have a good understanding on other peoples. In the future, they can learn to think questions and solve problems from others' eyes; it is important for they and it is also helpful for the solutions of troubles among different countries.

    Every nation can benefit from the global university which belongs to the world, so it is necessary for them to support its development. By sending their youth to the university, every nation can actually promote others' understanding of its own culture and the troubles it faces; It is the basis of cooperation with this nation for other countries. Also by sending their youth to the university, the people can know more about different countries' culture and troubles; and this will help it to play an important role in international affairs. Thus basing on mutual understanding and cooperation, the countries will likely avoid conflicts and wars, and perhaps benefit much from cooperation with others. As it turns out, every country should support to the development of the university.(最后展开这段有点问题,感觉也不好讲,不知道是不是举例子更好,但是又没有例子可举,超时了几分钟 可能最后紧张是一个问题把)

    In sum, a global can promote mutual understanding and cooperation among the youth from different nations, which can actually help to solve the world's most persistent social problems among many countries. Every nation can certainly benefit a lot from its building and development.

cleonlxUID: 172606

Consider the global warming and global air pollutions

这是environmental problem吧，不是social problem.

感觉你的论述都有些游离于social problem之外，虽然都似乎沾上一点边，但是好像都是旨在说明一个global university的好处，而不是在说论述明一个global university designed to ... 的必要性，可行性，与效用。
我觉得要高度注意作者的限定词： designed to
拙见，望探讨。

SunnyOpenUID: 164650

在上面一篇发不了,郁闷 发在楼下把

首先谢谢你看我的文章,下面是我的建议: :)
我觉得你的文章没有一个中心,好像就在驳题目的逻辑错误一样,我们写issue不是看观点对不对,而是看你能不能证明你自己的观点,我的issue的提纲如下
1 解决世界的棘手的问题需要各国之间的合作
2 全球性的大学能为来自各国的学生在将来的国际事务中更好的合作打下基础
3 通过参加这个计划,送学生上这个大学能使各国受益,所以各国都应该支持
我觉得这是一个全球化的题目,而不是教育题,当然也可以从教育方面入手,不管你赞成还是反对,只要能证明观点就行 还有个人认为这个题目应该注重在should上面 所以我就是这样写的. 我引得环境的例子现在想起来好像有点不足,不过应该还是和社会扯的上把 我当时想得是world这个词,而没有注重social上,:) 还有我觉得那个designed to 在从句只是修饰学校的功能的,并不是限定词把 限定词应该是should把 :) 欢迎探讨 :)

cleonlxUID: 172606

恩……我倒的确是把这个当作argument来写了，昨天写的时候就有想到了，也没有换思路。
至于反对作者能不能成为自己的观点呢，恩，ETS也说You are free to accept, reject and qualify嘛。argument主要是就作者的论证提出质疑，而ISSUE的reject就是质疑作者的观点了，不同之处，应在于此。

限定词的问题嘛，我抓的是一个designed to解决social problem的大学，这反正是个见仁见智的东西，到无所谓选什么。其实还有很多可抓，persistent，should support，all nation其实都可行。关键看你对哪一个敏感些。
论点上面，我们刚好是反着的，所以思维的冲突很正常。

第一个论证点的例子是有点问题，意思表达的不是很清楚。
第二个论证点里面，UN的例子，是想说明global view对于地方问题的无用，而一个global university教给学生的，肯定是global view了。所谓的方法，也就是universal method。遇到具体的问题的时候，基本上起不了什么作用。
western和eastern嘛，我也想到了J,K，所以加了个many作限定。

小丫丫UID: 173904

开头和结尾观点明确
第四段TS不明确，像个像结尾的总结

SunnyOpenUID: 164650

cleonlx 我的意思是我对你举的un例子好像是把学校的功能理解错了 你好像把全球的大学当作直接处理全球事务的机构了 我不知道这样可以不 但是按我的理解 这样好像是不足证明你观点:建大学是无用的 个人意见 :)

SunnyOpenUID: 164650

还有 很赞成你关于限定词的解释 让我思路开豁不少 :)

cleonlxUID: 172606

最初由 SunnyOpen 发布
[B]cleonlx 我的意思是我对你举的un例子好像是把学校的功能理解错了 你好像把全球的大学当作直接处理全球事务的机构了 我不知道这样可以不 但是按我的理解 这样好像是不足证明..

以下省略...... [/B]

是的，我第二个论证点是有这样的意味，不过那是因为我抓的design to，就是说这个大学就是用来解决问题的，还有因为我有第一个论证点对于大学究竟是什么功能的阐述…………不过，由于第一段阐述的不清楚，加之第二段开头没有让步，所以自己的思想上有的东西，好像没有表达出来呢…………
anyway，以后记住不要想到了手不到就是了。
一起进步吧。

SunnyOpenUID: 164650

哦 呵呵 恩 一起加油 :)