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No.1 issue131 限时基本成功
The arts (painting, music, literature, etc.) reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society."
上午写提纲,中午睡了一觉,下午开机就写~~差不多用了45分钟。
先对hidden两分:因为难于表达的而hidden与因为当局压制而hidden的。分别论述艺术可以reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society.
让步:有的艺术和ideas and impulses of a society没关系。
我的想法是,你既然详细说了hidden的情况,是否还应该反应不hidden的情况呢?现在你的分类是1.揭示hidden的ideas和impulses 2.不揭示 但是,我觉得按你对hidden的两方面分析,我觉得下面说不hidden而直接表达是顺理成章的。因为,首先是reveal不reveal一些什么东西,再说是hidden或不hidden。你说呢?我把自己都绕糊涂了,不知道你看明白没?HOHO
Miscellaneous art works are bequeathed to the modern people in large quantity. Some of them reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of society while others do not.很简洁的开头。赞一个
As a threshold matter, let us consider why ideas 这个都写全了比较好吧,ideas and impulses。are concealed. The ideas are hidden mainly for two reasons: first, they are difficult to express, second, they are oppress by the authority. Arts, however, can give vent to them in both cases.我的感觉还是,应该先说reveal不reveal,然后才能谈到hidden不hidden。而且你的开头说的也是如此,some。。reveal。。。others。。do not,就是在说reveal不reveal啊,不应该是hidden不hidden吧。
In the first case, arts serve as an effective way to communicate the unutterable这个可以作名词吗?. From the Renaissancewhen people began to glean the Christian theme, many paintings were made in the aim of expressing the public respect to the deity. ,(since the Renaissance。。。。had been。。。?)The construction of the church, often high and slim as the Cologne Cathedral , represents the awe and power 力量是神的,敬畏是人的,放在一起有问题吧。of the deity and thus(为什么用thus呢?) the people's respect to god. People have no difficulty in pointing out the meaning of the architecture and understand the society respected the god. And music, another form of art, has a mysterious power to utter the mind deep in our heart more effective than our words. On(by/through??) hearing the solemn Mass one will come to realize that the composer is telling him/her the divinity of the god. Hardly can a sentence like "we respect god" express people's esteem. In sum, arts act as a effective way to reveal some hidden ideas that are hard to express.看你前面一段是分两方面说,难于表达和被压迫。那么这段应该是要说难表达吧。但是似乎没看到哦,是在说艺术表达神性。你是想说神性不好表达,所以通过艺术吗?最好明确的提出一下。还有一点就是,神性和社会ideas,impulses的关系应该证明一下的。
In the second case, when voice from the masses is quenched by the authority, the art can express the ideas and emotions via abstract works. When the Spain is under the reign of Nazi, the bombing that claimed many lives was going on, but no one dared to speak out their hatred and sorrow towards the dead. But Picasso drew an abstract painting of the bombed city to express the public hidden ideas.(Guernica) Were it not for his painting, nobody can know the masses' feeling. 呵呵,蜘蛛那篇的句子,好句子,但是绝对了一点。In this way, the painting transcended the art itself and became the avatar of the public voice. reveal被压迫的ideas和impulses,照应了hidden分类的那段。
However, not all arts deal with the hidden idea还有impulses. After all, arts is a(an啊,检查) individual matter and utter the artist' feeling. The Chinese painting always focuses on the beauty and affinity of the nature such as the height of a mountain, the limpidity of a lake and the coziness of the early summer. A painting consisting of several fish, a pond and some flowers just describes a nature scene and the comfortness of its creator but has little to do with social hidden ideas. Likewise, the aim of Bach's well-tempered clavier book is only to construct and elaborate the well-tempered principles, a musical theory. Nothing about society hidden ideas can be figured out. If we really want to find some meaning out of the arts, then it is the personal emotion and inspiration that is expressed. The Beethoven's opus called moonlight is linked with his love of a lady and his sorrow emotion of losing her affection. To sum up, the arts can also serve as a way to express personal feeling or other aims far from revealing hidden ideas of society.这段很好的,没什么可说的
On balance, arts is so complex that it defies a single conclusion that it reveals the otherwise hidden idea of the society. Some art is employed as a tool to speak out the public otherwise hidden ideas and some of them may only speak for the artists themselves.
限时写成这样不错的,恭喜lake兄了!
语言很好的
结构我有一点疑问,在上面也都说到了
两方面的reveal和不reveal中的reveal里面分的是不同的hidden,而我觉得应该是hidden和不hidden好一点,比如说很多时期和艺术家的作品由于政府或贵族资助,社会思潮影响等等原因,直接就表现社会的ideas和impulses。你对于hidden的方面说的太多,而且散了一点,我觉得即使不说不hidden的情况,这里也应该缩短和整合一下,你说呢?
加油啊!限时语言还写这么好,你一定成功的!
说的不对的地方再讨论啊
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