issue10 高频题啦，刚写完用word查了错，请斧正

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10"Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive, because it is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated."

outline:
1.城市不能起到保护本国文化的作用
2. 乡村才是本国文化的温床
3.城市有能力支持自己的发展，发而是乡村应该得到更多资助


The speaker claims that a nation's major cities are the conservatories where its cultural traditions are generated and preserved, and therefore governments must give their major cities enough financial support to enable them to thrive. I strongly disagree with the speaker's claim. As far as I am concerned, it is hard to say that a nation's cultural traditions are primarily preserved in major cities. Moreover, government should shift their most subsidies from major cities to countryside, for the sake of the balance of whole society and better conservation of a nation's cultural convection.

As the outcome of economy and technology advancement, big cities are less likely to serve as sanctuaries for cultural tradition; to the contrast, it is the nature of big cities, such as modern and advanced, that weakens and fades the influence of native cultural tradition. Suffering the impact of globalization in this world, big cities have a trend to involve into the same, that is, fraught with skyscrapers, shopping malls, limousine, and so forth. Gradually, these cities lose their characteristic features when they aim to become more international and modern. People in cities enjoy the convenience to access to the fashion of the world and communicate with foreign friends from different background. To some degree, large cities can be regarded as a stew pot which incorporate many other cultures and might create a global culture in the future. Therefore, native culture is mixed with others, become only part of the mainstream, and even is marginalized. In this case, large cities can never function as conservatories on which a nation's culture traditions can rely.

Only in countryside can a nation's cultural traditions survive and breathe their own atmosphere. Unlike big cities, countryside suffers less impact of the foreign culture and values, mostly due to its occlusion and less connection with outer world. For example, in China, there is a traditional sports event called "dragon boat", which commemorates a great ideologist and poet, Qu Yuan. It has been held every year since thousand years ago, but now, people can only watch this game in the river of some countryside. Besides, many quite special and traditional skills of handicraft are faced with the danger of extinction, in that they are now only passed down and prevailing in the countryside, and people in cities always have no time, no interest, no patience to learn such skills. Thus, only in countryside, rather than big cities, can people preserve the precious cultural traditions.

Furthermore, not only because big cities do not function to preserve and generate culture traditions, but because major cities are capable enough of ensuring their development of economy and countryside still lacks of necessary resources, governments should pay more attention to subsidize countryside for their basic needs and the conservation of cultural traditions.  Industries and business can maintain the city in its healthy way of development; however, countryside necessitates the governments' subsidy to compensate the lack of resources and money. Therefore, it is a wise way for governments to give countryside more financial support to balance the development of society on one hand and preserve native culture traditions on the other hand.

In sum, it is unfair to regard cities as native culture's conservatory, which should be attributed to countryside. Moreover, with regard to its function to preserve native culture and its status quo of economy, countryside deserves more patronize from governments to ensure its development.

underseaUID: 158944

大家提点意见，3q

DigitalPigUID: 149730

en,正好写的同一篇，明天我来改~~ :)

cattiiUID: 172556

I have written the same issure, but seems there are many differences between yours and mine. Hope we can resive for each other.

underseaUID: 158944

好啊，楼上贴出来我们互相改改

pippo1983UID: 172110

没发现什么大问题，倒是找到了自己的不足。。。。。
我限时写的
Culture, which contains diet, belief, festival and language, delegates civilization of human being. If thousands of tears ago, I would agree with this issue. But now I disagree with it, because times which culture is preserved and generated by major cities has gone for ever.
In long history of human being, culture of a nation most formed in major cities, where most people and wealth congregate, which is necessary of initiating and preserving a culture. And as the progress of commerce and communication, culture spread throughout the whole nation. For instance, Chinese dietetic culture, which has continued for thousands of years, came into being in major cities of ancient China, since it was created by cooks employed by wealthy and powerful men in the nation, who often lived in major cities. After these cooks retired, they bring methods of cooking to populace, and then a widespread culture of diet formed in cities. In addition, Commerce and communication are also prosperous in these cities, so it is convenient to transmit culture to other places. By this way many people out of major cities receive culture and then it can get further perverse and progress.
But now, as the development of science and technology, communication and commerce have globalized. Any nation in the world can avoid influence of others, not only economy, but also culture, especially in their major cities. In major cities of China, such Beijing, Shanghai, Some culture has declined or even disappeared. Many people there, especially the young, prefer Coca Cola rather than traditional drink of China-tea. When you walking in street, people dressed in jeans and T-shirt are full of your eyes. Even a lot of people has celebrate for Christmas Day since they are children although they do not believe God or even know little about Christ. For them, it is only a fashion brought by opening of country. This situation also takes place in New York, Tokyo, and other major cities of world. Today most major cities has become where different races share different cultures. An effectiveness which results form it is that some culture was encroached by others. So if your want to see real Spring Festival of China, you have to go to villages, towns, or small cities, where culture are preserved better because some "disadvantage" of poor economy and laggard communication.
Even if culture is preserved and generated in some major cities, financial support still should not be granted to them. As we know, major cities are always where economy is well developed and wealth is greatly congregated. It is not necessary to give them financial support since they can satisfy themselves. Villages and towns, where some culture or convention died because of lacking money, need financial support. In western regions of China, some ancient building has been destroyed or collapsed because there is no enough money to repair them. It is impossible to image people who can not earn their living will do something to preserve or generate their culture.
To conclude, since major cities have lost most function of preserving and generating culture of a nation, government should give most financial support to villages, towns, or small cities, where culture are better preserved and generated in present time.

underseaUID: 158944

楼上的第三个论点开头有点阿狗的味道，来了一个让步，我以前也常用，但后来觉得与其写成让步还不如写成递进的，就是不仅仅因为这个，还因为。。。这样似乎更有力一些

DigitalPigUID: 149730

The speaker claims that a nation's major cities are the conservatories where its cultural traditions are generated and preserved, and therefore governments must give their major cities enough financial support to enable them to thrive. I strongly disagree with the speaker's claim. As far as I am concerned, it is hard to say that a nation's cultural traditions are primarily preserved in major cities. Moreover, government should shift their most subsidies from major cities to countryside, for the sake of the balance of whole society and better conservation of a nation's cultural convection.

As the outcome of economy and technology advancement, big cities最好改成major，big和major不太一样的 are less likely to serve as sanctuaries for cultural tradition; to the contrast, it is the nature of big cities, such as modern and advanced, that weakens and fades the influence of native cultural tradition. Suffering the impact of globalization in this world, big cities have a trend to involve into the same, that is, fraught with skyscrapers, shopping malls, limousine, and so forth. Gradually, these cities lose their characteristic features when they aim to become more international and modern. People in cities enjoy the convenience to access to the fashion of the world and communicate with foreign friends from different background. To some degree, large cities can be regarded as a stew pot which incorporate many other cultures and might create a global culture in the future. Therefore, native culture is mixed with others, become only part of the mainstream, and even is marginalized. In this case, large cities can never function as conservatories on which a nation's culture traditions can rely.

Only in countryside can a nation's cultural traditions survive and breathe their own atmosphere. Unlike big cities, countryside suffers less impact of the foreign culture and values, mostly due to its occlusion and less connection with outer world. For example, in China, there is a traditional sports event called "dragon boat", which commemorates a great ideologist and poet, Qu Yuan. It has been held every year since thousand years ago, but now, people can only watch this game in the river of some countryside. Besides, many quite special and traditional skills of handicraft are faced with the danger of extinction, in that they are now only passed down and prevailing in the countryside, and people in cities always have no time, no interest, no patience to learn such skills.个人觉得你这个例子举的不太好 Thus, only in countryside, rather than big cities, can people preserve the precious cultural traditions.

Furthermore, not only because big cities do not function to preserve and generate culture traditions, but because major cities are capable enough of ensuring their development of economy and countryside still lacks of necessary resources, governments should pay more attention to subsidize countryside for their basic needs and the conservation of cultural traditions. Industries and business can maintain the city in its healthy way of development; however, countryside necessitates the governments' subsidy to compensate the lack of resources and money. Therefore, it is a wise way for governments to give countryside more financial support to balance the development of society on one hand and preserve native culture traditions on the other hand.
这段的说理有点问题，城市为什么可以有足够的资金，没有说明白。后来的投资乡村会balance这点也没有展开完全
In sum, it is unfair to regard cities as native culture's conservatory, which should be attributed to countryside. Moreover, with regard to its function to preserve native culture and its status quo of economy, countryside deserves more patronize from governments to ensure its development.
用词已经达到一定的水平了，关键是说理不够清楚，段间的转折还不是很够，拙见。

underseaUID: 158944

谢谢楼上    可不可以再说明一下那个例子是为什么不太好：）

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