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wangwanglingUID: 134263

All of people in the world know that laws are not perfect. Some of them are just for some individuals while others are not. Then, is that reasonable for persons to choose the law which are favorable for them and disobey the bad ones?  The speaker believes so and I tend to disagree with this idea.  

It is true that law has two types of characters for different people who are determined by classes, occupations, ages, status at home, company or society and so on.  The diversity of human beings made it difficult for government to establish laws to protect all of them. For example, some laws protect children from corporal punishment by their parents.  Then the laws are just to children from being hurt by others. Yet, such laws, on the other hand, are unjust to their parents. It is very possible that parents punished their children only for their misbehaving. They hoped to give their kids a lesson rather than punished them maliciously.  However, such problems for parents can not be solved by disobeying and resisting the laws because the laws for children protection really do work when kids are hit by ill-intentioned or drunken parents. As a result, every individual should obey laws for the interest of people all over the country.       

Residents of a country should obey laws no matter what are just or unjust to them, also because it is the only way for nation to keep their social organization and strengthen their social security. It is hard to imagine how the society will be if all the residents have claims to choose the laws what they like and disobey others. If it really happened, laws would have no longer been powerful enough to restrict residents and the society would have been into confusion.

In conclusion, laws are objective which can not be changed by individuals. Even some laws are unjust to some residents; people should still comply with them for the sake of the whole country.

mack1983UID: 183345

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还有，没题目让别人怎么看？
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wangwanglingUID: 134263

No.17 There are two types of laws: just and unjust. Every individual in a society has a responsibility to obey just laws and, even more importantly, to disobey and resist unjust laws.

mack1983UID: 183345

明天帮你改好了，今天太困了，呵呵

mack1983UID: 183345

No.17 There are two types of laws: just and unjust. Every individual in a society has a responsibility to obey just laws and, even more importantly, to disobey and resist unjust laws.

All of people in the world know that laws are not perfect. Some of them are just for some individuals while others are not. Then, is that reasonable for persons to choose the law which are favorable for them and disobey the bad ones? The speaker believes so and I tend to disagree with this idea.

It is true that law has two types of characters for different people who are determined by classes, occupations, ages, status at home, company or society and so on. The diversity of human beings made it difficult for government to establish laws to protect all of them. For example, some laws protect children from corporal punishment by their parents. Then the laws are just to children from being hurt by others. Yet, such laws, on the other hand, are unjust to their parents (太牵强了吧?). It is very possible that parents punished their children only for their misbehaving. They hoped to give their kids a lesson rather than punished them maliciously. However, such problems for parents can not be solved by disobeying and resisting the laws because the laws for children protection really do work when kids are hit by ill-intentioned or drunken parents. As a result, every individual should obey laws for the interest of people all over the country.
没太看懂这段,先开始论证的是law对孩子是just,对parents不是,但原因,特别是However, such problems for parents can not be solved by disobeying and resisting the laws because the laws for children protection really do work when kids are hit by ill-intentioned or drunken parents这句把我读晕了。
这段大概要讲的是由于社会上不同背景的人而导致政府无法制定一个普适的法律。但是你的论点是人们应该遵守法律，不论是正义的还是非正义的。因此，这段对于论点没有贡献，算是跑题了。

Residents of a country should obey laws no matter what are just or unjust to them, also because it is the only way for nation to keep their social organization and strengthen their social security. It is hard to imagine how the society will be if all the residents have claims to choose the laws what they like and disobey others. If it really happened, laws would have no longer been powerful enough to restrict residents and the society would have been into confusion.
social security是想表达社会安全吧? 它的意思实际上是社会保障。

In conclusion, laws are objective which can not be changed by individuals. Even some laws are unjust to some residents; people should still comply with them for the sake of the whole country.

字数好像太少了，你要论证的问题在第三段没有展开。写作之前要先好好理解一下题目，不然跑题判得很重的。

个人观点，纯属参考。