Issue180 Society 难死了，快帮我看看吧

xiaoheUID: 162707

写了一天，脑袋都想破了也榨不出什么来，好几次恨不得把前面写的那点儿全删了，可想想这个关总得过呀。 :mad:  :mad:

烂烂的贴出来挨砖好了，免得我的脑袋被浆糊粘住了，别说结构，连论题也怀疑是不是偏了。

有谁写过的最好也贴上来参考参考吧。

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Many problems of modern society cannot be solved by laws and the legal system because moral behavior cannot be legislated.
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We can certainly attribute many problems of modern society to the unlegislated morals. However, it is incorrect to say moral behavior cannot be legislated. In my point of view, it is appropriate to say that some problems of modern society cannot be solved by laws and the legal system because SOME moral behavior cannot be legislated.

Laws and legal system have embodied most moral standards within their structures and provisions. Laws and legal systems are constituted in accordance with the moral standards of the society, and regulate people's behavior at multiple levels in a very wide range. Laws prevent and punish immoral behaviors such as robbery, stealth, violence, unfair competition, appropriation of public asset, damage of other's property... They have clear rules for people to follow and suggest the consequence of breaking the rules. They function a lot in keeping the society in a relatively peaceful, orderly and steady state.

The development of laws and legal system always closely follows the actual need of regulating various moral behaviors which are increasingly vital to the society. From The Code of Hammurabi in ancient Babylon to the huge and complicated legal system in every modern society, laws go from the punishment to injuring of human body to the liabilities in commercial activities, from protecting the rights of women and children to protecting wild animals and circumstances, from charging pocket-picking to conviction of hi-tech crime, covering almost every respect of a society. They undoubtedly provide solutions to most social problems concerning morality of behavior.

Nevertheless, laws and legal systems cannot solve every problem concerning morality of behavior, since legislation has not yet found its way into some of the behaviors. Laws punish robbery, but cannot oblige those witnesses to help fight against the robber on the spot. Laws cannot force any passers-by to jump into the water to the rescue of a drowning boy. Some time ago, I read a news reporting that an man got a sudden heart attack in a bustling shopping mall during his tour in the country which was famous for its perfect legal system, and lied on the ground for more than two hours without anybody coming up to make an inquiry, no to mention offering any help, until a patrolman came over. Isn’t it really terrible when people only follow what the laws require and become apathy to anything else?

Fortunately, besides legislation, we also have other ways, though less forceful, to help strengthen the morality of the society. We celebrate heroes who go to the rescue in some crucial moments, give merits to those who have the courage to uncover some unknown evidences to the public, and at the same time condemn those immoral behaviors. In this way, the moral standards pass on from generation to generation and gradually become the brilliant tradition of a society. And maybe they will eventually find expression in some new laws some day.

In sum, laws and legal systems are based on moral requirements and regulate most moral behaviors, but cannot substitute morals. Social problems should be solved by laws and morality standards hand in hand.

跳梁小丑UID: 157249

我帮你看看，呵呵

跳梁小丑UID: 157249

------题目------
Many problems of modern society cannot be solved by laws and the legal system because moral behavior cannot be legislated.
------正文------
We can certainly attribute many problems of modern society to the unlegislated morals. However, it is incorrect to say moral behavior cannot be legislated. In my point of view, it is appropriate to say that some problems of modern society cannot be solved by laws and the legal system because SOME moral behavior cannot be legislated. (论点不明确，根本不知道你想说啥阿，呵呵)

Laws and legal system have embodied most moral standards within their structures and provisions. Laws and legal systems are constituted in accordance with the moral standards of the society, and which regulate people's behavior at multiple levels in a very wide range. Laws prevent and punish immoral behaviors such as robbery, stealth, violence, unfair competition, appropriation of public asset, damage of other's property... They have clear rules for people to follow and suggest the consequence of breaking the rules. They function a lot in keeping the society in a relatively peaceful, orderly and steady state. (这段您只强调了法律的作用，我觉得完全偏了，因为原文并没有否认法律的作用啊，有些问题法律是解决不了的，比如说“见死不救”之类的，你就无法用法律约束人家必须这样去做，但道德却可以，道德的舆论能够鼓励提倡大家“出于道德”应该救救生命。再细点，比如说职业道德，空姐、911时候、Titanic 男士先让老人及小孩以及女士先上救生船等等，好象你后文提到了：-（)

The development of laws and legal system always closely follows the actual need of regulating various moral behaviors which are increasingly vital to the society. From The Code of Hammurabi in ancient Babylon to the huge and complicated legal system in every modern society, laws go from the punishment to injuring of human body to the liabilities in commercial activities, from protecting the rights of women and children to protecting wild animals and circumstances, from charging pocket-picking to conviction of hi-tech crime, covering almost every respect of a society. They undoubtedly provide solutions to most social problems concerning morality of behavior.

Nevertheless, laws and legal systems cannot solve every problem concerning morality of behavior, since legislation has not yet found its way into some of the behaviors. Laws punish robbery, but cannot oblige those witnesses to help fight against the robber on the spot. Laws cannot force any passers-by to jump into the water to the rescue of a drowning boy. Some time ago, I read a news reporting it is possible that an man got a sudden heart attack in a bustling shopping mall during his tour in the country which was famous for its perfect legal system, and lied on the ground for more than two hours without anybody coming up to make an inquiry, no to mention offering any help, until a patrolman came over. Isn’t it really terrible when people only follow what the laws require and become apathy to anything else?

Fortunately, besides legislation, we also have other ways, though less forceful, to help strengthen the morality of the society. We celebrate heroes who go to the rescue in some crucial moments, give merits to those who have the courage to uncover some unknown evidences to the public, and at the same time condemn those immoral behaviors. In this way, the moral standards pass on from generation to generation and gradually become the brilliant tradition of a society. And maybe they will eventually find expression in some new laws some day.

In sum, laws and legal systems are based on moral requirements and regulate most moral behaviors, but cannot substitute morals. Social problems should be solved by laws and morality standards hand in hand.

我个人的提干大致会是这样，上午我们要开会，争取下午回来把这也写写这篇文章：
1．        论点：社会问题的解决需要靠“法律”及“道德“双重手段，有点象中国政府近几年提出的“以法治国”和“以德治国”相结合
2．        承认许多问题并不能由现行的法律制度解决，需要道德的约束
3．        许多社会问题不能解决也不光是因为道德不能被立法的缘故，这是按照新东方老师所说的因果型题目的论证，就是列举它因；比如即使有了完美的法律制度，我们社会照样存在着诸多各种各样的罪行，其原因在于社会的发展导致了不公平及其它各种各样的因素

跳梁小丑UID: 157249

只是粗略想了想，要开会了
下午见文章再说哈
呵呵

xiaoheUID: 162707

谢谢你了！你的处理方法是更有针对性一些，比较集中。

我原来是这样想的：
论点：社会上有些问题不能解决是因为有些道德行为无法用法律约束，而并非所有的行为都不能约束。
1 法律就是依据道德标准而立的，约束了很多道德行为；
2 随着社会的发展，法律也在发展并根据需要约束更多的道德行为
3 然而，确实仍有些道德行为无法用法律约束
4 这时就需要强化道德意识……

唉，就觉得散乱得很。而且我脑子里也一直在想：有了法还不是有那么多人违法吗，这其实更是当今社会的主要问题呀。但我就是不知道怎么能融合到作文里去。结果提的论点也不象个什么论点，觉得象在玩文字游戏 :(

我再琢磨琢磨，你有空也写写吧，好让我学习学习。