issue40 学术类，改了好久才敢贴上来，拍我吧。

chrisssssssUID: 176321

虽然改了很久，大概还是挺烂吧。。。。。
感觉提纲就有点乱，如果实在没耐性看下去，就提纲的问题拍拍我也好啊：）
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Scholars and researchers should not be concerned with whether their work makes a contribution to the larger society. It is more important that they pursue their individual interests, however unusual or idiosyncratic those interests may seem.

对待学者和研究人员的评价不应该取决于他们的工作是否对整个社会有所贡献。而应该是看他们怎样为了自己的兴趣而奋斗，不管他们的兴趣看起来是多么不寻常或者多么特殊

提纲：

1. 追求兴趣的好处。兴趣是科学家工作的强大动力，正因为有兴趣，许多普通人眼中枯燥而艰苦的工作仍令科学家乐此不疲。

2. 但是在历史上得到崇高评价的科学家，还是对人类进步最初巨大贡献的那些。

3. 而且过于追求兴趣会浪费科学家的时间和天分。

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According to the speaker, for scholars and researchers, pursuing their individual interests is more important, and we should not evaluate them by their contribution to the world. I admit that scholars' interests are very important. In the mean while, however, it is more important that whether scientists' work is propitious to the large society when we evaluate them. Moreover, pursuing interests should also be limited to a certain extent.

Interest is the best teacher. It is also the most important motivity to scientists' research. Just the interest makes scientists willingly do their research work that are monotone and hard to general people. Fabre, for example, had been so interested in insects when he was a child that he often climbed trees and bent over ground to observe insects. After devoting all himself to the insect research, he eventually wrote “Book of Insects” which is one of the greatest books on insectology. But pay attention to that we consider him as a great scientist because of the learned value of “Book of Insects” rather than his interest on insect.

Open the human history; almost all the greatest scientists have their great contributions to the evolution of the human society. Although their experiences of pursuing interests are often praised, in a large sense what indeed endue them with high historic status is their excellent accomplishments. For instance, Alexander Fleming, who is a Scottish doctor, was interested in finding a kind of medicine to cure bacteria infection that devitalized many soldiers during the World War one. In 1928 while he was studying staphylococcus, he accidentally discovered penicillin which is the first antibiotic, making it possible for people to survive common bacteria infections; soldiers could survive their wounds instead of dying. Many other scientists were studying similar medicine under the drive of curiosity in the mean time. Regrettably, most of them failed, and silenced in the history. Thus, it is Fleming’s accomplishments make him a famous scientist.

If taking the importance of interest too far, scientists maybe waste their time and great talent. Take Newton who is one of the greatest scientists for instance, he had some great contribution when he was young, but was interested in religion when he was old. Undoubtedly he was pursuing his interest, devoting himself to the religion research, however, having no important accomplishments any more. Further more, pursuing individual interests excessively maybe bring disaster. Many bioscientists are researching some dangerous virus which even could extinct human themselves. In such case, the freedom we should grant researchers is not boundless; and severe restrictions posed by pertinent laws and regulations are needed.

To sum up, interest could impel researchers to strive to their work, but achievements decide their historic roles ultimately. Either great scientists or general researchers in college, when pursuing interests and exploring nature enjoyably, should make for society evolution as well as limit themselves reasonably. After all, it is fair that history present enjoyment to scholars who pursue individual interests and glory to scientists who make contributions to the large society.

pastryyangUID: 185913

40题
According to the speaker, for scholars and researchers, pursuing their individual interests is more important, and we should not evaluate them by their contribution to the world. I admit that scholars' interests are very important. In the mean while, however, it is more important that whether scientists' work is propitious to the large society when we evaluate them. Moreover, pursuing interests should also be limited to a certain extent.

Interest is the best teacher. It is also the most important motivity to scientists' research. Just the interest makes scientists willingly do their research work that are monotone and hard to general people. Fabre, for example, had been so interested in insects when he was a child that he often climbed trees and bent over ground to observe insects(很别扭啊). After devoting all himself to the insect research, he eventually wrote “Book of Insects” which is one of the greatest books on insectology. But pay attention to that we consider him as a great scientist because of the learned value of “Book of Insects” rather than his interest on insect.（你的主题句是兴趣是好老师，结尾句意思的转折太大了吧）

Open the human history; almost all the greatest scientists have their great contributions to the evolution of the human society. Although their experiences of pursuing interests are often praised, in a large sense what indeed endue them with high historic status is their excellent accomplishments. For instance, Alexander Fleming, who is a Scottish doctor, was interested in finding a kind of medicine to cure bacteria infection that devitalized many soldiers during the World War one. In 1928 while he was studying staphylococcus, he accidentally discovered penicillin which is the first antibiotic, making it possible for people to survive common bacteria infections; soldiers could survive their wounds instead of dying. Many other scientists were studying similar medicine under the drive of curiosity in the mean time. Regrettably, most of them failed, and silenced in the history. Thus, it is Fleming’s accomplishments make him a famous scientist.

If taking the importance of interest too far, scientists maybe waste their time and great talent. Take Newton who is one of the greatest scientists for instance, he had some great contribution when he was young, but was interested in religion when he was old. Undoubtedly he was pursuing his interest, devoting himself to the religion research, however, having no important accomplishments any more. Further more, pursuing individual interests excessively maybe bring disaster. Many bioscientists （biologists） are researching some dangerous virus which even could extinct(?)human themselves. In such case, the freedom we should grant researchers is not boundless; and severe restrictions posed by pertinent laws and regulations are needed.

To sum up, interest could impel researchers to strive to their work, but achievements decide their historic roles ultimately. Either great scientists or general researchers in college, when pursuing interests and exploring nature enjoyably, should make for society evolution as well as limit themselves reasonably. After all, it is fair that history present enjoyment to scholars who pursue individual interests and glory to scientists who make contributions to the large society.

be concerned with应该是指注意，关心之类的意思，而不是被评价吧，不知道哪种理解更合理。如果是前者，可能是有点偏题。

DendisUID: 158017

According to the speaker, for scholars and researchers, pursuing their individual interests is more important, and we should not evaluate them by their contribution to the world. I admit that scholars' interests are very important. In the mean while, however, it is more important that whether scientists' work is propitious to the larger society when we evaluate them. Moreover, pursuing interests should also be limited to a certain extent.

Interest is the best teacher. It is also the most important motivity to scientists' research. Just the interest makes scientists willingly do their research work that are monotone and hard to general people这句句子没看懂,有这种用法吗?. Fabre, for example, had been so interested in insects when he was a child that he often climbed trees and bent over ground to observe insects. After devoting all himself to the insect research, he eventually wrote “Book of Insects” which is one of the greatest books on insectology. But pay attention to that we consider him as a great scientist because of the learned value of “Book of Insects” rather than his interest on insect.又是祈使句吗?不懂

Open the human history; almost all the greatest scientists have their great contributions to the evolution of the human society. Although their experiences of pursuing interests are often praised, in a large sense what indeed endue them with high historic status is their excellent accomplishments. For instance, Alexander Fleming, who is a Scottish doctor, was interested in finding a kind of medicine to cure bacteria infection that devitalized many soldiers during the World War one用World War I或First World War感觉比较合适. In 1928 while he was studying staphylococcus, he accidentally discovered penicillin which is the first antibiotic, making it possible for people to survive common bacteria infections; soldiers could survive their wounds instead of dying. Many other scientists were studying similar medicine under the drive of curiosity in the mean time. Regrettably, most of them failed, and silenced in the history. Thus, it is Fleming’s accomplishments make him a famous scientist.

If taking the importance of interest too far, scientists maybe waste their time and great talent. Take Newton who is one of the greatest scientists for instance, he had some great contribution when he was young, but was interested in religion when he was old. Undoubtedly he was pursuing his interest, devoting himself to the religion research, however, having no important accomplishments any more. Further more, pursuing individual interests excessively maybe bring disaster. Many bioscientists are researching some dangerous virus which even could extinct human themselves. In such case, the freedom we should grant researchers is not boundless; and severe restrictions posed by pertinent laws and regulations are needed.

To sum up, interest could impel researchers to strive to their work, but achievements decide their historic roles ultimately. Either great scientists or general researchers in college, when pursuing interests and exploring nature enjoyably, should make for society evolution as well as limit themselves reasonably. After all, it is fair that history present enjoyment to scholars who pursue individual interests and glory to scientists who make contributions to the large society.

怎么讲,看得出写的很认真,赞一个先!

但是感觉每个分论点的重心有点偏离.

例如,b1,你所强调的是兴趣,但是根据这个issue题目,你应该从Scholars and researcher可能从事的都是很无聊的工作,但是他们还是pursue their individual interests,即强调两者的结合,然后才说正因为这样,才应该更注重他们的兴趣,再以后你可以说兴趣能够怎么怎么,所以怎么怎么~~~就是感觉论证的顺序有点不同,所以最终论证就不同了.

知道你曾经很认真的做修改，只是并不是所有的句子都要用长句，你要学会有一种使用语言的节奏和韵律，比如多长一短等。

最近比较忙，看得也很匆忙，如有不妥请指正！

panda2727UID: 138271

在ISSUE中出现"According to the speaker"这样的字眼是不适合的.
在为什么科学家应该对社会做出贡献的论述中，只举了历史上的例子说明，并没有逻辑上阐述原因。感觉上就论证不够有力。读起来比较淡。这样也显得楼主没有突出重点想表达的意思。

个人意见，希望我们共同努力进步。

chrisssssssUID: 176321

To  pastryyang:  

题目的意思其实到现在我也没懂，到底是说 “学者本人不应关注贡献” 还是 “社会评价学者时不应关注贡献”， 确实，关键就是be concerned with 的意思，但到现在我也不确定。我看网上几个翻译都是“社会不应关注”那种意思。到底be concerned with是关心，还是concern with 是关心啊……

To  Dendis：

呵呵写成这样也“赞一个”，谢谢鼓励啊。

你和pastryyang指出的语言问题我尽量改进，像“生物学家”和“一战”确实太业余了：）

我觉得我不只是每段论证有问题。后来我又看了一下，好像三个分论点之间也挺散。正好这两天主页上有个范文分析就是这篇，我好好看看再想想怎么改。

To：  panda2727：

"According to the speaker"似乎真的不妥。
我现在还处在凑字数阶段，凑的很乱。加上逻辑论证确实好的多，只不过好多话我能想的出来，但换不成英文，只能怪自己功夫不到了。

panda2727UID: 138271

我今天也写了这一篇，来拍拍我的吧。谢谢。