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beilongzhuhaiUID: 175441

Topic: A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic course to offer.

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       When I studied in my early age, from the elementary school to the high middle school, I had studied many different curriculum which the school determined that time. But I did not know if all the country students had to study the same national curriculum which the country determine. I had got to know its answer after I went to college. Because I knew that the whole country students had to study the same national curriculum before their college study. It was crucial to the whole education system and the whole country than the academic course which different parts of the nation determine.

      Different curriculum determined in the different parts of one nation means many students would study the different knowledge and absorb different opinions at many different things. Maybe someone would think that different views would make more progresses in many regions of our society. That may be right in the common realm. But if we insist different points of view in the important things of our country which will affect our society deeply, there will be harm to our country than benefit to it. For example, if there are many different curriculum being positive effect to different parties which had been studied by all the national country, many students will hold different opinions to politics, thus this status will be more destructive to our whole society. Therefore, this is very correct to require all the students to study the same national curriculum.

On the other hand, same curriculum special the same national curriculum also make great profit for the whole national solidarity and propel the development of the whole society. Because the same generations had owned the same understanding and culture to the whole nation and easily to hold the same idea when they meet something needing to solve. And it also benefit to be stable for the whole society. For example, we knew that Japan is a nation which focus on the national education. And the whole nation is so solidarity than the other countries of the world. Consequently, they got the significant development in the every aspects of the society even though the nation had been destroyed much after the world war two.

Thirdly, the same national curriculum will not only make more progress to the whole society, but also can strengthen the security of our country. And enhance the status of our country in the world. Now, every country in the world know that there is only one China in the world because our country construct an integrated educational system. And that system let all the students and all the people to know the same national experience and hold the same national honor.

To sum, there are so important to unify the national curriculum in the different place of our country. It is the basis of our educational system. And the educational purpose is to educate the useful persons to offer energy for our country. Therefor, the national curriculum change into be very important in that time. And we unquestionably to unify the same national curriculum even there will be many difficult in our country to execute it.

kkytUID: 188814

好好练吧,多看范文多背句式,这篇也就3分了

apolloxpUID: 156355

第一段除了最后一句以外似乎和下文无关

beilongzhuhaiUID: 175441

我会努力的。谢谢。动笔就是进步。