issue34 我的第一篇教育类

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Issue34
Instead of require students to take courses in a variety of disciplines, colleges and universities should allow students to enroll only in those courses that will help prepare them for jobs in their chosen fields. Such concentration is necessary in today’s increasingly work-oriented society.

提纲：
立场：disagree.
1.违背了教育的根本目的，即，塑造一个合格的，全面的，有知识的，具备社会责任感的公民。
2.尽管对未来的职业发展要求相关知识背景，但是一些其他领域所给我们的思考方式和知识同样也会让学生们在自己从事的行业中获益。
3.总结，工作至上的课程安排是短见的，不利于学生发展。

Some people have the opinion that the college should assign the curriculums for jobs rather than require the students to take courses in diverse disciplines. However, as far as I am concerned the statement of the issue is not reasonable because it not only neglects the ultimate purpose of the education, but as well misleads the students’ realization concerning the background of the jobs in their chosen field.

The assertion violates the important purpose of the education, that is, to form the general educated citizens, who are capable of creating opinions, and making decisions that could better for our nation. As we all know, the function of the education is to enhance the natural development of the students rather than pour information. However, the notion is near sighted that only views the schools as a place to replace the students empty brains with the information in their relevant fields determined by their future jobs. The ultimate purpose of the education is to create the well-rounded and enlightened citizens, basing on this, the college and universities should seek to bring its subjects to the perfection of their moral, intellectual and physical nature, by which the students’ ideas could become more well-rounded, and their feeling of the citizenship could be awakened.

Due to the purpose of the education, it is not difficult to understand why students majoring in physic science have to take the humanity education programs. To them, the history is not a mere of recital facts, memorizing of which could increase their credits in the final exam, but a study of the life and growth of the nations, through which the students could follow the general moral, intellectual, and economic development. And the study of that like could also bring about students’ realization that they should be responsible for the trend of thought and the actions of their times.

Undeniably, the successful career of the graduates also proves the efficient of the education, and such kind of success is one aspect of the education purpose. To get a satisfactory job and to attain the achievement in a certain level need the solid background in their chosen fields, but it never means that developing in one field only requires the knowledge and the information in the relevant field, those in other fields is useless. Actually, the courses in varied disciplines train the thought patterns of the students and enhance their ability to understand and analyze a difficult situation. The mathematics is compulsory for many majors in colleges. A few of students regard this course is tough but not conducive for their future jobs. To be honesty, the graduates would rarely be asked to give an answer to a complicated equation in a job interview or in a project they are undertaking. However, in mathematics what real needed by the students and by the future careers are the power of concentration and accuracy, and the ability of logical thinking. In addition, with the development of the society, more and more jobs need the people with the interdisciplinary background. For example, the sales manage in a software company, should possess the information of the computer science, the knowledge of the marketing, and the common sense of the psychology might be helpful as well.

To sum up, although there is an increasingly work-oriented trend in our society, the colleges and the universities as the educational institutions can never be lost in such trend. The assignment of the curriculums should be on the basis of the purpose of the education, that is, to form the enlightened and competent citizens. To require the students only enroll the course relevant in their chosen fields is nearsighted, which would do great harm to the growth of the students and influence their performance and the development in their future careers.

wuwei2668UID: 189816

说点不成熟的建议，我觉得这篇文章还是有些问题的，我觉得第二段的论述首先不够充分，结构也有点乱，层次不分明，比如将教育的目的，应将清楚点，分清条理，我觉得看了有点糊涂，怎么前面刚写了the purpose of education is….后面又出现一个目的，应该用一些连词，把他们串起来，比如another,second什么的，论证不充分的地方在于没有击中要害，没有说明仅仅根据工作安排课程如何不利于学生身心发展，比如知识结构的单一，思想的不成熟，价值观的扭曲等等太多了，这些都是成为合格社会人的大忌。还可以写如何违背了教育的目的等
    还有一点要说的是这篇文章的语言问题：
but as well misleads the students’ realization
and making decisions that [U]could better for [/U]  our nation.是什么意思？
As we all know, the function of the education is to enhance the natural development of the students rather than pour information这句话不够地道吧？
The ultimate purpose of the education is to create the well-rounded and enlightened citizens, basing on this, the college and universities should seek to [U]bring its subjects to the perfection of [/U]  their moral, intellectual and physical nature, by which the students’ ideas could become more well-rounded, and their feeling of the citizenship could be awakened.这句话也有语病，尤其是划线的，perfection 没使完美的意思吧？
And the study of that like could also bring about students’ realization that they should be responsible for the trend of thought and [U]the actions of their times.不太明白[/U] Undeniably, the successful career of the graduates also proves the [U]efficient [/U]  of the education, and such kind of success is one aspect of the [U]education purpose[/U] 不用说了吧？
However, in mathematics what real needed by the students and by the future careers are the power of concentration and accuracy, and the ability of logical thinking. [U]What is needed[/U] 可能才对吧
For example, the sales manage assignment of the curriculums should be on the basis of the purpose of the education, that is, to form the enlightened and competent citizense in a software company, should possess the information of the computer science, the knowledge of the marketing, and the common sense of the psychology might be helpful as well.   Manangement好点，这好象就是job releva :) nt courses吧

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谢谢两位对我的文章的指点。
根据你们的提示，我再读了自己的文章，第二段确实有点乱了。wuwei2668说的应该通过这种课程设置的弊端带来的危害性来展开论述，我采用的是通过按照教育目标应该采取多样化的课程设置这样的方式论述的。而感觉在这种驳论性的文章中，用wuwei2668的方式应该更切合一些吧。
我想谈一下我的思路吧。首先我是丛教育的目的这个角度出发，想站在一个比较高的高度来谈论这个问题，单一的课程设置是和教育的目的相违背的，至于怎么违背，我确实论证的不太深入。第二个出发点，我是想丛多方面的课程设置对未来的职业影响这个角度出发的，领域外的学科带给我们的不仅是一种思维方式，其知识背景对于我们所从事的交叉领域的多元化的职业更是非常重要。这里我用了两个例子，一个是数学思想对我们的影响，以及做一个软件公司销售经理所需要的知识支持。

思路基本就是这样了，大家也谈一下你们的思路吧，抛砖引玉，呵呵。有很多题目我都理解的不是很深入，真头疼。

ZHGsunny，我在你的帖子里和你继续讨论吧，谢谢你。

KANG-KINGUID: 190268

总的感觉写得还行，就是感觉句子比较普通，平淡无奇，没有一个句气势磅礴的句子让人读过后立即感觉耳目一新。
我认为几百字一篇文章，至少应该出现一两句经典句子供读者品味。
继续努力！