Issue147 第9篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！

不怕开水烫的猪UID: 187893

Issue147  第9篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！

这可是Rikku得来的机警啊，谢一下先！大家拍吧！

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Tradition and modernization are incompatible. One must choose between them.
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What is the relationship between tradition and modernization? Some people believe that they are mutually exclusive and we have to choose between them. In my opinion, however, in most cases, tradition and modernization are beneficial to each other.

Everyday experience tells us that traditions are always an indispensable part of modern life. Each nation in the world has its traditional festivals, some of which last thousands of years and were not interrupted by the process of modernization. Take Chinese Mid-autumn Day for example; nowadays, no matter in rural area or large cities with high degree of modernization, people consider it as an important affair in a year. Also, festivals have their special meaning in such a rapid changing society. On Mid-Autumn Day, all members of a family will come together to celebrate peace and happiness. It functions like a catalyst to bring harmony to this competitive world. In west countries, Christmas Day and Thanksgiving Day are also lasting traditions which cannot be separated from people’s life.

In fact, no evident boundary exists between tradition and modernization. Tradition is accumulation of a series of modernization in different periods in the history, while modernization nowadays would become the tradition in future society. Usually some old traditions reappear in modern society, and we cannot distinguish them from new fashions. For example, on the conference of APEC (Asian-Pacific Economic Cooperation) at Shanghai in 2001, several political leaders attended the meeting with Chinese traditional clothes. After the conference, the traditional Tang suit had been the top popular and style in China all the year round. Moreover, in everyday life, people seldom purposely separate modernization from tradition. For instance, although the spread of Internet enable us to communicate with other by E-mail conveniently, many people still prefer traditional ways such as writing letters to their friends, because some merits of tradition cannot be replaced by modernization yet.

Furthermore, modernization provides effective techniques to protect traditions from being extinct.
Despite of influence of globalization, there are still many unknown rituals and traditions scattered in rural areas. These cultural treasures would not escape from the destiny of extinction without being accessed and understood by the public. Luckily, media provide them the opportunities to present their particular traditions before the eyes of people all over the world and warrant their survival. Also, advanced technique plays a crucial role in remedy some ancient buildings which stand for some specific traditions.  

To sum up, tradition and modernization are not incompatible. One the contrary, they compliment each other. Traditions have become a necessary composition of modern life, and modernization gives us techniques to preserve tradition. The combination of tradition and modernization serves to the well-being of modern life and propel the development of the society.

coolblazeverestUID: 189260

先站再学！

ZHGsunnyUID: 185312

1:开头和结尾很好，值得学习！
2:Everyday experience tells （有点别扭，写成exprience constantly tells us that 如何？）us that traditions are always an indispensable part of modern life.
3:Tradition is accumulation of a series of modernization in different periods in the history, while (while? 应该是similarly? )modernization nowadays would become the tradition in future society.

coolblazeverestUID: 189260

------题目------
Tradition and modernization are incompatible. One must choose between them.
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What is the relationship between tradition and modernization? Some people believe that they are mutually exclusive and we have to choose between them. In my opinion, however, in most cases, tradition and modernization are beneficial to each other.开头简洁明了，赞！

Everyday experience tells us that traditions are always an indispensable part of modern life.ts紧扣题目，good Each nation in the world has its traditional festivals, some of which lastappear thousands of years and were not interrupted by the process of modernization. Take Chinese Mid-autumn Day for example; nowadays, no matter in rural area or large cities with high degree of modernization, people consider it as an important affair in a year. Also, festivals have their special meaning in such a rapid changing society. On Mid-Autumn Day, all members of a family will come together to celebrate peace and happiness. It functions like a catalyst to bring harmony to this competitive world. In west countries, Christmas Day and Thanksgiving Day are also lasting traditions which cannot be separated from people’s life.论证充分，用节日具体化tradition，很贴切啊

In fact, no evident boundary exists between tradition and modernization. Tradition is anaccumulation of a series of modernization in different periods in the history, while modernization nowadays would become the tradition in future society. Usually some old traditions reappear in modern society, and we cannot distinguish them from new fashions. For example, on the conference of APEC (Asian-Pacific Economic Cooperation) at Shanghai in 2001, several political leaders attended the meeting with Chinese traditional clothes. After the conference, the traditional Tang suit had been the top popular and style in China all the year round..例子很经典! Moreover, in everyday life, people seldom purposely separate modernization from tradition. For instance, although the spread of Internet enable us to communicate with otherothers by E-mail conveniently, many people still prefer traditional ways such as writing letters to their friends, because some merits of tradition cannot be replaced by modernization yet.
实际上这个body论述两方面的内容吧，tradition&modernization的融合，和tradition不能被modernization代替，是不是应该分为两段呢？
Furthermore, modernization provides effective techniques to protect traditions from being extinct.
Despite of influence of globalization, there are still many unknown rituals and traditions scattered in rural areas. These cultural treasures would not escape from the destiny of extinction without being accessed and understood by the public. Luckily, media provide them the opportunities to present their particular traditions before the eyes of people all over the world and warrant their survival. Also, advanced technique plays a crucial role in remedy some ancient buildings which stand for some specific traditions.

To sum up, tradition and modernization are not incompatible. OneOn the contrary, they compliment each other. Traditions have become a necessary composition of modern life, and modernization gives us techniques to preserve tradition. The combination of tradition and modernization serves to the well-being of modern life and propel the development of the society.
习作很优秀，语言很论证都很到位，我也没什么太好的修改意见，只有学习的份了

不怕开水烫的猪UID: 187893

谢谢两位啊！

新年快乐！

阳光下的钥匙UID: 190706

很经典的一句，蕴含哲理Tradition is accumulation of a series of modernization in different periods in the history, while modernization nowadays would become the tradition in future society.

freckleforeverUID: 184710

Also, advanced technique plays a crucial role in remedy (remedying)some ancient buildings which stand for some specific traditions
写得不错，值得学习。

zhangsx_1982UID: 176926

to 猪猪：看来我想改都没份了，看完之后只有一种感觉－就是写的不错。值得学习

pdyhcUID: 177332

最初由 pdyhc 发布
[B]In my opinion, however, in most cases, tradition and modernization are beneficial to each other

这句话的位置决定它的地位应该是全文“舵主”，总论点地位。但是?.

以下省略...... [/B]

我范了个严重错误，竟然把里面的tradition 想成了history一类的东西。不知道哪跟弦在作怪

pdyhcUID: 177332

Everyday experience tells us that traditions are always an indispensable part of modern life.Each nation in the world has its traditional festivals, some of which lastappear thousands of years and were not interrupted by the process of modernization.[如果能够进一步挖掘处传统的文化价值就更好了。比如，传统经过长时间的积淀，形成了一种文化，成了人们一种心理寄托。另外，后面提到的节日我这里一并说了。一个民族的传统节日会增强他们的凝聚力。人们的日常生活总是太平淡，很多东西在平淡的生活中都被吞噬和遗忘了。但是，节日提供了一个回想起这些平时遗忘了的东西的机会。比如，春节对全球华人的感召力。在春节，中华民族的凝聚力也会突然增强并凸现出来] .

接着掰上面这些东西对modernization的好处。比如，民族凝聚力的增强可以加快现代化发展…………



In fact, no evident boundary exists between tradition and modernization.[针对这个ts，还有一个好思路就是在新形式下，很多tradition以新面貌出现，比如国画通过internet发表] ……

pdyhcUID: 177332

147 Tradition and modernization are incompatible. One must choose between them.
限时成功！！45分钟内写完，还检查一遍.high!!!

哇哇，刚刚检查字数，虽然限时完成了，可是才394字也

一限时，很多好的思想就没有时间来得及表达了，尽是些平淡的说理。唉。还要加油。不管怎么样，限时成功了

Tradition, the refined form and the accumulation of human’s past life, always parallels with modernization. Something happening today may become a tradition tomorrow. Tradition may do some supplement to modernization under some certain conditions or in some unexpected circumstances. Both tradition and modernization become indispensable part of people’s life and constitute the colorful world together.

Tradition, a custom may be formed over hundreds or thousands years, may contain abundant cultural connotation and meet people’s inner mental needs. Tradition can be regarded as a kind of culture accumulated over extended period among certain groups of people. They are vital for people for it may reflect people’s mental requirements to much extent. Thanksgiving Day, a traditional festival in U.S. shows U.S. people’s thanks to God’s generosity and care. It has become an indispensable part in American life. Whatever the level of modernization is, such tradition is hard to abandon for it roots deeply in American culture. （感觉自己举了例子，却没论述到位。很烂拉。主要是时间问题）

Someone asserts that tradition and modernization are incompatible. He or she may come to such conclusion from the observation that modernization tends to compete some place with tradition. For example, new buildings may squeeze the available lands for building museums, which may be used to display items that related to tradition. Modern busy life may make people unable to spend an important festival with relatives. However, such phenomena do not mean that tradition and modernization are incompatible. Otherwise it may run to the contrary facts. People’ s concerns on such topics and their efforts made to look for balance between the tradition and modernization reveal their needs for both tradition and modernization exactly.（需要进一步深入，时间不允许啊5555555555）

Furthermore, in certain levels, modernization and tradition even mutually supplement each other. Modern technology may provide means to protect tradition in some circumstances. For example, the discover of electricity made it possible to decorate the Christmas tree with beautiful colorful lights and make Christmas Festival more interesting. Report on developed media may present an old tradition on the verge of extinction that is only kept in rural area and kept unknown from most people to the world, and then the treasurable tradition may be known by many people and protected from extinction.（自己感觉就这段有点味道，还行）   

In one word, both tradition, as a carrier of culture, and modernization, as a developmental trend, are indispensable parts of people’s life. In certain levels, they are rather mutual supplement of each other than exclusive objects.

大家认为，限时情况下，这篇烂作能得几分a？