issue 127 (prepare for 207--7)

九月爱上乒乓球UID: 151821

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阿莱UID: 190806

127."Facts are stubborn things. They cannot be altered by our wishes, our inclinations, or the dictates of our passions."看到这个题目 我觉得facts这个概念是一个值得澄清的概念 或者可以说是case by case分析的一个依据

Different people have different ideas about facts, some assert that facts are stubborn things and cannot be changed, while others hold that facts can be altered by people's wishes and inclinations or the dictates of persons' passions. In my opinion, some facts can be changed with the help of contemporary high-tech to meet people's needs while others, especially some history facts, cannot be altered.平衡观点倒是出来了 不过感觉论点比较浅 太普通了；不是说论点的方向问题 是论点的陈述方式 比如说这个facts为什么有的能改变有的不能呢？这个在你的body段既然提到了 我感觉还是把论点中的some具体化一些 对应起来会比较好

Today, with the rocketing? development of technology, people can not only savor convenient and comfortable lives, but also change some facts by their strong wishes and inclinations. These phenomena, however为什么however?, are also great impulses of societies' evolution. Due to the wishes of pursuing longevity, people have done enormous work and research about modern medicine. Now mature medical treatments have already changed some facts. For example, doctors have already conquered tuberculosis, which was defined as incurable disease several years ago, so Facts to the patients are not death but hope. Due to the wishes and inclinations of wealth, similarly, scientist now can change weather, which is absolutely facts and cannot be altered before, to help farmers enrich their crops and make more money. Due to the wish of democratic and free society, human beings finally change the facts that rights and fortune are only belonging to kings and nobilities in feudal societies, and win their own benefit and build up democratic and equal societies in many countries. From what I state above, we can see that sometimes facts cannot be defined as stubborn things and can be altered by people's wishes and inclination or passions.
例子是举出来了 但是感觉例子归类起来特征不是很明显 肺结核的例子 过去它是绝症其实是一个论断 局限于医学知识科技水平等 从表现上来看等同于某种事实 这种事实随着发展而发生了改变 看得出来 这种事实本身是一种落后的状态 是可以改变的

Moreover, if people think facts are stubborn things, they will lose passions and ambition for a glorious future跑题了吧？而且是这么一个long body. Just imagine that a person who was born in a poor family, if he always keeps in mind that poverty, hungry, ignorance and discrimination are facts which cannot be changed, he will absolutely loose encouragement to change these dissatisfaction things and be used to such live. So what's the result? People who are rich and authorities will rule forever, and people who are poor and misery will suffer from sadness from one generation to another. All of these should be attribute to the wrong concept people believed--- facts are stubborn and cannot be altered by their wishes and inclinations and passions. After all, these are undesired for our society and the only solution is that people should challenge dissatisfaction facts and make changes of them.

Admittedly, as far as history facts are concern, people should not try to change these history events and facts to meet their needs. historic facts归类一下应该叫做确实发生的事情和事件 但是跟body1来做同一级别的讨论来说数量级就小了 可以作为其中的一个方面或者例子。另外 用admittedly开头不太恰当 你的论点是平衡论点的话 body叙述怎么能有明显偏向呢？两个方面大可以用on the other hand来说嘛！Recently, I read in the newspaper that some Japanese historians fabricated that Japan didn't invade China; the war between China and Japan was not result from Japanese government’s mistake and barbarity. Obviously, in order to attain some base purpose, Japanese have tampered history facts, which should not be altered and must be clearly remembered by both Chinese and Japanese. This action has evoked great angry in China, and I think those historians must keep in mind the facts and take the responsibility of their immoral actions.例子很爽阿

In sum, whether facts can or cannot be changed, should be considered in a case-by-case basis. For one thing, people should try hard to alter those unwilling facts, for another, people should be honesty to history facts even those facts betray their wish and inclination. 去看看追星剑特训的case by case 会有帮助 加油

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平衡观点倒是出来了 不过感觉论点比较浅 太普通了；不是说论点的方向问题 是论点的陈述方式 比如说这个facts为什么有的能改变有的不能呢？这个在你的body段既然提到了 我感觉还是把论点中的some具体化一些 对应起来会比较好
很对阿！这篇文章是我的第七篇，写后面几篇时我体会到了全文ts应该把具体要论述的领域列出来回比较醒目。
改：:p Different people have different ideas about facts, some assert that facts are stubborn things and cannot be changed, while others hold that facts can be altered by people's wishes and inclinations or the dictates of person's passions. I concede some history facts cannot be changed while some used to be thought as facts of scientific realm and social realm  have already been altered for the great revolution of high-tech and people’s needs of happy live.
这篇我想写成大负小正，不是平衡的观点。

Today, with the rocket development of technology, people can not only savor convenient and comfortable lives, but also change some facts by their strong wishes and inclinations. 如果这是一个ts，不要用not only...but also...这是一个并列，前后就都要论证呢，但是之要说明可以被change就可以了，前面的话多余。These phenomenas, however, are also great impulses ofto societies' evolution.为什么是however？和also矛盾啊
改：:p Our ancestors consider some phenomena as facts due to the limitation of techniques and knowledge. Now, we have change such kind of facts by our wishes and inclinations.


These phenomenas, however, are also great impulses ofto societies' evolution.为什么是however？和also矛盾啊
nod,去掉however.


b2的确是跑题了，又想了一下，可以把b1最后一个例子扩展成一段。说明in the social realm, facts can also be changed.


若是写成大正小负的观点b3应该还是用让步把

再次感谢九月和阿莱！:p