issue195 痛苦写后改了一个小时，政治类

haiyaUID: 187989

！！改好的文章见楼下，这里是第一稿喔

终于把政治类老题扫掉了
好难啊，虽然提纲写好后限时写的，但是第一稿虽然时间很充裕，但是才挤了476字
希望大家评评

195"The goal of politics should not be the pursuit of an ideal, but rather the search for common ground and reasonable consensus."
政治的目标不应该是追求一个理想，而是寻找普遍合理的大多数人的意见
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As the art to balance various benefits of different existing groups, the politics maintains the stability of the society, which demands the politics accordant with common ground and reasonable consensus. However, the role of ideal in the political activities should not be ignored in history, present even future. Otherwise, we will be bogged down in confusion about where we shall go.

Obviously, the common ground and reasonable consensus should be concerned on a great degree. It is the basis of the society as well as the meaning for its existence. Regime, which is the symbol of the politics, comes from the partial sacrifice of the public’s rights. As Rousseau, an outstanding philosopher once illustrated in the "Social Contract", the public give the rights out to a form of organization in order to eliminate confliction and collision and raise the life level higher. They sign a contract with the organization, which is government, legislature or president today. Thus any policy or strategy that is constituted by these organizations should gain the confirmation of the common. Otherwise, the power is in threats even might be pushed over.

However, ideal and the common is not mutually exclusive. Ideal is the source of the force to pave the road for running wheels of the society. The human need reasonable ideal to pursuit the truth, goodness and beauty, which are recognized by all persons despite the difference in religion, skin and nations. In the process to quest for them, we have made a great stride by stride. Looking back into the history, thanks for the ideal of freedom, the slavers in United States got rid of the compression. Thanks for the ideal of communist, China beat the invader, Japan, and was able to rebuild the home. Not only for the individual but also for the whole nation, as long as it never give up the ideal, it is promising and never be fought down by obstacles.

Moreover, the ideal lights the way. Future is unknown while ideal is Polaris in such darkness. The common sometimes commit the blindness as well as focus on the short-time benefits. Even if their idea is harmless to society, we prefer to choose some long-time program for a bigger good. It is guided by no one but ideal. Hence, aiming for the ideal, the organization in power produces policies and strategies efficiently. In China, the supreme ideal is to realize the Communist. Thus, the constitution of all policies and strategies should not betray the ideal. Owing to the definitive aim, the development of China has prevented much crooked road and been faster and faster. Additionally, idea also links the common to the nation. They are consolidated together to congregate all force on one point. Without the ideal, they might seems as a pile of sand.

Last but not least, the ideal is certainly in harmony with the common ground and reasonable consensus. Otherwise, impractical ideal is a castle in the air and engender adversities. It was Saddam's "Arab Empire", for example, that push the public into the abyss.

Once there is a masterpiece impressed on me deeply. In that painting, a bright red flag is held by a woman, whom the common are willing to follow. Without the common, a flag of ideal means nothing in the war field. Without the flag of ideal, the common suffer for being lost in the war. Like the painting's name-" fighting for the freedom", this is the goal of politics- to pursuit the reasonable ideal which the common intend to follow.

ryanqUID: 154025

第二段：
Obviously, the common ground and reasonable consensus should be concerned on(to) a great degree. It is the basis of the society as well as the meaning for its existence. .....
第三段：
However, ideal and the common is not mutually exclusive. Ideal is the source of the force to pave the road for running wheels of the society. The human need reasonable ideal to pursuit(笔误吧) the truth, goodness and beauty, which are recognized by all persons despite the difference in religion, skin and nations(nationality?). In the process to quest for them, we have made a great stride by stride(不能酱紫用吧). Looking back into the history, thanks for the ideal of freedom, the slavers in United States got rid of the compression. Thanks for the ideal of communist(communism), China beat the invader, Japan, and was able to rebuild the home. Not only for the individual but also for the whole nation, as long as it never give up the ideal, it is promising and never be fought down by obstacles.
第四段：
Moreover, the ideal lights the way. Future is unknown while ideal is Polaris in such darkness. The common sometimes commit the blindness as well as focus on the short-time benefits. Even if their idea is harmless to society, we prefer to choose some long-time program for a bigger good. It is guided by no one but ideal. Hence, aiming for(at) the ideal, the organization in power produces policies and strategies efficiently. In China, the supreme ideal is to realize the Communist(adj->n). Thus, the constitution of all policies and strategies should not betray the ideal. Owing to the definitive aim, the development of China has prevented much crooked road and been faster and faster. Additionally, ideal also links the common to the nation. They are consolidated together to congregate all force on one point. Without the ideal, they might seems as a pile of sand.


“the” 用的可以再少些.

beilongzhuhaiUID: 175441

195"The goal of politics should not be the pursuit of an ideal, but rather the search for common ground and reasonable consensus."
政治的目标不应该是追求一个理想，而是寻找普遍合理的大多数人的意见
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As the art to balance various benefits of different(kinds) existing groups, the politics maintains the stability of the society, which demands the politics accordant with common ground and reasonable consensus. However, the role of ideal in the political activities should not be ignored in history, present even future. Otherwise, we will(would) be bogged down in confusion about where we shall(should) go.立场分明，观点明确。

Obviously, the common ground and reasonable consensus should be concerned on（with？会不会好一点呢。） a great degree. It is the basis of the society as well as the meaning for its existence. Regime, which is the symbol of the politics, comes from the partial sacrifice of the public’s rights. As Rousseau, an outstanding philosopher once illustrated in the "Social Contract", the public（s） give the rights out to a form of organization in order to eliminate confliction and collision and raise the life level higher. They sign a contract with the organization, which is government, legislature or president today. Thus any policy or strategy that is constituted by these organizations should gain the confirmation of the common. Otherwise, the power is in threats even might be pushed over.（觉得这段分析的有点乱，好像涉及的内容有点虚的感觉！）

However, ideal and the common ground isare not mutually exclusive. Ideal is the source of the force to pave the road for running wheels of the society. The human need reasonable ideal to pursuit the truth, goodness and beauty, which are recognized by all persons despite the difference in religion, skin and nations. In the process to quest for them, we have made a great stride by stride. Looking back into the history, thanks for the ideal of freedom, the slavers in United States got rid of the compression. Thanks for the ideal of communist, China beat the invader, Japan, and was able to rebuild the home. Not only for the individual but also for the whole nation, as long as it never give up the ideal, it is promising and never be fought down by obstacles.

Moreover, the ideal lights the way. Future is unknown while ideal is Polaris in such darkness. The common sometimes commit the blindness as well as focus on the short-time benefits. Even if their idea is harmless to society, we prefer to choose some long-time program for a bigger good. It is guided by no one but ideal. Hence, aiming for the ideal, the organization in power produces policies and strategies efficiently. In China, the supreme ideal is to realize the Communist. Thus, the constitution of all policies and strategies should not betray the ideal. Owing to the definitive aim, the development of China has prevented much crooked road and been faster and faster. Additionally, idea also links the common to the nation. They are consolidated together to congregate all force on one point. Without the ideal, they might seems as a pile of sand.

Last but not least, the ideal is certainly in harmony with the common ground and reasonable consensus. Otherwise, impractical ideal is a castle in the air and engender adversities. It was Saddam's "Arab Empire", for example, that push the public into the abyss.

Once there is a masterpiece impressed on me deeply. In that painting, a bright red flag is held by a woman, whom the common are willing to follow. Without the common, a flag of ideal means nothing in the war field. Without the flag of ideal, the common suffer for being lost in the war. Like the painting's name-" fighting for the freedom", this is the goal of politics- to pursuit the reasonable ideal which the common intend to follow.


感觉你的文章写的不错，语言好，就是第二段觉得有点乱，引该着重写好一个方面！同时举例时要注意读者的反应，不是每个外国读者都是同意“共产主义的”！

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mack1983UID: 183345

195"The goal of politics should not be the pursuit of an ideal, but rather the search for common ground and reasonable consensus."
政治的目标不应该是追求一个理想，而是寻找普遍合理的大多数人的意见
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As the art to balance various benefits of different existing groups, the politics maintains the stability of the society, which demands the politics accordant with common ground and reasonable consensus. However, the role of ideal in the political activities should not be ignored in history, present even future. Otherwise, we will be bogged down in confusion about where we shall go.

Obviously, the common ground and reasonable consensus should be concerned on a great degree 请教一下，什么是on a great degree. It is the basis of the society as well as the meaning for its existence. Regime, which is the symbol of the politics, comes from the partial sacrifice of the public’s rights. As Rousseau, an outstanding philosopher once illustrated in the "Social Contract", the public give the rights out to a form of organization in order to eliminate confliction and collision and raise the life level higher. They sign a contract with the organization, which is government, legislature or president today. Thus any policy or strategy that is constituted by these organizations should gain the confirmation of the common. Otherwise, the power is in threats even might be pushed over.

However, ideal and the common is not mutually exclusive. Ideal is the source of the force to pave the road for running wheels of the society. The human need reasonable ideal to pursuit the truth, goodness and beauty, which are is recognized by all persons despite of the difference in religion, skin and nations. In the process to quest for them, we have made a great stride by stride. Looking back into the history, thanks for the ideal of freedom, the slavers in United States got rid of the compression 应该用slavery好些. Thanks for the ideal of communist communism, China beat the invader, Japan, and was able to rebuild the home中国的这个例子并不十分恰当，我觉得，能不能取得胜利跟是不是共产主义理想关系不大. Not only for the individual but also for the whole nation, as long as it never give up the ideal, it is promising and never be fought down fight down 我查金山是克服的意思，怎么能说被困难克服呢？ by obstacles.

Moreover, the ideal lights the way. Future is unknown while ideal is Polaris in such darkness. The common sometimes commit the blindness as well as focus on the short-time benefits. Even if their idea is harmless to society, we prefer to choose some long-time program for a bigger good. It is guided by no one but ideal. Hence, aiming for the ideal, the organization in power produces policies and strategies efficiently. In China, the supreme ideal is to realize the Communist. Thus, the constitution of all policies and strategies should not betray the ideal. Owing to the definitive aim, the development of China has prevented much crooked road and been faster and faster 这个例子也不太恰当，想想三反五反，想象文化大革命就知道了. Additionally, idea also links the common to the nation. They are consolidated together to congregate all force on one point. Without the ideal, they might seems as a pile of sand.

Last but not least, the ideal is 应该是should be certainly in harmony with the common ground and reasonable consensus. Otherwise, impractical ideal is a castle in the air and engender adversities. It was Saddam's "Arab Empire", for example, that push the public into the abyss.

Once there is a masterpiece impressed on 去掉on me deeply. In that painting, a bright red flag is held by a woman, whom the common are willing to follow. Without the common, a flag of ideal means nothing in the war field. Without the flag of ideal, the common suffer for from being lost in the war. Like the painting's name-" fighting for the freedom", this is the goal of politics- to pursuit the reasonable ideal which the common intend to follow.
最后这段精彩，学习中。。。。。。

pherUID: 192036

As the art to balance various benefits of different existing groups, the politics maintains the stability of the society, which demands the politics accordant with common ground and reasonable consensus. However, the role of ideal in the political activities should not be ignored in history, present even future. Otherwise, we will be bogged down in confusion about where we shall go.（我觉得这个we的句子用的有些chinglish，句子的主语还是用politics比较好）

Obviously, the common ground and reasonable consensus should be concerned on a great degree（？？）. It is the basis of the society as well as the meaning for its existence. Regime, which is the symbol of the politics, comes from the partial sacrifice of the public’s rights. As Rousseau, an outstanding philosopher once illustrated in the "Social Contract", the public give the rights out to a form of organization in order to eliminate confliction and collision and raise the life level higher. They sign a contract with the organization, which is government, legislature or president today. Thus any policy or strategy that is constituted by these organizations should gain the confirmation of the common. Otherwise, the power is in threats even might be pushed over.

However, ideal and the common is not mutually exclusive. Ideal is the source of the force to pave the road for running wheels of the society. （这句话意思很赞，不过，是不是有出处？还是你自己的origin？如果是前者，那么，用吧！如果是后者，我觉得可以改进点，句中的force做何解，指代什么呢？不如改成“ideal provide the power to pave the road of politics for ruuning wheels of the society”）The human need reasonable ideal to pursuit the truth, goodness and beauty, which are recognized by all persons despite the difference in religion, skin and nations. In the process to quest for them, we have made a great stride by stride. Looking back into the history, thanks for the ideal of freedom, the slavers in United States got rid of the compression （这个例子不如改成美国人民反抗英殖民者的压迫而独立，因为slavers反抗的结果是什么呢？你并没有说到）. Thanks for the ideal of communist, China beat the invader, Japan, and was able to rebuild the home. Not only for the individual but also for the whole nation, as long as it never give up the ideal, it is promising and never be fought down by obstacles.（中国的共产主义例子不举为妙）

Moreover, the ideal lights the way. Future is unknown while ideal is Polaris in such darkness. The common sometimes commit the blindness as well as focus on the short-time benefits. Even if their idea is harmless to society, we prefer to choose some long-time program for a bigger good.（？？） It is guided by no one but ideal. Hence, aiming for the ideal, the organization in power produces policies and strategies efficiently. In China, the supreme ideal is to realize the Communist. Thus, the constitution of all policies and strategies should not betray the ideal. Owing to the definitive aim, the development of China has prevented much crooked road and been faster and faster. Additionally, idea also links the common to the nation. They are consolidated together to congregate all force on one point. Without the ideal, they might seems as a pile of sand.（同样，尽量不要举共产主义的例子，可以举美国独立的例子）

Last but not least, the ideal is certainly in harmony with the common ground and reasonable consensus. Otherwise, impractical ideal is a castle in the air and engender adversities. It was Saddam's "Arabian Empire", for example, that push the public into the abyss.

Once there is a masterpiece impressed on me deeply. In that painting, a bright red flag is held by a woman, whom the common are willing to follow.（这句话不如改成一个从句，once a masterpiece showed, which impressed me deeply, a.... ） Without the common, a flag of ideal means nothing in the war field. Without the flag of ideal, the common suffer for being lost in the war. Like the painting's name-" fighting for the freedom", this is the goal of politics- to pursuit the reasonable ideal which the common intend to follow.

（文章写的不错，除了不少拼写错误何那两个例子）

haiyaUID: 187989

to mark1983
1. on a great degree,是我笔误。因为以前这个地方一直写错，这次又习惯的写出来了。是 to a great degree,在很大程度上而言
2.ffight down是自己一想出来的。。。当时写的时候就想着是打倒，也就没查。改成beat down。
3。政治的真的写得很不舒服。。。书到用时方恨少。硬着头皮就举中国了。。。。还要努力多积累点东西。

谢谢


to 亲爱的pher,
谢谢你忙着实验还帮我改，我等会再订正一下，再贴上来。
btw那句被你赞的话是自己想出来的，因为自己看到一个pave the path of的词组，就一直想找机会用，然后就想到历史的车轮啊：p，又要chinglish了。。。。--------------------------------------------------------

还有谢谢ryang和beilongzhuhai，我会回拍你们的文章的。
前几天看到别人评别人的文章，就说the用的多，然后我也发现自己老是想用定冠词来指定一下。。。

多谢多谢！

pherUID: 192036

补充一下，最后那个例子中的painting我记得看过的，画面的主体的是一个上身赤膊的女人在战场上，领着一帮战士。但是我记得那画是反映法国大革命的，so女主角拿的可能应该不是红旗，而是三色旗，我手头没有图片，你可以看看有没有这张照片，确认一下。另外，这副画也算名画了，写出作者的名字，会显得更authoritative一点。

haiyaUID: 187989

As the art to balance various benefits of different existing groups, the politics maintains the stability of the society, which demands the politics accordant with common ground and reasonable consensus. However, the role of ideal in the political activities should not be ignored in history, present even future. Otherwise, politics will be bogged down in confusion about where it should go.

Obviously, the common ground and reasonable consensus should be concerned to a great extent. It is the basis of the society as well as the meaning for its existence. Regime, which is the symbol of the politics, comes from partial sacrifice of the public’s rights. As Rousseau, an outstanding philosopher once illustrated in the "Social Contract", the public give the rights out to a form of organization in order to eliminate conflictions and collisions and raise the life level higher. They sign a contract with the organization, which is government, legislature or president today. Thus any policy or strategy that is constituted by these organizations should gain the confirmation of the common. Otherwise, the power is in threats even might be pushed over.

However, ideal and the common are not mutually exclusive. Ideal is the source of the power to pave the road of politics for running wheels of the society. The human need reasonable ideal to pursuit the truth, goodness and beauty, which are recognized by all persons despite the difference in religion, skin and nationality. In the process to quest for them, we have made a great stride by stride. Looking back into the history, thanks for the ideal of freedom, which was brought by Mahatma Ganhdi, the India got rid of the colonial govern reign of the Great Britain by whole citizens’ endeavor. Not only for the individual but also for the whole nation, as long as it never give up the ideal, it is promising and never be beaten down by obstacles.

Moreover, the ideal lights the way. Future is unknown while ideal is Polaris in such darkness. The common sometimes commit the blindness as well as focus on the short-time benefits. Even if their idea is harmless to society, we prefer to choose some long-time program for greater profits. It is guided by no one but ideal. Hence, aiming for the ideal, the organization in power produces policies and strategies efficiently. In United States, In the United States, the supreme ideal is freedom and equality and justice. Thus, the constitution of all policies and strategies should not betray the ideal. Owing to the definitive aim, each individual has the free space to realize their dream. Additionally, idea also links the common to the nation. They are consolidated together to congregate all force on one point. Without the ideal, they seem as a pile of sand.

Last but not least, the ideal is certainly in harmony with the common ground and reasonable consensus. As Bill Moyers once said, “Ideas are great arrows, but there has to be a bow. And politics is the bow of idealism.” Otherwise, impractical ideal is a castle in the air and engender adversities. It was Saddam's "Arabian Empire", for example, that push the public into the abyss.

Once a masterpiece showed, which impressed me deeply, a bright three-color flag is held by a woman, whom the common are willing to follow. Without the common, a flag of ideal means nothing in the war field. Without the flag of ideal, the common suffer for being lost in the war. Like the painting's name-" Liberity leading the people", this is the goal of politics- to pursuit the reasonable ideal which the common intend to follow.


改了一个小时。。。查例子查得好辛苦呀！！555。
我把中国的两个例子改了，一个变成Mahatma Ganhdi, 一个变成美国。还在让步里加了个很合适的名言，是Bill Moyers。 有人认识他吗？ 我google了一下，好象是作家什么的。知道的介绍一下吧

to pher，我就是因为记不得那幅的确切中文名或英文名，而且也想不起来到底是哪个画家画的。：（所以也不知道该从何查起，只好说是masterpiece了。 恩，就是那个衣衫不整的女子。
(((yeah!!被我找到了，是三色旗哦 Eugene Delacroix 的作品：）谢谢猪）