issue 31 ( 行为类) 改了好久，特别想听听大家的意见，感激！！！

chenxgUID: 183868

Money spent on research is almost always a good investment, even when the results of that research are controversial.
提纲：
同意这个观点
（1）科学研究是推动社会发展的动力。科学技术是第一生产力，如果没有科学技术的发展就没有我们今天的生活，所以投资在研究上的资金也是非常值得的。
（2）科学研究也是不断解决人类所未知领域的钥匙。SARS，
（3）尽管有些研究是有争议的如原子能的利用，激光的出现。虽然有一些争议，但是如果合理的加以利用，还是会为人类造福的。

With society development leading to our life more colorful than before, technology plays a vital role. Nobody can doubt how many effects technology has generated to improve our lives. The author asserts that money spent on research is almost always a good investment, even when the results of that research are controversial. Given what technology progress has brought us, I strongly agree with the author's opinion.

As everyone knows, technology is impetus to make our society develop in surprising speed, and it is research that brings new technology. We can arrive anywhere that we want in a day, which proves how convenience traffic is, however it was impossible to achieve that object before a hundred years. At that time it would take several months even several years from China to USA. Furthermore, we can communicate with our friends who are far away by telephone or Internet, but it was a dream when technology of communicating was weak. Our ancestors once were dreaming of flying in the sky, just like birds, and now we have realized this imagination through thousands of failure. All of progress is contribution due to technology development. More important is that technology brings us rich lives and new knowledge. We succeeded in reaching moon and observing universe by telescope, which means we can learn about other planets except Earth. So we will lose our colorful lives if there are no investment on research.

Additionally, research is access to strange fields for us. At remote ages, once flood or drought happened, people thought that there must exist some gods controlled our world, so they would pray and wish gods bless them. But now we know they are some natural phenomenon, which probably happen because of physical or chemical changes. In 2003, SARS, a kind of disease, made people of whole world feel horrible. The main reason is that people do not know what cause this strange disease exactly. At that time people dared not go out to work, schools stopped having lessons for students, nobody can go street. Whole world was in mass. Later scientists found the reason what cause disease and we conquered SARS. It is another supporting example that scientific research is important.

Admittedly, sometimes there exist some controversies about research. For example human being how to make use of nuclear energy peaceful. And recently some debates on whether we have rights to make Clone tests on human have generated. The main issue is that Clone test will violate our moral standard. However, I am sure that we have the ability of controlling disadvantage. We can establish some regulations to forbid illegal use of nuclear energy and Clone tests.

From above discussion, research is two sides sword, sometimes it will give us bad effects on us, and sometimes we will benefit from research. But though forms of regulation or law, we can reduce the disadvantage to the lowest level. Consequently, money spent on research is a good investment.

poohUID: 146994

With society development develoment of society leading to our life more colorful than beforelead没有这种用法，改称lead our life to be more colorful..., technology plays a vital role. Nobody can doubt how many effects technology has have generated to improve our lives. 此句有问题。你自己翻译一下：没人能怀疑科技产生了多大的作用。好像高中语文经常出这样的句子来当病句改。应该是每人能怀疑科技产生了很大的作用吧。该成Nobody can doutb the great influence that technlogy has brought to our lives. The author asserts that money spent on research is almost always a good investment, even when the results of that research are controversial. 不要用题目原句！用自己的话来说Given what technology progress has brought us, I strongly agree with the author's opinion.

As everyone knows, technology is an impetus to make our society develop in surprising speed, and it is research that brings new technology. We can arrive anywhere that we want in a day, which proves how convenience traffic is, however it was impossible to achieve that object before a hundred years. At that time it would take several months even several years from China to USA. Furthermore, we can communicate with our friends who are far away by telephone or Internet, but it was a dream when technology of communicating was weak. Our ancestors once were dreaming of flying in the sky, just like birds, and now we have realized this imagination through thousands of failure. All of progress is contribution due to technology development. More important is that technology brings us rich lives and new knowledge. We succeeded in reaching moon and observing universe by telescope, which means we can learn about other planets except Earth. So we will lose our colorful lives if there are no investment on research.花了很多笔墨在technology,缺少与research关系的分析

Additionally, research is access to strange fields for us. 语法错误，一是acess用错了，二是strange不合适，改成research is an access to unknown fields to us At remote ages, once flood or drought happened, people thought that there must exist some gods controlled our world, so they would pray and wish gods bless them. But now we know they are some natural phenomenon, which probably happen because of physical or chemical changes. In 2003, SARS, a kind of disease, made people of whole world feel horrible. The main reason is that people do not know what cause this strange disease exactly. At that time people dared not go out to work, schools stopped having lessons for students, nobody can go street. Whole world was in mass. Later scientists found the reason what cause disease and we conquered SARS. It is another supporting example that scientific research is important.

Admittedly, sometimes there exist some controversies about research. For example human being how to make use of nuclear energy peaceful. And recently some debates on whether we have rights to make Clone tests on human have generated. The main issue is that Clone test will violate our moral standard. However, I am sure that we have the ability of controlling disadvantage. We can establish some regulations to forbid illegal use of nuclear energy and Clone tests. 这段太简单了吧

From above discussion, research is two sides sword, sometimes it will give us bad effects on us, and sometimes we will benefit from research. But though forms of regulation or law, we can reduce the disadvantage to the lowest level. Consequently, money spent on research is a good investment.

haiyaUID: 187989

pooh姐姐辛苦了。
我去睡觉了，先占个位，明天下午bbs时间再来改：）

coolblazeverestUID: 189260

No.1 issue 31 ( 行为类) 改了好久，特别想听听大家的意见，感激！！！
Money spent on research is almost always a good investment, even when the results of that research are controversial.
提纲：
同意这个观点
（1）科学研究是推动社会发展的动力。科学技术是第一生产力，如果没有科学技术的发展就没有我们今天的生活，所以投资在研究上的资金也是非常值得的。
（2）科学研究也是不断解决人类所未知领域的钥匙。SARS，
（3）尽管有些研究是有争议的如原子能的利用，激光的出现。虽然有一些争议，但是如果合理的加以利用，还是会为人类造福的。

With society development leading to our life more colorful than before, technology plays a vital role.此句有问题，实际上是想说our life are more colorful than before due to social development and technological advancement吧？ Nobody can doubt明显中式英语，it is undoubted that how many effects technology has generated to improve our lives. The author asserts that money spent on research is almost always a good investment, even when the results of that research are controversial. Given what technology progress has broughtto us, I strongly agree with the author's opinion.

As everyone knows, technology is impetus to make our society develop in surprising speed, and it is researchreported that brings new technology. We can arrive anywhere that we want in a daynowadays, which proves how convenienceconvenient traffic is, however it was impossible to achieve that object before a hundred years. At that time it would take several months even several years from China to USA. Furthermore, we can communicate with our friends who are far away by telephone or Internet, but it was a dream when technology of communicating was weak. Our ancestors once were dreaming of flying in the sky, just like birds, and now we have realized this imagination through thousands of failure. All of progress is contribution due to technology development. More important is that technology brings us rich lives and new knowledge. We succeeded in reaching moon and observing universe by telescope, which means we can learn about other planets except Earth. So we will lose our colorful lives if there are no investment on research.
关键问题是，这些高新科技成果，与投资于研究的必然联系，如何体现good investment？

Additionally, research is access to strange fields for us. At remote ages, once flood or drought happened, people thought that there must exist some gods controlled our world, so they would pray and wish gods bless them. But now we know they are some natural phenomenon, which probably happen because of physical or chemical changes. In 2003, SARS, a kind of disease, made people of whole world feel horrible. The main reason is that people do not know what cause this strange disease exactly. At that time people dared not go out to work, schools stopped having lessons for students, nobody can go street. Whole world was in mass. Later scientists found the reason what cause disease and we conquered SARS. It is another supporting example that scientific research is important.
还是这个问题，研究的作用体现在哪里？

Admittedly, sometimes there exist some controversies about research. For example human being how to make use of nuclear energy peaceful. And recently some debates on whether we have rights to make Clone tests on human have generated. The main issue is that Clone test will violate our moral standard. However, I am sure that we have the ability of controlling disadvantage. We can establish some regulations to forbid illegal use of nuclear energy and Clone tests.
对于controversial consequence 没有论述清楚，究竟是不是要investment也没交代，总之，vague

From above discussion, research is two sides sword, sometimes it will give us bad effects on us, and sometimes we will benefit from research. But though forms of regulation or law, we can reduce the disadvantage to the lowest level. Consequently, money spent on research is a good investment.
建议搂住，关键是内容的充实

chenxgUID: 183868

谢谢大家的中肯意见，晚上好好修改一下。

naiba369UID: 131655

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chenxgUID: 183868

通过这次修改，明白了不少东西。以前总是觉得心里明白怎么写，可是一到下笔的时候就出现了好多问题。真心感谢大家！
Money spent on research is almost always a good investment, even when the results of that research are controversial.

With development of society leading our life to more colorful than before, technology plays a vital role. It is undoubted that how many influences technology have generated to improve our lives. And it is exactly that researches gestate technology. The author asserts that it is a good investment that money spent on research, even when the results of that research are controversial. Given what technology progress has brought to us, I strongly agree with the author's opinion.

As everyone knows, technology is an impetus to make our society develop in surprising speed, but what relationships between researches and technology are? Researches are precondition of technology progress. Every year most countries spend much money on research, the main purpose of which is to bring advanced technology. So we can draw a conclusion that no research, no technology progress. It is investment on research that gives us so advanced technology. Nowadays we can arrive anywhere that we want in a day, which proves how convenient traffic is, however it was impossible to achieve that object before a hundred years. At that time it would take several months even several years from China to USA. Furthermore, we can communicate with our friends who are far away by telephone or Internet, but it was a dream when technology of communicating was weak. Our ancestors once were dreaming of flying in the sky, just like birds, and now we have realized this imagination through thousands of failure. Technology development contributes to all of progress. It is more important is that technology brings us rich lives and new knowledge. We succeeded in reaching moon and observing universe by telescope, which means we can learn about other planets except Earth. So we will lose our colorful lives if there are no investment on research.

Additionally, research is an access to unknown fields for us. Research lets us know many natural secrets. At remote ages, once flood or drought happened, people thought that there must exist some gods controlled our world, so they would pray and wish gods bless them. But now we know they are some natural phenomenon, which probably happen because of physical or chemical changes. Research help us conquer many diseases threaten to human being. In 2003, SARS, a kind of disease, made people of whole world feel horrible. The main reason is that people do not know what cause this strange disease exactly. At that time people dared not go out to work, schools stopped having lessons for students, nobody can go street. Whole world was in mess. Later scientists found the reason what cause disease and we conquered SARS. It is another supporting example that scientific research is important.

Admittedly, sometimes there exist some controversies about research. For example human being how to make use of nuclear energy peaceful. If we cannot handle this matter successfully, it will be a threat to survive of human. And recently some debates on whether we have rights to make Clone tests on human have generated. The main issue is that Clone tests will violate with our moral standard. Although these problems are puzzling us, I am sure that we have the ability of controlling disadvantages. We can establish some regulations to forbid illegal use of nuclear energy and Clone tests. After all, the advantages that we have get are more than the disadvantages. As a result, money spent on research is still an good investment.

From above discussion, research is two sides sword, sometimes it will give us bad effects on us, and sometimes we will benefit from research. But though forms of regulations or laws, we can reduce the disadvantage to the lowest level. Consequently, money spent on research is a good investment.

zhl_halleyUID: 140173

通过这次修改，明白了不少东西。以前总是觉得心里明白怎么写，可是一到下笔的时候就出现了好多问题。真心感谢大家！
Money spent on research is almost always a good investment, even when the results of that research are controversial.

With development of society leading our life to more colorful than before, technology plays a vital role. It is undoubted that how many influences technology have generated to improve our lives. And it is exactly that researches gestate technology. The author asserts that it is a good investment that money spent on research, even when the results of that research are controversial. Given what technology progress has brought to us, I strongly agree with the author's opinion.

As everyone knows, technology is an impetus to make our society develop in surprising speed, but what relationships between researches and technology are? Researches are precondition of technology progress. Every year most countries spend much money on research, the main purpose of which is to bring advanced technology. So we can draw a conclusion that no research, no technology progress. It is investment on research that gives us so advanced technology. Nowadays we can arrive anywhere that we want in a day, which proves how convenient traffic is, however it was impossible to achieve that object before a hundred years. At that time it would take several months even several years from China to USA. Furthermore, we can communicate with our friends who are far away by telephone or Internet, but it was a dream when technology of communicating was weak. Our ancestors once were dreaming of flying in the sky, just like birds, and now we have realized this imagination through thousands of failure. Technology development contributes to all of progress. It is more important is that technology brings us rich lives and new knowledge. We succeeded in reaching moon and observing universe by telescope, which means we can learn about other planets except Earth. So we will lose our colorful lives if there are no investment on research.

Additionally, research is an access to unknown fields for us. Research lets us know many natural secrets. At remote ages, once flood or drought happened, people thought that there must exist some gods controlled our world, so they would pray and wish gods bless them. But now we know they are some natural phenomenon, which probably happen because of physical or chemical changes. Research help us conquer many diseases threaten to human being. In 2003, SARS, a kind of disease, made people of whole world feel horrible. The main reason is that people do not know what cause this strange disease exactly. At that time people dared not go out to work, schools stopped having lessons for students, nobody can go street. Whole world was in mess. Later scientists found the reason what cause disease and we conquered SARS. It is another supporting example that scientific research is important.
你都在讲research如何好, 所以值得花money, 但其实你忽略了research 不好的地方和有时候不值得花钱的地方. Actually, 题目重点在于”投资”, 而非研究
Admittedly, sometimes there exist some controversies about research. For example human being how to make use of nuclear energy peaceful. If we cannot handle this matter successfully, it will be a threat to survive of human. And recently some debates on whether we have rights to make Clone tests on human have generated. The main issue is that Clone tests will violate with our moral standard. Although these problems are puzzling us, I am sure that we have the ability of controlling disadvantages. We can establish some regulations to forbid illegal use of nuclear energy and Clone tests. After all, the advantages that we have get are more than the disadvantages. As a result, money spent on research is still an good investment.
你的结论太突然了,也没什么论述
From above discussion, research is two sides sword, sometimes it will give us bad effects on us, and sometimes we will benefit from research. But though forms of regulations or laws, we can reduce the disadvantage to the lowest level. Consequently, money spent on research is a good investment.
你忽略了研究的本质, 研究的意义在于探索新领域, 不顾什么predictable的结果, result在test 之前是无法知道的.
总之, 你基本没有对题目作出回应. https://bbs.gter.net/showthread.php?s=&threadid=244933, 看一下, 加油, 互勉!

chenxgUID: 183868

意见都记下来了，现在觉得写一篇好文章好难啊。
修改了一晚上，还帮别人改了一篇文章，头疼死了。

nightsky2004UID: 155946

我早就接了，只是改得晚了。还是那个搂主最早写的，全当看看吧

nightsky2004UID: 155946

With society development leading to our life more colorful than before, technology plays a vital role.（这一句话比较别扭，可改为 Together with society’s rapid development, our life became more beautiful and convenient than ever before. Technology plays a important vital role in each areas.） Nobody can doubt how many effects（effect 好像没有adj呀） technology has generated to improve our lives. The author asserts that money spent on research is almost always（这个感觉有点问题almost 和always可以一起用吗，是不是重复了呢？） a good investment, even when the results of that research are controversial. Given（是不是用consider with好点呢？具体的用法我不太记得了） what（这里是不是应该用which or that）technology progress has brought us, I strongly agree with the author's opinion.
（首段提出了你的观点，还算开门见山，只是语句（特别是词）的使用上显得粗糙了些）
As everyone knows, technology is impetus（没有见过这么使用的，科技不能是刺激我们发展的因素吧，说不太通） to make our society develop in surprising（rapid就可以了，surprising的话尺度不好把握，个人感觉） speed, and it is research that brings new technology.（and researches bring us new techniques，科技不能说新旧，只有技术可以说）We can arrive anywhere that we want in a day（真的吗？考虑不太周全吧）, which proves how convenience（convenient）（the）traffic is, however（这里是不是应该改成even，我猜你想说尽管） it was impossible to achieve that object before a hundred years. At that time（这个是什么时间呢） it would take several months even several years from China to USA. Furthermore, we can communicate with our friends who are far away by telephone or Internet, but it was a dream when technology of communicating was weak.（通过书信也可以通信呀，只不过是不够快捷而以，这些都需要考虑清楚） Our ancestors once were dreaming of flying in the sky, just like birds, and now we have realized this imagination through thousands of failure.（这句没看懂，不好意思） All of progress is contribution due to technology development（这句话很别扭，建议改改，方法不一）. More（用了比较级，应该说明和谁比？） important is that technology brings us rich lives and new knowledge. We succeeded in reaching moon and observing universe by telescope（你难道通过天文望远镜来登月？说得太不清楚了）, which means we can learn about other planets except Earth. So（这个此也用得不好，应该先说一句总结句，比如Today’s technology brings us more convenient and beautiful world,再说Without these improvement….） we will lose our colorful lives if there are no investment on research.
看得出来，这一段从开始你就在极力说明你的观点（科技使我们的生活更美好），这些论据还都是在围绕主题展开的，没有跑题，这一点不错。但是论据说得实在是有些问题，建议找一些相关的资料读一读，可以找些灵感
Additionally, research is access to strange fields for us（你是不是要说研究可以探索未知领域？我看可以这样写research is an important method to explore unknown areas，仅供参考）. At remote ages, once flood or drought happened, people thought that there must exist some gods controlled our world, so they would pray and wish gods bless them.（你说的问题现在还在普遍存在，况且关于god以及其它类似于神灵的问题不太好说清楚，否则就不会有那么多的教派了，所以不建议涉及这方面的问题，可以换一个例子） But now we know they are some natural phenomenon, which probably happen because of physical or chemical changes. In 2003, SARS, a kind of disease, made people of whole world feel horrible. The main reason is that people do not know what cause this strange disease exactly. At that time people dared not go out to work, schools stopped having lessons for students, nobody can go street（绝对了点吧，大街上还是有人的）. Whole world was in mass. Later scientists found the reason what cause disease and we conquered SARS.（说得太简单了，现在好像还没有正式研究成功吧，仅仅是测试阶段，据我所知） It is another supporting example that scientific research is important.
（这一段写得是科学研究可以帮助我们探索，优点在上面一段已经提到了，看来这是你的特点，挺好。除了上一段的缺点之外，本段的例子似乎不足以说服人，至少我没有被说服。应该换一个更好的例子）
Admittedly, sometimes there exist some controversies about research. For example human being how to make use of nuclear energy peaceful.（我明白你的意思，但是换一个说法吧） And recently some debates on whether we have rights to make Clone tests on human have generated. The main issue is that Clone test will violate our moral standard. However, I am sure that we have the ability of controlling disadvantage. We can establish some regulations to forbid illegal use of nuclear energy and Clone tests. （总结段不能就是论事，应该涉及所有的问题）
关于科学的反面你说的太少了，任何事情都有其阴暗面的，谈到这一点是一定要正视，clone这个话题现在还不好说，至少没有定论，最好找找相关资料看看
From above discussion, research is two sides sword,（two edges sword） sometimes it will give us bad effects on us, and sometimes we will benefit from research. But though forms of regulation or law, we can reduce the disadvantage to the lowest level. Consequently, money spent on research is a good investment.
总的来说，你的文章还是围绕着你得thesis来展开的，这一点不错。但是你的你的论据不够好，语言需要进步。个人意见，仅供参考，加油吧。

chenxgUID: 183868

Thank nightsky2004 too much!
大家一起加油。

chenxgUID: 183868

我已经把你给我修改的打印出来，好好研究研究。