issue5 教育类 国家应该规定一个统一的高中课程 10G修改版

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In the argument, the author claims that a nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow governments in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer. While I agree with the author that in order to ensure 加the？ majority of students can没有必要用can receive high quality education and avoid the imbalance development of the students’knowledge frame in different districts, the nation has the responsibility and duty to provide an elementary curriculum in the nation wide可以这样用吗, but to samesome extant, different parts in a country should have the space to conduct some particular courses which are beyond the reach of the nationcentral govement).

  Courses which are provided by national government must conduct the mainstream of the education, and convey the accentuated personalities of a race. It is very necessary for the students to establish orthodox viewpoint towards their country, history, race, and politics, and give them an overall world view towards their society and outside world. Moreover, because of the strong backup of the nation finance and the concentration of educational authorities in nation wide, the quality and authority of the curriculum supervised by nation are guaranteed.

However, there also emerge drawbacks of this restricted curriculum.(there exist是不是有点别扭啊？ This kind of undue conducting to the education may cause negative effects, such as the potential harm to students, which may be difficult to avoid due to the coherence of the curriculum. Tracing back to history, the Japanese dictator unified the curriculum to induce its people thatthey were superior to other races; Hitler conducted uniform education to German that Jews were low ethics and it was honorable for the Nazi to annihilate them, all thosethese are the horrifying consequences of over-centralization of education management. Thus, once education becomes the tools for someone to fulfill his or her own evil interest, the uniform of curriculum seems like the vector of the horrific spirits. Although they are the extreme examples towards the drawbacks of over unifying the curriculum, it is very necessary for the students not only being arranged by only only这里好像用的重复了one kind of consciousness, and the compensation from other ways, such as the thoughts from local educators, 后面这句没有主语啊is obviously crucial to help them acquire something from other angles.

Admittedly, if the country does not restrict the curriculum of all the schools, it has potential to cause another kind of extreme: all the schools can offer the courses which they regard important, the consequences may be the students cannot receive enough courses which are necessary or basic for them to listen, speak, read, write and calculate etc, and the quality of the education is open to doubt. Therefore it is easily to comprehend that providing enough courses which can be adopted by all the students as the necessary courses and giving the freedom to the local authorities or schools to provide some courses by themselves which can be assimilated by the local students. Accordingly, the quality of the education can be guaranteed through the students receiving the instructed fundamental knowledge; the schools can provide some extra courses which they have the ability to conduct; and the students can choose the courses which they really interest in.

To sum up, if the country can give a portion of the curriculum which they regardas important and necessary, and provide some freedom to the local governments and schools, it has high probability to be a wise way to solve the problem. And as far as know, many countries definitely execute this kind of policy to their education.
思路很好，我挑不出什么毛病来。因为刚考完托福，只能在语法上说说了。
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怎么改都不行。我第一次用调色工具，请帮主指点一下：）

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Should a nation require all its students to study the same curriculum before they enter college? The speaker thinks so, however, I cannot agree with the statement totally. In my opinion, a country has to not only draft a national compulsory curriculum but also encourages encourage different high schools 未必一定是中学吧，可以是小学to provide some additional courses concerning the prospective of education and culture.courses concerning the prospective of education and culture ....这个prosepctive是形容词阿,怎么后面跟of短语？而且这句话的意思是‘’以教育和文化的未来为内容的课程‘’，虽然我明白你想表达这些课程的学习跟教育和文化的未来有关系。

Admittedly, a the same national curriculum can make sure that nearly all the high school students have complete and necessary knowledge structures, which are necessities for their college study or future. Common sense tells us, the curriculum drafted by nation will probably be under many experts’ discussions and published eventually. Thus, this national curriculum is authoritative and reasonable.这点有道理，但是不能说明学校自己制定的cuirriculum 没有合理性 Follow this curriculum; all the high school students will get some basic abilities and knowledge, such as reading, counting, thinking, communicating and etc. And those will be useful for almost all the high school students, whateverwhether   they will choose to become an engineer or a writer in the future. Furthermore, the establishment of a the same national curriculum can get 尽量避免这种万能小词，用正规一点的词，get a standard?改成reach a fundamental standard a fundamental standard, which is necessary for the proceeding education proceeding education 没见过这样用的,这个定于从句多余，去掉吧，感觉用了很多非限制性定于从句。你是想表达有利于教育的进行吧。那就改成because 从句，because  it is much easier for the impartment of knowledge in college. Just for example, if Mike who is Mike? 举例的话不必要人名，你来一个Mike,让人觉得很唐突 never know knows what computer really is, while others can easily make programs in Java (a computer language). How can a teacher teach? It is a trouble indeed. From this prospective, a uniform curriculum can get rid of such imbalance in education to a large degree.这个例子不十分合适啊，造成这种不同可能是因为个人的原因而非教育的原因。比如有的孩子从小就有电脑，自学就会了，家庭困难的没有这种条件。

Moreover, a the same national curriculum will promote culture fusion in the regions where people have different languages, in various races or have special special这个词不好，似乎有点歧视的意思，这句表达啰嗦，直接where people have different languages, races or religions  religions. Since misunderstanding and prejudice among people mainly derived derive from their dissimilar thinking and educational background. 前面一个since,只有从句无主句，因此这里是逗号，并去掉后面的therefore Therefore, if a same curriculum can be carried out in those areas, probably, with the uniform courses they adopted 为什么总用过去式？ and the increasing exchange exchange 不合适阿，用communication , they will understand each other gradually. It is known that China has 56 races while they all live in peace and calm and calm去掉，这个此表示冷静，镇定 with each other on another in most of the time. Why? The key is Chinese government had pressed such a same compulsory curriculum of 9 years all over China in 1975, which is also suit for other 55 races. !!!这句逻辑太不严密了！！！怎么可能中国民族和谐是因为课程统一带来的?! 实际上在这个问题上同意课程的影响很小，民族政策影响才是关键的  Thanks to this curriculum, many minority leaders have been well trained. 怎么用train? train专职技术培训，跟教育不同的！而且你这里表达得让人认为中国少数民族的领导人都是被共产党一个模子改造出来的，呵呵，让老米判官看到会认为你左倾  Nowadays they all play a significant role in working on the better interaction between minority and majority. So, from this view, a same national curriculum imposes a great impetus on the culture interaction. 这段的例子不成功啊

However, every sword has two blades. So is this topic. 不喜欢这样的表达，感觉很模糊，不准确，如果你用so is this topic那么你就等于在说the topic has two blades ,显然你只是在用比喻意，所以表达不对If we only have just one choice and provide no alternatives, we may face a social problem that, our high school students are all identical, without any differences, which denies the aim of education. 这个论点跟你body1 的最后一个分论点显然自相矛盾，那段说学生统一的知识结构有利于教学，这里说要多些alternatives不让学生identical, 请问你到底支持哪个呢？ 你要注意把自己的观点都协调统一起来。前后矛盾不好哦。The goal of education system is cultivating a complete 什么叫complete person??改成competent person not only with smart brain and strong body but also having his/her own interest and specialty. Admittedly, the only one curriculum cannot meet various needs, so, it is necessary to delete ''to'' for different high schools offer their own special courses to satisfy students’ requests. Just like some high schools in East China, especially in Hunan Province, where hold plenty of rivers and lakes. Thus,用什么thus,这个例子还没说完呢，刚才我还以为你要下结论了 some high schools provide sports course in water. 直接swimming course就好了And lots of Olympic winners are come from there.are come from??？ Fu Mingxia is an excellent illustration, who gets 3 Olympic gold medals in just 12 years. And the only one curriculum cannot make such effect.这两句跳跃性很大，从前面伏明霞到单一课程做不到。其间省略了太多的内容。是不是觉得这段写得比较多了，就匆匆收尾了

Simultaneously, it is possible that the popularization of only one curriculum in those minority regions will cause disharmony, since any compulsory requirement may cause dislike cause dislike ? 搭配不当even hate in the extreme. Just like a saying goes, "Things will develop in the opposite direction when they become extreme". It is the same with this issue. Each race has its own culture, which maybe spread may be handed down from one generation to another. Due to this tough continuity, the more compulsory request adds onto themthem 指代什么啊！前面没有出现过复数的人，除了你引用的那句话里有they, 指代要明确！ , the more resistance they will react. react resistance???你看看这些搭配都不恰当！Hence, it is necessary to offer some additional courses for those minorities, so as to maintain their unique civilization. 还是跟你前面body2矛盾，逻辑上有问题，你得把自己的观点统一起来

All in all, from the discussion above, we can make a conclusion that a nation should have both a compulsory compulsory不合适，这里不是要不要compulsory course的问题而是要不要统一课程的问题， 改成 a series of national  uniform courses curriculum and some local additional courses. From the education 注意这里应该用形容词point, a same curriculum can help students build a strong structure of knowledge, while some elective courses may cultivate students' interest. And from the civilization point,civilization point? 用词不当！ a same curriculum may promote exchange -->communication within different races and get culture fusion YOU'D BETTER AVOID USING ''GET'' . While some provincial classes CLASSES 跟COURSE不同的，这里不能用CLASSES may protect the diversity of various cultures. In a nut shell, we need both: a same compulsory national curriculum and several elective courses.

语法上的问题很多，逻辑上有矛盾，例子不是很合适，写得不成功

naiba369UID: 131655

TO Elliot:

楼主强，我曾经就这个问题请教过偶妈妈，偶妈妈是多年做小学校长的，她的观点你基本上全都提到了！

强！45分钟之内打死我也想不出这么多

呵呵，其实，自己写的也很慢呢

不过后来我总结了一下，首先，任何领域都有“单一”与“多元”的对立，教育也不例外；都有“国家意志”和“

个人意志”的对立；都有种族独立性的问题；都有“规范”与“自由”的对立。

issue每一个题目中，都充满了“矛盾”，而你说的“单一”与“多元”就是一对具体矛盾的体现。

我也很受启发呢:)

全国课表还有一个问题，可能导致全国范围内必须使用同一版本的教科书，可能导致某家出版社造成垄断

，垄断可能会加重学生购书负担。

就此问题，还可以用日本文部省推广反华教科书一案来说事，因为这会导致全种族左倾或右倾。

这个可以归结到“反面”的“文化整合”的害处里面，是一个具体表象。

关于日本教科书的问题，可以提出一个新的分论点，“过分统一会造成某种意识形态的”集体“偏差，不利于

人类社会整体的协调发展。

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Should a nation require all its students to study the same curriculum before they enter college? The speaker thinks so, however, I cannot agree with the statement totallycompletely. In my opinion, a country has to not only draft a national compulsory curriculums but also encourages encourage different high schools to provide some additional courses concerning the prospective future of education and culture.可能你想表达的是国家鼓励学校提供一些能够提供关于教育和文化未来的课程。我觉得future比较好。

Admittedly, a the  same national curriculum can make sure that nearly almost        nearly好像是用在否定句和疑问句里 all the high school students have complete and necessary knowledge structures, which are necessities for their college study or and  future. Common sense tells us, the curriculum drafted by nation will probably probably be under many experts’ discussions and published eventually. Thus, this national curriculum is authoritative and reasonable. Follow  Following this curriculum; all the high school students will get some basic abilities and knowledge, such as reading, counting, thinking, communicating and etc. And those will be useful for almost all the high school students, whatever they will choose to become an engineer or a writer in the future感觉这句话写的不好，whatever career they will choose. Furthermore, the establishment of a the same national curriculum can get a fundamental standard of education, which is necessary for the proceeding education in college. Just for example, if Mike never knows what computer really is, while others can easily make programs in Java (a computer language). How can a teacher teach? It is a trouble indeed. From this prospective, a uniform curriculum can get rid of such imbalance in education to a large degree. From this point, the uniform curriculum can reach the balance in students’ education level.

Moreover, a the same national curriculum will promote culture fusion in the regions where people have different languages, in various races or have special religions. Since misunderstanding and prejudice among people mainly derived derive from their dissimilar thinking and educational background. Therefore, if a same curriculum can be carried out in those areas, probably, with the uniform courses they adopted and the increasing exchange, they will understand each other gradually. It is well known that China has 56 races while they all live in peace and calm with each other in most of time. Why? The key is Chinese government had pressed constituted such a same compulsory curriculum of 9 years all over China in 1975, which is also suit for other 55 races. Thanks to this curriculum, many minority leaders have well trained. Nowadays they all play a significant role in working on the better interaction between minority and majority. So, from this view, a same national curriculum imposes a great impetus on the culture interaction.
这段觉得没有写出民族融化的意思，9年义务教育和统一课程不是一回事吧。

However, every sword has two blades. So is this topic. If we only have just one choice and provide no alternatives, we may face a social problem that, our high school students are all identical, without any differences, which denies the aim of education. The goal of education system is cultivating  to cultivate a complete person not only with smart brain and strong body but also having  have his/her own interest and specialty. Admittedlybut, the only one curriculum cannot meet various needs, so, it is necessary to for different high schools offer their own special courses to satisfy students’ requests. Just like some high school in East China, especially in Hunan Province, where这应该算语法错误吧 which  holds plenty of rivers and lakes. Thus, some high schools provide sports course in water. And lots of Olympic winners are come from there. Fu Mingxia is an excellent illustration, who gets 3 Olympic gold  golden medals in just 12 years. And the only one curriculum cannot make such effect.
这一段觉得写的不太好。

Simultaneously, it is possible that the popularization of only one curriculum in those minority regions will cause disharmony, since any compulsory requirement may cause dislike even hate in the extreme. Just like a saying goes, "Things will develop in the opposite direction when they become extreme". It is the same with this issue. Each race has its own culture, which maybe spread from one generation to another. Due to this tough continuity, the more compulsory request adds onto them, the more resistance they will react. Hence, it is necessary to offer some additional courses for those minorities, so as to maintain their unique civilization.

All in all, from the discussion above, we can make a conclusion that a nation should have both a compulsory curriculum and some local additional courses. From the education point, a same curriculum can help students build a strong structure of knowledge, while some elective courses may cultivate students' interest. And from the civilization point, a same curriculum may promote exchange within different races and get culture fusion. While some provincial classes may protect the diversity of various cultures. In a nut shell, we need both: a same compulsory national curriculum and several elective courses.
个人感觉文章写的太长了，45分钟内难以拿下。如果真能在规定时间写完，pfpf。

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呵呵，我还以为你不写aw，光研究了。。*^^*
帮你看看，顺便取经~~~

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好多人写同主体啊，我那篇就冷清多了，:(
还是先跟搂住学习一下！

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Should a nation require all its students to study the same curriculum before they enter college? The speaker thinks so, however, I cannot agree with the statement totally. In my opinion, a country has to not only draft a national compulsory curriculum but also encourages different high schools题目中说是before college to provide some additional courses concerning the prospective of education and culture.

Admittedly, a same national curriculum can make sure that nearly all the high school students have complete and necessary knowledge structures, which are necessities for their college study or future. Common sense tells us, the curriculum drafted by nation will probably under many experts’ discussions and published eventually. Thus, this national curriculum is authoritative and reasonable. Follow this curriculum; all the high school students还是觉得把它限制在high不太好 will get some basic abilities and knowledge, such as reading, counting, thinking, communicating and etc. And those will be useful for almost all the high school students, whatever they will choose to become an engineer or a writer in the future. Furthermore, the establishment of a same national curriculum can get a fundamental standard, which is necessary for the proceeding education in college. Just for example, if Mike never know what computer really is, while others can easily make programs in Java (a computer language). How can a teacher teach? It is a trouble indeed. From this prospective？, a uniform curriculum can get rid of such imbalance in education to a large degree. 我觉得这个例子要再加点时间限定，是在大学的时候老师上课，同时因为缺少大学前的基础课程。突然拉出来一个例子，看得有点莫明，看到后面的陈述才反应过来

Moreover, a same national curriculum will promote culture fusion in the regions where people have different languages, in various races or have special religions. Since misunderstanding and prejudice among people mainly derived from their dissimilar thinking and educational background. Therefore, if a same curriculum can be carried out in those areas, probably, with the uniform courses they adopted and the increasing exchange, they will understand each other gradually. It is known that China has 56 races while they all live in peace and calm with each other in most of time. Why? The key is Chinese government had pressed such a same compulsory curriculum of 9 years all over China in 1975, which is also suit for other 55 races. Thanks to this curriculum, many minority leaders have well trained. Nowadays they all play a significant role in working on the better interaction between minority and majority. So, from this view, a same national curriculum imposes a great impetus on the culture interaction. 我觉得ts里提到到culture fusion这个词不好。因为我以前看过篇写美国文化融炉，有利有弊。你这段的内容是正面的，所以觉得不好。基调有点怪，我就一直在找里面的反面说明，：p

However, every sword has two blades. So is this topic. If we only have just one choice and provide no alternatives, we may face a social problem that, our high school students are all identical, without any differences, which denies betray/deflect会不会好点？deny是否认的意思，否认了教育的目的不太好the aim of education. The goal of education system is cultivating a complete person not only with smart brain and strong body but also having his/her own interest and specialty. Admittedly, the only one curriculum cannot meet various needs, so,so口语话了，要注意喔 it is necessary to for different high schools offer their own special courses to satisfy students’ requests我觉得这个词太主动了，demand感觉舒服点. Just like some high school in East China, especially in Hunan Province, where hold covers? plenty of rivers and lakes. Thus, some high schools provide sports course in water. And lots of Olympic winners are come from there. Fu Mingxia is an excellent illustration, who gets 3 Olympic gold medals in just 12 years. And the only one curriculum cannot make such effect. 我觉得这个点评有点仓促，因为这一段是说curriculum的弊端，这个例子是举的选修的课的好处。所以在结束时要从选修课的好处再绕到统一课程的弊端。你觉得呢？

Simultaneously, it is possible that the popularization of only one curriculum in those minority regions will cause disharmony, since any compulsory requirement may cause dislike even hate in the extreme. 这句话再组织一下，感觉在和前面的minority打架Just like a saying goes, "Things will develop in the opposite direction when they become extreme". It is the same with this issue. Each race has its own culture, which maybe spread be passed from one generation to another. Due to this tough continuity, the more compulsory request adds onto them, the more resistance they will react. Hence, it is necessary to offer some additional courses for those minorities, so as to maintain their unique civilization. 看到后面的比较级，感觉和前面打得越来越厉害了

All in all, from the discussion above, we can make a conclusion that a nation should have both a compulsory curriculum and some local additional courses. From the education point, a same curriculum can help students build a strong structure of knowledge, while some elective courses may cultivate students' interest. And from the civilization point, a same curriculum may promote exchange within different races and get culture fusion. While some provincial 美国是state吧classes may protect the diversity of various cultures. In a nut shell, we need both: a same compulsory national curriculum and several elective courses.

1.好长的文啊，我除了第一次写过71？个，后来就一直控制在500+，我觉得写太多会来不及的。
2。我觉得对于compulsory，应该强调两方面的课程，思想类和基础类，而本文只强调了基础类。我觉得思想类应该是更重要的。比如 patriotism,每个国家的课程都会强制涉及的吧。
3。觉得提纲分析的比文章全面：）
4。我的第一篇好象就是这个，哎。。。。哪天鼓足勇气再把它拿出来大刀阔斧一下。
5。有些错误我想楼上的帖子中一定有改了，有几个觉得一定要指出或者怀疑一下希望得到答案的帮你标出来了。

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好火的帖子阿~~~

haiyaUID: 187989

谁来拍拍我。：（

naiba369UID: 131655

呵呵

haiya，明天吧

flyingwindUID: 189320

最初由 Elliot 发布
[B]全国课表还有一个问题，可能导致全国范围内必须使用同一版本的教科书，可能导致某家出版社造成垄断，垄断可能会加重学生购书负担。

就此问题，还可以用日本文部省推广反..

以下省略...... [/B]

强烈反对这1点，跑题拉
又不是在搞argu，列其他后果

flyingwindUID: 189320

1。  naba提纲写的好！！！

2。  pooh文章改的好！！！