issue 51 自出生以来第一次写的issue ，请帮忙看看，不胜感激

游泳的啄木鸟UID: 162386

第一次写，有点少，有点差，请指教：
issue 51
" education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student ."

Is education truly effective only when it is specifically designed  to meet the individual needs and interests of each student ? 1,000 readers have 1,000 Hamlet in the heart after reading Shakespeare's masterpiece . So does the answer to the above question . In some people's view , it is absolutely right . While in other's opinion , it is totally wrong . As far as I'm concerned , it does need a balance between the two aspects . In other words , education should be designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student , but it is not the only respect which need to be considered .

First and the foremost of all , I agree with the statement insofar as that education should be designed to satisfy the individual needs and interests of every student . People are different from each other . We have different outlooks , different ways to think ; everything is different including what we like and dislike . Something may be great to a person and terrible to the other . When it comes to education , there also are things that a person like to even love to study , while other person dislike to even hate to study . Obviously , students will find it is hardy for them to study what they dislike well . If they have to study it , it will be a process with great sadness and anguish . In such situations , education losses the primary value which means that students absorb knowledge in a happy and relax way .

Secondly , we can't design education only considering the above aspect . After all , it is impossible for us to meet every student's need and interests of individual . We have thousands of millions of students ; if we designed a special plan for every student's education , it would be another Great Wall spending thousands of years . Thus , it cannot be executed in the real world .

Thirdly , it should be admitted that it is hard to learn what is hated . However , some courses , for instance , mathematics , reading and writing lessons are necessary to be studied ; and there are some lessons that is instructive for the student . They are supposed to be taught to the students as compulsory causes . It means a lot to the student’s life . They will make the student creative and intellectual .

In sum , education will be absolutely more effective when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student . Thus , the statement is correct to some extent , however , we should take into account for other factors as mentioned , only in this way can we have the perfect education .

zffUID: 191904

I very appreciate your frist mastrpiece! It is much better than my frist issue! In the part one of your passage.you have refered to that education satisfying individual needs is not  the only aspect that make the education effective.But you do not prove it in your whole issue. I think the most important point of the issue is the wold 'ONLY'.we should concentrate on it and find some examples to say for it.You should take up most of the content to talk about it.During the demonstration,we can analyze the problem from several facets;
   The people who have choosed the the courses which he or she is most interested at  must study well?
I do not think so,nowadays,computer science is very popular and many students say they like it,but all they shudy well and know about the computer very well. to be a specialist in any field,we not only like it ,but also the diligence you have to afford.the effective education is not that every student choose their most fondness,but every student masters what he or she likes and make contribution to the society,that is significant.
     and then we should talk the effective as you do.The pepole study what they like most is not must be effetive education.The effetive education should be that the controled technology wiill improve our material life spirital life, it should benefit the whole society.Somebody studies his fondness,but he do not use it correctly,he maybe make use of hie knowlege to hazard our society,make our society in mess.For example,some pepole like the nuclear knowledge,and he study it well ,produce some new nuclear weapons to theaten our healthy and weath.Is it effective education?
There are also some verbal mistakes in yur issue.

游泳的啄木鸟UID: 162386

谢谢指教，受益匪浅

poohUID: 146994

语言上很多地方都informal

例如We have different outlooks , different ways to think ; everything is different including what we like and dislike . Something may be great to a person and terrible to the other .

it should be admitted that it is hard to learn what is hated -------------用词太不正规了，句子也不完整
这句应该这样说比较好，I admit that it is hard to figure out what individual student likes or dislikes.

没段内容太少了，根本不可能分析清楚地，所以建议你还是仔细研究范文，找找自己的不足