Issue5 大家帮我看看吧，说一句都行。

fengboallanUID: 157405

5. A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer.
一个国家应该要求所有的学生在上大学前都学习相同的课程，而不应该允许不同地区的学校擅自决定自己的教学领域
还是主张合的观点：
1 如果不要求同样的课程有些边远地区就将取消一些的选修课
2 从法律上讲，在这个国家的每个人都有受到相同义务教育的权利
3 政治上的考虑，共同的文化教育有利于民族团结
4 大学的角度
更容易授课
说实话，现在别说说理了，我觉得我能把自己的意思能够完全表达都是很大的问题，速度非常慢，单词打的不准。谢谢自己就把自己给绕进去了。时间越来越紧张，3月1号考试。才刚刚起步，我该咋办！
那位能给我指引一下迷经之路啊。


It has a long sociological controversy that whether or not a nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow school in different parts of  the nation to determine which academic course to offer. The common belief of some educators is that different parts of the nation should determine which course they offer. But aided by scientists and educator’s researching today, nevertheless, hold a thoroughly different idea that a nation should uniform his national curriculum in order to get the suitable balance. Both of arguments have their evidence to support their argument. In this circumstance, I would like to unify both of arguments: a nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college, but in some special area ,it has right some speciality. For example, they can offer their language course in order to let their culture continue.


In the nation, not all the areas have the same situation of education. For example, in country, the condition of schools is much worse than that in city. If they have right to decide which curriculums would be offered, they maybe cut off some curriculum to save trouble. Even in law, every citizen has the right to own the same level of being educated. No matter how far you leave, before college, you have the right of deserving compulsory education. If we let different parts of the nation to determine which academic to offer, in country, we needn’t worry about major curriculum, but other class like music, philosophy, class of qualification would be taught without qualification remaining, because there isn't the same amount of aid. With the prohibiting of law, the government must obey to give education appropriate budget in order to offer all of courses.


In political view, for example, in China, she has 56 kinds of races. We must keep different kinds of races solidary. The same national curriculum is helpful in potential effect of communicating with each other. For example, in China, through we speak Chinese. But it has multi-pronounce. Our government advocates standard Chinese pronounce. Thus, different area people would have no trouble in communion. Even through I was born and live in Heilongjiang province in the northeast of China, I can speak Chinese freely in the whole country with standard pronounce with no trouble.

As a view of college, it is convenient to offer college course that students has the same level of grades before getting into college. Most scientists hold the ideas that the education before college is basic education. It is better to fly the imagination of students in college to let them further their education in distinguishing orientation. A living example in China, all the students from the out-of-the-way province before studying in university must be taught in preparatory school. Even they must study standard chinese language because they usually speak their race language, and can’t listen to the class very well. Also they learn some basic course like English and math because of their weak level. If they offer the same curriculum, nothing is so trouble.

Another view which should be thought over is that too completely uniform is not a good ting. The best way to solve this problem is that in major course before college, we should keep the same curriculum. However in some areas where they have their own culture, art, and language, it is necessary to add some course for their students. A nation can't let her minority culture go to dead. Keep both of argument together and balance is the best way.

fengboallanUID: 157405

顶啊，谁帮我看看吧

onlyfishUID: 192741

真可爱的图，我最喜欢男生穿那种领子的毛衣了：）

onlyfishUID: 192741

It has a long sociological controversy that whether or not a nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow school in different parts of the nation to determine which academic course to offer. The common belief of some educators is that different parts of the nation should determine which course they offer. But aided by scientists and educator’s researching today, nevertheless, hold a thoroughly different idea that a nation should uniform his national curriculum in order to get the suitable balance. Both of arguments have their evidence to support their argument. In this circumstance, I would like to unify both of arguments: a nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college, but in some special area, it has right some speciality(right 后面事实少了介词什么的，我怎么觉得不通）. For example, they can offer their language course in order to let their culture continue.


In the nation, not all the areas have the same situation（我觉得用condition是不是更好） of education. For example, in country, the condition of schools is much worse than that in city. If they have right to decide which curriculums would be offered, they maybe cut off some curriculum to save trouble（pl). Even in law, every citizen has the right to own the same level of being educated. No matter how far you leave, before college, you have the right of deserving (to deserve)compulsory education. If we let different parts of the nation to determine which academic to offer, in country, we needn’t （再考寄托作文的时候最好不要出现这种缩写，老实写 need not）worry about major curriculum, (这句我没看懂，为什么又说不用担心主要的课程阿？）but other class （classes）like music, philosophy, class of qualification would be taught without qualification remaining, because there isn't the same amount of aid. With the prohibiting of law, the government must obey to give education appropriate budget in order to offer all of courses.


In political view, for example, in China, she has 56 kinds of races. We must keep different kinds of races solidary. The same national curriculum is helpful in potential effect of communicating with each other. For example, in China, through we speak Chinese. But it has multi-pronounce. Our government advocates standard Chinese pronounce. Thus, different area people（people in different areas） would have no trouble in communion. Even through I was born and live in Heilongjiang province in the northeast of China, I can speak Chinese freely in the whole country with standard pronounce （pronounciation）with no trouble.

As a view of college, it is convenient to offer college course that students has（have） the same level of grades（我记得这个词应该指成绩，是不是用别的词，我也没想出来啦：（） before getting into college. Most scientists hold the ideas（idea) that the education(omit the before education) before college is basic education. It is better to fly the imagination of students in college to let them further(pursue) their education in distinguishing orientation. A living example in China, all the students from the out-of-the-way province before studying in university must be taught in preparatory school. Even they must study standard chinese language because they usually speak their race language, and can’t listen to the class very well. Also they learn some basic course(courses) like English and math because of their weak level. If they offer the same curriculum, nothing is so trouble.

Another view which should be thought over is that too completely（应该用形容词吧） uniform is not a good thing. The best way to solve this problem is that in major course before college, we should keep the same curriculum. However in some areas where they have their own culture, art, and language, it is necessary to add some course(pl) for their students. A nation can't(cannot) let her minority culture go to dead(die). Keep both of argument together and balance is the best way.

结构不错，观点也基本到了，就是还有些复数单数冠词等语法问题，这也是我们最容易忽略的。

加油阿

第一次帮别人看作文，如果不对还请见谅

poohUID: 146994

It has a long sociological这个词不准确吧，这是指社会学，而这个争论是在社会范围上的 controversy that whether or not a nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow school in different parts of the nation to determine which academic course to offer. 不要抄原题，用自己的话来描述题目，因为抄原题会让人认为你语言的能力有限The common belief of some educators is that different parts of the nation should determine which course they offer. But aided by scientists and educator’s researching today, nevertheless, hold a thoroughly different idea that a nation should uniform his national curriculum in order to get the suitable balance.没有主语，写长句子时要注意别把自己绕进去 Both of arguments have their evidence to support their argument. In this circumstance, I would like to unify both of arguments: a nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college, but in some special area ,it has right some speciality.it has right some....不通顺啊  For example, they can offer their language course in order to let their culture continue.这里举什么例子啊，放到正文里面去吧


In the nation, not all the areas have the same situation of education.表达不恰当，改成not all areas around the nation have the same educational condition. 另外，即便这句话你表达对了，我不明白这到底跟本文的主题什么关系，你自己知道但是读者不明白啊，你需要一个because 从句来引起这句，然后给出一个表示目的的主句，我给你改了一下：If shools are allowed to decide their own curriculum, then the quality of education can hardly be guaranteed   For example, in countryin the country , the condition of schools is much worse than that in city. If they have right to decide which curriculums would be offered, they maybe cut off some curriculum to save trouble. Even in law, every citizen has the right to own the same level of being educated.the same level of being educated, 太别扭了，改成every citizen has the same right to have an access to an education of the same quality.  No matter how far you leavelive, 不应该是how far, 应该是no matter where you live , before college, you have the right of deserving deserving改成receiving, 后面没有详细给你改，改的太多会让别人觉得不公平的，因为已经放出风去要给改作文多的同学献香吻的。 compulsory education. If we let different parts of the nation to determine which academic to offer, in country, we needn’t worry about major curriculum, but other class like music, philosophy, class of qualification would be taught without qualification remaining, because there isn't the same amount of aid. With the prohibiting of law, the government must obey to give education appropriate budget in order to offer all of courses.


In political view不要上来就举例，给出topic sentense和说理, for example, in China, she has 56 kinds of races. We must keep different kinds of races solidary. The same national curriculum is helpful in potential effect of communicating with each other. For example, in China, through we speak Chinese. But it has multi-pronounce. Our government advocates standard Chinese pronounce. Thus, different area people would have no trouble in communion. Even through I was born and live in Heilongjiang province in the northeast of China, I can speak Chinese freely in the whole country with standard pronounce with no trouble.

As a view of college, it is convenient to offer college course that students has the same level of grades same level of grades? 相同的教育水平就可以了，不用相同的分数吧。改成the same educational background before getting into college. Most scientists hold the ideas that the education before college is basic education. It is better to fly the imagination of students in college to let them further their education in distinguishing orientation. A living example in China, all the students from the out-of-the-way province before studying in university must be taught in preparatory school. Even they must study standard chinese language because they usually speak their race language, and can’t listen to the class very well. Also they learn some basic course like English and math because of their weak level. If they offer the same curriculum, nothing is so trouble.

Another view which should be thought over is that too completely uniform is not a good ting. The best way to solve this problem is that in major course before college, we should keep the same curriculum. However in some areas where they have their own culture, art, and language, it is necessary to add some course for their students. A nation can't let her minority culture go to dead. Keep both of argument together and balance is the best way.
作文的基本框架还没掌握好，每个body段都要有topic sentense + 说理+例证，语言上的问题也比较多，需要多注意。

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fengboallanUID: 157405

真的非常感谢pooh和Onlyfish的修改，我一定好好的看看。pooh我真服了你了，你总是能一针见血。不过至今QQ还没加我呢