issue64 我的珍宝

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Many people know how to attain success, but few know how to make the best use of it.
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Some people say they know what is the best use of success, but they do not know this saying itself is intolerant. They may mean that the successful people need to benefit the society with their success, or else it is not the "best use". But we do not have necessary to ask different people to choose the same way.

First of all, what is the definition of success? Thousands of people have thousands of opinions. Someone think it is not called success without fame and money, while someone recognize earning enough money for a family journey is a big success. What is the criterion of success? No one has the power to say others are wrong. It all depends on the feeling of people themselves. They feel they are successful, so they do.

Secondly, what is the criterion of "the best use of success"? Someone enjoy life fully by the money and time earned from success, at the same time others continue working hard for more success over the past one. Who is wrong? Who do not make the best use of success? Who have the potence to value?

But we must admit someone really use their success for something good to the humanity. For example, some actors fund money to protect wild animals and propagandize to the whole society for more people attending the action of saving wild animals. These people make their success more valuable by benefiting the society. These kinds of people have the ability to influence the society, They make better use of success than the people who have the ability but without behaviours.

However, we could not say the people who do not have the ability do not make best use of their success. They live a happy life, benefit their family, and make the society better with their success. That is good enough. Even we could not say the people who have the ability but without behaviors are wrong. They may want to live a relatively peaceful life. They feel happy for their choice of their own life. No body has the power to ask them to make “best use” of their success, moreover they have contribute to the society so much. We general people already can learn from them too many things.

A man’s energy is limited. The successful people have use lots of energy for success. It is unfair to ask them to continue influencing the society after success by being busy with their enterprises and social affairs, just because they have the ability. When can these people have a rest? Such busy life may destroy their health of both body and mental. To be famous already is a tired thing. They need to live in the sight of public without privacy and care about everything they do. That is the cause of suicide so popular among famous people. What a destroy thing for them to be observed more by influencing the society with their fames.

Additionally, we need to condemn some people who destroy the harmony of the society by their statuses got from success. For example, some officers receive bribes by their power. They do not only make bad use of their success, but also endanger the society.

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Some people say they know what is the best use of success, but they do not know this saying itself is intolerant. They may mean that the successful people need to benefit the society with their success, or else it is not the "best use". But we do not have necessary to ask different people to choose the same way.既然下文对两个概念进行定义,开头只提一个似乎不全面

First of all, what is the definition of success? Thousands of people have thousands of opinions. Someone think it is not called success without fame and money, while someone recognize earning enough money for a family journey is a big success. What is the criterion of success? No one has the power to say others are wrong. It all depends on the feeling of people themselves. They feel they are successful, so they [U]do.[/U] are

Secondly, what is the criterion of "the best use of success"? Someone enjoy life fully by the money and time earned from success, at the same time others continue working hard for more success over the past one. Who is wrong? Who do not make the best use of success? Who have the potence to value? 光提问不做答似乎不好,又不是反问

But we must admit someone really use their success for something good to the humanity. For example, some actors fund money to protect wild animals and propagandize to the whole society for more people attending the action of saving wild animals. These people make their success more valuable by benefiting the society. These kinds of people have the ability to influence the society, They make better use of success than the people who have the ability but without behaviours.

However, we could not say the people who do not have the ability do not make best use of their success. They live a happy life, benefit their family, and make the society better with their success. That is good enough. Even we could not say the people who have the ability but without behaviors are wrong. They may want to live a relatively peaceful life. They feel happy for their choice of their own life. No body has the power to ask them to make “best use” of their success, moreover they have contribute to the society so much. We general people already can learn from them too many things.

A man’s energy is limited. The successful people have use lots of energy for success. It is unfair to ask them to continue influencing the society after success by being busy with their enterprises and social affairs, just because they have the ability. When can these people have a rest? Such busy life may destroy their health of both body and mental. To be famous already is a tired thing. They need to live in the sight of public without privacy and care about everything they do. That is the cause of suicide so popular among famous people. What a destroy thing for them to be observed more by influencing the society with their fames.

Additionally, we need to condemn some people who destroy the harmony of the society by their statuses got from success. For example, some officers receive bribes by their power. They do not only make bad use of their success, but also endanger the society
语法错误比较少,但是思路很不清晰,一开始的定义下的不错,但是后面有点自相矛盾B3中肯定社会谋福利的人比有能力不做的人make better use of success后面却又一直在论述,不该指责他们,这样做似乎有跑题的嫌疑,写成should型了

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Some people say they know what is the best use of success,[what the best use of success is] but they do not know this saying itself is intolerant. They may mean that the successful people need to benefit the society with their success, or else it is not the "best use". But we do not have necessary to ask different people to choose the same way.

First of all, what is the definition of success? Thousands of people have thousands of opinions.[好像比较正规的说法是One thousand people have one thousand opinions.] Someone think it is not called success without fame and money, while someone recognize earning enough money for a family journey is a big success. What is the criterion of success? No one has the power to say others are wrong. It all depends on the feeling of people themselves. They feel they are successful, so they do.

Secondly, what is the criterion of "the best use of success"? Someone enjoy life fully by the money and time earned from success, at the same time others continue working hard for more success over the past one. Who is wrong? Who do not make the best use of success? Who have the potence[是金山里查的把?用right即可] to value?

But we must admit someone really use their success for something good to the humanity. For example, some actors fund money to protect wild animals and propagandize to the whole society for more people attending the action of saving wild animals. These people make their success more valuable by benefiting the society. These kinds of people have the ability to influence the society, They make better use of success than the people who have the ability but without behaviours.

However, we could not say the people who do not have the ability do not make best use of their success. They live a happy life, benefit their family, and make the society better with their success. That is good enough. Even we could not say the people who have the ability but without behaviors are wrong. They may want to live a relatively peaceful life. They feel happy for their choice of their own life. No body has the power to ask them to make “best use” of their success, moreover they have contribute to the society so much. We general people already can learn from them too many things.

A man’s energy is limited. The successful people have use lots of energy for success. It is unfair to ask them to continue influencing the society after success by being busy with their enterprises and social affairs, just because they have the ability. When can these people have a rest? Such busy life may destroy their health of both body[physical] and mental. To be famous already is a tired thing. They need to live in the sight of public without privacy and care about everything they do. That is the cause of suicide so popular among famous people. What a destroy thing for them to be observed more by influencing the society with their fames.

Additionally, we need to condemn some people who destroy the harmony of the society by their statuses got from success. For example, some officers receive bribes by their power. They do not only make bad use of their success, but also endanger the society.

[看完你的文章觉得很”顺畅”,因为我是个中国学生呵呵,译成中文像是中国大学生的辩论赛,总是反问和辩护,你视这篇文章为珍宝我已经看到你洋洋洒洒辩护”对方辩友忽视了一个问题…..对方二辩不要忘了….’偶一点个人意见,思维要西方化,语言也要西方化]

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