issue处女篇，大侠们来批呀！

rangerUID: 156307

题目：Many people believe that a few individuals or

small groups (family,friends,teachers,celebrities,for

example) have caused them to think and behave in the

way they do. Yet it is always society as a whole that

defines us and our attitudes,not a few individuals.


正文：
As we know, no one is living in a whole close

circumstance. As one part of the society,everyone of us

will certainly be influenced a lot by others

,especially by those who are close to us ,or important

to us, for example the family,friends, teachers, or

celebrities.

Life is a progress of learning and changing, We learn

from each other and change ourselves. When a new born

baby open his eyes and give the first cry to this world

,he has no idea about how to live in society, but when

he grow up, he will get his own way of life.Who will be

the teacher? society! It's society who can give a lot

of useful and vivid examples about how to live ,how to

get along with others, how to find the career and the

truth of life. Though individuals or small groups can  

be one example or just a part of an example, society

can give a integrated sight of the life.

Men have the instinct to be the same. We imitate

others,behave in the way that most people do, because

we know that be too different with other people could

be very dangerous that we will be considered as

zombie,we will be considered breaking the regular rules

and we will be repulsed from the society.  The good

example is Bruno who had burned to death at flower

square.

However, although most people keep being the same with

others, there's always someone who will say no. There's

always someone can find what is wrong although in most

conditions it's accepted by most people. They always be

the force that promote our civilization and way of

life. Nowadays everyone knows Copernicus who could

hardly be understood at his time but now be considered

as a giant who had brought the first beam of light for

the age of science.

Society can influence our attitude but never define it.

rangerUID: 156307

我的英语功底十分不好，可能有好多语法错误，欢迎大家一一指出。这是我写的第一篇GRE作文没有计时间，超了好久，对GRE作文的特点也没什么认识，还望大侠们指点，先谢过了。
第三段中那个人想是说布鲁诺，不知道拼的对不对……


等待批斗，心理好没底的说……

kkytUID: 188814

好象发帖格式不正确啊,别谦虚,占位,下下来看

kkytUID: 188814

As we know, no one is living in a whole close circumstance. As one part of the society, every one of us will certainly be influenced a lot by others, especially by those who are close to us, do not use one word “use” in the adjacent sentence or important to us, for example the family, friends, teachers, or celebrities. you had better contrast your opinion with the speaker's, and clearly demonstrate what you agree or disagree

Life is a progress of learning and changing, We learn from each other and change ourselves. When a new born baby open his eyes and give the first cry to this world
he has no idea about how to live in society, but when he grow up, he will get his own way of life. Who will be the teacher? Society! It's society who can give a lot of useful and vivid examples about how to live , how to get along with others, how to find the career and the truth of life. Though individuals or small groups can be one example or just a part of an example, society can give a integrated sight of the life.

Men have the instinct to be the same.what is the men similar to ?  We imitate others, behave in the way that most people do, because we know that be too different with other people could be very dangerous that we will be considered as zombie, we will be considered breaking the regular rules and we will be repulsed from the society. The good example is Bruno who had burned to death at flower square.
However, although most people keep being the same with others, there's always someone who will say no. There's always someone can find what is wrong although in most conditions it's accepted by most people. They always be the force that promote our civilization and way of life. Nowadays everyone knows Copernicus who could hardly be understood at his time but now be considered as a giant who had brought the first beam of light for the age of science.

Society can influence our attitude but never define it.Is this your end ?
去精华区看看，那有好多东东，对你有用
第一篇都这样,别灰心,一家之言,看追星剑特训  :(